Summary: I can tell there’s a storm coming. The skies are turning grey, and the wind is starting to pick up. Lily Evans wonders what she can do about the war that is threatening to change everything she's ever known.
An entry to the Gryffindor 'A Banner for Thee' challenge.
oh, this was beautiful! especially the last line.
Suddenly, involuntarily, I can feel tears forming, and I wish the damn rain would hurry up and fall so I could pretend I’m not crying for him. Or maybe I’m not crying for him at all. Maybe I’m crying for myself, for what I’ve lost since I was that little girl.
What a perfect description! and it's so true, so real.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! :)
Summary: James has tried. Now it's time to give up.
I’m going to let her go. I’m going to let her be her own person, without me around. Without me around to bother her anymore.
A one-shot from James POV about trying to give up
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This story was so honest...I love how well you've explained James' feelings. This isn't a plot-heavy story, but it's so important for you as an author to understand James' feelings; I've tried to do this myself and just pause to figure out--and write--what James and Lily feel for each other. I would love to see you write a story from Lily's POV. This story is so accurate, though, right on in every sense. The part about Lily's being a whole person separate from James really resonated with me. I guess the reason I would like to see something from Lily's POV is that it's her move, so to speak, and I want to see what she does with it; I want her to give James some hope.
Anyway, I loved reading this story and I can't wait to read more of your work.
Summary: It's hard to let go, it's even harder realizing that you can't. JamesLily Oneshot.
You've got some good ideas here--but I am surprised at how casually both Hestia and James treat their relationship.
Summary: We all know that Lily and James fell in love after years of fighting ... but what about the years before that? Why did they hate each other so intensely? What caused them to argue so much?
Well, those are some of the questions I set out to try and answer!Follow Lily and James (or Evans and Potter as they like to call each other) through their seven years at Hogwarts; one chapter per year, and maybe we'll find the answers to some of these questions.
I'm really interested to see where you take this; you seem to have a really good understanding of the characters' personalities and how they interact with each other.
Author's Response: Yay! You noticed the title! I racked my brains for ages thinking of one, and then it came to me! Then I had to check that there really WAS a war called the Seven Years' War, and I hadn't just made it up! Gosh, you guys have all given me such wonderful feedback that I really hope the rest of the story is up to scratch! Ah well, there's only one way for me to find out really...! Thanks for the wonderful review, Nymphea!
Summary: Assigned to work on a project together, James Potter and Lily Evans find themselves getting to know one another through a silly game James has devised. A light, fluffy, slightly cliche one-shot. "Don’t look at me like that! I’m going to behave today." *one-shot*
This story was delightful! It was just what I wanted to read right now.
"My good opinion lost once is lost forever." So I guess James didn't read P&P once Lily said she liked that book, or he would have realized that Lily was having a Mr. Darcy moment...
I like how James is cocky but not overly so. Also, I noticed that your "Someone to watch..." James also likes giving nicknames. Hmmm....
A few criticisms.
First, I was a little confused about why Lily suddenly got mad at James. It seemed a little unprecipitated.
Also--and maybe this is just me--I wish you had foregone the "ten things" part. I love reading what you think up yourself. That part was a little weaker and seemed kind of out of place, like you knew you wanted to put it in your story but had to find where.
But the format was great. There was a nice cadence to this--the pacing was really good within each section; it was kind of lilting. That's not a very clear way to describe it, but I hope you get what I mean.
Also, you were humorous in just the right places.
All in all, very nice! I really enjoyed reading this. It was just what I needed.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked the pacing. And yes, I do have James doling out nicknames in more than one story . . . I just really think that James is the sort of person who would give Lily affectionate nicknames! Plus, I myself love them ;) Criticisms are always appreciated. When she gets mad at him it is rather sudden, and I was a little worried it would confuse people, but I really wanted the explanation to come after the fact. Thanks again for the wonderful review!
Summary: In James and Lily’s seventh year, everything changes. A war has begun, N.E.W.T.s are approaching, and James is suddenly acting like a whole new person. Lily doesn't know what to think or feel anymore, but it may well be that the events of one moonlit night on the grounds, combined with a dash of Greek mythology, will settle her head and her heart once and for all.
I love the way you wove the greek myth into this story. This fic was so well-written--especially the dream. The repetition of "or was it James"? was really good.
I like that you show James as having actually changed in that he'll help Snape...but having not changed in the good aspects of his personality.
The artemis parallel ties the story together beautifully. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, and the compliments to my writing! I'm so glad the myth ended up fitting so well, and that you enjoyed it.
Summary: “Guilt brings people together. It’s a takes one to know one type thing.”
James Potter has always been a spoiled, arrogant, lazy show-off. When he enters his final year at Hogwarts School, he’s Head Boy . . . and he’s still a spoiled, arrogant, lazy, show-off. But because of that terrible summer, he’s also guilt-ridden.
Lily Evans has always been a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. When she begins her last year at Hogwarts, she’s Head Girl . . . and still a self-righteous, impatient, temperamental know-it-all. But the first night back — and the murder that takes the entire school by surprise — leave her guilt-ridden as well.
With the darkness that’s surrounding the Wizarding world slowly seeping, at long last, onto the grounds of Hogwarts and into the lives of James Potter and Lily Evans, what comes next?
Why do we love JKR so much? Because, in the setting of her magical, fascinating world, she tells a story, And though bookstores may call her work "fantasy", at the heart of it they are really mystery stories.
I don't know if you ever watch The Office--and here I mean the US version, having never seen the UK one. Part of what makes the romance on that show so good is that it's not all we see. In fact, in an episode there may be nothing more than a meaningful glance between the couple...yet somehow that's powerful enough to sustain the viewer's hungering for romance.
Both examples are representative of your work in this story. It's a real story, not just fluff, and we see the development of James and Lily's relationship without its being the exclusive focus--and that's enough.
A few nit-picks: in the books, Prof. McGonagall refers to female students as "Miss", not "Ms."
Also, in his announcement of Jill's death, at first Dumbledore only refers to her as "a Gryffindor student". Wouldn't her name be more important than her house?
Anyway, very well done; I'm really enjoying this fic.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! That made me smile to read :) I do watch the US version of The Office and I absolutely adore Jim and Pam! I'm glad you like how the story is progressing so far, As for this nit-picks -- I'll have to fix the bit about McGonagall. Thanks for pointing it out; I always appreciate it when reviewers take the time to do such. You make a good point concerning Dumbledore's speech, but I had thought while writing that he wouldn't want to release her name for gossip fodder. Maybe I'll change it, though. . . . Thanks again!
Summary: It was the last night of term; the last night of their seventh year at Hogwarts.
It was the last night they had together.
A short story about James Potter and Lily Evans.
I would like to see more driving this story forward. I think a meditative short story can work, but it needs to be rooted in the present; I needed more of a sense of the motivation behind this story. It seemed to be mostly nostalgic musing, and I didn't get a chance to see what being "deeply in love" means for them.
I wholeheartedly encourage you to keep writing! I can't wait to read more of your work.