Please do not delete
Love the story, but I'd like to give you a few pointers on grammar, if you don't mind. See my user profile for my AIM screen name. I know I'm not a beta reader, but I wasn't the best student in my 12th grade English class for nothing!! (I'm a recent high school grad)
One word (whole story): Awesome.
Author's Response: Another one word review! I must be making everyone speechless. Thanks for the review! It makes my day.
*chuckles* Wonderful, simply wonderful!! Sequel, anyone?
Author's Response: I\'m thrilled you found this story wonderful! And if you wish a sequel, check out my longer fic \"As Happily Ever After As They\'re Gonna Get\" as it more or less follows this one. The only exception is with the portrait of Snape in the headmistress\' office as I have different plans for that in the chaptered story. Thanks for reading and reviewing! cj
Haha yeah, I did. It's almost as if you have a view into J.K.'s mind as to how she would have written it. I realize that I sometimes prefer reading post-DH-chapter-36 H/G stories that are a little more adult-oriented, but more often than not, it comes at the expense of the story's quality. Your style is a seamless balance between readability for adults (or late teenagers, like me) and the semi-younger set (but I agree with the notion that you wouldn't want your 9-year-old to read it.
P.S. You don't actually have to keep putting disclaimers in each chapter's notes. All you really need is one in the story notes. I know it may not seem that way, but trust me, it's fine. All you really need to do that for is if you pull a quote out of the book(s).
Author's Response: Disclaimers - yeah. It seemed to be getting a little much to be honest. It was getting tough to say the same thing in different ways! LOL! Thanks for the comments about having a view into Ms Rowling\'s mind. How sweet to say. I actually have the more \'adult-oriented\' version on these chapters in my head but as I know the children I work with (grade 6) and my own children read these stories, I had to keep it clean. After all, it\'s just as easy to click \'yes I\'m of age\' as it is to click \'no, I\'m not\', right? I\'m pleased you think my writing is a balance between readability for adults and young \'uns. Thanks so much for taking the time to review Sean! cj
*chants as if cheering on Superman* UP-DATE!! UP-DATE!! UP-DATE!!
Author's Response: I take it you liked it then. I\'m doing my best to update asap. When my dh was in the hospital I was dying to write and now that he\'s out and things are slowly getting back to normal, I have a bit of time but I\'ve been hit with the biggest writer\'s block. Very disheartening! It\'s lovely to know people are still anxious for the next chapters, though. cj
It's perfect! Though the warning is entirely unnecessary.
I realize you haven't updated this in a while. Would you like me to help you, perhaps collaborate on this story (i.e. as co-authors)?
Author's Response: I\'m sorry, but I am going to have to refuse. The next chapter of this is in queu and I\'ve got it all planned out. There really would be no benefit to having someone else writing with me. So I\'m sorry, but no. Thank you for offering though.
No, it's fine. Don't apologize. I just wanted this thing out of the starting gate lol, cuz it's a GREAT story so far!! Do you need a beta?
Author's Response: No, I have a beta, but again, thank you for offering. I\'m glad you like the story!
NOOO!! I hate cliffhangers!! Haha. Can't wait for the next one!! Please update soon!!
You know, I think that the whole thing with Mrs. Weasley barging in and such is a bit OOC; she knows perfectly well how her and Arthur started off, and therefore the sheer hypocritical-ness that that whole scene bought upon Mrs. Weasley. Now Ron, I can understand, but if Arthur is the realistic, mature advocate of Harry that I know he is, he probably had a talk with Molly before Harry got there about him and Ginny consummating their love. At least, that's what I'm planning.
Author's Response: Honestly, I beleive that Mrs. Weasley is the type of woman who has trouble seeing her kids grow up. Plus it is in human nature to overlook are own past when dealing with a situation in which those you love are involved And although Mr. Weasley may have a diferent stand and may advocate to Mrs. Weasley that she should let up on Harry and Ginny, i think she to strong willed to heed anyones opinion but her own.
Yeah, I can see where you're coming from. I just think that the Battle of Hogwarts may have _finally_ convinced Mrs. Weasley that her children can take care of themselves: perhaps her sheer fury when dueling Bellatrix was of the type where something like "Dammit, you are not ending my daughter's life when I just saw her grow up" was going through her head...or maybe Molly killing Bellatrix was Mrs. Weasley's way of doing her daughter one last motherly favor-sort of going out with a bang, if you will. Losing Fred may have kind of shocked her into some realization, too. I know that if I were in her position, my view would be something like "life is too short, and they should enjoy it while they can". It could go either way-JKR never said which way it went, so as fanfic writers, we are essentially both right.
Author's Response: I see your viewpoint. I also think that Fred dieing however would have the opposite effect, it would make Mrs. Weasley hold on to her children that much more. Speaking from personal expierence, when my brother died my mother seemed to have a vice grip placed over all are lives for a long while. She didn't want anything to happen to us, or for us to grow up to quickly
Like I said, JKR never said how Mrs. Weasley turned out, so as fanfic writers, we're technically both right!