I love Harry Potter novels, and just about any other book I can get my hands on. I love to write and secretly wish that an owl would swoop down and deliver my admissions letter to Hogwarts!!!
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I like the way you started your fic., with an action sequence. It was well written, and I enjoyed the look into the Black Household. Keep up the good work!
I like your story, though I have a hard time believing that Mrs. Potter would allow Sirius to stay over without further explanation. “Mum, Sirius’ mum was being a bitc- big butt hole. So can he stay over for awhile?” seems like she might want to inquire more. Though it was very funny!!! Other then that I found the story very believable, I love the camaraderie between the boys, and the verbs you use to express their face expressions.
Author's Response: Thanks. Yea when I reread this fiction, I notice I was going fast and I didn't really go more into Mrs. Potter I guess. Thanks for the review!