I am 19 , lives in denmark and I like reading HP fanfiction :)
I have never read a Aberfoth or a Dumbledore fic before. But I thought this was awesome story ! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
I think this was a excellent story. This is also what I think DD saw.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I enjoyed writing it and think the same. ~Lindsey :)
I made me a log in so I could read your story. Oh how do I begin? I am simply in love with your stories. I love the way how do descreibe Bella and her feelings. You have made me to a Bella fan. I love reading your stories. You have a good way of using words.
Author's Response: *smiles* I\'m glad to hear you\'ve warmed up to Bella because of me. I love hearing that. Thank you for all the lovely reviews.
First of all - I am not person who really likes poem.. I don't why but : I really liked your poem. ^^ It really gave a insight (I don't know if it right word?) But it really gave a feeling of what Bella felt.
Tatjana R. Black
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
I don't think I have wrote you a review on this one - at least I can't find it. I just got into HP mood a few days ago and then I have started to read your fanfics agian:
Well this is a great one too. You are one of my favorite writers. :)
(By the way I don't think I have seen any recently written by you. Have you stopped writing fanfic?)
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you like my stories.
And yes, I have stopped writing fanfic. At least, for the time-being. But you never know, I might get into it again some day.
Oh I like the start. :)
I like your writing style
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you like the writing style, because I know some people will hate it!
It is so great so great (And I normally don't like next genrations stories!). I really like Teddy :)
Author's Response: Glad to hear! :D
Plealse countione!! I love love the story .
Author's Response: I will
Amazing story. It is getting more exciting. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: thanks. :)
What a amazing story. Love it so far
Ok. I can't believe I have not left a review. ANYWAY this story is a great one. I kept reading for days. You are so great with dialogus (or how to spell I mean the parts where they speak)
Looking forward to next chapter.
Each member of the Black family had their own fate, whether it followed or went against the family's beliefs.
Ok - I have to be honest : Normally I don't like poem of ANY kinds,
but this poem was something speciel and I enjoying reading it very much, You are such a good writer!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I kinda agree with you about the poem thing--I think some are really good but some are hard to follow. I do love to write them, though! :) I'm glad you liked this one.
Wow I liked this story very much. It was a good one-shot and you did a good job.
One line I especially liked was this one.
Without knowing it, Rubeus Hagrid has interrupted an act that he has once witnessed before.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you :) I'm really glad you liked it.
Lindsey Tonks appears to be a normal, almost invisible Hogwarts student, but underneath her is someone far from normal. What the world doesn't know is that Lindsey is the daughter of two well-known imprisoned Death Eaters, and has an identity she must hide from the world. Underneath Lindsey is a girl named Lyra Lestrange, a girl who is meant to be a secret forever. But will it last forever?
*Begins in GoF and follows the series through DH.
**Will appeal to fans of the Black family! Prominent characters are Bellatrix, Tonks, Andromeda, Sirius, and (to an extent) Narcissa.
Part Four Synopsis:
It's the summer after Albus Dumbledore's death, and the whole world is falling to Voldemort and the Death Eaters. Broken-hearted Lyra, unable to return to Hogwarts, must go into hiding with her family. It doesn't last long, and eventually Lyra is faced with a choice: join or die. Lyra's decision comes with many surprises, including a new ally who follows her to the final battle of good versus evil. While Lyra's path may seem clear, she finds herself torn between two sides for the final time, and in the end, despite tragedy and loss, Lyra accomplishes the impossible...which defies all of the agreements she and her family ever made.
Three years later, the fic has been completely finished! Enjoy reading it without having to wait for new chapters. Thanks to those who patiently waited and faithfully reviewed!
I am to lazy to think about some quenstions. It is pretty early when I write this. 6. 52 AM. Talk about time differents! But I thought I would answer your 'mail' here. So I hope you don't mind that I use your poor little review box ´*huggles the box*
First of all I would like to say that I understand you about giving your real name out. I am also very senstitive about that. :)
And thanks for answering my questions. I am looking forward to the next chapters. I don't have so much to say :)
This chapter got rected? I can't imagenaige that. Do tou have any beta ? I am just curious.
And your stories sounds very exciting. :D If you ever get to mangage to get some publised I hope you will publish under the name Lyra so I can say 'Hey I know this girl' :P
But I will let you know if I have more questions. I think I maybe will try to read your whole story agian and post a huge review if I get time.
Haha, I'm sure the review box doesn't mind! I know I sure don't! I think as long as the reviews are constructive, the mods don't mind if you post several. Anyway, the chapter that got rejected was a bit different. Apparently Lyra's characterization was unrealistic, according to the mod. I don't have a beta, mainly because I try to do things on my own and I just hate it when English teachers mark up my papers because I'd much rather them give me some advice and let me fix it myself. I also don't have one because I don't know exactly how it works, and I would rather have my writing looked at by someone I know. That said, if I ever try to publish something, I'll get an editor for that. And maybe I'll put in that story that I was Lyra Lestrange on MNFF! Thanks again. I know I say that a lot, but I mean it.
Hope everthing is going fine with you. I am.
I thought this chapter was a good chapter You are a good writer and you strong side is your dialoges. I loved the Tonks-Lyra conversation.
The only thing I did not like was that this chapter it a bit short and to me seems a bit rushed until the Lyra-Tonks conversation part.
Author's Response: Hi. I'm pretty good, too. I'm really glad you like my dialogues, because I definitely find those easier to write than paragraph after paragraph. I'm not that great at describing without listing. I realize the chapter was short, but you'll be happy to know it was one of the shortest and the next one is fairly long. I try to write long chapters, but they turn into rambling...so yeah, the rushing and short chapters are about to be over starting in part two.
Yes a new chapter of your story. You made my day. Well first of all I don't think this story is very slow moving, but I think it only me who thinks that.
For this chapter I would say it was a good one. I have not so much to say.
Anyway, for my part I would love to see flash back of her past. Her childhood, things she can remember. In my opnion I think flashback is a good way of getting knowning a charater better.
I still think you do a great job with your story. Your charater is very believbe (I can't spell that word)
From one of your readers,
Thanks so much! I think I might write a flashback if I can find a place to add it. I tried writing one earlier but it didn't work. I'm glad you gave me that suggestion as it really helps. Hopefully I'll get the next chapter out soon! Thanks again. Your reviews are really nice.
Dear dear Lyra,
First of all I am sorry that I have not written to you for a month or SO. Your poor review box must have been missing me. Anyway here I am and I hope that you still remember me.
But as you can guess the real life is very busy for me. I hope you are doing good in the real life too. How are you doing?
Anyway, back to your story. I liked your yule chapter by the way, but I have to say that I like this chapter more. Do you know that you are so good with dialoges? You really make them real . And same goes for your character. She is very beliavabe I have to say. :-) She is different from other OC I have read about. Anyway this chapter is NOT boring and DON'T ever say this about your story. But yes it gave me at least a look onhow Lyra could not get close to people, even (Or maybe it is just me) that she is anway wish she could have close friends.
But Lyra I don't really have so much else to say. Keep up the good work.
Of course I remember you! You leave some of the best reviews, I have to say. Oh, and I have an account on the beta forums now so you can PM me. I'm not exactly sure how it works, though... But my username is the same as it is here.
My real life is pretty good. But, like you I'm very busy! I'm in the school marching band, which takes up a lot of time for practice, and well...it's a good thing my story is already written, because I've been too busy and tired to write.
So, about the story. I'm glad you like this as much as you do. It seems people like it more than I thought they would. It started out as pointless rambling and turned into a space-filler, but at least it's a good one. I was just afraid it was a bit repetitive, but I guess it's not! Thanks again. Your feedback always helps.
I sent you an email. You can answer me here or to my email. I will check both. Anyway I hope you got my mail.
I do have some quenstions. It is not really about Lyra but:
1) How does Tonks' mother feel about Lyra IS daughter of Bellatrix. Kind of a wierd question, but I mean: Tonks's mother and Bellatrix was after all sisters.
You don't need to answer this quenstion, if it reaval the plot, but I was just wondering.
2) Another quenstion but is still not about Lyra but I have been thinking about it since I read the last chapter. You said that Lyra looks very much as her real mother Bellatrix and some people when the look at her thinks for a moment that she IS Bellatrix.
Have you thought about how Neville recrated to Lyra the first time he saw her? I mean after all it was Bellatrix who did *** the thing to his parents. Maybe it could be a flashback you could write about.
Hey! I did get your email yesterday; sorry I didn't reply. I was going to, I just don't have an account on the forums yet (though I plan to get one) and didn't want to answer by email in case my real name got out. But anyway, here's response to your email:
I write a variety of stories. I'm working on this one that's kind of sci-fi, with natural disasters. And it's all very teenage-girlish, you could say. Kind of a weird mix. Some of my writings are more like diaries/journal entries. I also love to write poems. On a different note, I understand why you thought the last chapter was rushed. It was originally two chapters, but the first one was rejected once and I couldn't think of anything to do to fix it besides combine the two. I did try to write a flashback scene to fill in the space, but it failed, mainly because I had to ideas or motivation. But hopefully that won't happen from here on out.
Now to answer your review questions:
1) Andromeda Tonks cares deeply about Lyra but doesn't overlook the fact that she is Bellatrix's daughter. I won't say much because it'll give stuff away about Andromeda, but you're right, they are sisters. All I can say is to keep that in mind! This will be covered in later chapters!
2) This is a good point that I hadn't thought about, mostly because of a very important chapter coming up in part two. I think Neville may have seen a resemblance between Lyra and Bellatrix, but if Lyra explained that she's part of the Black family, he might understand. That's how she explains her looks to most people.
Your reviews are great and I love to answer questions! Thank you!
Well I love you. I have been lurking around but I have still read your fanfic, but just not commented, however I had to this time and I am being honest this was if not my favorite chapter. I can tell your writing also have improved a lot - because you see in my opnion your weakness has been that you write a little too much dialouge sometimes and not descriebing, however this time I thought the balance was perfect. You also really got inside Lyra's head. Well done, I am looking forward to the next chapter
Hey! It's been a while since I've heard from you! I'm glad you're still reading my fic. I'm really glad you liked the balance. I'm really not very good at descriptions. All the descriptions I write seem very cliche to me, so I tend to go with dialogue more often. This chapter required a lot of descriptions of Lyra's thoughts, so I'm glad you thought it worked! Keep reading :D
Do you know fantanstic this story is? I am simply in love with it and I can't wait for more.
Thank you so much! I'll admit that I've had some difficulty getting chapter seven validated, but I've fixed it and it's in the queue now, so hopefully the wait won't be too long! I got your nice email and would just like to say thanks for what you said about my stories. I'm using this fanfiction as practice to become a real author someday, and it's nice to know that I'm on the right track even if sometimes I have trouble getting chapters posted. I'm glad you like this story because there is much, much more to come! Thanks again!