just as MagEd says... seemed as if Lily was really there in front of me, very convincing!
emotions were expressed very beautifully... i enjoyed every word. keep up!
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
good one, hazel eyes... *wink*
Author's Response: Tee hee, thanks :).
well, i loved anything it was ur A/N about Professor Scalar! dont i hate that topic! haha...
nice attempt Niymphea... i would have loved a bit more detail though... keep it up.
Author's Response: I was afraid no one would get the joke if I didn\'t point it out...I\'m quite proud of that name. ;-) When I wrote this, I was thinking of it almost as like two separate chapters, two isolated incidents. So the reason there isn\'t as much detail as perhaps you would have liked is that I know there was a lot going on in their lives, but I was emphasizing these two simple scenes and their effect on their relationship.
provides a break from the usual style of writing... i loved how Ginny questions herself abt Harry's safety...
Author's Response: Yeah, I wanted Ginny to be unsure and all that. Thank you though!
I was on the third paragraph, Tash, when I hastily closed the window of your story. And then I held my chest and I was heaving *puffs*
Oh my Godric! That was the sweetest thing ever!
You said, something about your uncertainty with the characterization. Well, you were wrong. Absolutely wrong because every character was so original and convincing, I enjoyed reading every word.
One of the best type of fictions I think are the ones that portray the “other” side of a character. You accomplished that in Flame with Harry, Ginny and Molly as well. Harry was absolutely adorable ( I was getting giddy!) and really, his tempers just sets butterfly in my stomach.
Just like everybody else I too thought that Ginny was dead. You reinforced our assumption through Harry’s attitude at her absence from his life. The candles and his feelings towards Daisy. Real nice twist though. I can never imagine Ginny leaving Harry for the world but the thing that you can accomplish writing what seems such an unimaginable canon twist, is superb!
I think the main feature of a good story is that the author in some way touches the reader’s heart through the relation of the character’s attitude and attributes to those of the readers. Its always enjoyable to read something I can relate to. Sometimes the biggest things we say or do are made up of the little things.
Flame. Your title couldn’t have been any better! Flame. The little thing *wink*
It was sweet and touching and just shakes all the strings of the guitar in my heart. The echo lasts for hours too.
An excellent one-shot to add to my ever-growing list of favs.
Author's Response: Wow, Akay, thanks for the lovely review. I\'m really glad that you enjoyed the characterisations. I was actually unsure about them and wasn\'t even going to upload this fic at one stage, but I loved the actual story so I\'m glad now that I persisted. I\'m happy that you liked the title too. I usually try and keep them simple and to the point as I find an overly complicated title can turn me off sometimes. Thanks again! Tash
and Tash, while i was reading the fic, it reminded me of Rascal Flatts song What Hurts the Most...
myabe its a conincidence or something but Harry could actually be singing that song! ha!
Author's Response: I\'ve never actually heard of the song, but I googled the lyrics and you\'re right--they do sort of match. :D Just a coincidence, though. :) Tash
i think its an excellent job, considering that its your first fic at MNFF or is it the first one u ever wrote?
really well written, i must say. sirius is one of those charcters not everyone can characterise vert well but u did a good job.
the memories were well thought and reflect your obvious talent in writing.
keep it up. i'll be looking out for you.
Author's Response: Thanks--I think Sirius is hard to characterize too...esp. because sometimes he\'s so intense, but other times so laid back...
Reading Blame was 'Like pouring salt in a fresh wound'. Literally!
Enjoyed it very much, Megan. Specially Pursue.
I'm guilty of feeling sad for Peter after reading Part One, owing to your detailed exploration of his mind. In the end, the line 'in running, he left his guilt behind' accurately describes the 12 years he cowardly spent as an Animagi.
Part Two was just torture. A blantant torture from Megan to all Sirius loving fans.
I love how your incorporatation of the voice of the inner self makes Sirius appear very vulnerable and then how his anger helps him bring back the composure.
I hoped that you elaborated when you wrote 'And Sirius had had plenty of experience with his anger' but I guess that would've affected the well achieved continuity of this chapter.
I liked this line very much as it sums up well how Sirius saw Peter throughout their years of acquaintence.
He saw the eleven-year-old boy that they’d met years ago. He saw the teenager that they’d laughed and planned pranks with. He saw the man that they’d trusted.
He saw the man that had betrayed that trust. He saw the coward. He saw the spy.
I think the information you give us in paragraphs was better being eliminated or else written without the paragraphs. It sort of distorted the flow of the story, and reminded of the horror of school textbooks "(refer to page no. blah)"
Keep it coming.
*near fainting* How do you people come up with stuff like this? *stares at her vanishing plot bunny*
*now grins like a maniac*
Loved every alphabet, every word, phrase, sentence, paragraph! Brilliantly expressed with the sweetest emotions in the world.
I love all those writers and their stories that circulate around those “little things” in life. Tomato seeds! I’m touched, really. It is one of the most beautiful fictions I have ever read.
Now you’ll say I named all of them, but *grins* do you leave me a choice? I specially liked the Sirius and Remus parts, then George and Andromeda and Teddy too!!!
It is a very sad story but unlike many others, I didn’t cry when I read Tomato Seeds.
In fact, I was smiling. There is a tragedy that makes you cry, which is sad itself. But I think there is a very rich and beautiful aspect to any tragedy too. This goes for the time when I think about Lily sacrificing her life for Harry. The sentiment is so strong and touching, that I tend to start viewing it from the emotional point of view.
Mudblood428’s ‘Mum, Dad, Its Me Harry’ was the first ever fiction in which I sat crying for an hour! I love Tomato Seeds as much, but cherish it in a very different, unique way, that is felt equally strongly. And of course ‘OMG’ was the only utterance from my mouth for a long time as I sat in otherwise a very Gin_Drinka’s-story-induced dazed silence.
I love the way you link “the little thing” throughout the story. I can even relate to certain parts of the fiction, which makes me even more attached to it. Characterization was awesome and very skillfully done.
Keep it up!
Author's Response: Oh my goodness, what a spectacular review. I grinned so much when I read this. Thanks! Some people cried when reading this, they told me, but I sort of agree it\'s not the crying sort of fic. Of course it is sad, and tragic, but I try to always put a little bit of hope in any story that I write, no matter how sad it gets. Thanks a wonderful and extremely flattering review. I\'m so glad you enjoyed it.
loved your ending line. very touching
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m so glad you like it. ~Ange^__^
it was sweet really, but the way it started out, i expected more, er- better.
there must at least have been some solid details and emotions attached with each time Ron made Hermione angry. i dont mean there wasnt at all, but a bit more would have made ur one-shot more realistic.
i though, loved the ending line and the title is awesome.
the content was not aboslutely up to the mark. nice attempt anyways, buddy.
Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback-- it was honest and constructive, which is just what I needed.
touching :) two of my fav characters written beautifully. good job
Author's Response: Thank you.
i specially liked the immediate start and the immediate end.
it was a good story
But one cannot grieve and live at the same time. And one realises it doesn’t really take much to go back to living after grieving: love thaws all sharp icicles the way spring has never yet broken its promise of driving away winter.~LucillaJoanna of Hufflepuff believes Seasons Change and avows it with this entry to the Winter Tales Challenges.
~Dedicated to Wulfric Brian Dumbledore, who intimately knows grief and will successfully befriend it, too.
loved Teddy's little gestures, Joanna! They were so sweet and made me coo. Oh and Harry-Ginny parts were AWESOME. My stomach gave me some very serious flicks!
keep it coming!
Author's Response: Thanks, Akay! *hugs*
*bites her quivering lip*
that was very good, Stubby. i liked the line you wrote in your A/N, but somehow the reference to the colours is always more believable and touching.
poor James. descriptions were really very good. i loved how you talk about things such as trick or treating and kicking leaves. James' reaction to the muggle Halloween was sweet.
He forgets that maybe, maybe this is a promise he cannot keep. James forgets that maybe there might not be a tomorrow.
*nods her head impressively*
P.S: what is it with dark fictions leaving you sad, Stubby? :)
Author's Response: *grins idiotically* Oh, thakees, Akay! I love to slip in little descriptions and small passages. It just makes things more... touching, in my opinion. I do rather like James\' opinion of Halloween. That line\'s one of my favourites, too. That was originally going to be the next-to-ending paragraph (With just \'There is a bang at the door\' after it.), but then I added more. Did it make you sad? How marvellous. -Stubby
absorbed within the second paragraph, i was like 'how is she?'
within the third line of second paragraph i was like 'damn! who is she!!!'
my first guess with the scrap book was lily, harry's daughter, complete with the his glasses and all. but then came ginger hair and i was like, thats probably ron's daughter.
then came 'defeat of the darkest wizard in history' and i was sure it was lily potter, the second!
but you didnt stop tormenting me there, because the third paragraph was next and i couldnt help saying 'on no'
finally in the fifth one, i smiled. ah, Ginny.
nice one, really.
i liked Harry a lot. supportive, caring and sweet. ginny, being a mess of emotions was sad.
P.S: now i see what you mean by the warning 'DH spoilers and Book 7 disregarded'!
Author's Response: Sorry for tormenting you. =) It did kind of sound like either Harry\'s or Ron\'s daughter. Yeah, the fifth paragraph was a HUGE tip-off to who the narrator was. o.0 I\'d actually be surprised if someone didn\'t get who she was after reading that paragraph. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story!
I'm returning after three hours since I first read your story to tell you that
I can't stop smiling. :D
Author's Response: Whee! I\'m really pleased. Thank you!
absolutely hooked! loved it
Author's Response: You can say that again! Ok, I\'m lame. But seriously, thanks, and thanks for reviewing!
You've done it again, Kat! I'm smiling and I'm crying. Oh Godric, it was spectacular!
I loved the following description very much:
Staring down at his hands as if they were not his own, Teddy stopped in the middle of the room; the world began to spin around him. The sound of the book falling against the stiff mattress echoed in his ears causing him to shift his eyes up to it. He steadied himself from the vertigo that had suddenly overtaken him and moved to the bed, leaning against it. The journal was a mere foot away from him and yet he could not pick it up. It was as if his arm had temporarily lost functionality as it hung limply by his side. The shine of the sun caught the gold trimmings of the pages and at dauntingly glared into his eyes, enticing him to pick it back up.
It was so real and I felt I was there standing beside Teddy watching the journal fall.
The best quote:
He did love her; just not with the type of love he had for his parents’ memory.
Thats it. Love exists in form and you've explored the whole philosophy of it in one beautiful sentence. A very appropriate retrospection to Teddy's cauldron of jumbled emotions.
Two words, Mistletoe: Loved It.
Author's Response: Akay, you have been the best reviewer... EVER! I loved this review :] I\'m glad you liked my description--I strive to be there with the character, as you\'ve said above. Heh. Thanks, dear! Now I\'m off to read your lovely entry :]
you know what... in my opinion your story is the best one combined all the categories of the Winter Tales...
its like reading OotP! it feels as if i'm watching Teddy or Harry... Teddy, Harry, Teddy...
ugh... it should be like:
Mistletoe, Rowling, Mistletoe, Rowling...
mind blowing portryal of Teddy's current position... its so realistic and love the way how he isnt even thinking abt how would Vic think, cuz his prob with his parents is too much more than a relationship with a girlfriend..
it was so nice to read something so real and well expressed...
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I\'m really glad you are so fond of this! :]] This review made me feel all arm and fuzzy on the inside. *grins* --Kat
Author's Response: warm and fuzzy... not arm... >.> <.<