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Summary: This is book two in the "Potter's Pentagon" trilogy. Read "Potter's Pentagon: The Five" first, myesss? Cool.

WARNING: This story contains French people, an internal monologue about a blue orange, adolescent facial hair, good old-fashioned snogging, superstitious truck drivers, a portrait who calls everyone "Mavis," a zoo break-in, some very strange clothes, romantic conflict galore, and Ron Weasley's caffeine addiction. And worst of all, Professor Zabini!

Hogwarts is hosting the Triwizard Tournament, and when one of the members of Potter's Pentagon is selected to represent the school, much excitement ensues. Simultaneously, elections are being held for Minister of Magic, and things are getting busy at the Ministry.

Not to mention the fact that Jordan's made a new Muggle friend without informing her of the itty-bitty fact that he's magical, Haley has found an enchanted diary of dubious origin, Ted's met a werewolf from Beauxbatons, and Emma... well, Emma's not having a good year.

And what exactly is Ivy up to, anyway?

Everyone has secrets. But in the end, the truth will have to come out.


Starring Best Male Original Character runner-up Jordan Potter, Best Female Original Character Nominees Ivy Potter, Emma Weasley, Haley Potter, and Giorgi Anderson, and Best Male Original Character nominee Ted Lupin! Nominated for Best Post-Hogwarts story in the 2008 Quicksilver Quill Awards!

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 76214 Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/16/07 Updated: 06/04/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 01/06/08 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: In Which Various French People Anger Various English People

You know what is absolutely pathetic?

I’ve been meaning to read this since it was updated, and just now have I had the time to do so. Yes, that’s right — I’m just READING IT now, let alone reviewing. *headdesks*

I like the beginning conversation with Arden and Ted, first off. It really shows her insecurities . . . and Ted’s poem made me giggle, though it reminded me of a particular song. . . . *hums said song under her breath*

“I’d like that,” replied Ivy, pulling a blue-grey cardigan on over her wool sweater and throwing a scarf around her neck faster than you could say ‘sphygmomanometer.’ “I’d like that,” replied Ivy, pulling a blue-grey cardigan on over her wool sweater and throwing a scarf around her neck faster than you could say ‘sphygmomanometer.’ What’s a sphygmomanometer? (Obviously it’s a funny word, but. . . .)

Ted nodded. “I sometimes have really crazy dreams,” he said. “Like one time, I dreamed that I was deathly allergic to the word ‘yeah,’ and I had to try and keep people from saying it. Another time, I dreamed I was in a huge skyscraper, and I was holding a black rose that I had to give to someone wearing a blue shirt before the sun went up, or else the building would explode.” Dude, that sounds like a lot of my dreams! For example, I keep having a recurring nightmare about an orange-and-black spider with really pointy teeth trying to eat me and me trying to kill it by riding a seal (the animal, not the wax thing). Yeahhhh. . . .

O.O That was my expression when reading Marina and Emma’s argument. Good for Emma, sticking up to that Mary-Sue! And The Hogwarts champion stared at her. “WHO THE [CENSORED] IS THOMAS EDISON?” she roared, and stormed away. made my jaw drop, and then made me laugh so hard I almost fell off my swivel chair. Just the way you put ‘censored’ in there . . . wow. You are truly talented at making people laugh without even intending it.

But I really think she should have said the Elder Swear — “Your mother is a BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP ing BEEEEEEEEEEEP Lorum Ipsum BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Admitum Venium BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Prragoona BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Hippopotamus BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Republican BEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Daniel Radcliffe BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP With A Bucket Of BEEEEEEEEEEEEEP In A Castle Far Away Where No One Can Hear You BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Soup BEEEEEEEEEEEEP With A Bucket Of BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Mickey Mouse BEEEEEEEEEP And A Stick Of Dynamite BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Magical BEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP Alakazam!” (Why yes, I typed that from the video!)

Giorgi is . . . hyper? Insane? Somewhat scary? All three? A cook who makes only flapjacks? (Wait, scratch that last one.) I don’t think she’s using enough exclamation points, Schmergo. *is sarcastic*

WHAT DOES JORDAN WANT TO BE?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?! Gah, this is another important plot point that you’re not going to reveal, isn’t it? *bangs head off wall*

“No, Ivy, ‘stupid’ is me cartwheeling into Jordan in the corridor,” Haley told her sister gently. HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!! Something about that just made me laugh. . . . ^_^

“If that’s really the case–in which case, Ted may one day soon wake up with a face covered in small but very angry crabs–he doesn’t know what he’s missing.” *dies laughing*

FLEEH, FLIEH, FLOEH, FLUEM. (‘Fluem’?) I seriously think my head is going to explode from utter wonder if this doesn’t get validated soon. VEWY VEWY SOON, MODS.

This just gets better and better, doesn’t it? The next thing I know there’ll be a parrot on my ceiling and Dobby’s sock in the hall and Voldemort will be eating chocolate from a car.

I really need to cut back on the sugar.

- Katie

Author's Response: It\'s okay that you haven\'t read the chapter \'till now! It\'s not like I\'m forcing you or anything!

WHEN AN EEL BITES YOUR TOE AND IT DOESN\'T LET GO... it\'s a moray. Hahahahahaha. No.

A sphygmomanometer is one of those blood pressure measuring things. Yep. Ted\'s dreams are based on dreams I\'ve actually had. I figured truth was stranger than fiction.

Hahahahahahahaha, I totally should have put the Elder Swear in there... Ron probably WOULD teach it to Emma. But I wrote this over a year before Wizard Swears came out . Giorgi is so strange, isn\'t she? (Incidentally, my brother can only cook pancakes. I love the word flapjacks.) But I have fun with her. As for Jordan\'s job, you won\'t find out till the epilogue of the third book in the trilogy! MWAHAHAHAHAHA! (Hint: It\'s a ballerina)

You may also want to cut back on the crack while you\'re at it.

 
Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 02/01/08 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: That Romance Chapter

I . . . have no excuse for putting off reviewing, except that I am a procrastinator with a notoriously short attention spa — OOH, A TAP-DANCING STUFFED PURPLE FLAMINGO!!!!!!!!!!!!

See what I mean?

Anyway, I’m going to attempt a review now. WARNING: I’m eating sugar. I will be random. You haff been varned!

I have a hidden suspicion of Ivy’s “studying” habits and what she’s learning to do. I may PM it to you, so that if I’m right, I won’t be spoiling poor innocent readers. :d (Teh smilie is licking its upper lip, apparently.)

The other girls froze—Haley dropped her shopping bags, and Emma’s jaw fell to her chest like a python unhinging its jaw to swallow a whole pig. *dies of laughter* I’m sorry, I just find stuff like that funny . . . .

I love the line about Hermione being about to “cry with happiness” at Emma wanting to borrow Hogwarts, A History. Very awesome.

*blinks* Rupert Daniels? ^_^

And EMMA asked out TYRONE? O.O

Haley’s giggles actually gave way to a loud snort, which Emma had been fairly certain only happened in fiction. “I’m sorry,” she choked. “But… how did Tyrone think you tasted?” HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!! Very vivid mental image of Tyrone eating an Emma meat pie from Mrs. Lovett. O.o (I’m listening to Sweeney Todd; I can’t help it.)

Her cousin laughed a laugh so humourless that it would be illegal to call it a laugh in fourteen different countries. (If you’re reading this in one of those countries, then I most humbly apologize.) *raises hand* I think I’m in one of those countries — Hyperville. ^_^

O.o Arden asked out Ted?!?!?! Goodness gracious me! Never saw THAT coming!

Oh, yes, that’s right, it had been a dream; that’s why Tyrone had been wearing a leather miniskirt. Okay, that line made me make this noise: GCCCCCCKKKKKKKIIIIIIIIIIIIRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! . . . Except, I was laughing. ^^;

Bit of melodrama in the broom cupboard . . . minty fresh breath? . . . OH MY GODRIC TED AND IVY SHIPPINESS YAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *squees*

I love Professor Zabini right there. Fantastic.

Aw, so that’s why Ivy wears her hair like that! That’s . . . awwwwwwwwww. *tears up slightly* Never thought I’d say this, but Ivy is becoming my favourite OC of yours.

I love your description of Ivy, but I kind of wish you’d have gone into a bit more detail on Haley and Emma’s appearances.

I really enjoyed your descriptions of the ball, and seeing Ivy’s POV on everything. But I felt really, really, really horrible when Arden was running out of the ball like that.

Why am I sensing some upcoming Giorgi / Jordan shippiness? *nudgenudgewinkwink*

That was a truly AWESOMETASTICAL (yes, I’m borrowing your word) chapter, Schmergo!

- Katie *apologises for the lateness of this review*

*gives you a suspicious-looking meat pie*

*runs away*

Author's Response: KATIIIIIEEEE! I\'m glad to hear you liked this chapter! \'TWas the first romance-y thing I ever wrote.

A TAP-DANCING STUFFED PURPLE FLAMINGO? WHEEEERE?

Funny how I don\'t even remember writing half these lines... I can\'t tell you if your suspicions are right or not, because you\'ll find out anyway in Chapter Nine. I\'m EBIL.

LAWLZ, SWEENEY TODD! You have no idea how much Sweeney Todd has changed my perception of the world. SPeaking of which, I love your new avatar on the forums. It was a little bit disturbing, though, when I got your message, because it said \"FISH ARE FRIENDS, NOT FOOD\" and I was eatin\' a fish sandwich.

I have a picture of Tyrone in a miniskirt. NOT ATTRACTIVE. I also have a picture on my art thread where I swapped the genders of all of the characters, and girl Tyrone (named Tyra) is in a miniskirt.

Zabini ends up being a pretty major character in this trilogy, but...I can\'t help but make him do stuff like this!

I\'m really glad you like Ivy! She\'s never been one of my favourites, maybe because I\'m so much unlike her, but still...

Don\'t worry, there are more detailed descriptions of what all three girls wear to the ball in the third book. I just felt like describing Haley and Emma\'s outfits would detract too much from the Ivy-ness. Speaking of which, Haley would TOTALLY be singing \"Popular\" from Wicked, yes? And I wrote this story before I knew anything about Wicked!

THANKS AGAIN! And suspicious-looking meat pies are my favourite kind!


Author's Response: SUPER SPOILER LIKE WHOA: IVY\'S \"STUDYING\" WAS ACTUALLY HER SNEAKING OFF NIGHTLY TO SNOG VLADISLAV POLIAKOFF! OMG!!!!!

 
Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 02/01/08 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: In Which Tyrone Does NOT Enjoy Brief Insanity

*cannot wait for upcoming Jordan angst*

*grabs popcorn*

*sits down to a BRAND SPANKIN’ NEW chapter*

*will stop using asterisks now*

Awwwww. Poor, poor Arden. I feel really bad for her; however, I’m also really happy that she and Ted are friends again.

I LOVE the metaphors here — Emma as fire and Jordan as water. Does that mean that Ivy is air and Haley is earth?

. . . Wow, sounded like my English AND my Science teacher there. Never mind.

I REALLY HATE APPLE. He’s getting on my nerves something fearsome. I may have to Sweeney Todd him. (Yes, I use ‘Sweeney Todd’ as a verb . . . even in RL. ^^; )

“Leave me alone, you jerk,” she told him in a low, deadly voice. *is learning to be slightly afraid of Emma* *edges away*

HA! I love that Emma wears pigtails when she’s mad. That’s one of those FANTASTICAL traits that makes your OCs seem more real. You know, the little details.

*giggles madly* Harry let Peeves into the Tournament? Mad, that ‘un. Oh, and I like the description of Peeves’s accent.

EURGH! I did NOT need the mental images of Myrtle spying on all of the boys! WHERE IS THE MIND BLEACH?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

Ooh, TYRONE is the one who was poisoned? Wow, that’s . . . interesting. Not entirely unpredictable, but very uplifting. Shippiness = Awesomeness. ^_^

Wait a second; something’s fishy here. Is Vladis-whatshisname cheating? Could HE have switched the clues around? (And I agree with Emma — she should have gotten higher than Marina.)

O.O

O.O

O.O

Haley . . . got a 94? And Jordan got a . . . 93? *mind explodes*

Though I really wish that I could get a 93 and be disappointed. ^^;

“I think I’ve been old for a long time,” said Harry. Awwwwww. That’s so profound and Harry-ish.

*clears throat*

HURRY UP AND UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IF YOU DO NOT UPDATE SOON, I WILL SIC JUDGE TURPIN ON YOU!!!!!!!!!!!

. . .

Wow, that was REALLY creepy of me. Never mind.

- Katie *makes too many Sweeney Todd references*

Author's Response: OH DEAR, NOT PERVY OL\' JUDGE TURPIN! GUESS I\'LL HAVE TO UPDATE! *Actually, I\'m just about to*

I think Ivy is air and Ted is earth. Haley is SPARKLE. Yes, that\'s an element now. Actually... I think she\'d be the element of surprise. (NOT FUNNY.) Sorry about that.

Hahaha, Apple reminds me a bit of Anthony. COULD NOT STAND FILM ANTHONY. Wow, I\'m using an awful lot of caps locks. Too bad Anthony didn\'t get Sweeney Todd-ed... though are you familiar with the original cast version of Sweeney Todd? Their Anthony is awesome. And Mrs. Potts from Beauty and the Beast plays Mrs. Lovett.

Harry is crazed, isn\'t he? I guess he\'s trying to be Dumbledore-ish. I don;t think even Dumbledore would let Peeves be part of the Tournament! Now... even I felt sick writing the part about Myrtle spying on the boys! PASS THE MIND BLEACH PLEASE!

I wish I could be disappointed with a 93, too.. saaad...

 
Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 12/09/07 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: In Which Ted Continues To Be Adorable

SCHMEEEEEEEEEEEEERGO! SORRY THIS TOOK SO LONG TO REVIEW; I WAS CHRISTMAS SHOPPING FOR EIGHT STRAIGHT HOURS YESTERDAY!

Boy, do I love Caps Lock.

I am beginning to wonder what goes on between “Professor Zabini” and “ . . . and a potato.” My deranged mind thinks it should be “Professor Zabini should turn into a singing, tap-dancing fluffy stuffed penguin that loves to sing “Penguin In The Dive” (a spoof of “Falcon In The Dive”) that is also an Olympic Gold Medallist in catching snowflakes on its tongue and eats only yoghurt and a potato.” (I hope you appreciate my randomness.)

“You wish,” sneered Charybdis.

“Oddly enough, yes,” snapped Jordan.
HA!

(And you probably don’t know, but how do you pronounce ‘Charybdis’? And WHERE do you come up with these fantastic OC names?)

And what does O.I.S.E.A.U. stand for? (I’m just wondering.) I do love the fact that you have a Mary-Sue in here, though. She’s so . . . PERFECT. It’s either bound to make me laugh at her or hate her. I haven’t decided which yet. ^_~

Ooh, I HATE Charybdis! She’s so MEAN and EVIL and . . . URGH! I hate how she calls Haley ‘ten’ especially. Height-deprived people are NOT inferior! Just look at Warwick Davis! And since you seem to like Theodore Nott so much (judging by your Gauntlet fics), I’m a bit surprised that THIS is his daughter. Bleh.

What IS up with Ivy, anyway? I’m beginning to wonder what’s going on with her, just like your summary said I would. . . .

Sgtjpepper: What. Did. I. Tell. You. About. Chatspeak? Ha, I can relate to Jordan here. I actually say that to my friends all the time when I Instant Message them, because they always go “lyk lol tht was sooooo funny!!!!!!! So omg wht is up w./ her latly????????” and it drives me INSANE!

“Promise me one thing,” he asked his son seriously. “If you ever see a Harry Potter action figure in a shop… please don’t make a bonfire and invite all your friends for a ritual burning.” HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!! I laughed out loud there, and the sudden noise made my mother jump and drop a Christmas ornament. (By the way, you owe me $4 for a new one.)

I’M AN OSTRICH! is now my favourite random thing to yell. Oh, and I love the Cap’n Crunch reference.

I love love LOVED the transformation scene. Arden might even give Ivy some competition! (Or not.) So, wait, they can talk to each other in wolf form? Dude, that’s awesome!

I really like Arden’s character. She seems shy and believable, and I adore the fact that she’s an artist.

I loved this chapter, Schmergo, and I can’t wait for the next one!

- Katie

P.S. I'm curious -- what's your favourite Christmas Carol? Mine is probably either 'Jingle Bell Rock' or 'Rockin' Around The Christmas Tree.'

Author's Response: WOW, IF I HAD TO SHOP FOR EIGHT STRAIGHT HOURS, I\"D CHOP MY HEAD OFF WITH A LIVE MOOSE\'S ANTLERS!

Okay, I laughed out loud at your weird potato thing and had to read it out loud to my sister... she didn\'t think it was funny, but she is a poo-head. (I only said the poo-head part because she\'s standing behind me reading what I type and I WANT HER TO GO AWAY! Okay, thanks. ^_^) Just put the sickest thing you can imagine before the potato line. I\'d love to hear the Penguin In the Dive song, by the way.

Charybdis is pronounced ker-IB-diss. Her name comes from The Odyssey. Odysseus has to choose between going through one of two monsters, Scylla or Charybdis. He picks Scylla, and I always thought Charybdis had a cooler name... so I made her a character in my story! It sounded evil to me.

I don\'t speak French (why do I keep writing about French stuff, I wonder?), so I don\'t know what O.I.S.E.A.U. stands for. I do know that \"Oiseau\' is French for bird... or something... so I did that as a pun on O.W.L.s.

You are preaching to the choir about height-deprived people, dude. I am about an inch and a half taller than Haley, and I have a lot of ludicrously tall friends. I hate Charybdis, too. We\'ll see more of why she is the way she is in the next book, but I will tell you that Theo and November are dead in this story.

Jordan would go completely spare if he encountered Bellatrix on \"The Dark Lord\'s Blog,\" hehehee.

Sorry about the ornament! Do you accept PayPal donations? ^_^

I bet people are reaaaallly confused by all the random things you yell!

Wow, you picked up on the subtle hint about wolf-form communication! Whoops, that slipped. Well, anyway, they will discover that later on.

My favourite Christmas carol is \"The Twelve Days AFTER Christmas,\" which we are singing in chorus. It starts off like this: \"The first day after Christmas, my true love and I had a fight. And so I chopped that pear tree down and burned it just for spite. Then with a single cartridge I shot the blasted partridge my true love, my true love, my true love gave to me.\"

Also I like \"You\'re A Mean One, Mr. Grinch,\" \"I Want A Hippopotamus For Christmas,\" and anything Josh Groban sings.

 
Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 12/09/07 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: In Which Ted Continues To Be Adorable

SCHMEEEEEEEEEEEEERGO! SORRY THIS TOOK SO LONG TO REVIEW; I WAS CHRISTMAS SHOPPING FOR EIGHT STRAIGHT HOURS YESTERDAY!

Boy, do I love Caps Lock.

I am beginning to wonder what goes on between “Professor Zabini” and “ . . . and a potato.” My deranged mind thinks it should be “Professor Zabini should turn into a singing, tap-dancing fluffy stuffed penguin that loves to sing “Penguin In The Dive” (a spoof of “Falcon In The Dive”) that is also an Olympic Gold Medallist in catching snowflakes on its tongue and eats only yoghurt and a potato.” (I hope you appreciate my randomness.)

“You wish,” sneered Charybdis.

“Oddly enough, yes,” snapped Jordan.
HA!

(And you probably don’t know, but how do you pronounce ‘Charybdis’? And WHERE do you come up with these fantastic OC names?)

And what does O.I.S.E.A.U. stand for? (I’m just wondering.) I do love the fact that you have a Mary-Sue in here, though. She’s so . . . PERFECT. It’s either bound to make me laugh at her or hate her. I haven’t decided which yet. ^_~

Ooh, I HATE Charybdis! She’s so MEAN and EVIL and . . . URGH! I hate how she calls Haley ‘ten’ especially. Height-deprived people are NOT inferior! Just look at Warwick Davis! And since you seem to like Theodore Nott so much (judging by your Gauntlet fics), I’m a bit surprised that THIS is his daughter. Bleh.

What IS up with Ivy, anyway? I’m beginning to wonder what’s going on with her, just like your summary said I would. . . .

Sgtjpepper: What. Did. I. Tell. You. About. Chatspeak? Ha, I can relate to Jordan here. I actually say that to my friends all the time when I Instant Message them, because they always go “lyk lol tht was sooooo funny!!!!!!! So omg wht is up w./ her latly????????” and it drives me INSANE!

“Promise me one thing,” he asked his son seriously. “If you ever see a Harry Potter action figure in a shop… please don’t make a bonfire and invite all your friends for a ritual burning.” HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!! I laughed out loud there, and the sudden noise made my mother jump and drop a Christmas ornament. (By the way, you owe me $4 for a new one.)

I’M AN OSTRICH! is now my favourite random thing to yell. Oh, and I love the Cap’n Crunch reference.

I love love LOVED the transformation scene. Arden might even give Ivy some competition! (Or not.) So, wait, they can talk to each other in wolf form? Dude, that’s awesome!

I really like Arden’s character. She seems shy and believable, and I adore the fact that she’s an artist.

I loved this chapter, Schmergo, and I can’t wait for the next one!

- Katie

P.S. I'm curious -- what's your favourite Christmas Carol? Mine is probably either 'Jingle Bell Rock' or 'Rockin' Around The Christmas Tree.'

Author's Response: Whoopsie daisies!

 

blink-blink by Stubbornly_appeared
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: "blink-blink
wake up, australia
breath..."


Monica Wilkins begins a letter to someone that doesn't exist with an invisible war on the television.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders

Word count: 170 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/19/07 Updated: 11/20/07


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 11/20/07 Title: Chapter 1: blink-blink

WHOA. AWESOMENESS OVERLOAD.

You're writing lotsa poems lately, and I'm not sure my tiny leetle brain can handle the sheer amazingness of them!

I love the 'blink-blink' repitition in here, and the parentheses here and there. . . wow. . . .

You really have a unique poetry style that is all your own, and it definitely shows here -- and it's fantastic. I especially love:

dearest daughter,
it
begins
-wait

(no daughter
of hers)


I can almost feel the emotion and the confusion here, and I'm also feeling a bit sad.

This was an excellent poem, and I have no concrit (for once).

- Katie

P.S. That poem I beta-ed for you a while ago called "Caged Bird" -- have you submitted it?

Author's Response: THANK YOU! Tehe, I\'m sorry, but that just is teh happiness overload to me. Just.. yeah... thanks! I do like this poem. \'i have never heard a caged bird sing\' got submitted, but incorrectly, and I haven\'t redone it yet because I\'m lazy and don\'t particually like it. Maybe I\'ll do it though.... :D -Stubby

 

Jack-o'-lantern by Stubbornly_appeared
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: James reflects (Trick-or-Treating is dangerous; he must not think of tomorrow; life is like a jack-o'-lantern) on October 30, 1981.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1414 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/26/07 Updated: 11/26/07


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 11/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: Jack-o'-lantern

Ooh, Stubby, this got accepted!

I rain congratulations upon ye!

*rains congratulations upon ye*

I really like the new ending line. Very, very powerful.

But all of this was great! (And I'm glad I convinced you that it's NOT RUBBISH. ^_~)

- Katie

Author's Response: Ooh, Katie, yes it did! I rain thanks upon ye! *rains thanks upon ye* The new ending line, I must admit, is one I\'m particually fond of. With your magnificent beta-ing skills and help, and a great suggestion from Phil, I got a rehashed ending that is a lot better than the original. Oh, yes, it\'s not rubbish. Coming from me, that\'s like \'I love it!\'. Thanks again! -Stubby

 

Dark Legend by Stubbornly_appeared
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Nolan's interest in the Dark Arts began as a perfectly academic persuit. But he soon discovers that their power is difficult to resist.





I am Stubbornly_appeared of Gryffindor, writing this final for cmwinter's NEWT Dark Art's class.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Mental Disorders, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 4080 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/11/07 Updated: 12/13/07


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 12/16/07 Title: Chapter 1: Dark Legend

O.O

WOW. That was so . . . so . . .

ANGSTY.

I loved it!

I especially shivered at the part when Opal went insane right before she died.

But the ending was perfect as well, and I can find absolutely nothing I didn't like.

Fantastic job, Stubby!

- Katie

Author's Response: 0_o Thanks a jillion! I had altogether too much fun writing this. -Stubby

 

Summary: He's just trying to count down to New Year's and make a toast, but it's proving difficult with the rain and his memories.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 241 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/06/08 Updated: 01/07/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 01/07/08 Title: Chapter 1: Gently and loudly, down

I LOVE THIS POEM.

The numbers . . . where the lines break . . . the overall tone . . . amazing, Stubby. Simply amazing.

Though to be honest, I wasn't sure who it was until you told me. But I'm generally st00pid, so. . . .

Keep up the SPLENDIFOROUSLY AMAZING work!

- Katie

Author's Response: I LOVE GETTING REVIEWS. Thank you, thank you, thank you! I might say the same.... -Stubby

 

Summary: He is building walls, and they must be the strongest the world has ever seen to protect him. Yes, they will obscure the sun and hide the hills, but he still will build. He must.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 112 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/26/08 Updated: 01/27/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 01/27/08 Title: Chapter 1: smooth, stone-wall visage

Very, very nice, Stubby! I'm happy that you submitted this; it's a great poem.

All the punctuation is actually helping the poem, rather than hindering it, so good job there.

*is too lazy to write anything else*

*pokes*

*flees*

- Katie

Author's Response: *pokes* *is to lazy to say anything but thank you* *flees* -Stubby

 

More Than A Game by Hypatia
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 33]

Summary: “Lord Voldemort has never had a friend, nor do I believe that he has ever wanted one.” -Dumbledore, HBP, ch. 13

Dumbledore was rarely wrong, only once did Lord Voldemort desire a friend. It started out as only a game…

First place winner in the Color of Love Challenge.

Nominated for Best Romance Between Other Characters in the 2008 QSQs!

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 9119 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/24/08 Updated: 03/24/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 03/24/08 Title: Chapter 1: More Than A Game

This was an amazing character study of Tom Riddle. From the very first sentence I found myself drawn into the story, and I couldn't un-glue my eyes from the monitor.

You managed to keep Tom in-character and evil while still having him love someone, which is a major accomplishment. I loved all of the details about lilacs and the colour of Lydia's eyes.

The ending was absolutely fantastic:
If this was love, then Dumbledore was a greater fool than he had believed. Love wasn’t a power; it was a weakness.


That really sums up a great deal about Voldemort's character and offers good insight as to why he was so against feeling love.

I absolutely adore this story, and it's going into my Favourites. Keep up the excellent work!

- Katie

 

Summary: 'All in all, you're just another brick in the wall.' -Pink Floyd, 'Another Brick in the Wall, Part Two.'


At the Bronx Magical Institute, things seem anything but magical. One girl rises above the terrible mundane.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Self Injury, Substance Abuse

Word count: 1469 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/03/08 Updated: 04/21/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 06/25/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Bronx Magical Institute

Yes, yes, I know it’s taken me FOREVER to review this. But I have a good reason! I wanted to leave a super-long review because this story is AMAZING. I’ve read it somewhere near five times now, which means that most of it is *officially* committed to memory. It is THAT awesome. So, without further ado (because too much ‘ado’ is never good), onto the review!

The bell rings, and another day begins. Perfect beginning. It’s a simple, unassuming sentence that manages to hook the reader (‘What’s so important about today, after all?’—that sort of reaction) and make them keep reading. The rest of the paragraph sounds remarkably like my school, and probably every other high school in the world. I like that you show the similarities between a magic school and a regular school before going into the minute differences between the two that begin to reveal themselves in the next paragraph.

Your descriptions are very blunt, and yet somehow are absolutely captivating. Pledges are said to various flags (nobody really says them, though, only reciting), announcements are read (same old things), and the announcer rambles on about things nobody cares about (who gives a shit about the charity drive?). That line, in particular, is one of my favourites of this fic. The way it’s written is unmistakeably frank and truthful. The normal part of the sentence shows how things would appear, but upon reading the fragments in parentheses, the reader is enlightened to how things are truly viewed.

‘Sweet little Stevie’ is a perfect look into what I feel is the underlying theme of this fic: Things are not as they appear. And, ultimately, you speak the truth about the ‘Stevies’ of every school: Stevie will be reprimanded. He will speak to councilors who will ask why-why-why. He might even be removed from school for a few days. But eventually, he will return to his bathroom. All anyone ever cares about is the why, as you’ve hinted here. ‘Why did you say that?’ ‘Why did you do that?’ ‘Why would you make such a stupid mistake?’ But no one cares about the whats—‘What’s wrong?’ ‘What’s bothering you?’ ‘What can I do to help?’ And using only why and never what will lead the Stevies of the world right back to where they started: in the bathroom.

*is getting ranty*

I feel sorry for Jenna. Not much else I can think of to say on this one, for some reason, though. . . . >.> But, so this looks less like a sentence and more like a paragraph, I’ll just mention here that I love how you skip seamlessly around the room, telling several stories without ever becoming too choppy.

The teacher is another character I feel sorry for. He knows that teaching is his passion, but his students are terrifying him to the degree that teaching almost seems impossible. I admire him for even attempting to teach, as no one but Jenna seems to want to learn. (This is incredibly similar to my school. I already mentioned that, but I figured I’d mention it again. ^^; )

Ooh, snow. There’s something really symbolic about it snowing in such a tainted (if that’s the right word) environment. *is obsessed with symbolism*

Jamie is my favourite character, without a doubt. I’ll get into why at the end of the review (if I remember—poke me if I don’t). She gives a glance to Andrew and Steevie but turns away like a ballerina- she's on pointe. I like the last half of this sentence. Something about the way you describe her being on pointe is unique and really makes this sentence stick out. And ‘Steevie’ should be ‘Stevie’. *is a typo freak* =]

Everyone who goes before her is better. Jamie knows this because they aren't her: she will never be the best. This line is somehow heartbreaking to me, especially after you say that her father said so. Poor Jamie.

The little section about her being tormented was a bit distracting to me. I’m glad that you put it in there, as it gave a bit more insight about how Jamie dresses, how ‘popular’ she is, etc., but it’s not my favourite section. *hides from fruit projectiles*

The walk up to the stage does a great job of subtly building tension. The first time I read this, I nearly skipped over that section just to see how well she did (I’m impatient). But as I read it, I was glad that I didn’t skip a single line, as they were all brilliant.

Although the lyrics are mournful, and the strains gloriously sad, there is hope. It bounces around the room like a rainbow reflected off of a billion drops of water, ignoring the rain. These are my absolute favourite lines out of this entire fic. They’re on my Top Ten Favourite Lines EVER List. The description here is beyond adjectives. It’s beautiful, but haunting; hopeful, yet powerful. Absolutely amazing.

This is magic. Perfect, perfect, perfect last line. Because in a school where magic is used for such wrong reasons, shouldn’t something so beautiful be the only true magic, and the other ‘magic’ be only a tainted copy? [/weirdness]

I absolutely LOVE this fic. It’s one of my favourites of all time. You did a fantastic job with it. Keep up the excellent writing! =]

 - Katie 



Author's Response: *superflyingtackleglomp*\r\n\r\nThank you, Katie! I haven\'t recieved such an amazing review in... well, ever. You gave my goosebumps just reading it.\r\n\r\nCan I thank you again? And again?\r\n\r\nThank you!\r\n\r\n-Stubby\r\n\r\n(Oh, yeah, and I\'ll fix the annoying Stevie typo and see what I can do with the bullying part.)

 

Golden Lucifer by Stubbornly_appeared
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: His eyes sparkled in the light, and Albus knew they could do great things together.

Disillusionment flies on swift, silent wings, though, and soon the gold fades.

I am Stubbornly_appeared of Gryffindor writing for the Colours of Love Challenge.

Categories: Same-Sex Pairings Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Slash, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 2562 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/19/08 Updated: 04/20/08


Reviewer: harrypotterfangirl21 Signed
Date: 04/20/08 Title: Chapter 1: Golden Lucifer

STUBBY!

*tacklehug*

Even though this is Slash, which I don't usually read, I found this to be a great story with amazing descriptions.

He was gone; he was gone for good, and all Albus had of him were the feel of his lips and the look of his hair and the glint in his eyes and too many worthless promises. I really love this line, because it gives an excellent description of Albus's feelings. All of the romantic notions (his lips, his hair, and his eyes) are nicely interrupted by the sad fraction of his feelings (worthless promises).

All of the gold and yellow sprinkled throughout was brilliant, as well. I really enjoyed looking for that colour while I was reading.

One thing: Albus’ knuckles rapped one, two, three times on the hard wooden door. It should technically have an 's' after the apostrophe because 'Albus' is a singular noun. There's a couple other places where that was, but I'm too lazy to find them all. =P

My favourite part was when Ariana was killed. I love that you stayed true to canon and made it so that either Albus OR Gellert could have killed her. The bit about Albus ducking to avoid the Killing Curse was also nicely placed because that would have added to his guilt over her death later in life.

All in all, this was a fantastic story. Great job! =]

 - Katie



Author's Response: KATIE!\r\n\r\n*glomp in return*\r\n\r\nThank you! I\'m glad you liked it. I tried to get a lot of \'stuff\' in there, and though I may have rushed and crammed it to the point of melodrama-ness, I think I still \'like\' it.\r\n\r\nI got a few typos in there. One funny one (I\'m not sure if I\'ve changed it yet) is at the end, when Aberforth goes and holds Arianna\'s body, it says that he was \'holding her in his eyes...\'. Whoops!\r\n\r\nThanks again for the long review, Katie. \r\n\r\n-Stubby

 
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