I was born early on in life. For most of my life I was shorter than I am now, then I gradually grew to my current height.
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Oh, and I'd been dying for you to update, so I was completely ecstatic when I saw your new chapter!
Author's Response: Oh, I know it took a long time. Sorry about that. I’ll try to keep future waits to a minimum, but I’m glad you looked forward to it. Thanks, electronicquillster!
One thing that I never cease to love in this world are your chapters of this story.
Moony, you’ve always got such a great grasp on your characters. I’m almost constantly suspicious of Sirius and James, and even though they’re always up to something, sometimes even pranking dear Remus, I’m feeling as loyal to them as he is. If I were in Remus’ shoes, I’d roll my eyes at them frequently, yes, but I’d still stick with them.
I love the plethora of background layer’s you’ve got. There’s James with the broom, and that upcoming race with Lindi; then we’ve got Remus’ extended family. A lot of authors would simply ignore the extended family of anyone not in the house of Black, but you don’t, which I love. And then, on top of that, you’re just brilliant, what with the present James and Sirius get for Remus. Seriously! I was laughing so much when I read about all of those gifts.
I’m (im)patiently awaiting your next fabulous chapter.
Author's Response: Mar! *tackles* I\'m so glad you\'ve dropped by. ;) I haven\'t had the best of weeks and this was just the thing to brighten my day. :-D Suspicious of James and Sirius? O.O As you should be! *TEHE* I’m glad to hear you enjoy all the background info/side story stuff. I sometimes imagine readers want to slap me and say, “just get on with it!” LOL But it all plays into the story, at least in my twisted little mind, so I’m glad you aren’t annoyed by it. I have always been one of those people who can’t tell a story without filling in all the details, and sometimes going off on tangents, that to me, are important to the outcome of the tale. @.@ So anyway…*stops rambling* Thank you so much for the fabulous review. I really needed it. :)
I know I have been sorely testing all my readers’ patience levels and I’m sorry. I will post an update on my writing status on my Author’s Profile page.
It's KILLING me that there's still been so much non-getting-togetherness. But I love it all the same.
Author's Response: Hi, electronicquillster! I am definitely sensing some frustration on that whole thing. I\'m thinking I shouldn\'t have started this in Romance and maybe it would go down easier. LOL But there is so much other stuff that must be addressed. ;) I need to get those things underway before I complicate matters. I just wish I had everything typed and beta\'d so I could update more quickly and maybe cut down on the aggravation. Live and learn! I am glad you are still enjoying it, though. Thank you.
This is really killing me. But I can't help loving it anyway. I'm very excited to see Remus' parents again, you've characterized them so well. The birds were brilliant, and I love that Lily is spending more time around James - and that she wants to. It's lovely. Remus is brilliantly crushable, as always. I'm looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: *performs CPR on Quillster* *Starts thinking maybe she shouldn\'t have* LOL You might be ready to kill me soon. ;-)
I\'m thrilled you are enjoying the Lupins. I do so love writing them. You will definitely be seeing them more soon. Yes, slowly but surely, Lily has to come around, doesn\'t she? *crushes Remus* You know good comments on Remus are the best compliment I could get. Thank you, electronicquillster. :)
Oh dear, dear, dear. You probably think that I don't read this story anymore, becuase I don't review. -headdesk- Don't worry. I still read it. I check to see if you've updated every time I go into the queue to mod stories....and if you have, I read it there. A girl needs a break now and then to read something she knows will be good. Just know that I cheer everytime I see your story, and I reccommend it to everyone that I know that reads fanfiction.
Author's Response: Ah, Quillster, we do become attached to our regular reviewers don’t we? I have to admit to getting curious when I don’t hear from someone who has been reviewing for a while, but I understand that there are different kinds of reviewers, those who review almost every chapter (either because they like to review or are simply looking out for the author *you sweethearts*), those who stick their heads in now and then (which are always fun to hear from), those who wait until the very end (completely understandable) and those who don’t review at all *remains conspicuously silent* ;). I myself am more of a stick your head in once in a while reviewer and sometimes feel that once I’ve left the first review, I need to continue, especially when there aren’t that many people reviewing. (Though I haven’t read much since writing my own fic, as I spend all my computer time on it. *vows to be a better reviewer when she gets finished*) But as kitkat said, reviewing is hard. Note to serial reviewers: You are the life-blood of the fanfic author; you keep us going, but don’t feel obligated to review every chapter. You can skip one hear or there. ;) ;) *will get very paranoid if they all skip the same chapter, LOL*
I am very honored that you would recommend my story. I will do my best not to let you regret the recommendation. Thank you, Quillster!
Author's Response: Erm, that would be here or there! *blushes* You are a Mod, can't you get them to program an edit on the review response? *giggles in embarrassment*
All right, I've finally recovered from the euphoria of reading this (slightly) and can now submit a coherent review.
His tousled hair…he could almost feel Lindi’s fingers still running through it.
The opening sequence of this was very well set forth for the reader, reminding them of all the delicious and excruciating anticipation experienced in the last chapter. Indeed, when I heard from my sources that the chapter was being betaed, I just about died of happiness.
The way you set up the Lily/Remus conversation just oozes in foreboding winds for the future relationship of Remus and Lindi, and I was in agony.
I still can't get over how well you've characterized the dynamics of the Marauders. The tension with Sirius was very well done here. However, I did feel as if James and Peter weren't quite up to par. Peter seemed to revert to a slight fanboy for small spurts, and I felt like James wasn't quite as charismatic as he could've been.
The library scene was lovely. The scene in the dungeons for practicing the potion making was practically perfect in every way. The goading, the obliviousness of Lindi, the hand touching, the anger...it all drove the reader on in a frenzy until the end where we are all (Remus included) finally getting some reassurance in this beautiful relationship that's been developing for ages and ages.
Author's Response: Gosh, electronicquillster, again you have made my day! Your sources…LOL!
I love writing both Remus and Sirius. I have such a clear picture of them in my mind. James and Peter are a bit more elusive for me and I know they are my weaknesses (well, two of them), which is a problem since this is a Marauders fic and not just a half-the-Marauders fic. ;) JKR just gave us so much to go on with Remus and Sirius, but James is nearly a blank canvas (to me, anyway) with the exception of his horrid behavior in Snape’s Worst Memory and the fact that he was loved by so many of the “good guys”. I just can’t quite get a handle on him, so I find that I neglect him. :*( I will try to work on that. Then there is Peter. What a mystery. Peter may well be the most complicated character in the entire series. When I wrote the “fanboy” parts with Peter, I felt a bit repulsed to be honest, and thought about taking it out, but I decided to keep it there because in some ways, Peter was a fanboy, and I can see him being awestruck by his friend’s success with girls in the way he was with James’ Quidditch skill and the snitch. It gave me sort of the same feeling I got from Peter climbing around Remus to watch James torment Snape. It is part of the fine line I’m trying to walk with making Peter likable because he was a Marauder, and showing the character flaws that might have led him astray. I hope I didn’t step over the line too much.
”…practically perfect in every way…”*beams* “…developing for ages and ages.” *blushes* LOL. But you think it is a beautiful relationship? I love that you said that! Thank you so much for such a wonderful review (another one). :-D
Oh, Moony (you, not Remus), how I love you and your writing!
I was pleasantly shocked to see the email notification that chapters FORTY-FOUR and FIVE were just put up. Yes, I've been reading this story for forever, but I was surprised that there have been so many chapters, and each of them so long, and it is amazingly lovely that they all remain exciting. Nothing about them is ever stale, and I think that's absolutely lovely! It's not an easy thing to find among authors of long stories. I think this chapter, in particular, showcased your ability to keep things from ever getting boring. This chapter has a LOT of Remus/Lindi interraction, and you keep it all fresh. Never dull. Their relationship is constantly growing. I suppose I'm over-gushing on this point, but it's not common. Numerous books and tv shows, etc, have to break up their main couple so that they don't become a dead horse, but I don't really worry about that happening here.
You also continue to keep the Marauders lively. I love it. I absolutely loved the Transfiguration class scene! Those boys are brilliant and ridiculous at the same time, and I love that you portray it so well. I'm tempted to propose marriage to this story. Is that a bit ridiculous?
Don't worry... I'm not too scary. Just keep feeding me updates to keep me at bay from going ballistic with my fangirlism, I suppose. -shifty eyes-
Your updates are always a joy to read!
Author's Response: *hugs Mar, one of longtime reviewers* :) *dies at amazingly wonderful review* When I revive, I will have to put this on my wall of glory, too. (No, I don\'t really have one, but if I did, this would go on it with some of your others.) I like it when you over-gush. ;*) And proposing might be ridiculous, but the story would accept after this. *giggles* You make me feel so guilty for keeping you waiting for updates. I will try to get one to you soon. Thank you, thank you for the amazing review.
What an amazing chapter. I love your ability to completely draw the reader in. It's a rare gift, and you've totally got it. I'm always so excited to read a new chapter of "The Remus Story." Squee.
Your article from the DP was totally like a regular news article. (Meaning that I simply scanned it for the relevant information. I mean....I totally read it....Of course.) I love how, yet again, we have just one more thing to prevent Remus/Lindi action. Enter Remus' Dad. Mr. Lupin is actually the first aspect of your story I fell in love with though. My best friend was going on and on about MoB, and one day, while modding, I saw a chapter of your story in the queue, and I figured I may as well see what all the fuss was about. It was the chapter with the conversation between Remus and his dad about Lindi. It just totally made me fall in love with your characters.
I learn to appreciate all of your original characters. In this chapter we've got Phil, the Head Boy. I'm, of course, giggling because I know that James will be in his shoes soon enough, but I just instantly cared about him when he entered this chapter. Much applause. Keep up the good work, I'm eager for more.
Author's Response: *sigh* I love your ability to completely make my day! I just can\'t think of a better compliment than saying you love my characters. (Unless it is “The Remus Story”) *positively beams* Writing them is one of the advantages of working within the Marauder era as we have more room to create. I do enjoy it. And that scene with Remus and his Dad may be my favorite of the entire story. So thank you so much, Quillster.
*Ponders how many more ways she can stand in the way of having to write the Remus/Lindi action* <.< Probably quite a few. >.> *giggles* Ah, Marauder Era…so much blank canvas to work with. ;)
Thank you so much for the wonderful review, electronicquillster. Now if I can drag myself away from staring at it, I might get some writing done. :)
Author's Response: Oh, and are you saying my journalistic writing is dry? Hmmm? LOL! :)
I'll just start with a little letter of my own (as cliché as it is for an RAB fic):
Every time I read one of your stories, I'm left speechless at the sheer brilliance of it.
Okay, enough with my lameness. The way you string simple words together is somewhat like a spiderweb to me. It's beautiful, and it's complicated and simple at the same time. It's also something that catches the reader and doesn't let them go. And then, the end of the story is almost as disappointing as being eaten by a story. Because it's just over.
I love your portrayal of Regulus. This line in particular: "Oh, he would be found out. Most certainly he would. But not before he wished it." It's fabulous because it shows that streak of arrogance and self-satisfaction that we see in Sirius, and I think it's natural that the two brothers would share that trait.
That brings me to the relationship you illustrate between Regulus and Sirius. I love the Heart of the Lion anecdote. I love that Sirius gave him a terrible look upon being sorted into Slytherin, I love that they kept up at least some correspondence. I just love that they're brothers.
The section where he tortures the Ravenclaw girl is just as painful to read as it was for Regulus to execute, and for the girl to endure. I love that they all coincide, seeing as it is the Cruciatus Curse employed there. Brilliant tactic!
The end is perfect. Well, mostly. I don't want him to die, of course, but I love his last thought. "Top this."
Noldo, you are genius. I fangirl you. The end.
Yay! They got together!
This was very beautiful. The apprehension, the nerves, the pleasureable memories and the relief... I loved it!
Yay! They got together!
This was very beautiful. The apprehension, the nerves, the pleasureable memories and the relief... I loved it!
And no, contrary to beliefs very likely impressed upon you by this summary, I'm not a gormless prat.
Well... not entirely.
The end. What a sad pair of words. What a lovely letter exchange, by the way. It's hard to keep interest and forward plot motion, but you did it. -rushes off to author page to see just where the sequel is-
AAAAH!!! I was totally dying! This is such a cute chapter. You really did a good job pulling on the emotions between Helen and Sirius, and then again stretching the longing to the max at the end between Lily and James. So good!
Author's Response: thanks!!
I actually read this over on LJ before, it seems. I'm pretty sure I did. (is also pretty sure that the version over there isn't mnff-rates, lol)
Anyway, I really love the inner turmoil you illustrate here for Hermione. It's hard to write F/Hr/G, but it can be so beautiful when it's done correctly. One of my favorite elements of this story is actually the Katie/Angelina cover-up. It's so surprising. This story is love.
Author's Response: Yes, I\'ve posted the none-work safe version in my LJ :) And I\'m so glad you like it. Thanks for a wonderful review.
There was so much tense emotion through out the whole thing. I'm glad you captured the fact that Fred and George aren't the same person. The kiss scene was so beautifully writtin, that I agree, I was very close to crying for how beautifully/intensely written it was.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm so delighted that you feel that way. And I do believe that too many fics have Fred and George being just one and the same, and I think that it's important to understand that they're not.
Paul, Paul, Paul. This fic was intense from start to finish. I'm not gonna lie...some parts seemed far-fetched, and I don't know that anyone else could have pulled them off, but you kept me hooked with your fanfixion riting skillz. *throws confetti*
I'm dying Pie. Absolutely dying. This story is just...! Anyway, I loved this chapter. I missed the valiant, good-hearted Harry. I hope he totally brings the hurt on to Voldy soon, but if my memory serves, there are a lot more chapters, so....I'd bet get reading.
Dude, Pie, this is so full of raw emotion that you almost had me in tears, and I'm not even lying to you. The flashback part was ok, but the rest of it was just...like I said, raw emotion. I can't believe that you killed Remus too. Do you have a heart, Pie? I guess I'm going to have to keep reading.
When Harry’s quest for the horcruxes turns desperate, he leaves the security of his homeland to seek out the advice of an ancient and most unusual Council – one whose allegiance is only to themselves but whose knowledge is so vast it may be his only chance. What Harry discovers there will change everything. Soon, he comes to see that this is all so much bigger than just he and Dark Lord – his role, though pivotal, is terribly minute compared to the challenges the Wizarding World must now face.
Meanwhile, across the Atlantic Ocean, a young witch uncovers the truth about her bloodline. But only when catastrophic events begin to unfold, does she realise her importance in the greater scheme of things...
It is a tale of epic proportions: bringing in the truth behind Slytherin's betrayal, and the choices the Founders had to make to ensure the longevity of their world. Enemies must unite, lines must be crossed, and children must forgo their innocence. And behind it all, fly the Spirits of the Storm, waiting, watching, scheming. Welcome to the greatest epic war the Wizarding World has ever seen.
Chapter 11 is posted.
I liked a lot of the changes you made from the other version of this. The second half, especially, was much more chilling this time around. There was the air of apprehension lurking around every punctuation corner and paragraph break. You handled your descriptions well. I'm at a loss as to why Lanette was too sick to eat, though I guess it's safe to assume that it was the part of the magic of her surroundings, pushing her on through the plot. That line about magic in everything was pulled off very well. No sniggering here. Dierdre has really started to show her true colors, though I felt you lost something in Lanette's character. Lanette has been presented as such a strong character for the majority of the story, and here at the end she seems to have lost some of her control over the situation. It reminds me a lot of Harry's characterization - a competent character who is overwhelmed by particular characters and/or situations. I love the little nuances and clues in the last section. I suspect some Extendable Ears and a pimp cane-carrying man on the horizon.
I'm absolutely fascinated by your writing. You're in with the league of authors that can write things that are simultaneously boring yet fascinating. What I mean to say by that is that even when "nothing" happens, it's a beautiful thing to watch through the eyes of a reader. Lovely, lovely, Hal!
Author's Response: Thank you, my darling Mar, for this review. Even after all you\'ve done for this chapter (which reminds me, I still have to go back in and note that you were my beta!!! *feels ashamed for forgetting*), you\'ve still managed to make me squee all over again. Where have you been for all of my writing career!? *giggles*
\"Lanette has been presented as such a strong character for the majority of the story, and here at the end she seems to have lost some of her control over the situation.\"
Ah hah! See this is something I disliked about my previous version of this chapter. She was taking everything too well... she was too \"in control\", too... blah. It bothered me when I was rereading it to make corrections, and it took me a while to put my finger on exactly what it was... and then I realized that she was just out of character. After all that\'s happened over the past few days, she was bound to be far more suspicious--and observant--of things going on around her. Plus I really needed to get that \"evil wind\" thing in there--and by doing that, it just changed the entire tone of the second half of the chapter, and I had to keep going with it.
\"I suspect some Extendable Ears and a pimp cane-carrying man on the horizon. \"
*snorts* Your wish is my command. Well, only because that\'s what I\'ve planned for the next chapter anyway ;)
\"You\'re in with the league of authors that can write things that are simultaneously boring yet fascinating.\"
HAH! Go me ;) Again, thanks for your review dear. I\'m all inspired to continue on, now...
First of all, WOW! I randomly clicked on this story because I saw that Rachel had done it for one of her SPEW reviews, and I’m trying to quickly take care of mine, and I just thought, “Hmm, Noldo is usually fabulous for a fic...”
CLEARLY I had forgotten just how true my own statement was. Section one absolutely blew me away. I shall now continue to read. I still have no idea exactly what this story entails, but I’m fascinated and captivated, and I love that you have me reading that way. It hasn’t happened in a while, honestly. At least not at this extreme level.
The Saviour of the Wizarding World is exchanging wry, commiserating glances with the shabby, greying werewolf...
This just makes me laugh. Yet, I’ve totally been there, trying not to gag as a couple carries on with their couple-y tendencies, and you can’t quite kill them because they’re your friends and you just can’t.
Even though the term ‘maternal madness’ brought a smile to my face, that section detailing some of the finer effects from the war pulls at my soul, you know? They are robbed of their former lives, and you illustrate that so well.
And then, finally, the AU element of the story is revealed, and now I love Peter, and I have so much respect for him. Blast! Why couldn’t it have really happened this way?
And then there is the dull reality of the fact that so many, even Harry, will never understand, and will roll on with every day life. What a touching and poignant story.
And I love that you explained everything at the end for people who are potentially stupid. -wink-