A Black Rose and a White Lily
Update on August 9, '12- I have yet to start writing the fifth chapter. So that'll take some time. Okay, so, let's just admit this fic has been abandoned for now.
A Silent Change
Update on August 9 '12 - Chapter 4 was apparently with my betas. Chapters 5 and 6 were all written but I don't have any of these now. So, again, fic has been abandoned for now.
Update on August 9, '12- A sequel to my other James/Lily one shot: Beneath the Shell. A follow up one shot will be coming whenever. Okay, probably never.
I haven't written Harry Potter fanfiction in an age. I highly doubt I'll be writing any more any time soon and continuing these which I wrote forever ago? Don't think that's happening. Enjoy the one shots though. :)
i just loved it!
Author's Response: I\'m glad.
Lovely chapter! I can't believe that I never got a chance to read it until now.
Ah... Rio's so damned lucky. :p Mes wantings tos spends somes times withs Sirius toos! *begs* lol. Sorry. *blushes*
Oh, and I don't know how I forgot to mention this in the previous review, but I'll say it now. I love Lummer! He's so sweet. I read all the drabbles you wrote in the birthday challenge thing in the Common room. Lummer was always so sweet! *hugs Lummer* But, you better not make James wait for long.
Great job! Can't wait for the next chapter. =)
It's wonderful! Sirius-ly. =D I have to point out some typos though. =)
From the Story Notes. lol. Yeah, I read those carefully too. =p
I would also like to thank my friends, Jen and Jess, for supporting me through his writing process! My story would
not be the same if you three hadn't helped me!
I'm assuming that it's supposed to be 'this'.
Now, from the chapter.
“Bye, Mum;, and yes, I will write you,”
Two punctuation marks? Maybe you can delete any one of them?
The next thing the brunette knew, she as forced into the red cushioned seats of the Hogwarts Express.
Was, is it?
The brunette chirped a short ’goodbye’ before she was forced around the corner.
Check out the inverted comma's, the first one i.e.
“Well…erm…they looked at me like I was a raging Flubberworm,”
It's misspelled, it should be Flobberworm.
No, the name Rio suits you well, but now we just have to get the boys to stop calling you ’Parker’
The same inverted comma thing.
Maybe it would benefit her future and possible love life to let some of her mother’s ’Roseanna’ kick in
Okay, so there was a lot of stuff which I had written, but thanks to this absolutely fantastic net connection ^o) the whole thing got lost.=@ It's five thirty in the morning here and I just can't write everything all over again. But, I had to leave a review 'cause this seems as a fantastic story. Can't wait to read the next chapter. =)
One error though:
I look at you and I take in your smart suit that is so completely muggle I am a bit shocked, as well the fact that it looks like you tried to tame your hair.
The 'Muggle' should have a capital M. Otherwise, it was perfect!
Wow. That was amazing! Great Job!
Author's Response: thanks!
It's absolutely lovely, and flawless. :D One gotta love Emma.
Author's Response: Afifa! I saw your lovely comments on my thread on the forums. I\'m really glad you like this story so far and that you like Emma so far!
Hillarious! I loved the chapter title, it made me LOL. =D
Emma was sorta mean with Ivy... it's not always a good thing to speak out loud what you think. I feel sorry for Ivy though.
I loved the whole part. The Patrick scene, the dance part, and especially the summary. It made me laugh like crazy. My mum came up to me to ask whether I was okay or not. Lol.
Oh, and I looove long chapters, and had a lot of fun reading this one. =]
Wow! Another fantastic chapter! =D
“Don’t worry,” chirped Haley, as though reading my mind. “Wolfgang’s adorable, but he’s not my type. He looks like a girl. I like a man who looks more like one.”
I stared her. “Haley, you don’t have a ‘type.’ You like everything with a y-chromosome.”
LOL. This made me laugh so hard, I had to clasp my hand on my mouth! LOl.
“What about that vampire that tried to kill me in the alleyway last year?”
“HE WAS SPARKLY!”
“No, that was your diseased imagination, Haley. Bloodstained, maybe.”
“HE WAS SPARKLY!”
Do I catch a Twilight reference here? =p I still haven't read it though. =O
Still, it’s an undeniable fact that he’s carrying on the proud tradition of socially inept Potter boys.
Poor James, he'd be so disappointed, yeah?
I wonder if Tyrone remembered that his pets were, in fact, toads.
I wondered that too. I mean, really! You don't go on about water temperature and all about toads! =O
Oh, and the summary was absolutely hilarious! =D
LOL. P&P's summary was hilarious! I love Mr. Darcy though, but it's okay. You can make him as bad as you like. As Emma likes, I mean. lol.
I love this, I sirius-ly do.
I feel cool that I know the outline of the story =p lol.
Oh, and I loved the term, 'facial topography'. LOL. I will use it!! =D lol.
Talk about hyper. Sorry.
Anyways, I LOVED the chapter, =D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I actually like Mr. Darcy, too. But Emma has to think he\'s a jerk at the beginning of reading the book because she\'s essentially Elizabath. ^_^ I\'m so happy that you liked this!
omg, Schmergo! It was absolutely fantastic! I loved all the analogies, and everything. I can't go into the details at the moment (it's around four in the morning here! :eek:), but I wanted to drop a review congratulating you for having such a fantabulous story up. =D I promise you that I'll read all your fics as soon as I get over with my exams. I might even start reading them earlier. lol. Can't stay away from this site for long. lol. Try to update asap. =)
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! It\'s great to have new readers! I\'ll try and read your stories, too!
omg! He's a vampire! That is so cool. =D I loved this chapter. In fact, I liked it even better than the previous one. I'm adding it to my favourites. =)
Author's Response: OHMY! He is!! -squeal- And a damn sexy one at that.xD Thanks for the review Afifa.(: I\'m glad you adored this chapter; they\'re only going to get bettter. ;D
Ah, lovely start, Jess. =)
The summary was very well written, very interesting. It perked my attention. Same with the chapter. What I liked was your description of Dacia. You pictured her as one with scars and all. She isn't supposed to be having breath taking beauty as several other fics have. Of course, she's a werewolf, so she has all those scratches, but that's revealed later. Anyways, all in all, it was a wonderful start, and I can't wait to read the next chapter. =)
Author's Response: All of these compliments about my summary are drowning me in happiness, ha. (: Wewt.:* Yay for scars, hah. As you already mentioned, we\'ve got two weeks for the next chapter.xD haha. Thanks Afifa, another review that made me smile.(:
Oh my goodness, Mia! This is fantastic! So sweet, and real and emotional (a bit?). I loved it.
Author's Response: Lol, thanks Afifa! I\'m really glad you liked it.
I've got no words. Sirius-ly. This one shot blew me away. It was so very well written. Great job, Je$$! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you Afifa! :D I\'m glad you enjoyed it.
What happens when you find out your whole life has been a lie? How do you react when the people you trusted, believed in confess to hiding a secret that changes everything you believed about yourself?
Hermione Granger is about to face that situation.
The war is over and life should be simple. She should be planning her future with the man she has loved since she was 11. But now, she doesn’t know who she really is. As she struggles with the grief of lost friends, she also deals with the grief of the loss of everything she believed about herself. Can she open her heart enough to let Ron help her deal with this, or will this secret drive them apart?
Woah, Terri. Talk about being shocked. =O I had thought that one of the Marauders would have been the father, because of one of the lines in which you've said about Snape hating her father. But then, you had written about Dumbledore meeting the person, and I thought that it could not possibly be any of the four. =/
Anyways, it was a great chapter! Sirius-ly. =)
I could only find one typo:
“We have to tell her. Now, before she finds out on her own, before she reverses the Memory Charm on her parents!” Professor McGonagall spoke to a portraits hanging behind the headmistress’s desk.
It should be 'portrait'.
He would not have been able to get over his hatred of her father.
This has got me thinking, not that I need to seeing that the next chapter is already up. :p
Great starting! *goes to read next chapter*
This is not fair, Terri! I thought that you were going to reveal Hermione's real parents in this chapter! *humph*
Lol. I loved this chapter. And I hate your 'strengths' of ending stories with cliffies. Jokin' jokin'. Don't take it sirius-ly, hmm?
Anyways, the story. It was very well written, especially the whole of Harry's speech to Snape.
And, I'm adding this to the favourites! =D
Best of luck for the future chapters, and be sure that I'll read and review every one of them. :p
Wow, Tiff! That was amazing. Sirius-ly. It's no hidden fact that I love Sirius, so that added of course. But I really did liked this chapter. And, no, don't you dare abandon this fic. Continue it, yeah? Lovely job! =)
Lovely starting, Terri!
I like how you bring in all the Weasley kids one by one, and even Harry in the end.
You've kept the fact that Bill was a Head Boy in your mind, and made studies go easy on him. Very good!
Over all, it was nice! =)
Omg, Terri! This one shot was really sweet. Sirius-ly. I loved it! Great job! (Y)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I am glad you enjoyed it. Terri