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Summary: Past Featured StoryCallie and Lia, a Gryffindor and a Slytherin. A lady and a tomboy. Two opposite souls. Two sisters. Separated at birth by circumstances they are determined to discover... and undo. Yes, after being reunited, the siblings plan to reunite their parents as well. Let’s see them accomplish House Unity, too!

“It’s our rule not to dredge up past things, remember?”

This rule is about to be broken.

~Inspired by a worldwide beloved film.



Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 125007 Chapters: 30 Completed: No
Published:
11/19/07 Updated: 07/18/12


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 02/21/08 Title: Chapter 6: 'Sweet sorrow'

Any bets on who goes to which house?

Thalia in Slytherin; Calliope in Gryffindor. At least that's what I want. I can just see the drama that will come from Thalia in Slytherin. Besides, I think those houses fit their personality. I'll keep my fingers crossed, because that's what I'm really hoping for.

Anyways, I really enjoyed that chapter and I hope you'll get to update soon, after all this mess with the glitches is taken care of, of course.

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 02/05/08 Title: Chapter 5: Their story

I really like this story, though at times I wish you'd be a bit more detailed, but we've already know how we both like different stories. Please update soon. I don't really have any criticism or anything, not that I can think of at least, just that I'm really enjoying this story and these characters, and I hope you'll continue the good work.

Author's Response: Thanks, Chante! I\'ll see if I\'ll be inclined to make it meatier, yes.

 

Hot Roast Chestnuts by dumbledorefluertwins
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 31]

Summary: It is a snowy Christmas Eve. An old man sits by the fireplace and eats roast chestnuts, not knowing that a woman, whom he has not seen for years, will make one last appearance.

A simple tale of Christmas, by Apollo13 of Slytherin House, for the Winter Tales contest.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1807 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/04/07 Updated: 12/09/07


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, that was beautiful. My attention was caught by your summary and the how vague it was of the 'old man'. I really wanted to know who it was, but I never guessed that it was actually Harry. Wonderful job of keeping it hidden.

This was a simply unique story that I know has a good shot in the contest. The only thing I wonder is why Lily came to collect Harry and not Ginny. But it doesn't matter, because it was simply lovely anyways. Good job.

Review courtesy of the Order of the House Elves.

Merry Christmas,
from the Ravenclaws

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! :D Thank you, OotHE! I feel so flattered! :D ~Evie

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, that was beautiful. My attention was caught by your summary and the how vague it was of the 'old man'. I really wanted to know who it was, but I never guessed that it was actually Harry. Wonderful job of keeping it hidden.

This was a simply unique story that I know has a good shot in the contest. The only thing I wonder is why Lily came to collect Harry and not Ginny. But it doesn't matter, because it was simply lovely anyways. Good job.

Review courtesy of the Order of the House Elves.

Merry Christmas,
from the Ravenclaws

Author's Response: Thank you, you lovely claws! :D

 

Forgiveness by Pondering
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Lily waits patiently for the man she needs to forgive before she can move on. But after he returns, she finds that he's not the one she really has to forgive after all.



Written by Pondering of Ravenclaw



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2746 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/13/07 Updated: 12/19/07


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/31/07 Title: Chapter 1: Forgiveness

That was beautiful. I want to cry, really? You did my Sev/Lily loving heart good, Tash, especially since I was just forced to read an awful James/Lily for a dare. But this, this made me forgot all about that the moment I began reading it. I was entranced, because this story was wonderful.

I loved it - the idea that they only had to forgive themselves which is SO true. And I love that Lily always regretted breaking the friendship. It was something that I always was angry at her for, but at this moment, I think I can understand and am not so angry. I just loved the characterization, and how she chose Sev and not James. I love, love, love it.

I hope you do well in the challenge. *hugs* Thanks for writing such a beautiful story.

Chante'

 

Summary: Nominated for the 2009 QSQ award for Best Male OC.

Harry's life is quiet now. He has a loving wife, a beautiful son, a career along side his best friend, and everything else he could ever want and never imagine having. But now, his career as an Auror will lead both him and Ron halfway around the world to investigate a mysterious school known only as the Skat-Hatokha Academy of Magic.

But from the beginning, something seems off. No one in the wizarding world has heard of this school, the board of directors can contact you, but you can't contact them, and the accepted students have all been in some trouble with the law and take their right to remain silent very seriously. Not to mention Lucius Malfoy's near obsessive interest in this case and his close involvement with the Ministry.

But as more time passes, the more the case begins to take on a life of its own, and not just for Harry.


Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 62139 Chapters: 9 Completed: No
Published:
01/10/08 Updated: 10/29/09


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 10/24/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Three Weeks Time

I am officially in love with Nate. That is a a heck of an OC you have there. I love his and Lore's relationship and I love pretty much everything about this chapter. I can't wait to keep reading! :D

Author's Response: I'm glad you love Nate so much, and maybe now you understand why I can't get enough of him either. *squishes* I hope he continues to amaze and impress.

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 06/21/09 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 Dewey, Chetham, and Howe

Oh, Molly, you'll be so proud. I finally read all this, and you know what, I absolutely love it. You already know I have a soft spot for Lore and Nate, and now little Rae ( I LOVE your original characterization of the five year old. It's just...amazing). And Harry and Ron getting the crap beat out of them by Lore - priceless! :D

I really can't wait to see where you take this story next.

Author's Response: Wow! I'm glad you read it, and I just submitted chapter seven, so you should be able to read it soon! And I'm glad little Rae entertains you so!

 

Summary: Nominated for the 2008 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Post-Hogwarts Story

When Albus, Rose, and Scorpius are put on the train to their first year at Hogwarts, their parents have simple hopes for them. Namely to have the normal, boring school years they never got to experience themselves. But sometimes, we ask too much of our children.

When the school becomes plagued by invasions of wild beasts, three different students from three different houses follow in the footsteps of the generation before them, but strive to achive the one thing none of their predesesors ever could: DON'T GET CAUGHT!



Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 109928 Chapters: 18 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/19/08 Updated: 02/15/10


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 09/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 A Quiet Compartment Ride

“Yes, Rose wasn’t afraid of anything. She was a true Gryffindor if ever there was one.”

Ah, beautiful foreshadowing. I haven’t even read what happens yet and I had the sneaking suspicion that Gryffindor is the last place Rose will be. Or maybe that’s just because I know Molly never does what is normally expected.

“His brother, James, was soon stopped dead in his words, something Albus himself had only seen twice in his life.”

I really would have liked to know what those two things were. What does James rate to be as horrific as a Malfoy?

“Dragging each of the younger children by their elbows, he led them out into the corridor and turned to slam the door shut. It was such a loud, deafening sound, Albus was sure he heard a girl scream in the compartment to the left.”

A few paragraphs after this you have something that contradicts this. You state that there is a slight opening in the door, but it’s hard to believe that would happen if the door slammed closed that loudly. Just a minor thing.

Now my thoughts on characters. Hermione has a Mini-Me! Yes, I’m stealing your coined expression, because Rose is very much like a young Hermione. I also see Albus as a quite a bit like the early Harry, or at least, a side of him. James, though. My God, he’s as big of a git as his namesake. No offense. After the abuse he gave Scorpius, I don’t blame the boy for any insult that he threw back. Even Victiore stooped so low as to speak lowly of his company and rescuing the two, right where the boy could hear her. It may just because I have too many Heretics in my head, but this is nothing short of prejudice. But I like that. It shows that the bias hatred between them goes both ways and neither side is innocent.

As always I enjoy reading your work, and I look forward to being able to read more of it – when I finish your trailer and the OMG moment.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! We just HAVE to do Ravenclaw Review Circle again!

 

The Death Eater's Heir by Ironic Inspiration
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: (Fifth Year) When Professor Snape starts doubting the trust Voldemort has in him while he works as a spy, he has to start thinking about the consequences - his daughter. She has been living in France since she was very young, hiding behind the surname of Prince and steering clear of Voldemort, but now the Dark Lord endangers her safety once again, forcing Snape to beckon her to Hogwarts. He has feared that she would befriend Harry Potter, but he never imagined them being inseparable, finding a love that no one thought could exist between a Potter and a Snape. With Snape thinking Harry's too dangerous for her, Malfoy thinking he's better for her, and Voldemort lurking around, loving Evangeline Snape might be the hardest task Harry's yet to face.

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 4635 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
01/27/08 Updated: 04/03/08


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 03/03/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Well, that was certainly a good beginning. It captured people's attention, and certainly has the potential to bring them back wanting more. Unfortunately, it was far from perfect, and had a few small things that made me raising my eyebrow. Most of it had to do with characterization. For the most part, the characters were IC, but there were a few little quirks that kept them from being spot on.

Though you handled Harry well, getting his ability to stick his nose in things that he has no business knowing about down perfectly. However, I found some things about how he looked at Snape uncharacteristic. Like in this part:

Snape twitched just like one of Ron's family did when Voldemort's name was mentioned out loud, though Harry knew it wasn't the same fear that the Weasley's possessed. It was a fear that came out of mere habit. The fear that still clung to his mind when his master's name was spoken without its proper title; an action of stupidity that could earn a Death Eater's torturous punishment.

Though I applaud you for giving you this reason that Snape would wince at his name, (because it's a perfectly respectable reason) I cannot see how Harry would know this. He has never been observant, never been able to read Snape, and even in canon, when Snape winced at the name, Harry never once figured out why. So I believe this paragraph was a bit OOC - in a small way, but OOC nonetheless.

He looked like he was trying as hard as he possibly could to make sure that Dumbledore didn't hear or see the concern in his voice or expression, but Harry, for a split second, saw worry flash across his pale, angular features.

As I mentioned before, Harry cannot read Snape. He has never been able to comprehend the few emotions that he shows, because Snape is a master of hiding them. Harry would not have been able to see the worry in his gaze, especially if Snape was trying to hide it well enough that Dumbledore would not have been able to see it.

Hm, there were just a couple more places like this that made Harry Potter seem a bit out of character. The other thing was Snape. Though you handled his character well, and his conversation with Dumbledore showed the trust that he had for Dumbledore - so it was perfect for the two. The problem I had trouble wrapping my mind around, was that Snape didn't know that Harry was in the room.

Snape, unlike Harry, is extremely observant. You can't be a kind of spy like him if you fell to notice even the smallest bit of details - and a student remaining behind is not small, especially when they're having conversations like that. Snape doesn't just forget details like that. It would have made sense if Dumbledore had arrived and Snape had ushered Harry out, but he had remained to eavesdrop, but Snape would not have forgotten so easily - especially if there at the end, he remembered so simply.

One more thing

“If you are talking about his sanity, I believe it's in tact.”

Just wanted to point out that intact is one word. No big deal. It's a very minor typo.

Other than those small little quirks, you have a very interesting plot in your hands and I would love to see more. I'm going to favorite this because it has the makings of a very interesting story.

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the very informative review! Yes, I agree with you that it\'s odd Harry can read Snape so well all of the sudden. I had to steer fromt hat fact a little to make the scene a little more visual. This was a very emotional thing that Snape was admitting, though he doesn\'t show it quite as much. Reading this, I see that Snape would never forget about Harry. That is true. I do believe that he had alot on his mind. If this were from his POV, it would make much more sense. Basically, the reasons for Harry seeing Snape\'s emotions and the emotions themselves are ecplained as the story unfolds. This is a story that Harry starts to understand Snape much more than he ever thought he would. Thank you very much! I will update as soon as the queue is open. I have the next two chapters finished and betaed.

 

Loyaulte me lie by Vorona
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Summary: Severus Snape is in Azkaban, awaiting his trial for the murder of Albus Dumbledore. When the trial occurs, what, if anything, will he say in his defence? A snapshot of Snape before and during his trial, and a prequel to The Secret Papers of Regulus Black. Canon compliant to Half-Blood Prince but not Deathly Hallows.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 4738 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/17/08 Updated: 04/23/08


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 09/06/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love the premise of the story—what might have happened if Snape hadn’t died and given Harry his memories. I’ve been wanting to read this story for a while (I kept seeing the banner and clicking on it but never got the time to actually sit in read it). I’m so glad I finally got to.

I found a few minor faults.

In the first few paragraphs, you use the words ‘of course’ a few times during the narrative. This isn’t technically wrong if used correctly, to go from one thought to one that sort of contradicts it. It, however, didn’t seem to work as both times it interrupted the flow of your words and pulled me from the story.

Another problem was that you repeated the same thought twice a few paragraphs later. “My choices are reduced to what, if anything, I will say in my defence.” Severus thinks this, then goes onto think about other things, and then a few paragraphs later you had an almost identical sentence: “The only choice I have left: what, if anything, to say in my defence.” I understand you were simply trying to get back to a previous thought that was important, but this was so identical to the previous sentence I got confused. I honestly had to stop reading to make sure that I hadn’t somehow got lost and was rereading what I’d already read. My recommendation would have been to either remove what was between these two sentences, or to write the second phrase in a way that was different.

You never mention Lily, which was Severus’ main reason of doing all he. But you did say this was compliant of DH, so I suppose that was your reason for leaving her out, so I suppose that’s perfectly all right.

But there were much more that I loved about this story.

I love how you have Severus considering whether or not he is evil. So many people have thought of him as such, it’s only natural he would really begin to wonder. Not to mention, having him wonder if that’s what Albus thought. I think many people don’t realize how much Severus respected Albus, and how it MUST have hurt when Albus chose Draco’s soul over Severus. Even in DH, he demands: “What about my soul?” I can only imagine how much that hurt. Thanks for showing that in this story.

I like pretty much everything else. This story was so very good. It was well-written and beautiful, and gave a different portrait of Snape, who I adore. I also loved how I didn’t end how I thought it would be. I pictured a heart-felt speech that would convince Harry of his innocence, but you didn’t go down that road at all. As much I love Snape and wish for him a better ending, I’m also a sucker for sad endings. And for him to heroic face his punishment – wow. My heart just broke for him.

Keep writing. You’re very talented.

Chante’

Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review! You're absolutely right about the "of course"s and the same line. I didn't notice that at all. I certainly agree that it's overly repetitive. As for Lily, yes, it was not DH compliant, and I actually really dislike the idea that she's the reason he did everything. It's the major problem I have with the last book . . . but I wrote this story before that one came out and although some people were suggesting it as a reason, I thought that his relationship with Dumbledore was much more powerful, so that's what I went with. If I was writing the story now, I'm not sure where I would go with it. I'm really glad you liked the story overall.

 

Hero by thechocolatefrog
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: The war has been over for five years, but the world is still treating Harry like he defeated Voldemort yesterday. Why doesn't anyone realize that he is a hero for other reasons?

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 1015 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/25/08 Updated: 04/27/08


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 04/30/08 Title: Chapter 1: Hero

Congrats on finally getting the story up, Hannah. I was so excited to finally get to read it. It was really good -- well written and sweet, but without a lot of fluff. No sneezing from me. :-D It really was a lovely story, though I can tell that the OC did seem a lot like Ginny, but I know who it really is so, in the end, that doesn't matter. Once again, fantastic story. It was great!

 

Kill Me Now by R_Ravenclaw
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 16]

Summary: Hermione is Draco's new boss. In this situation comes hatred, arguments, and maybe even some passion.

This was written for the Dumbledore's Hat Fic Exchange in the SBBC. My quote was: "Granger, I really can't believe what sort of crap I have to do for my job." (from a poem by coppercurls) Nikki, this is yours. I hope you like it.

Categories: Hermione/Draco Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 4279 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/14/08 Updated: 06/24/08


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 07/01/08 Title: Chapter 1: Kill Me Now

Okay, I'm insanely tried so forgive me if I'm incoherent. As a general rule, I am NOT a Draco/Hermione shipper. (Fred/Hermione, ftw! tehe, though I do like Dramione better than some) but so far I've never seen one that has made me believe it could work. Yours came close.

I do think that Draco and Hermione did fall in love a bit too quickly, but it was a oneshot so that's sort of to be expected. And I loved how everyone stayed IC. The banter was incredible. I giggled so much.

And at the end (and I am ashamed to admit it) I was grinning like an idiot. It was just that line "God, Granger, sometimes you are an idiot". So orginal. So uncliche. So AWESOME!

Brilliant, girl. Well done.

 

At the Bus-Stop by Rhi for HP
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: An old woman sits down on a lonely bench one night waiting for the bus. She is joined by a young woman, who brings with her strange memories of the past, and the reminder that time changes everything.

Categories: Alternate Universe Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 2077 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/07/08 Updated: 08/18/08


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 01/31/11 Title: Chapter 1: At the Bus-Stop

This was very excellent. I generally don't read AU, but I stumbled upon this and was extremely curious. I really didn't expect the way this turned out, which is a talent since I generally find most stories fairly predictable. But I didn't figure that the old lady was Bellatrix.

I love the imagery you created with this story. The simple setting of the two sitting on the bench was very good. I also loved the dialogue, but I especially loved Bellatrix 'insane' thoughts.

Hermione, I thought, was pretty in character. However, I wonder what it was she was sent to 'do Bellatrix in'. Is she an Auror in this story? If not, I'm not sure I understand why it was her and not someone like Harry who would have been sent after Bellatrix.

However, I thought it was a very interesting story and very well written. I actually like the fate this Bellatrix suffered better than that in DH, at the hands of Molly. It has an ironic sense of justice too it. The Bellatrix who tortured people to insanity, left without her wits, living with the Muggles she despised.

Yes, it's quite an excellent piece indeed. Bravo.

 

Snape Didn't Die by OliveOil_Med
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 26]

Summary:

Winner of the First-Annual Ravenclaw Quicksliver Quill Award for Best Humor, Wittiest Writing!


Snape didn't die, he simply joined the Witness Relocation Program. A funny slogan for an avatar, but what if some crazed author somewhere decided to write the story behind it?

On the run from all those who would want to see his head on a platter, Severus Snape is put through a series of tests. But between scantily-clad Ministry agents, seeing-eye elves, and an all-witch school and all the drama that goes along with it, he is beginning to wonder how much worse the alternative would really be.

Happy Birthday, Chante'!


Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity

Word count: 39652 Chapters: 7 Completed: No
Published:
12/23/08 Updated: 06/18/11


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 01/11/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 The Best Laid Plans

As I have said before, I LOVE this story and I love you. Who knew making that awesome avatar would spark your incredible genius? I'm going to be eagerly awaiting an update. :D

Author's Response: Well, it is something I thought you would love for seventeenth. I hope it continues to entertain.

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/12/10 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 It Begins

No, no, this simply cannot have only ONE review!

the pieces of hay fell like spaghetti-like snow.

I wanted to point out that I absolutely LOVE this description. Just being the horse person I am and knowing how pretty straw is when it falls. *sigh* I get nostalgic just thinking about it.

“What’s up with you, Sweet Pea?”

I absolutely love Kit's nickname for Salome. Has nothing to do with this is one of the nicknames I sometimes get called. You know...nothing like that. lol

In fact, I love everything about Kit and Salome dysfunction friendship. I'm so used to the the bosom buddy friendship that you general find in Harry Potter and its fanfiction (including mine :/ ) that use in a unique breath of fresh air. It's so dynamic and interesting, and I love it.

In a sporadic action, the taller girl smacked her riding crop against the one of the stable beams, causing her horse to buck at the sharp noise.

Just a tiny little critique. Bucking isn't what horses do when they're scared. It's more of an aggressive act, not really seen unless playing or attacking other horses or trying to get a rider off. If a horse was spooked by a sudden noise, it would have a "flight" response which means shying away from the noise, trying to bolt (obviously not possible if the girl has a tight enough hold on the reins), and etc.

Okay, I'm done. Feel free to roll your eyes now.

Salome began to fidget as she felt herself being pulled deeper and deeper into a situation that seemed like it could only end painfully. But it did seem like it would be an…engaging, and even amusing pastime in a school with no boys and where a person would live a near Puritanical existence if they followed every school rule. First, Kit had caught the urge, now it was beginning to spread to Salome, and the two fourth-years already seemed heavily infected by the notion.

It has to be contagious….


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Author's Response: Well, the bit about the horse really shows I am a city girl. I'll have to go to you from now on with all horse-related questions.

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/12/10 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 It Begins

(review Part 2)

I heart this line so much. It's like she's saying. "All right I've come to the darkside. Now pass the cookies."

I love Shoshanna and her reaction to what happened. She drives Professor Snape so crazy, which I have to admit is sort of good for him. You are the queen of strange relationships and I love them so much!

But instead of doing anything to fix this, the girl just looked up at him, disgusted. “I’m Miss Barnett!” she said before pointing to the black girl who was her partner. “She’s Miss Iwamoto!”

"Witch, I ain't Cho Chang!"

Sorry, I had a flashback to A Very Potter Musical when I read this. It is, of course, hilarious.

This first prank is amazingly hilarious. Severus did ask for it by telling him what he did.

Anyways, of course, I just wanted to say how much I loved this chapter and hopefully it'll give you a little bit of inspiration.

Author's Response: Yes, Shoshana is a very...special person. And yes, Miss Iwamoto's bit was inspired by A Very Potter Musical. I'm glad you're loving them.

 

Deal Or No Deal by the opaleye
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 21]

Summary: Hermione is struggling to keep S.P.E.W afloat after a nasty and public incident involving a house-elf, rolling pin and Muggle now recovering in St. Mungo's. George is slowly drowning in a sea of financial strain and grief over Fred's death. When the two of them join forces one Christmas, will they overcome their troubles and perhaps find solace in the unexpected? But can these two very different personalities reside in one place at one time?


Categories: Hermione/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Epilogue? What Epilogue?, Sexual Situations

Word count: 12020 Chapters: 5 Completed: No
Published:
08/13/09 Updated: 07/19/10


Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 2: 2 - The Deal

Aw, I have always had such a soft spot of Hermione paired with one of the Weasley twins. This is a sweet and well written. Hermione is perfectly in character, and George I suppose is too, but Post-Fred George portrayed so sadly always makes me miss the old George. Hopefully we'll see a bit more of that as I continue to read. And I assure you I will continue to read.

I love the whole thing about "the whisper of ghosts". It so poetically fits the way it feels to sit or be someplace, knowing someone should be there with them. Bravo.

Anyways, I suppose I could leave a much longer, more constructive review, but you have a great fanfiction and I really would like to read the next chapter. So I'm sorry for the short review. Only know it's because I really want to continue on.

:D

Signed,
The Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves

Author's Response: Hi Chante! As soon as I saw your banner request, I wondered if you had read my own George fic! I started writing this fic after I had a sudden craving for a Hermione/George and found that MNFF had very few fics with that pairing. And I always wondered about George post-Fred. I know he seems sad in this chapter but deep down the old George is still there. Further on in the fic we begin to see more of that but I have a feeling that the old George will never return. He may seem more and more like the old George but for him there will always be something missing, something not quite there. I see I have some other reviews from you so I will hurry to respond to those, too XD Thanks so much for the review!

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 3: 3 - Drink, Anyone?

The clunk of the glass on the wooden surface seemed to ring with deprecation.

Okay, for some reason this was a line that I loved. Doesn't seem like much, but it was one of those lines that put a vivid image in my mind -- the glass hitting the table and the ring that it made. :D And deprecation? What a beautiful perfect word. It was a sentence that made me say, darn that simply could not have been said better. That doesn't happen very often for me, so really it was brill.

In fact, I loved the entire scene of the four of them at the beginning. The dialogue, the awkwardness, the relationship, and the end where they burst out laughing. It was a fresh moment that seemed pulled from real life, and those are the best moments in stories I do believe.

Their laughter burst out across the table and through the bar - a frivolous moment when the whispers seemed to disappear.

Another breath-taking line!

My only critique...

“I-Well, I think…er…” Hermione turned to Harry, horrified. So, he doesn’t want me to move in with him, she thought. “So, you don’t-”

I couldn't decide if "I-Well, I think...er.." was actually Hermione talking or George until you switched to George's POV. There really should have been a paragraph break after that bit of dialogue. But that's my only critique. I really like the story and I'm going to keep reading. :D

*skips off to next chapter*

Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review! I must admit that I love writing scenes largely made up on dialogue. I'm studying film and love writing short scripts so I can get carried away sometimes but it's good to see you enjoyed this chapter. I really tried to make this as realistic as possible. Thanks for pointing out the awkward spot, though. You're right that it is very unclear. I will note that down and edit it sometime in the near future.

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 4: 4 - Fizzle and Pop!

Hermione took a deep breath and stepped over the threshold into Weasleys’ Wizard Wheezes.

Okay, you're going to roll your eyes at me for finding pleasure of crazy little things, but the word choice of "stepped over the threshold" is amazing. Most people would have said stepped through the doorway or something equally mundane, but the whole use of threshold was brilliant. I had visions of the old tradition of the groom carrying the bride over the threshold of their new house, and I know this is totally not what was happening here, but it still brings to mind the symbolism. "New beginnings", "love and romance". PERFECTION in this sort of fic. You probably didn't plan this, but it is amazing none the same.

Okay, I'll shut up about it now. (Yes, yes, I'm a nerd)

Merlin, Morgana, and all things Quidditch!

I found this HILARIOUS! This was even more so:


What if I walk in on her naked in the shower?


But the most LOL moment of all: They were nasty things, especially if you were taking a leak. My God, it seems like the old George IS coming back!

*grins* Still loving this (obviously)

*runs off to read next chapter*

Author's Response: Hehe I didn't plan that threshold connection to marriage at all XD But I did want it to symbolise a new beginning for Hermione. It's a huge change for her and George and something neither of them expected, really. And I have to credit my beta, Drew, for suggesting that exclamation! She's great at things like that XD I did try to make it more humorous as well. I wanted to show that the old George is still there. He's not just some morose, languishing shadow. Again, thanks for the read and review. It's exciting seeing new reviews for this fic and will definitely motivate me to update sooner!

 
Reviewer: C_A_Campbell Signed
Date: 12/13/10 Title: Chapter 5: 5 - Socks

The Spicy Sorceress, hm? George you naughty boy! LOL

Seriously, I love this story, and I do hope you will update with a new chapter soon. This is going straight into my favorites!

Author's Response: Hehe. I rather liked that title. I'm sure The Spicy Sorceress is going to feature again sometime soon XD Thanks for the reviews. I am definitely not abandoning this fic. I'm going to have more spare time on my hands in the new year so hopefully that will mean more updates!

 
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