nymphéa: French for water lily, because Lily is one of my favorite characters :)
and pronounced NAM-fay-AH
I love the story so far...and random question (please answer) how do you know how many people have read your story?
I really liked all of it...but the last couple paragraphs seemed weaker than the rest of the story (and I missed James' crooked smile!)
I really liked this chapter! (And I'm delighted that you like TKAM). Random question, please answer: how do you know how many people have read your story?
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you, Nymphea. I\'m glad to know you enjoyed it. I adore TKAM, but you know, I\'m such a goof that it took me 5 minutes to figure out what you were talking about. *facepalm* It isn\'t like we don\'t refer to every Harry Potter by acronyms, and LotR, etc... I can be so slow it scares me. @.@ But, yes, it is one of the all time greatest books/movies ever! Regarding the number of people who have read...There is no way to know. When I first started posting, the site used a different system and there was a reads counter that would come up on your account page. When they revamped the site, they did away with that. I\'m really sort of glad, because it wasn\'t very accurate anyway. It would register a read even if someone accidentally clicked on your story. *shrugs* Now all we have to tell us if people are reading are the reviews and how many people have you on their faves list. So, that\'s a long answer to your question, when the answer is just that you don\'t know. :*) That\'s why reviews are so important. So thank you for letting me know you are reading.
I joined MuggleNet fanfiction in part to write, but also to tell you how much I love MOB! I love how you set everything up, like Remus learning Wadiwassi and that chocolate remedies a dementor attack. I think you nailed his character--he's exactly like I imagine he would be at school. I think it's perfect that Remus' dad works with magical creatures. I think you did a great job writing about him. One of my favorite parts is when Lindi is talking about if it's safe to kiss a werewolf--because so many authors don't address that at all, but you thought it through. I can't wait for the next chapter! (and I'm sorry that review was kind of rambling.)
Author's Response: Thank you, Nymphea. I don\'t think the review was rambling at all; it is lovely! I\'m really happy to know you are enjoying the story and all the little details. I have spent too much time thinking about them, I think, but I\'m obsessed with Remus, so I can\'t help myself. LOL Thank you so much for taking the time to review. I really appreciate it. :)
I love this story! James' character is absolutely right.
I love this story! James' character is absolutely right.
You wrote: James’s lifeless hand.
But he wasn't dead...maybe you should say limp or something?
I really like this fic; for the most part it's true to how I think of the characters.
eugh...Lily wouldn't drink illegally! And honestly, I don't think James would either. I really like the story so far, but this chapter bugged me.
I thought at first the "long-neglected organ" was like the liver or something, which would have really been weird. But I liked the story!
made me smile--very nice. Not quite how I imagine James, but still well-written.
I will go to a happy place
This doesn't seem quite right. Perhaps "better place"? Happy place breaks the mood you've created through the story. Otherwise, really well done.
Author's Response: Well, she is going to be with Charlie, so it is happy to her. Thank you.
It was full of passion, but it was gently. Should that be "gentle"?
I love this story...thank goodness Mirabelle was nice about it--though it seems a little unrealistic that she would take it so stoically. She should marry Aaron.
This is very well-written, one of my favorites of your work.
Author's Response: Thank you! And I\'ll go change that. This was one of the first fics on the site and I haven\'t looked at it in ages.
the juxtaposition of memories with the present makes the pain of James and Lily's deaths that much more powerful.
very beautifully written.
oh, I love it! This was such a good chapter! You planned everything out so carefully, and it really comes together here. This story is so intriguing!
Author's Response: Thanks! I have been planning this all for a while, and I'm glad you appreciate it and find the story intriguing. :)
okay, one final review.
This was one of the first stories I read on MNFF, and the first that I loved. I think it's part of the reason I started writing my own: this story was such a good example of what a fanfiction can be.
The beginning is what I remember most vividly, because it's tied up with all those memories of finding the James/Lily category and discovering there were stories in my head, too. From the very beginning, the way you described Lily and James so fit with both what JKR has written and with the characters as I imagined them that I couldn't stop reading. There's just a deliciousness, a tenderness, to the way you write their relationship--and even though the whole story is set in the made-up world of Harry Potter, the emotions are absolutely, gut-wrenchingly real, especially Lily's post-trauma development as a character.
My favorite plot twist was the discovery of Ted's duplicity. But the whole story line of the captured people was so creative and intriguing; it really gave a sense of urgency to all the events of the story. There's a war happening at the same time.
Thank you for finishing this. And yes, the epilogue is a little depressing, but I love the last line. And the epilogue isn't depressing in a bad way, just a real way. "What if?" is always the question that plagues us, isn't it, and Sirius and Emmeline feel the weight of that question here.
I can't wait to read more of your work!
Author's Response: Thank you so very much! It makes me smile to think that this story helped give you the push to write your own fanfiction :) And I'm so glad that you thought the emotions real, as that's always something for which I strive. I do think that a lot of Lily/James fics simply skip over the "there's a war going on" aspect, which clearly would have affected them in some way, so its good to know that you thought the plot captured plot line put the war into the story, and also that you liked Ted's duplicity -- I had been waiting to do that since the beginning and it was so exciting to have it all finally come out. Thanks again!
I love this story. I love it. Ted is such a fascinating, complex character and I'm so happy he's with Emma.
are there going to be any more memories? my feeling is that since Lily is starting to move on, she won't have any more...but maybe from Emma or Ted's pov?
Again, I love this story.
Author's Response: There are a few more memories left, but you're write, Lily is certainly having them less because, thankfully, she is starting to move on. And yes, you guessed it -- they'll be memories for both Emma and Ted in the upcoming chapters. Thanks for the review -- I'm glad you enjoy the story!
I can't wait!!! This was a good chapter; the memory was very well written (and congrats on your QSQ!)
Author's Response: Thanks, I thought it was a pretty good memory too! And thanks for the congrats, as well. :)
I was just rereading this chapter when I remembered how AWESOME Ted is! But I'm kind of confused: did Lily actually kill him later?
Author's Response: You\'re not supposed to know. There are all sorts of clues, but honestly, not enough for you to possibly guess what really happened. . . . Thanks for the review!
Yayy!!! A kiss!!!
And I'm feeling very clever: I was sure Jimmy was a wizard as soon as that paint drip was gone. e — ” Jimmy swallowed, dropping to the floor when his knees buckled and he lost feeling in his feet “ — a witch?” This part was so funny.
I have to tell you that I've put off reading this story because it looked really AU...but I'm SO glad I decided to read it! I had to drop everything and read all 11 chapters even though I really should study for AP US History :(
Anyway...I think this story is fantastic!!! It's funny in all the right places. I love James' spontaneity. One of my favorite parts was when he acted the scene with Lily in front of everyone after giving that speech. That was so so good. And you didn't make James shallow or stupid; he's intelligent and caring.
I love Lily's relationship with her dad; I think it's really sweet. Also, we haven't seen her mother yet; is Mr. Evans a single dad? That could be interesting.
I'm working (okay, thinking about working) on a fic right now where James is more involved in the arts than we see in canon, because I think that adds a good dimension to his personality....so I'm glad that someone agrees with me! I love that James cares so much about the play that he keeps coming back, even before he really likes Lily. I also love that he's a great dancer.
The scene where James is telling everyone about the medieval knights is one of my favorites too: he's so smart, so genuinely interested in the topic.
Your writing is beautiful; it made me "aww" and grin and laugh and shiver. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Wow--this is a long review. Think of it as 11 in one.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you figured out that Jimmy was a wizard! :) And, yes, a tad bit AU... but I also tried to keep everything as close to the book as I could! And, yes, I agree on the whole arts thing! I once wrote a story where Sirius was an artist... It\'s been a while since then, but I have explored the idea before! :D I really couldn\'t be more flattered, though - I\'m thrilled that you love my writing so much - thank you! And thanks for reviewing!\r\n\r\nYours truly,\r\nAmelia Bedelia
Thank you for finishing this story so beautifully. It's the best one I've ever read--I've already reread it several times and I know I'll continue to do so. You were absolutely accurate to how I think of the characters and I love the plot. I can't wait for the epilogue!