MONTY PYTHON REFERENCE.
I love the bits of Jordan character development here, and how we get to see the relationship between Harry and Jordan more.
Author's Response: So glad you caught the Python reference! If you didn't, I'd have to hang you by your ankles and flay you alive! And as I'm sure you know, Jordan chapters are my FAVORITE chapters!
Giorgi is just... so... Giorgi! It's perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love her! ^_^
Seventh grader Alexandra Quick returns to Charmbridge Academy. This year she faces bullies from another wizarding school, a secret Dark Arts club, and the machinations of her father, but her greatest trial yet awaits her in the dangerous Lands Below.
This is the second book in the Alexandra Quick series.
Of course, with all this talk of bluffing and things not being as they seem? It's entirely possible that Max is bluffing, too.
Maybe I'm just reading too much into it xD
"That's Not My Name" was playing in my head as I read this chapter!
I love the little bit of intrigue that's been worked in here, and Alexandra's little she-doesn't-quite-know-it's-a-crush. The way you've worked in the meeting with her father was also very clever - the scepticism she had in the beginning really made that scene.
Author's Response: I'd never heard of the Ting Tings before, but I Googled "That's Not My Name" and watched the video on YouTube, and now it's stuck in my head! Aaaaah!
Here is your Easter Egg, Arianna!
I love the perspective here. It's an interesting portrayal of his feelings, especially how he accepts it as his "friend" - that's an emotion that is rarely explored, and when it is, it's usually not as eloquent and well-written as you have shown here.
A few of the rhymes seem a bit forced, but that is inevitable with a rhyming poem! I think it's very well done, though!
Great chapter - the one we've been waiting for, heh! I love Blaise's mother's reaction to her. We never really hear much about her, and your version of the character is very real and tangible, something I expect must be hard to achieve when most of we know about her is the fact that all of her husbands have 'mysteriously' died! You've managed to weave a very complex and yet very realistic personality onto a character we know little about [;
One small nitpick - in the last line, 'of' should be 'off.'
Can't wait to see what Leonard does next, personally, hehe.
Author's Response: I do love a villain. I always imagined Mrs Zabini as a cheerful and charismatic murderess. Keep up the R&R ing. :-)
What a poignant chapter! I love that you explained it. It was very sudden, though.
The choppy, disconnected pieces when Harper was still recovering really help to stress the fact that she's struggling to remember something that had such a profound impact on her.
I felt like the first and second half (e.g. the eploguey bit) didn't really fit together, but at the same time I'm of course very glad I didn't have to wait to read the ending!
Very excited for the sequel!
Author's Response: So am I. Thanks for reading and reviewing, and sticking til the end. Sequel will be soon :D
I would just like to share that I was rereading MTT (which I have lots to say about, both good and critical, but that is another story, literally) and this email alert popped up and when I saw this was updated, I pretty much dropped everything to read, because I have been waiting for an update very impatiently.
Anyway. Now that the fangirl squee is over with.
Pansy is fantastic. She's just the right type of snide and oily balanced with overly-feminine wiles. I love it.
I also love the touch with Audrey and her dress - a little glimpse of reality within all the surreal that's going on in the lives of these two!
The downside is that this chapter is kind of slow until the very end - I love fast-paced works, which is probably why I blew threw this chapter so fast - not much happened. I'm assuming this will be made up for in the next chapter? Your cliffhangers are terrible!
Author's Response: Calm before a storm. And I always loathed Pansy, so I had to lay into her. :D
What a wonderful Christmas present [:
Looks like you have a spelling error in the title, though: "Jimm'y" should be "Jimmy's," am I correct?
Author's Response: Yep, that's true. I'm being more organised as a resolution this year, so I may get around to correcting it :D
I've said it before and I'll say it again: your portrayal of Isabella Zabini is spot-on. She doesn't seem unbelievably far-removed from her canonical description, short as it is, but her complete and utter devotion to her son at all costs (even when it's not necessarily in a tender, loving manner!) really makes the character for me. I think you portray her wonderfully and I love seeing more of her [:
I actually just reread the story to get everything fresh in my mind for this review, so.
Aside from that:
Is Harper ever going to tell Blaise that Leo is actually quite a powerful wizard and not a Squib? It seems she would have been inclined to tell him that pretty much right after she found out (it is rather important, after all). Pretty important fact there, no? Obviously, she's not telling him everything - and I love that about her, that even though the two of them are so completely in love she still has her trust issues and things that haunt her - but the whole Leo-is-a-wizard thing just seems like something you wouldn't necessarily want to hold back.
Oh, and reading into past reviews...
is this OC for Albus in a Chocolate story (that's code for Rose/Scorpius, btw) supposedly -very- tied into Harper and Blaise for mathematical reasons for which I'm going to try and start messing around with years now?
Author's Response: I've decided not to give any more away about the sequel to this story, which is R/S and A/OC. There's only five more chapters of this one to go... :)
So... almost too fast, I think. I like fast paced but this was hard to keep up with o.0
And... tantalizing ending. Gonna hate you for that. ;)
Nitpick: If Harper has no memory of, well, this entire story, really, then wouldn't she still be unable to speak?
That strikes me as a mental block that acted upon her physically, and even if it's a shoddy memory charm, the newly-erased-memories would have let her revert to her previous state - one which would include her inability to speak.
So even though this is excellent, I find that to be a gaping plothole. Of course, you may have interpreted her lost voice a different way, but as far as psychology goes erasing the memories which restored her voice in the first place would, in a backwards way, force Harper to revert to her previous state, i.e., unable to speak.
Author's Response: Harper's memory and voice issues are what the final chapter is based around. The idea being, as this is a romance, that Blaise has left an invisible print on her which is not in the mind, but in the soul, thereby erasing the initial reluctance she felt before she met him. It'll all be explained in the next chapter but I was aware of that and it is addressed.
It's here! Yay!
They are such kids about their parents' relationship, which I find hilarious and truly and completely accurate. It's one of those little things you manage to put in there that just makes it better.
Very much looking forward to what happens. I like Jemzi - she's an individual, that's for sure, but in the best possible way!
Author's Response: I like Jemzi too, I have good plans for her. Next chapter soon :D