Penname: SmileyWeasley [Contact]
Real name: Amy
Member Since: 03/21/05
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I'm a twentysomething who found HP only after seeing the first movie. I'm now obsessed, pretty much like everyone else visiting this page:) I love smiley faces and R/Hr and H/G ships. I much prefer ficlets to novel-length stories. I appreciate reviews, tips, advice, etc., so please don't hesitate to review my work.
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Summary: This is the story of how Hermione and Ron realised they were in love, saving the best for last.

Categories: Ron/Hermione Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2058 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/22/05 Updated: 02/22/05


Reviewer: SmileyWeasley Signed
Date: 03/22/05 Title: Chapter 1: Saved The Best For Last

I thought, overall, it was quite good. I didn't like the tense you used (passive past tense or something, I don't remember what it's called). I also don't like to idea of glamorizing pregnancy before marriage. It's not a good message to send to the young audience that reads these stories. Otherwise, keep up the good work!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: SmileyWeasley Signed
Date: 03/22/05 Title: None

Not bad. I can tell that you are very romantic and probably quite young based on this story. Keep writing! You've got a great start. I think other reviewers were right in saying that it's very unrealistic for a couple to get married on their first date - especially in what I assumed to be a Catholic Church. (That isn't allowed in a Catholic Church, fyi. You must go through months and months of counseling first, but you probably know that.) Like I said, keep writing, and try to put as much reality into the story as possible so we can all relate. Thanks!

Author's Response: But...Darma and Greg got married on their first date, and it turned out fine. I'm not Catholic...and now that you mention it, I did know that you have to go through months of councleing (Bit of a waste, if you ask me). Obviously you don't know that I have a lot of stories, but thank you for your honesty. Thanks again!

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