I'm a 22 year old girl from England. I've got a horse, who lent his name for this and have recently completed a degree in Chemistry at university.
I first read the Philosopher's Stone about 4 years ago, and I read books 2 and 3 on my birthday about 3 weeks later. I read all the remaining books on the day they came out.
So far, I've written, or in the process of writing, five fics on here - 2 oneshots, 1 shorter fic and 2 longer fics. Please let me know your opinions on them, I read every comment I get and add a response. If you've got any questions/suggestions/plot ideas etc. feel free to contact me and I'll do my best to answer asap.
Also, I do know a little Latin so if anyone wants a bit of a hand with translating spells from English into Latin, feel free to email me and I'll do my best to help. Also, I'm more than happy to beta read stories, if anyone wants me to - just email me and I'll write back as soon as I can.
Thanks a lot to all you guys who have taken the time to review my stories - it is very much appreciated.
All I say to my fellow fic writers and friends though is:
Draco Dormiens Nunquam Titillandus.
Grrr, it's taken me about 10 attempts to be logged in long enough to review. Anyway though, I'll get to the point... :)
I like what you've done so far, you've really set yourself up for some great action/Angst so I'm looking forward to seeing how this all develops.
I assume you've ignored the fact good old Sirius died in book 5...? It doesn't matter though, you've intergrated him really well so far and I like the way you've got Snape sorting him out after Lupin died. I dunno, it just seems sort of, natural and human that Snape would do that if he could...
I also have to say well done for killing Harry (Sorry if that sounded morbid) Very few fic writers do that so I'm really going to enjoy how you write the rest of this. I hope you can update soon as that cliffy was evil :) Well done though, and maybe have longer chapters coming up...?
Author's Response: Thanks!!! Don't worry, the old Sirius-alive thing will eventually be explained - Painted Black was meant to be about that but it wasn't very good so I stopped it. Sorry about the short chapter, that was only a prologue, and the next isn't particularily long either. That's only becuase everything's just getting started, but chapter three's gonna be a killer!!! Also, next Dark Lord ... your gonna love him!
Hey, I like it! I so pleased Phoebe is all right *breathes sigh of relief*, I wasn't sure what would happen to her or if she'd go the same way as the Longbottoms. As for Snape, where the heck is he off to? Dissapaating in the middle of that *shivers*. Incidentally, where's Dumbledore in all this? Just wondering... :) Very good so far though and I hope you can update soon! ~Stormy x
PS: I'm not sure whether you would have seen the author's note on Darkest Hour yet or not, but just in case you haven't, i've started submitting the sequel so it should be up soon if you want to check it out :)
Author's Response: Aargh! It's taken me ages to be logged in long enough to be able to answer! Anyway: Wahoo! I'm so jhappy you've finally submitted the sequel, I can't wait until it is approved! You're writing's great!
Don't worry, everything about Snape wil be described in later chapters, and he actullay only Disapparates off to Hogsmeade to get back to Hogwarts, no where nasty ... yet. As for Dumbledore, it is mentioned in the first chapter (perhaps not quite as well as I had hoped) that Dumbledore dies in the last war. how? That will too be mentioned later on - never fear - everything will be!
Thanks for reviewing - your the bestx ~Ermine the One~
I love it!!! It was amazing - I thought you portrayed the characters really well, I thought it wasn't OOC at all. You asked for a few comments and I noticed a couple of tiny little errors so...
“See, she was attacked by some wizards (a neighbour saw them running away from her window) – I dunno if you could perhaps … You don't usually have brackets in speech, so possibly change it to : “See, she was attacked by some wizards; a neighbour saw them running away from her window. I dunno if you could perhaps …"
At one point you said “Who else were attacked!” Snape cried to get his attention” I don’t really think Snape’s the type to cry out like that – maybe change it to snapped or something…? And you should have ‘was’ instead of ‘were’.
Also, you mentioned towards the and that Snape had ‘issues’ – I might be wrong and this is just a personal thing but issues always sounds a bit like he’s having a strop or something for no reason. ‘Secrets’ or something similar may be a bit better…
Sorry if that sounded like I was lecturing you, cos I really didn’t mean it to sound that way! The story’s absolutely fantastic and I hope you keep writing and updating! Hopefully you’ll get more reviews as well soon. Another 10 :)
Author's Response: Why thankyou, oh loyal reviewer! I shall take everything you said into account and go back through chapter three, which I am submitting shortly!!!
Ahhhhh! Cliffie!!! Noooooo! Sorry, I will gain control of myself soon :)
That was amazing! The bit about the grave being empty and Voldemort returning *shivers*... Just a thought, the guy who Snape talked to using Legilimency (I've forgotten his name, sorry), I think you mentioned that he had green eyes. Harry's gone missing and someone with green eyes turns up with dear old Voldemort... Odd coincidence, that. Servant guy = Harry...? Just a guess I suppose, probably mee doing 2+2=5 again but hey, lol.
Absolutely great chappie though and I can't wait for the next one! 10.
PS : Thanks for reviewing my fics; the least I can do for the encouragement you gave me is to do the same for you! :) ~Stormy x
Author's Response: Thanks, Stormy!!! As ofr Harry being with Voldemort ... 2=2=5, maybe ... But I can't say no or yes incase comeone reads the reviews before the chpater, in whoch case everything is given away ... Next chappie may take a bit longer than usual as I've got tonnes of coursework to be doing - but I'll do my best all the same, and your encouragement helps in every way, guys - I appreciate it so very much!!!!!!! And a 10? Yay!!!!111
Ooh, I love it! Brilliant, and Cat didn't seem too happy with Sirius, and Sirius didn't seem to happy with Cat... Really good chappy though and I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: Yay Stromy!! I was wondering wher you had gone! :D Thanks for the review, I'm glad to see that you use Cat's nickname too - I thought I hadn't really made it that clear in the novel that that was what she was called but ... :D
~Ermine the One
Hi again! First, I want to say Happy Christmas and thanks for the update! A great way to start the holiday... :) Anyway, I'll get on with the review...
'No one could come back from the dead … unless … You added this at the beginning so casually but, well, I guess there is a way ot bring someone back from the dead? Or there isn't a way, but Phoebe thinks there is...? It just struck me as I started reading the chapter that it seemed like it was significant. Possibly Snape knows something that Phoebe will need to help Harry?
I liked the way you introduced your new character, it gave the reader just enough information to make us curious but without giving too much away. The comment about the tax man was classic though - I loved it! Gives me the impression that the guy knows his stuff but isn't completely on top of everything in his life. Kinda reminded me of Slughorn...
When Severus answered, “Only me,” I have to say that it unnerved me a little bit. Your new character must be sure of himself, of know Snape very well, to describe him as 'only you'. I mean, Snape has been renowned in his time at Hogwarts as mean, evil, sarcastic etc. and to see him greeted almost casually, in a friendly way, was really nice but a little bit unnerving.
I also liked the way you showed Logan's reaction to Voldemort's return. Snape's sarcastic, abrupt answers were really true to his character though so well done!
"But it can’t be true, Severus, you know it can’t.” That line made me shiver. How often in the real books do we see characters in denial of Voldemort? Fudge, for example, in the Goblet of Fire when he refused to believe Voldemort was back. Hang on, are you going for copious amounts of irony here?! Lol, good cliff hanger as well. I wonder what Snape wants with Logan...?
Sorry for going on so long but once I started reviewing I just couldn't stop! I also read your response to the last review I left... *blushing* Thank you! I hope you have a good christmas and I can't wait for the next update! I hope I'll be able to update Flame of Obitus as soon as the mods reopen the queue again. I've got the whole story planned now and quite a lot of it's written, including the ending. If you want, maybe check it out sometime?
Happy Christmas though (For the third time now I think!) and I hope you have a great time!
~ Stormy x
Author's Response: Thanks again Stormy, your reviews really are a great help to me. I read through your fic, I think, but last time I looked it wasn't updated. I'll read and review for you now :) Now, "no-one can come back from the dead, unless ..." This should be easy enough to work out, and it relates very closely to Voldemort. I won't say any more incase I ruin the fic, but look out for clues further on in the fic. Again, thanks for the review Stormy and have an excellent christmas!!!! ~Ermine the One
I thought this was really good, especially as I haven't read a full length account of what happened when Voldemort killed Lily/James. My only thought though, is that Harry seemed to be talking a lot using fairly long words, like 'coward'. Maybe I'm wrong but I can't really see a baby saying that. Otherwise, it was really good, and well written. 9.
Author's Response: Well, I wasn't sure how much Harry-speech I could get away with, so I just decided that if that's not normal for a 1 year, 3 month old.. then he's special. :) Glad you like it... :) ~*~ LIZ
Does two reviews warrant an update?! Anyway, I'll get tothe revieing bit... I loved it! Really original, and it could be interesting seeing Snape as a werewolf... The wolf that bit him; Lupin or someone else? I really hope you can update soon, this one is definitely being added to my favs!
Author's Response: THANYOU!! aswell. I decided to get Snape bitten because he was always scoffing at Lupin being a werewolf so I thought it would do him good to suffer ... Even though Snape is definitely my favourite character. I want atleast 10 reviews, actually, though I suppose I may end up giving in eventually ... Thanks for putting me in your favourites, I'm honoured - your the only one to do this I think. As for who actually bit Snape ... It's pretty obvious, I know, but I won't say the answer yeet - that's in next chapter when I decide to update.
I was wandering through my favs (again) and I re read your chappie for the second time since I was a little bit bored. All I can say is wow! This is just as good 2nd time around as it was the first time and I was still scared rigid at the end! You sure as heck can right Angst, lol. Absolutely great and I hope you can update soon *pleading*. God, I hate cliff hangers!
Author's Response: A few people have said this story is scary ... lol! I'm so happy this is going the way I hoped it would. Well, I am half-way through Chpater Two for this at the moment as I have decided to update at last *bows to the cheers*. the next Chapter won't be as good as this one as i have to explain what happened *yawns very widely* but it should get REALLY exciting after that - I have the whole thing worked out and the endings gonna be a big surprise ... ooh.
Anyway, Stormy, I've updated A New Battle, so if you want to read that (I dunno if you have already or not) I'll be most grateful.
~Ermine the One~
*Shivers* I just found this and it was so, so sad. I don't really know what to say except well done... *Shivers again* You seemed to keep everything blunt and to the point which made it more haunting, I suppose. My only comment though is a six year old is unlikely to know what 'insanity' means... Just a thought though and very well written. Nice touch at the end, too...
Author's Response: Hey Linda! Thanks for the concrit, I didn't really think about that before, and so I have changed Neville's Grandmother's explanation into something that a six-year old would (hopefully) understand! I'm glad that you found it chilling, that was the iuntended affect! Lexi xxx