Good job! You did a wonderful job impersonating Snape and Hermione. But......didn't Harry, Hermione, Ginny, and Ron play Quidditch during the summer? It doesn't make sense that Hermione would be dreadful at flying.
Author's Response: hmm :/ i don\'t know where i got that she was bad at it, i just always had the feeling that she was. oh well, sorry about that. in my fic Herms sucks at flying xD lol thanks for mentioning it thought!
Well written, but I thought the lyrics you had written in italics detracted from the story. Nice finish.
Author's Response: You mean to tell me that my story, written by me, for my class, did not satisfy you? And the lyrics, which were what inspired the fic and what it was written around, detracted from your view of what the story ought to be? *le gasp* I beg your forgiveness Sir Snapester1! Next time, I shall consult you before writing my story.
"No, Potter," answered Voldemort. "I am Dumbledore."
I love that quote!