Oi! You there! Read my stuff, will you?
I thought I'd advertise Social Loner's amazing bannermaking skills and my latest poem. Behold!
Come on then, what are you waiting for?
Woah. That was wierd, mate. Interesting. I'm wondering about what directions this is going to take... hm....
Wow, that was exciting. The conflict between Dudley and Vernon is really good, plus you're working in the 'real world' elements well, too. Keep writing!
Ooh. Good new chapter. I love Dudley in this. Keep 'em coming!
Author's Response: Thanks!
:D New chapter! I liked the plot development we got here and action. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks!
Ooh, can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks!
[Peter Pettigrew, Obsessive-Compulsive Disorder, and the logic of fives. Dark, some disturbing imagery. One shot.]
Oh. My. Godric.
That was fantastic. The imagery, the wording, the everything. The ending was (*cough*) killer.
I really don't know what to say except for well done.
Ooh, that's lovely, that is. The imagery and wording was wonderful, although it was a little rambling and hard to follow. Keep up the nice work.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m sorry it was rambling..it wasn\'t meant to be so. How was it hard to follow? Thank you so much for taking the time to review!
First of all, I'd like to congratulate yo uon a well written fic. It wasn't exactly my favourite of yours, but I still enjoyed it.
The lyrics felt a bit... neutral to me. Truth be told, I barely read them- more like skimmed- except the ones at the end. IT sounds like an interesting song, though.
'Twas also a tad jerky, jumping from place to place. But, after about half of the fic, that was cleared up.
What I REALLY liked about this fic was the awesome twist. I totally thought it was about Harry (although the part about the cat confused me slightly: I was pretty sure Harry didn't have a cat that I knew of) until you said Draco's name. AND he wasn't actually dead, he was just comatose.
This fic was a very good look at feelings of grief and love and finally finding the will to move on and let go. In the end, we're sad about Draco and his fate (and Ginny having lost her love), but also happy that Ginny has finally decided to stop letting him control her life.
Author's Response: Thanks, Stubby! When I wrote this I wasn\'t really in my best mood and neither was my writing skills either. This was more of a \"get it down on paper quickly\" kind of story... I actually wrote it during the last two days of my friend\'s father\'s life and finished it during the funeral. I had to edit it a bit to enter it in the SBBC fic exchange. Thanks for the review!
Alright, I must admit that this story has an interesting, original premise. Who'd ever thought of Hermione becoming a vampire?
But, my enjoyment of this fic pretty much ends there. It moves quickly- too quickly to be natural- and the dialouge is dust flying off carboard cutout characters. There seems to be only one way each character can act- Hermione can only be a stereotypical 'vampire trying to be good' and Severus can only be, well, the stereotypical fanon Snape.
Don't get me wrong- the story's got promise. If you can breathe life into your characters, slow down the action and paint believable words and scenes, you could have an amazing fic here.
Ooh, here's my fave bit:
VOLDEMORT: Had you been here on time, you might also have seen
All the colours of spells, all the bright beams of light.
SNAPE: Why does this seem so wrong and Lily seems so right?
DEATH EATERS: Green–the noble killing curse!
Red–the dashing Crucios!
Green–a bruise that’s getting worse!
Red–a victim’s blood that flows!
SNAPE: (Simultaneous with above) Green–envy that never dies!
Red–the pain when she’s not there!
Green–the colour of her eyes!
Red–the colour of her hair!
VOLDEMORT: Severus, you’re no longer a child.
I do not doubt you mean it well
But now there is a higher call.
Look at me and my shattered soul!
We strive toward a larger goal.
Love doesn’t matter, not at all!
EVERYONE BUT SNAPE: Snake–the life that springs from death!
Skull–a victim’s skeleton!
Skull–someone who’s smelled Snape’s breath!
Snake–the sign of Slytherin!
LOL. Love your spoofs, Schmergo. You could be the next Weird Al or something....
Author's Response: Oh, I\'d love to be the next Weird Al. Like, as an actual job. My mum doesn\'t support it, though, sadly. That song was one of my favourite bits, though.
This poem is totally going in my favourite stories list.
I was wondering what you had in mind when you wrote it, though. I got a feeling of either Remus or Snape.
But man, was that good.
Aw... my heart goes out to everyone who has lost loved ones.
Author's Response: As does mine.
Woo-hoo! Dementor fic!
I was slightly confused by it, but I'm just crazy. It's ultimate coolness outweighed the bad things, though- you must have put a lot of thought into this. Congrats!
Ooh. Sirius angst. How I love it.
You know, I've been seeing a lot of 'Petunia was the witch' stories lately, and I'm really liking them.
It really shows you what Petunia might have felt about the whole thing with Lily, you know.
I do love the last line as well.
Author's Response: Thanks, Stubby. I\'m glad you liked the story. :)
Woah, I've never heard that one before. Sybil/Alastor. It was nice, though- a little brief, but sweet and touching nonetheless.
Author's Response: I was actually challenged to write this one - Hufflepuff\'s I Challenge Thee thread. When I first got the challenge, I very nearly gave up on it because it was so random! Anyways, I was actually able to lengthen my original drabble and voila! The story was created. I\'m very glad you enjoyed it and thank you for leaving me a review!
Aww, how sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks! =)
Hmm, interesting, Katie. Very interesting. Some of the figurative language is compelling ('Watch the sands in the hourglass,
Slowly counting down.
To the loss of all innocence,
On this murky ground.' is my favorite, I think), and it sounds really lyrical.
My only critisism is that it just sounds OOC of Harry to me, but it doesn't really affect the poem.
Author's Response: Thanks, Stubby! Yeah, Harry was bit OOC, but if he hadn\'t been, this poem wouldn\'t exist. Thanks for the amazing review!
Author's Response: And as for the lyrical thing. . . . See, all my poems start out as songs, and then I tweak them so they\'re a bit less song-ish. I think you can still kind of tell, though.
Woah, I just got chills there. That was great, mate. Really sums up and expresses Moody's character in an interesting way.
Ooh! That's cool, mate. Brilliant
I love your characterisation of Narcissa as practical. It was marvelously written and intriguing.