Hi, I'm Kate! I'm a fairly recent Potter fan - only started reading the books after "Prisoner of Azkaban" movie came out (when I realised I was becoming something I hated - a movie-fan, who hadn't bothered reading the books). At that time, Order of the Phoenix was out, and I managed to finish all five in the space of a week, I think!
My favourite characters are Tonks, Sirius, Weasley Twins, Lupin, Draco and Lucius (I have a thing for blonde bad boys hehehe). A big fan of alternative couples - so you can imagine my annoyance when JKR decided to pair Tonk and Lupin. They are still one of my favourite couples. I'm such a romantic!
It has been a while since I wrote fanfiction, but I have written many LotR stories. I also used to beta in LoTR fandom, so I would be happy to beta again. Romance stories preferred.
Works in progress:
* "One Night, One Chance" - George Weasley comforts Tonks in her time of need.
* Three part series about Tonks. Each story will focus on a major period of her life - Hogwarts, Auror training and the Order(including romance with Lupin).
* "Scarlet Woman" - Story focusing on Ginny, and the boys she dated, in an attempt to forget Harry.
This is third time lucky for me reviewing this story - my computer hates me and keeps eating the reviews!! Half the reason I signed up was so I could review your lovely story.
You have taken an original concept and built it into what is clearly going to be a touching love story. I love the way you keep building on Tonks and Lupin's relationship, adding new levels with every meeting. Adding cameo roles for certain characters, such as Bill, Charlie and Regulus was a clever touch as well.
My one piece of constructive critism refers to the fact that Tonks did not appear to recognise Lupin in Hogsmeade, even though - at there previous meeting in the Leaky Cauldron - she probably would have been old enought to recall his face. Obviously, we can't expect baby Tonks, or even toddler Tonks, to remember the young man she terrorised (;P), but by "Angel of Hope" I thought she'd be old enough. You probably have your reasons for this, but I just thought I'd mention it (just in case).
Otherwise, I found this to be a very enjoyable read - easily the best Tonks/Lupin fanfic I've come across. I hope you will be able to update soon! :)
Author's Response: You have pointed out an aspect that I am trying very hard to camouflauge - how to stop them recognizing one another in later meetings. In \'Angel of Hope\' I had Remus altering his appearence to avoid being pitied and suspected. But it\'s going to be difficult next chapter onwards. Thanks for reading!
This was very sweet! I don't think there are enough Hermione/Viktor stories out there, and most of the ones that are don't explore Viktor's romantic side. I like that this story is implied romance too - even though we don't see the two interact physically, the affection between them is still obvious.
You wrote Viktor's letter amazingly well. The difficulty with English was just enough to imply he had tried to learn the language.
I really hope you'll consider writing a sequel where the two meet and the rose blooms (but I'm guessing you'll wait until the final book, just in case one of them is killed).
This is a very cleverly written story about the Marauder's in their younger years. I think you have developed their younger characteristics very well, particularly Sirius (you should take this as a very big compliment - I'm very picky about Sirius characterisation!). I also enjoyed your development of the parents of the four Marauders (especially Mrs. Black - the hateful, old cow), though I did wonder why you called Mr. Lupin Harry (I found it slightly confusing, but that's just me).
A couple of points for constructive criticism. Number one, while I liked that you included Neville's parents in this story, I don't know whether Frank Longbottom would have been such close friends with the Marauders in school. I mean, he's obviously a very talented wizard (as his mother constantly reminded poor Neville, plus he was an Auror), so I would think that - if he *was* close friends with those four, he would have been in on Lupin's secret, and become an Animagus with James, Sirius and Peter. Just a bit of food for thought.
My second point is probably just pickiness, but it's something easily rectified, so I thought I should mention it. I gathered the idea from certain things you have written that you are American (or at least not British) - things like using the words "dessert" and "cookies", or spelling "recognise" as "recognize", etc. (I was pleased to see you *had* used "Mum"). While this really isn't a huge issue, I feel that if you had someone more familiar with British spelling, grammar and slang, your story could have a more authentic Harry Potter feel to it. This is just a friendly suggestion to make your story even better - and you are free to ignore me :P
I am very much looking forward to further chapters of this story!
Author's Response: Wow, this may be the longest review I\'ve ever gotten (actually it probably is). I will take that as a compliment about characterizing Sirius, I\'m also very picky about how he\'s characterized. The parents will hopefully be a big part of the story, and the cow, Mrs. Black, will be seen again. It is confusing that Mr. Lupin is named Harry but I don\'t want to say too much about the reason for it. You\'re right about Frank probably not being the closest of friends with the Marauders. I figured that because this was their first year they might be closer and then slowly drift apart until they\'re in the Order together. Even then, they probably weren\'t very close, but they were undoubtedly friendly. You guessed right, I\'m American. I\'m very good about using Mum, but forget the other British substitutions for what Americans write. So \"dessert\" would probably be \"pudding\" and cookies are biscuits right? I\'ll look it over once the first year is finish and make the necessary changes. I\'m not going to ignore your advice about it, you\'re completely right that it\'ll be authentic if the correct British terms are used. Overall, thanks for reading and I\'m definitely going to try and fix it up using what you mentioned.
Still making us wait for the prank? You're very mean :P!
I really liked your explanations for why some of the other DADA teachers left (I'm having trouble coming up with ideas for a Tonks fic I'm writing). In particular, running off with a Banshee. Where on earth did you come up with that? Very amusing!
Remus's birthday present was very sweet. It would have been good to have a little bit more on Sirius's birthday (because I think it would have been a big deal for him to have his first birthday away from home), but I did like what you included. While his present wasn't as thoughtful, it certainly suited him!
And by the way, we were both right about Sirius's age, and whether Andromeda would still be at school. I checked on Lexicon, and there's about four approximate DOBs listed for Sirius (and James, Remus, Peter, Lily and Snape), and the info is slightly different depending on which section you go to. I was just using a slightly earlier DOB than you. So glad you didn't try to change anything because I didn't verify my info ;)
Author's Response: Don\'t worry, the prank is the next chapter. Ooh the banshee, the weirdest things pop into my head when I write. That happened to be one of them. Next time Sirius\'s birthday rolls around I\'ll go into more detail - that\'s a promise. The Lexicon does have a lot of varying dates of birth. Something has to be right. Thanks for reading!
Yes, I am a long review writer. As an author, I've always found reviews which stated what was good and why, and what could be improved upon much more useful than "great story. i love it" and the like. So be prepared for more epical reviews from me :)
It was good to see Remus's grandfather showing some affection towards him. I was beginning to dislike his character, but he has rectified himself now. And I'm guessing you like making poor Remus suffer - imagine a stomach virus, just after transformation!
I liked how you worked Narcissa and Lucius into this chapter too. I did work out something interesting though. If you go to Harry Potter Lexicon, they have some very well approximate dates of birth for key characters. Going by information on that page, Narcissa would only be 3 years older than Sirius, and Andromeda, at least, would also still be at school. Probably too late to make such substantial changes, but it could be something to keep in mind for other stories.
(By the way,your response about Frank was a good one. Friends don't always remain so close, and maybe Frank was too distracted by Alice when the others were becoming Animagi, hehehehe. Those corrections of British words were right too. I think the easiest thing to do would be setting your spellcheck to English UK - that'll ensure British spelling of particular words where the US spelling has changed).
Eagerly awaiting the prank and its aftermath :)
Author's Response: (Ahh! I just had a response for you and it goes and logs me out! So let\'s try this again...)
I love getting long reviews that point out what\'s good and why, and I try giving them whenever I review someone else\'s work.
Yeah, Remus\'s grandfather is trying to redeem himself, and he\'ll continue doing it. Heh, yeah I like making Remus suffer, even though he\'s my favorite character, I\'m weird like that.
I checked out the Lexicon when I was doing this chapter (and chapter 8). I thought Andromeda was a year out of school, but I could be wrong. I always gets the dates for the Marauders a little mixed up, but you\'re right, it\'s way too late to change it (I already tried).
I\'ll try the spellcheck, and if that doesn\'t work I\'ll just go over it manually. Thanks for reading!
This is a clever little story :) I'm looking forward to seeing how everyone reacts to their partners - especially Fleur. I also think you....I mean, the twins, did a wonderful job choosing the couples, though Ron's reaction may have been more amusing if Hermione was paired with Krum (guess that would be a little too cliche though).
Your little hints towards Luna/Krum were interesting. I'm all for the more original pairings, and that's certainly one I've never seen before. I hope you work with it, because they both deserve someone.
I haven't really got any suggestions for improvement - characters were all well written and IC (especially the twins). The only thing, maybe, was that the perspective changed a little too frequently. I think nearly every character had a scene from their point of view. It can sometimes become a little confusing when there are too many point of view, but other than that, fabulously written story. Looking forward to the next chapter :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for liking it and dropping me a review! I\'ve always liked Luna/Viktor, they just seem to me a couple that would work well, somehow. Actually, I was aiming for pratically everyone having a scene...*blushes* I just thought it might be interesting to see how everyone at the wedding reacts to the whole fiasco. Anyway, thanks again!