I'm a 22 year old girl from England. I've got a horse, who lent his name for this and have recently completed a degree in Chemistry at university.
I first read the Philosopher's Stone about 4 years ago, and I read books 2 and 3 on my birthday about 3 weeks later. I read all the remaining books on the day they came out.
So far, I've written, or in the process of writing, five fics on here - 2 oneshots, 1 shorter fic and 2 longer fics. Please let me know your opinions on them, I read every comment I get and add a response. If you've got any questions/suggestions/plot ideas etc. feel free to contact me and I'll do my best to answer asap.
Also, I do know a little Latin so if anyone wants a bit of a hand with translating spells from English into Latin, feel free to email me and I'll do my best to help. Also, I'm more than happy to beta read stories, if anyone wants me to - just email me and I'll write back as soon as I can.
Thanks a lot to all you guys who have taken the time to review my stories - it is very much appreciated.
All I say to my fellow fic writers and friends though is:
Draco Dormiens Nunquam Titillandus.
This is a Scrooge-like tale. Dennis's life is threatened, Harry, Ron and Colin try in vain to convince Snape, but Snape refuses.
I like the way you've started this fic, the story itself is very original and certainly could get interesting. Well done! But I have to say there were a few errors in the chapter. You said in your last review you wanted to be told what they were so...
"All they could do is Nurse Dennis, but their efforts were in vein." should be "All they could do was nurse Dennis, but their efforts were in vain."
I also noticed that Snape and Dumbledore particularly seemed OOC. I can't really see Dumbledore saying 'stuff' and I've always seen Snape as the quieter, more threatening type - he's not really likely to start yelling for no real reason. He's more likely to sneer, or threaten quietly...
As a suggestion, you could possibly get a BETA? Anyway, well done so far and I like the story itself so far but it could be improved if the charachters became a little less OOC. You've done well with the Creevy brothers though.
Author's Response: Ah the present tense mistake. Snape might not yell but when it comes to christmas...he can yell, he can scream, he can threaten to kill Dumbledore for all I care. And...oh...another Creevey lover I see? Me too. I dont have much time for BETA but I will if I can and remember. Pardon me for asking, but what does OOC mean. As for the story being original, yeah, its supposed to be like that. Sorry chapter 2 is taking so long, having a bit of trouble getting it through.
OOC means 'Out of Character'. And I'm not a huge Creevy brothers fan but you might change that :) I hope chapter 2 is up soon!
Author's Response: I resubmitted chapter 2. Hopefully, it will be up by tomorrow or the day after if there are no errors. Sometimes, even in my other story, there might be OOC.
Good chapter, especially with the reasoning behind why Snape hated christmas. I thought it was still a little OOC at different points and the story could be improved with a little extra detail. I'll definitely check out the next chapter - you've certainly got some great ideas, just pad them out with a little bit more detail.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. They do go a bit OOC don't they? Still, there is slow submission at this time, I don't when the next chapter will come up.
Oooh, good cliffy! The person at the end,Snape maybe? The whole 'Potter' thing just sounds like him... Anyway, great start so far and I look forward to what's coming. My only comment is that you did get a little bit carried away with commas at the start of the chapter. Other than that though, well done! *9*
Author's Response: Thank you for ur review!!!Yes, i have a certain thing with commas;) I've submitted the next chapter so it should be up soon!!
I am stunned by this fic - I never usually like the suicide fics but that was brilliant! You captured so well how Harry could feel after defeating Voldemort and the photo Colin took, and the results of it, are spot on with what could happen in the real world. Well done, and I hope you have more fics coming soon!
Author's Response: Wow, that's quite a compliment! I based Colin taking the photo off of all of the private moments that get exploited on the news every day.
Summary: It’s the summer after the battle at the Ministry of Magic and Harry has returned to Privet Drive, where he awaits the time when he can rejoin his friends. A certain redhead has begun to occupy his mind and awaken emotions he never knew he had. As he continues to mourn the loss of his godfather, Harry slowly begins to heal and may have discovered a way to communicate with Sirius. Can it be too good to be true? Takes place directly following OOTP. Primarily a H/G romance, with some R/Hr as well. Rated R for adult content in future chapters.
I like the way you're going with this fic, well done! You've got Ginny very well in character and I like your overall style of writing. Again, well done and I hope you update soon. You've got a lot of potential with this fic so I'm looking forward to seeing how it unfolds. Oh, and I hope Harry appreciates the letter...
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! This is my first fanfic, so I am a little nervous about it and was hoping it would be well received. I'm glad you think Ginny in in character - she is one of my favorite characters and I wanted to do her justice. I plan to post chapter two sometime soon. I rather like Harry's reaction to the letter, but then I'm kind of partial! Thanks again for the review.
I've just started reading this fic and I have to say, I like where you're heading with it! Snape's seriously treading a dangerous line giving Malfoy the book and so's Draco - with reading it. Well done and I hope more's coming soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, Snape really takes some risks in this story. All for Draco . . . *awww* It was so tempting to make this ssp. hahaha! Don't worry, I avoided that!
Another good chapter! I especially like the descriptions in the book, and the way you described the pictures; it actually sent a shiver down my spine! Superb and you really deserve more than four reviews :) I'm looking forward to chapter 3!
Author's Response: Thanks again! It's great to hear from people!!
You've certainly set yourself up for a really different type of story here and I'm looking forward to see how it develops. I hope you get to update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks :-) I certainly hope this story will be different, I've read far too many Snape/Hermione stories that go over the same old ground again (apprenticeship etc...) that I thought I might do something a little differently!
You're going from strength to strength here - well done! My only comment, though, is that the chapter was a little bit short. Maybe make your next on e a little bit longer? Overall, well done though. I look forward to updates!
Lol, Snape cooking! And when he said that it was like Potion making but easier... Fantastic!
The end - with Snape being recruited to dear old Voldemort - was just totally unnerving; somehow, it seems worse when it's because his parents forced him into Voldemort's care, rather than him making a choice. Also, the bit about LV not knowing about Sirius was intriguing, along with Snape being half way to decent towards Harry!
Anyway, a really great chapter and well done for keeping all the characters in character, even though you're showing us different sides of them. Well done.
I like it so far! I was a little bit worried when I first saw it that it would be similar to another story I read, but you've got a completely new take on it. Well done, and a nice place to end the chapter on.
Author's Response: Well I hope it isn't similar to anything else, as I came up with the idea myself. Enjoy chapter two -- coming soon!
Hmmmm, interesting... You've certainly started an interesting fic and I'm looking forwards to updates. Well done.
Wow! I LOVE it! You're doing absolutely amazing with this - please keep updating! Ahhhhhh; I can't wait for updates, the tension is killing me! Seriously though, it's really amazing and, I'll ay it again, leagues ahead of Destiny. Well done, and keep this quality of work up! Linda x
Author's Response: Thankyou so much! I am really pleased with this project, and it is now finished. I think I'm gonna post them all one after the other because I want to get this fic finished before July16th. Trying not to sound big headed, i think thst story is leagues ahead of Destiny too. Im really really pleased with it! Lol! And thakyou for the lovely review. Niw I think Id better revise.... oh, no, wait, did I say revise? I meant go out.
Hiya! To be perfectly honest, this story's leagues ahead of Destiny. I really like the way you've written the characters and I especially liked the dates you added to the story - it made it seem very... realistic I suppose - almost like a diary. Well done and I hope you've got more coming soon!
Author's Response: Yay thankyou! This might sound big-headed, but I think that it's leagues ahead of Destiny too. I used the dates to give historical context to it, so thate evryone can see when, um, events....started. I really have put a lot more effort and thought into this that I ever did into Destiny, and I've decided that I just want to get all of this posted, so I'm gonna submit the next chapter now! Arent I a nice author? Lol. xxxxx Thankyou for the lovely review xxxxx PS: Update soon! (Pps; I can talk.....read your email and you'll know what I mean.)
Talk about about starting with a bang! I mean, silence, lol. Anyway, what I mean to say is that I'm really impressed - you've captured the atmosphere brilliantly and I felt really sorry for Alice.
My only comment, though, is that I don't really see Wormtail as the type to give orders, but I know I'm just being difficult!
Overall, really well done and I'm looking forward to your updates!
Summary: Just because Pansy is named after a flower and wears pink does not mean she is a simpering twit. She was, after all, sorted into Slytherin. She’s always been stronger than she looks. Draco may be spoiled and rich, but he’s also volatile and cruel. He may hide behind his image, but he has his image for a reason. This is story of revenge.
Third and last chapter in queue.
Ummm, a little bit, er, odd if i'm perfectly honest. How old are Draco/Pansy? After Hogwarts? And where's Lucius/Narcissa etc if this is happening at Malfoy Manor? I'd be interested to see where this is going because at the moment I'm really not sure...
Author's Response: I know, it's totally odd-- I completely agree. They aren't in school anymore, let me say. This will all get explained, I promise :) Next chapter is almost done. I'm glad this interests you, hope you come back and finish reading the rest.
Woah, talk about starting with a bang! That was seriously good - one of the best prologues I've read on here. It was very, very short but you really got the point across - well done! Oh, and I love the cliffie you've left and I look forward to updates. Hopefully they'll be longer than this though...? :)
Two little things I noticed; in the first line you've written 'barley' and not 'barely', and later you've got 'Shaklebot' not 'Shacklebolt'. Only nit picking I know, sorry :)
Author's Response: Aight, Fixed em. You woulda thought after rejecting my story six times Chelsea would've picked em up? :P Anywayz, ill update as soon as I write somethin more :P
Oooooh, I loved it! Fantastic! Brilliant! (ok; calming enthusiasm) It wasn't confusing at all, just really, really unnerving I suppose; and that Grail / Pensive thing is seriously cool. Please update really soon, the whole story is so original and the new Dark Lord / Shadow thing is really creepy. Well done!
Author's Response: Great - glad to hear you liked it! This was esily my favourite chapter to write so far as I basically love writing the bad guys, or the generally ecvil people - they're just so much cooler. I did the same with my book and got quite upset when I killed one of the bad guys ... *sniff*. I've finished Chapter 4 so just going back through it - submitting it shortly - stay tuned!
Hiya! Sorry I haven't reviewed for like two months but real life has been insane! I've just read all your new chapters and I have to say, they are absolutely stunning. Harry/Gadreth (lol, sorry if that's wrong but I'm sure you get who I mean) is really freaking me out. I like the way Volfdemort is still out and about but only as a spirit and the way Harry recognised Pheobe was enough to give me the shivers. I also thought the way you wrote Snape finding out Pheobe thought it was Harry was superb. The way he dismissed her and then, when he realised what she was trying to say, actually listened to and respected her was really moving. Well done and I can't wait for chapter 11!
Author's Response: Stormy!!! It's great to see you!!! Thanks for the review! You really thought it was that good? Coming from a writer such as yourself I find that a compliment above all others I could ever get. I love Snape, and I love the way that you are never sure whether he realy does mean what he says or whether he doesn't - He's a man of mystery and I guess that's why I like him so! I am updating as quick as I can, so you shouldn't have to wait long ... I only have until wednesday to get up to Chapter 15 ... I don't think I'l manage that somehow ... But, again, Thanks for the review Stormy!!!!!!!!!
~Ermine the One