A Black Rose and a White Lily
Update on August 9, '12- I have yet to start writing the fifth chapter. So that'll take some time. Okay, so, let's just admit this fic has been abandoned for now.
A Silent Change
Update on August 9 '12 - Chapter 4 was apparently with my betas. Chapters 5 and 6 were all written but I don't have any of these now. So, again, fic has been abandoned for now.
Update on August 9, '12- A sequel to my other James/Lily one shot: Beneath the Shell. A follow up one shot will be coming whenever. Okay, probably never.
I haven't written Harry Potter fanfiction in an age. I highly doubt I'll be writing any more any time soon and continuing these which I wrote forever ago? Don't think that's happening. Enjoy the one shots though. :)
So, I decided to check out the rest of your fics because you mentioned in Finality’s summary that you have other Dramione’s. And I love the pairing and your writing so I couldn’t possibly pass up the chance of reading more fantastic work. :D Anyway, so, to the review.
This fic is majorly cute in practically every manner. The fact that they didn’t have a real relationship and come together in the end because of their daughter, for one. Also, coincidently, they both chose the same name for their girl: Isabelle. And so many incidents.
It’s obvious, right from the beginning, that Draco loves Hermione and wants them to be a couple and also that he wants to take care of their daughter together. But of course, he is a Malfoy and hasn’t changed completely despite him having watched Muggle devises installed in his house and coming to the Good Side, and so is reluctant of voicing out his feelings. So he’s polite and nervous with her. In fact, both of them are too formal, I got kind of annoyed actually. >.>
When Hermione reminisces about the pregnancy and her being rude to Draco even though he acted like a gentleman [okay, that sounds stupid to me since they did have a one night stand, but I’m hoping you’ll understand what I mean] and got in touch with her, it makes me angry at her even though it wasn’t her fault exactly, I guess. But he was trying so it wasn’t his fault either.
Draco with Isabelle makes quite a pretty picture. The way he acts around is too adorable. It really brought a smile on my face. It’s like he’s born to be a father. :D
The ending is lovely. Draco needs a tiny hint which Hermione gives but she’s stubborn and is unwilling to take the first step, but Draco’s fine with her words and kisses her. And the one word dialogues interaction? They just made me smile. :D
Over all, another great one shot! Just a one shot and yet you managed to show us everything—their hook up, the baby, the problems, them ending together. :)
Author's Response: Hi again. Thanks for checking out my other work. I'm glad you liked this fic too. It's very different from my other Dramione stories; it's one of the only cute, happy ones :) Thanks for the wonderful review!
wow. this chapter was awesome. the ending was just too sweet. =]
Just lovely. =) One thing though, you've got American spellings in there, like 'favor' and all. Try to update soon, will you? I can't help but wonder what happened to James and what will happen next.
Thank goodness this fic got updated! lol. I loved it. Sirius-ly. The whole chapter was very well written. There were a few typos though.
James glanced quickly at Emmeline and me before swinging the boom off his shoulder and releasing it to hover beside him so that he could give the taller man a proper back-pounding embrace.
The 'boom' over here should be 'broom'.
“What’s does it take to be a successful—which means ‘living’—Auror?”
Right, so over here, I guess it will be 'what' instead of 'what's'.
The last one, I promise!
We spoke of Alice and the wedding, talked for a little while about prospects for my future career, how my N.e.W.T.s would factor into my desires, and he told me very candidly what life being an Auror was like.
The only problem over here is the small 'e' in the 'N.E.W.T.s'.
Well, that's about it! Hopefully the next chapter will get validated soon. *keeps fingers cross*. =)
woah. that chapter was friggin' awesome. can we please have the next one soon? the last line is a major cliffie... it's killing me!
wow! i love this fic. its just awesome!
Ah... a Frank/Alice chapter. Well, to tell you the truth, it's sort of a relief actually. No, I'm not bored with your fic, but I've been reading way too much of James/Lily lately and it became too much. But then I saw the update, and, well, I had to read it. I can't skip the old fics, now can I? And then I see that James and Lily are just mentioned, it's all Frank/Alice, so that was cool. Anyway, let's go on with the review. =]
I love the relationship between the two. They seem just so... perfect for each other. Like a classic case of meant to be. Alice can't sleep without Frank. Frank comes and tries to smile to reassure Alice that everything's fine and he's in good spirits, but he right away catches that she hasn't slept at all. She's not the complaining kind. She just states something, that she can't sleep when he isn't home and Frank apologises even though it's not his fault. After wards she asks what happened and he says that he'd talk about it the next day and she agrees without arguing. It's give and take both ways. They've got such an easy going relationship.
Later, when Alice finally says what she really wanted to talk about... I thought that she would ask something like whether he was having an affair or something, but she didn't. She just asked him a question and waited for an answer. She didn't start suspecting or screaming and making a scene when Frank was thinking whether to tell her about the Order or not. It shows how close they are, how implicitly they trust each other that it sort of hurts to keep secrets from the other half.
Also, I really like how they aren't all physical. Like they're alone, are engaged, but they kiss only once... and it's like sort of a brush of lips... no long kisses. When Frank comes home, they just hug, and then she is just ruffling his hair with her fingers and he's satisfied and comfortable. That's it. It proves that there is more to their relationship, that they aren't all touchy touchy. They talk. They have feelings for each other and understand each other. They do, truly love each other. In short, their relationship is natural and perfect.
One thing, it's very minor, and I don't know why, but I like how you have Frank having long hair. Like I said, I have no idea why this little detail struck me, but it did. Maybe because in most of the fics Frank is supposed to be the serious one, physically as well as mentally. But this clearly isn't the case over here, he's... balanced.
Over all, I really liked reading this chapter. It wasn't really serious or angsty or fluffy. Just the right amount of everything. Great job!
P.S. And congratulations for winning NaNo. (Y) I barely wrote anything in mine though I did participate. >.< Lol.
loved this chapter. but i loved the title even more! lol
try to update asap. =)
Author's Response: Yeah...I have a lot of fun coming up with amusing titles :D.
Author's Response: Thanks!
yayy! like finally lily kissed james. lol. like now they are going to be together. about time. well, great chapter! love this fic!
oh, and update soon, yeah?
Author's Response: Well, almost. ;)
Actually, I originally meant to keep them waiting for a long time, but I\'m really as tired of the confusion as you guys are, so I might speed it up a little. :D
Well done! =D
And yeah, I do remember you, and the story. =p I had to reread some stuff, though. Forgetful me!
Anyways, lovely update! Yay for Remus being single again!=D Though i'm into Sirius, and then James but not Remus. He's nice and all, but really not my type. =p Yeah, I know people might attack me with daggers once they read this, buts mes tellings thes truths. =p
I hope you're still okay. what with all those 's' we do that in school. hehe. Great chapter! Now i don't need to write update asap, do i?
Took me ages to read this chapter, but I did read it. Lol. Let's get on with the review then.
She knew he was intentionally trying to rile her up, that was the only explination.
'Explanation' is spelled wrong.
Sirius gave her a really funny look. “Holy shit.” he turned to look at Adriyana. “Thank God you don’t get mood swings like that.”
Just as he approached the Fat Lady’s portrait, it swung open, and Lily and James stepped out.
Sirius blinked at her.
You should have written Sirius instead of 'he' right in the beginning. We never get to know who the person is until Sirius blinks. It becaomes sort of confusing for a moment or two.
Anyway, hilarious chapter! =D Loved Regulus' dialogues! He's such a sweetheart. =]
*goes to read the next chapter*
Nice chapter, but short, but it was nice, so that's okay. [Sorry for this extremely absurd way of writing this sentence, but this may be happening due to lack of sleep. lol.]
Anyway, this line I loved the best:
“You’ve got about ten seconds of footage of just your chest now. Probably not ‘classroom appropriate’.”
omg! this was a really good chapter, especially the beginning. i just loved these dialogues...
“Did you know Lily’s hair smells like oranges?”
“Did you know James tastes like Autumn?"
and please, update soon!!
Author's Response: Heh, I like it, too!
omg! It's awesome! Sirius-ly. No flaws or anything. It's perfect and bloody hillarious! =D I just can't seem to stop laughing. And I absolutely love Ron's essay. =)
We all know how this tale ends, but how does it begin? Did Lily hate James from Day One? Did James fall head over heels the moment he first laid eyes on Lily? How did Remus feel about the whole thing? Who let Peter slip through the cracks? And what exactly happens when Sirius gets hold of some Time-Release Dungbombs?
The Marauders' years at Hogwarts were marked by internal demons, external tensions, and whispers from the shadows growing steadily louder. By intertwining lives in the midst of danger. By powerful love and a whole lot of laughter. This is their story, a tale of cauldrons and comrades.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I\'m about to put the next chapter in the queue...
like james has a crush in lily!! hehe =D
p.s. lily starts hating james cause he went out with diana the next day??
Author's Response: Thanks! I love James in love. Don\'t worry, the hatred arises out of something a bit more complicated than jealousy. :)
Thanks again for the review! Next chapter coming soonish...
that was a really nice chapter you know.
is there seriously going to be something between lily and chadwick ahead?
and yea, please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! I certainly enjoyed writing it. As for Lily and Chadwick... I suppose you\'ll have to wait and see. But I am a big fan of Chadwick, so I\'d like to give him as much \"screen time\" as possible... :)
The next chapter is coming along steadily, but probably won\'t be ready until after Deathly Hallows... Thanks again for the review!
i can't find my review anywhere. :S and im sure i did leave one. anyways, i was re-reading the fic and i just wanted to say that... girl, you rock!! i absolutely love all your fics (the ones which ive read, i mean), but i still like this one best. =D
Author's Response: =D Well, I do try. No, seriously, thanks, I\'m really glad you like them! I like writing them, so I guess everybody wins ... really. Thank you.