A Black Rose and a White Lily
Update on August 9, '12- I have yet to start writing the fifth chapter. So that'll take some time. Okay, so, let's just admit this fic has been abandoned for now.
A Silent Change
Update on August 9 '12 - Chapter 4 was apparently with my betas. Chapters 5 and 6 were all written but I don't have any of these now. So, again, fic has been abandoned for now.
Update on August 9, '12- A sequel to my other James/Lily one shot: Beneath the Shell. A follow up one shot will be coming whenever. Okay, probably never.
I haven't written Harry Potter fanfiction in an age. I highly doubt I'll be writing any more any time soon and continuing these which I wrote forever ago? Don't think that's happening. Enjoy the one shots though. :)
Summary: Hi, I’m Lily Evans. You know, there are a lot of fics about me out there. I’m flattered that you spend time thinking about me, but sometimes sickened. How could these fics not mention my
bonkers beautiful cat, Missy? And what about my evil and malicious extremely helpful conscience? Or the fact that I make a fool out of myself at every opportunity am unique?
Well, this fic has all of these things. It also has L.O.V.E (I’m the ‘L’), the elite group of
cliquey lovely girls that I am part of. And our rival, the sarcastic cynic also unique Iola Potter (cousin and partner in crime to James). But does it have an actual plot? Of course not Absolutely! And it starts with me getting a detention with Iola (through no fault of my own, of course). And we kind of ... almost ... well, we get on alright. A friendship sparks, shall we say. I have no idea how it happens It is meant to be. But it’s going to take some fighting for if we want to keep it. It would be a lot easier to just stick to what we know, really. We were perfectly happy hating each other. But ... well. I guess you’ll have to find out!
Read this or I’ll curse you Read this and I’ll love you!
i can't find my review anywhere. :S and im sure i did leave one. anyways, i was re-reading the fic and i just wanted to say that... girl, you rock!! i absolutely love all your fics (the ones which ive read, i mean), but i still like this one best. =D
Author's Response: =D Well, I do try. No, seriously, thanks, I\'m really glad you like them! I like writing them, so I guess everybody wins ... really. Thank you.
Summary: What if everyone was quite mistaken, and Lily was not Harry's mother?
okay, now that was surprising... but it's written very well all the same.
Summary: I remember the first day I saw them together. It was sixth year, before Mum and Dad came and got Padma and me. I was walking up to the Shrieking Shack and I saw them, pressed up against a tree, kissing.
Two sisters; one too proud, one too prejudiced.
Parvati Patil reflects on her sister's girlfriend and how it affected not only her sister's life, but her own as well.
first of all, CONGRATULATIONS!! =)
and i read this one cause you won, i dont read the same-sex pairing fics. anyways, this is really good... though... a baby?! =O is that possible...??
Author's Response: Look, there are ways that people can get pregnant without being in a heterosexual relationship. Also, Purplemage won; I was the runner-up. Thanks for reviewing.
Summary: 2009 QSQ Awards Winner for Best Chaptered Canon Romance
Before the chosen one was ever born, his parents had to meet, fall in love, and defy Voldemort three times. Easier said than done. Things were never easy for Harry Potter's parents, but it gets a whole lot harder when Death Eaters kidnap Lily. This is the story of Lily and James, the trials they face, and how James finally wins Lily's heart. (pre-Deathly Hallows)
“I’ll always protect you.”
wow. this chapter literally left me speechless. it's just perfect! i mean, there's fluff, heart to heart talks, surprises... everything. it's just friggin' awesome! and i won't say to update soon, because i know how long it takes to update... [i speak feelingly. my one shot's been in the queue since the last 15 days.]
best of luck with the next chapter! =]
p.s. the cliffie makes me impatient.
Lily and Peter's conversation was pretty sweet. I'm glad that he just isn't an 'ego booster' in your fic. Because he IS a part of the group. He betrays them LATER. Before he's a FRIEND.
“You know, waking up to half naked girls is quite the life.”
LOL. Sirius-ly. I loved this part. It was so bloody hilarious. Oh, I love James. =D
I'm sort of sleepy right now so I can't specifically point out the lines, all I can mention is that in the flashback, there was a line in which you've written 'tired' instead of 'tried', and 'Apparating' wasn't capitalized, same with 'Marauder'. Otherwise, it was perfect! I'll be reading the whole thing from start tomorrow. 'Cause I really love this fic. (my exams end tomorrow! =D)
Thanks for writing this lovely chapter! =)
that was totally fab!!
Author's Response: Thanks!
three people cant castrate james. and i dont want him to become a eunuch. pleasseee. lol
right, good chapter. love your fic. update soon. please. (i can even write ong sentences as well as short. lol. how lame was that?)
Author's Response: That would be terrible for James! ;) I\'m glad you like the story; thanks for the review.
Wonderful chapter, hon!
But a few nitpiks:
This boy understand what Lily had been through better than James could ever imagine.
I believe it should be 'understood' instead of 'understand'.
“For not tell me you’re a squib!”
A capitalization error over here. The 's' of the Squib should be capital. Also, it should be 'telling' not 'tell'.
“After you apparated away,” he said softly, “He was really angry."
Another capitalization error, the 'a' of Apparated should be capital.
For a long time I didn’t think they would honor the Final Five rule, I really though they were going to kill me.
Um... one Americanism-- it should be 'honour'. And, you missed out the 't' in the 'though', so it'll end up being 'thought'.
Right, that's it. =] Now on with the best part of the review. =D
“I’ve always wanted to use fruity shampoo,” Ted deadpanned.
Lol. Love your Ted. The poor guy has been through so much, and is still joking around.
“Your kookiness turns me on.”
Lol. =O Lol. James is weird. >.> lol. Jokin'
“Sure, sure,” James assured her.
Reminds me of Jacob Black. =p
“Ted,” she breathed, “Ted — why do you have the Dark Mark on your arm?”
*bam* What a cliffie! =O Please don't do this to us? Please? Okay, that aside [though I know you won't listen to us, you authors are so evil. lol] I sirius-ly don't get it. Why would Voldemort make a Squib a DeathEater? Is it so that Ted can be an informer or something? Like Peter? Or was there some sort of deal struck. Say Ted wants Emma to remain alive, and Voldemort wants to kill her. But he turns into a DeathEater and Voldemort promises not to kill Emma or maybe even Lily. Or did he accepted to become a DeathEater in a moment of weakness? Ugh. I hate not knowing.
Anyway, the quotations and my theories aside, lovely chapter like always. I liked the graveyard part in the beginning about Lily not being able to digest the fact that Ted was alive in one go. It seemed more real. Though, the continuous repetition about it later in the chapter got a bit... er... over the top, but I didn't dislike it, of course. ;] And I also liked how James is all jealous. Hehe. But is telling himself not to be. Lol. Oh, and is there some reason why Ted has 'pointed' teeth? I get the yellow, and him being dirty part, and all the bruises, but is there some specific reason why you mentioned 'pointed teeth' a few times? Lol. Okay, I admit that I'm paranoid. Lol.
Over all, it was a fantastic chapter. *realises that she has used the words: 'wonderful, lovely and fantastic' to describe the chapter uptil now, so will stop now. Doesn't want to give the author a further ego boost. =p* Now better put it in the queue soon. *threatning voice*. Lol. Best of luck! =]
Uh... so I got to read this chapter more than a month later after you updated it... >.> But I had computer problems, so... But I'm back again! And I've got two more chapters to read. =D But I'll review this one first. =]
First, I'll just point out some errors:
She didn’t his heed his desperate plea.
The first 'his' should be deleted.
She hadn’t just seen what she though she had.
Thought, not though.
“Don’t touch me!” snarled Emma, backing away from his just as Lily had, crying out, “How could you? After everything they did to us?!”
It should be: '...backing away from him...' And, no double punctuation marks together, so either remove the exclamation or the question mark in the end.
Sirius gave another chocking sound, and his face began rapidly losing all colour.
I believe you meant 'choking' and not 'chocking'.
“Do you have any idea where Ted and Emma went?” McGonagall questioned after a long stretch of silence had enveloped them all.
This is quite an un-McGonagall-ish dialogue. At least, she would use the surnames and not first names and nick names.
Yeah, done. =D
This chapter was pretty intense I must say. Lily especially. Quite an emotional roller coaster ride for her. First, shock, then denial, confusion, suspicion and what not. And then the rubber band just stretches and loses it. Why did they have to break? *sob* I feel so sorry for James. He was so mature in this chapter, always trying to keep his temper under control and begging to her in the end for her companionship.
Sirius sort of over reacted but then he's got family issues and it's understandable. But I really like how he comes to James' defense about the Animagi part. Shows how close the two are.
Very well written chapter! *goes to read the next one*
Author's Response: Thanks so much for pointing out all of those typos. I always appreciate it, and they have now been fixed! :) You mention the issues Sirius has with his family -- I actually address that a few chapters from now, both the problems themselves and how they relate to this whole situation. James was acting mature in this chapter, but sadly it was not enough to keep Lily from losing it. Of course, we all know what happens in the end, so. . . Thanks for the review!
Uh. Oh. I really need to go and read the next chapter, so sorry for this extremely short review: Awesome chapter. Surprising ending.
Author's Response: That's fine with me -- I hope you enjoy the next chapter, too! :)
Oh, crap. Crap. Crap. Crap.
This can't be happening... O.o
*is waiting impatiently for the next chapter*
*is too shocked to write a proper review*
Update soon. I beg of you.
P.S. Very well written chapter. Wonder what will happen to Emma...
Wow. Loved it. Mrs. Potter is a bit crazy though, but in a good way. :p
that was awesome!! sirusly!
and yeah, there better be some good revenge.
well, i guess il have to wait for a week for the update, right?
Author's Response: Thanks! Revenge can be very good sometimes *evil smirk* If all goes well, another update should come as soon as the site opens again.
that was awesome!! sirusly!
and yeah, there better be some good revenge.
well, i guess il have to wait for a week for the update, right?
anyways, keep up the good work! (Y)
Woah. I had no idea that the title was based on a song. O.o But it's so appropriate. Maybe I'll look it up some day. =p
On with the review now. One thing, first, the chapter title is pretty fitting too. And so true.
I like how abrupt the starting is and that it's a negative feeling. The thought after it shows that James used to be arrogant. That there was something to why Lily called him 'arrogant' and not just because she thought him that.
The debate he has in his mind is quite natural. What to do? What to bring win back Lily? What to bring back the girl he loves? It shows how human he acts even though he's just a made up character. I know I've mentioned it quite a few times but I sirius-ly do love your James. He's mature but not overly so. He definitely has his moments of being arrogant but they're under control now and show that he has changed though not completely. That it would take time.
I love the cold/hot thing. How James likes being warm because it's comfortable and he always used to be that until Lily leaves and he suddenly feels cold. It's more of how he feels emotionally than physically.
Also, his thoughts about the firsts... he's truthful enough to admit to himself that he hadn't fallen head over heals for Lily at once. That he hadn't fallen in love at first sight. In fact, there had been many other girls before him. That she was just a crush, and sometimes a challenge. A ego thing. But, then, he comes close in contact with her. And viola! And, then, the jealously factor makes him admit. Now his feelings were so, that they weren't actually together... er... physically doesn't matter much to him. It's more of love and less of lust. He's willing to wait as long as he gets what he wants. And, he's willing to commit. In fact, he wants to. And he's even willing to be all friendly with Ted even though he doesn't want to. Shows how much he needs Lily.
After he finds Lily, he's relieved, but worried, but he's also in control and will fight for her life. He's panicked but he doesn't show it unlike Sirius and Emma. But he's obviously hoping, and praying.
Then there's Sirius. He completely fits. He's furious. And he's had had his own personal experiences no one would envy. It's just so natural that he should think of running away from Hogwarts too since he had run away from his home before. But he's loyal to the Marauders. *loves* It's sort of ironic though how he's thinking of 'Peter' and 'loyalty'. It is so Sirius, showing his anger at an apple. He still has brotherly feelings for Regulus, too. Shows that he's not cut off everything. He can't. No matter how hard he tries. He has a heart which refuses to hate his brother. He wants to change what's happening. But he can't. He's helpless. And he hates that feeling. When he finds Lily, he's horrified. He doesn't know what's happening around. He can't think. Lily's about die, and with him will die his best friend. His brother. The one person he cares most about in the world.
Emma's all freaked out. But she isn't in denial because she's a matter of fact girl. But that doesn't mean that she wants it to be the truth. She knows and it hurts. Her love is on the side she is against. And he has put her best friend, more likely her only friend, on her death bed. She was utterly happy some time back. And then suddenly everything has been snatched away from her. And she can't do anything to put her life back to normal. She ends up singing a song she loves. She ends up reminiscing. Talking about Lily and James and the hardships and the song. She's vulnerable. A feeling she's never shown.
Love the determination in the last line. And I hope like hell they find the antidote soon. I know they will find it, obviously, but I hope it happens soon. I really feel sorry for them all. *hugs them*
Also, somewhere in the chapter you mention Lily's BFF. Um, I don't think that in those days there were terms like these so maybe you should change it to 'good friend' or something. I thought of saying 'bosom friend' first but then that might be a bit too much maybe.
I can't wait till the next update!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for such a long, detailed review! This makes my day :) I absolutely adore James -- even if he is a fictional character -- and I'm to know you think I write his character well. I never really thought he fell in love with her at first sight or that his fourteen-year-old self could really be madly in love with her. I just don't think fourteen-year-old boys can EVER be madly in love with someone. As for Sirius -- he always seemed so tortured to me, and I love the character that J.K. Rowling has created: a boy who is so good, loyal and brave, yet so angry, bitter, and simply flawed. It's good to know you think I did a good job with him, too! Really, though, the person I think is worst off in this chapter is Emma. They'll definitely be more on her and what she's going through! Thanks again for the review; I'll have to change that one line.
Summary: Lily: Smart, sharp, and would never even dream of getting in trouble. Head Girl.
James: Clever, crafty, and Hogwarts' main source of mischief. Head Boy.
Lily hates James, James knows not what to think of Lily, but when they must work together to ultimately protect the lives of their friends, who knows what can happen?
Author's Response: Thanks!
Summary: Sirius Black has been thrown into prison. He was expecting Dementors. He was expecting misery. But he wasn’t even anticipating Mistry, the innocent woman who just so happens to be in the cell next to his. Just as she, in her wildest dreams, had never expected him.
But in a place as dark as Azkaban, not even keeping yourself sane is easy. Not even with the two words that both of them know are true ...
**One-Shot, switches POV**
i love sirius!!! and i love this fic too!!
one thing though...
Harry will have to spend his life with his Aunt and Uncle, who happen to detest what he is.
this thought shows that sirius knows that the dursleys wont treat harry properly, but in the third book, he hesitates when asking harry if he wanted to live with him, thinking that harry had a lovely time with the dursleys.
yeah, so now im going to add you in my favourite authors list... i can't believe it that i never added you before! *curses herself* anyways, contiue writing such good fics. =)
Author's Response: Wow, I\'m really honoured to be on your favourites list! No, really I am. Thank you. I think, in the third book, after so long, Sirius was very unsure of himself, he hadn\'t been able to get to know Harry, he doubted himself and their relationship very much at that point. Sirius is very complicated ... I think he was just really self-doubting to be honest. But still ... it\'s a good point. Thanks for reviewing!
Summary: A fear of commitement drives Lily away. Circumstance gives them another chance, but old friends could be there end. This is the story of James Potter and Lily Evans, the year after Hogwarts.
Excerpt from the new chapter:
He doesn’t want you to kiss him, she told herself rationally.
“No p-,” she started
i hope like hell that jordan gets a few from sirius and james too.
nice fic by the way. =)
Summary: Lily felt her heart jump into her throat. In fact, all she heard was her heart beating steadily throughout her body. ...Any minute, James Potter is going to walk through that door and sit down. At my table. By me...
Summary: Lily knew that James was nothing but trouble. He was rude, conceited, and indifferent to anyone that wasn't in his group of friends. She had known him to be that way for six long years.
But their seventh year comes, and Lily slowly begins to see that he is no longer the boy he was. Now Lily sees herself more clearly, and she isn't sure she likes what she sees.
This is the almost-forgotten story of Lily and James's romance, and what they went through to become the heroes that were Harry Potter's parents.
what the heck was written on the paper??
and whos the figure??
good story btw. =)