LOL. Oh yes, a very good parody from the point of view of someone who's rather sick of the bad fanfiction authors over at fanfiction.net going entirely off movie cannon. . . . Rather witty, you are, and I'm interested to see where this goes. Cheers!
Oh, MERLIN! I think I've something of a crick in my side laughing from that. Very, very funny, to say the least, and probably very in character from the Marauders. Just, very funny. Kepp going! Cheers!
Cow joke? There's a cow joke out there? There's something in fanfiction I missed? BRAGI: I, one of Loki's muses, must take over because she's in shock. *sniggers* fairly funny, fairly funny. You could go into more deatil with things, but you've got the muor element down! Cheers!
heh heh heh -- you have now made my favorite'l list. I'm not quite sure when this takes place, though, and that's the only constructive criticism I have. Just an awesome story, with too many amusing points to list! Cheers!
I really, really, realyl probably shouldn't be laughing about this . . . poor Snape. HAS he tried the shampoo yet? Um . . . very strong writing, you develop his thoughts very well. Good grief. Once again, I really shouldn't be laughing about this. . . . All in all, very strong story. Cheers!
A little overdone, but not a bad way of doing. I caught a couple of problems with apostrophes ("won't" not "wont") and Sirius . . . Im questioning whether he's really IC. He now owes James 10 Galleons, however, and that's pretty amusing. Btw, can we PLEASE get through one "Marauders read PS/SS" without the question of "Is 'UnDurselyish' a word?" jokes? However, for writing something overdone, you aren't doing too bad a job -- it's still funny, you can spell, and James and Remus are pretty much IC, ect. Cheers!
Highly, highly amusing. Snape's black fuzzy bat slippers? How fitting! And the comment about the shower . . . we should all stop making fun of Snape's oily hair! Or, I would hold that opinion if it wasn't so much fun! Short little ficlet, but a very good one for its size! Cheers!
First reviewer? (stares at computer in shock) How can I be the first reviewer? Awesome, awesome story! I love the characterization, all the Marauders are perfectly IC, and I love the way everything is just so well done. The discription of what it came in as their discription of their animagus forms was awesome, and I love the passage of Sirius changing the first time, too. Brilliant. 10, definitely! Cheers!
Very good two chapters -- excellent job getting inside both Harry and Snape's heads, and to say the least the whole promise id very amusing. Clean grammar, good discription, and as I said your characterization is excellent! Cheers!
Good developments, excellent characterization and discription -- indeed this promises to be an amusing story indeed. I did fine one typo -- "a thing line . . ." Didn't you mean thin? OTherwise, awesome job! Cheers!
If I listened to rap, I might be up for a shot at it, but I'm afraid it would take the sorting hat to make me stand it. That was immensely inspired insanity -- it does sound as if it came out of an immensely sarcastic schoolteacher's textbook. Very cool -- ended up reading the songs aloud and laughing through them. Is that nothing but praise? Of course it is! I have nothing to criticize -- very cute. Cheers!
Heh! Very amusing, really -- very good. Its so rare you see a decent, funny Lily/James fic (I've been on fanfiction.net too long. . . .), but this appears to be the start of one. So characteristic of James and Petunia, and I think you did a very good job with Lily, too. PS Thanks for reviwing Magical Creatures Dateline! Cheers!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really did like that second chapter with Snape and all. I'm working on chapter two at the moment, hopefully it'll be up soon. So thanks!
Woah, good fic. Long fic, but good fic. Excellent discription, and good characterization -- some of Harry's dealings with the Dursley's seemed a bit out of character for him, but otherwise everyone was spot-on. In a chapter of this size, its natural for there to be some errors, but they were minor -- "incomplete shock" instead of "in complete shock" and wrong word errors like that. Interesting concept, good idea! PS Thanks for reviewing Last of the Line! Cheers!
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out my incomplete vs in complete error. What other things did you notice? --- Samantha
What . . . the . . . HECK! Funny story, kid, the kilt. Excellent discription and characterization, and the details of the trip were hilarius and superb. All in all, great story! Cheers!
Oh, I'm a grammar nitpicker, and this is clean. Very funny, though -- I hope this DOESN'T mess up their future -- I like the pink boa, and Snape out of his trousers . . . at least he's pretty well IC, too. Great discription, again! Cheers!
You used Eloise! I have been wondering since I started reading fanfiction when someone was going to finally use Eloise! I'm glad you did it rather than me, though, probably much better -- and as for the rest of the capter, Dumbledore and CLancy continue to be wonderful, and Snape beautifully annoying. Hairdryer comment was good, too. All in all, an awesome chapter! Cheers!
heh heh heh heh heh -- okay, so it takes place in Harry's second year. THAT explains Lockhart; I'd automatically assumed it was his sixth. The basilisk going to have anything to do with the plot? Btw, Snape was right on par, and the conversation with Dumbledore? Alow me to congradulate you on doing what I would've thought impossible. All in all, an awesome chapter! Cheers!
Author's Response: The Basilisk will be mentioned briefly, but it has nothing to do with the plot. The dates of the letters exchanged in Chapter 3 set the year of the story, along with the reference to Harry and Ron crashing the Ford Anglia into the Whomping Willow in Chapter 5. Thanks for your reviews!
Oh, WOW. I'm impressed. Very, very impressed. Usually I balk at OC fics (but then, I've spent too many time in Mary Sue over-run sites, which Clancy is probably NOT), but I love well-done Snape humor, and the character development in this is AWESOME. Interested to see what Snape's reaction to this interesting person is. :) I have no criticism to offer, so kudos to that! PS Thanks for the review (and email) to Of Rats and Drainpipes! Cheers!
Wow. Another awesome chapter. I'm glad Clancy has that moment of doubt, you know . . . it made her character feel real. Glad to get details of his life. Hm . . . wonder how Severus will react to something like Clancy actually showing up, as we know she will. . . . Andyway, continuing on! Cheers!
And yet another good chapter. I'm really enjoying Clancy -- she's a good, belivable character, and the letter definitely sounds like Dumbledore. The only thing that struck me at all was in Clancy's letter "advise" to Hillary's death sounded a little odd. Could be just me. Otherwise, awesome. Oh, my. . . . what's Snape's reaction going to be? Cheers!
Author's Response: I used "advise" in the sense of inform. Remember Aunt Hilly's directive from her letter: No hearts and flowers. Thank you for your reviews. I appreciate it when readers take the time to let me know they're enjoying the story.