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The Sky Lament by lady magician
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 27]

Summary: There is no more song in Hermione's life. She is lost. She's been taken away by her parents from the wizarding world because the danger from the war has gotten the worst it can get. While Harry, Ron, and even Ginny are miles and miles away, fighting to save the world, Hermione spends her time yearning to go where everyone wants to go...home.....And then the song plays again...From the 'universe' of sorts from my first two poems...

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 444 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/18/06 Updated: 12/19/06


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Hermione's Lament

How touching. This poem really was not like your other ones that I've read. This one is just so sad and beautiful.
And the song faded into the stars. What a great ending to such a strong piece!

Author's Response: this poem probably appeals to you the most because i actually wasnt thinking of hp when i wrote it; i wrote it because of my own emotions at the time. i have a really bad bit of nostalgia because i moved a few months ago from the place i grew up *hint: i might not live where my bio says, but im from there* ...so it was really just raw emotion from me,and wasnt meant to be an hp poem, but as i saw i hadnt posted a poem in a long time and i wanted to give my readers a nice present for the holidays (and because i formed a hermione story that fit), i posted it! :-) Thanks alot!!

 

And You Tore It Down by wendelin the wierd
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: It is the natural order of things.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 92 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/22/06 Updated: 12/22/06


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 06/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

So sad. The words and descriptions you used were very powerful and beautiful.

He tells himself he doesnít care,
For she made heavenís face so fair.


A very bittersweet ending. I would never think that Remus would not care if someone died, but I guess there is more to your story. The last line is amazing. Great job. ^^


Author's Response: *Sigh* I absolutely love reviews that make me feel all fuzzy.

 

Butterfly's Wings by blacsilver_serpent
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: It is Christmas five years after Harry won the battle with Lord Voldemort. This Christmas sees Ginny and Harry together while Tonks and Lupin are already married and have a child. What about Ron and Hermione?Is it finally a happy ending for them after all these years? Set on Christmas five years after Harry's final battle with Lord Voldemort, this story explores Hermione's feelings and what has happened over the years. This is a two-part story featuring Ron and Hermione as
the main characters.


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death

Word count: 2802 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/08/07 Updated: 01/14/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 08/31/07 Title: Chapter 1: Part 1

I must say, you do a wonderful job of using descritptive words to paint a picture of the scene in the reader's mind. My only bits of concrit are...

"Her newly-purchased suede boots sink deep into the snow and go crunch, crunch, crunch."

The "cruch, cruch, crunch" should be italisized since they aee sounds, and...

The place looks like a park, a small park.

I don't think you need to say that it "looks like" a small park, unless it is not, but I got the impression that it was.

Anyways, its a very sweet story so far, and like I said before, you use such wonderful descriptions that it is very easy for me to see the story in my mind, like in these lines...

Wisps of cotton candy clouds drift across the winter sky.

The sun, a gold-yellow orb hanging in the sky, is already reaching out with its million spear-like arms, grasping handfuls of snow and melting them with its gentle heat.

The place is the Garden of Elov, a place of life and love, a place where flowers and greenery come to life when there is love and life around.


Wonderful and sweet beginning to the story, keep up the great work.

 

A lot to live up to by lady magician
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 24]

Summary: Have you ever heard of a Ronald Weasley? No?
I bet you have.
He's the tall, red-headed kid who's always tailing Harry and Hermione.
He's Ginny Weasley's brother.
He's Fred and George's brother.
He's Bill's brother.
He's Charlie's brother.
.......Now do you know who Ronald Weasley is?....

POST- HBP

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 368 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/13/07 Updated: 01/16/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Ron's Rant

He does have a lot to live up to doesn't he? I liked the idea. The format of the poem and wording were also very interesting... they made the poem more "Ron-nish." There is only one suggestion I can make:
Imagine having to live up to all of those people. They ARE quite a group you know.
I think these should be two different lines in the poem. It just makes sense to me if there is an "enter" between "people." and "They."
It's only a suggestion. Anyways, good job! ^_^

Author's Response: thanks for the suggestion! but its early in the morning here so ill probably get on it later, im just so lazy at *checks clock* 8:42 AM...:-P

 

Wondering Why by Angel Feathers
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: Ginny thinks on her relationship with Harry.
Ginnys' POV.
I would kill for you,
Iíd die,
I do everything for you,
You never try,
And thatís why I find myself wondering why.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 234 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/16/07 Updated: 01/17/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: Why?

I liked reading this. I like how there are so many words that rhyme with "why." It adds a little something to the poem- makes it more enjoyable. Good job!



Author's Response: Thank you!

 

A little more by Angel Feathers
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: A poem about the spark between Ron and Hermione. Can be from either POV.

Our hearts are the same,
Letís clear this pain,
Give into the little more,
Thatís what love is for.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 161 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/18/07 Updated: 01/19/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: Once I Felt a Little More

Hmmm... a quick read but very sweet. Your really good at writing sweet poems. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: Aw thanks!

 

Final Battle by hogwartsrules
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: The teenaged savior.
The older demon.
Vanquished together.
Under the blood-red sky.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 101 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/07 Updated: 01/23/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Only one chapter

Wow... very dark. But that's okay. ^_^ I like how short the lines are- it kind of adds to the darkness of the poem.
My favorite lines are the last two:
I am the last breathing.
Yet I did not win.

Awww... so sad but so true. Just because you win something in the end doesn't mean you didn't lose more just to get there. So true. Good job!


Author's Response: I was aiming for that. Thank you! I thought that the last two lines came out a bit... um... *thinks of good word besides \'bad\'* messed up, but... thank you!

 

Summary: I remember.
I won't forget.


Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 162 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/07 Updated: 01/23/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

The everlasting arenít memories. Very true.
What I like about this poem is how short and simple it is- but there is so much meaning behind the words. And of course, my favorite part is the ending. Those last four lines were just so beautiful! Great job. ^_^



Author's Response: Aaaw. Thank you. Ack. How original oof me. But really; thank you for the review!

 

Comforted and Comforter by Chaser921
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: A missing moment from Order of the Phoenix. When Harry goes down to the lake to brood, Ginny follows.

Categories: Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1993 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/22/07 Updated: 01/27/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 05/11/07 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Very cute one-shot. I love Harry/Ginny stories and this one is great. It would've been great if it was part of a longer story, but its sweet by itself as well. I like how you do these *missing* moments. Keep up the great work. ^^

 

They Told me Not To by Heiress_of_Insanity_
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: They told me not to cry at night

Just sleep.

They told me not to add

Or keep.



Harry is dead. Ginny mourns.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 198 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/24/07 Updated: 01/25/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hmmm. I like its style- its not fancy and overbearing with metaphors and all- but it is still emotional and well written. I like the ending, especially. So yah.... nice job! ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! My computer is acting really weird............*shrug* Another review! =DDDD~ Monty

 

The Touch of an Angel by Angel Feathers
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Luna Lovegood is an oddball, someone who doesnít fit in with this world that she has been born into.

A poem about this fallen angel.


She speaks the truth like no one else can,
She holds the fragments of her life in her hand,
She loves like nobody else could do,
Her heart is always and forever true


Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 223 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/27/07 Updated: 01/30/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Fallen Angel

Yes Luna is an oddball, but this poem just shows what a wonderful character she is in the book. My fave part of this poem has to be:
That warm, sweet smile that can touch the hardest heart,
A voice that speaks the truths that tear you apart.

It shows the good side of Luna, but then it explains what most characters don't like about her. So anyways, fantastic job.


Author's Response: Thanks a lot! I love Luna, she\'s one of a kind!

 

To Find the Truth by hopelesslyhopeful
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 247]

Summary: Harry and Ginny have led a happy life together that now includes their four children. But when Lily discovers a new 'talent' and old enemies combine with new, can the children of Order members and their parents unite and prevail?




To Rekindle the Flame sequel, although it's not necessary for you to read that story first to understand

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death, Violence

Word count: 61902 Chapters: 24 Completed: No
Published:
02/02/07 Updated: 11/27/09


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 07/26/07 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - The Transcender

Great chapter! We are finally understanding Lily's "curse" more. I was just a bit upset that Harry wasn't there by her bedside, since she is his daughter. Update soon!

Author's Response: I wanted Lily\'s \'curse\' to be understood a bit more before continuing on. And it is too bad that Harry couldn\'t be there when Lily woke up, but he\'s out looking for someone at the moment... thanks for reviewing.

 
Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 05/14/07 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 13 The Burrow

This is such a terrific story. Please update soon. I like it when Lily learns more about Harry's past. And now that Bella is in the picture- things should get even more interesting. Such a sweet story. UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!

Author's Response: Well I am very glad you are enjoying the story so far and I will try to update as soon as I possibly can. Bellatrix does tend to add a little excitement to the story doesn\'t she? I must admit that I have so much fun writing her! thanks for such a nice review!

 

The Badger & The Snake by Angel Feathers
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: A poem from Helga Hufflepuffs' POV, thinking about what she once had.

So here we are, best friends, once lovers,

So here we are, different from others,

Green and yellow, cunning and true.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 217 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/02/07 Updated: 02/05/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: Him and Her

Ohmygosh this was just amazing. I really liked how you took an idea I would've never thought to write about (Hufflepuff and Slytherin?) and used it to make such a sweet poem.
And the way you described them was great:

So here we are, best friends, once lovers,
So here we are, different from others,
Green and yellow, cunning and true.

You were always a snake, slipping away,
I was forever a badger, trying to help you stay,


That was so genius! (does that make sense?) So creative and poetic, the whole thing is great.

I also like how you wrote the first two stanzas, by describing them with colors. Just pure genius. So yah... this poem is awesome. AMAZING job.


Author's Response: Wow! Sorry I haven\'t replyed, I had retired from MNFF for a while, but now I\'m back! Thank you so much, I really appreciate the lovely comments - I\'m so glad you liked it!

 

Decadent Love by Pixichik118
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 35]

Summary: Harry and Ginny can't make it throught the war for peace, but is it all bad? Harry's pov

We brought each other to such great heights,
And all we left behind were silhouettes...

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 299 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/09/07 Updated: 02/15/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

O wow this was a-may-zing! Just amazing. The words you chose were just so beautiul- they touch your heart. And the last stanza just really was the icing on the cake. Sorry but that s the only way I can explain it. I thought it was great how different the stanzas are in the poem. It's like theirs a format but then again there is not. Did you follow a specific format when writing this? And I like it when poems rhyme and your poem does rhyme but you didn't overdue it with the ryhming. Great job!
Oh and btw, I've seen some of your banners on different authors' pages. They are just as amazing!

 

The Extra Mile by Hansolohpfrk
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: A sweet, short Lily/James poem.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 347 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/11/07 Updated: 02/15/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 07/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Extra Mile

Very sweet poem. I liked how some lines rhymed but not so many. The poem flowed nicely but was rough in this one part:

She hates my guts, and
She stated it clearly,
When I once asked her for a dance.


That midle line was pretty short and kind of wrecked the flow, but that's just my opinion.

Also, it'd be nice if you indicated when the POV changes with italics or something, because although it is quite obvious (from saying he to she) it won't make the reader *think* so much. I really liked the ending by the way, it was a nice way to end the poem. Excellent job. ^^

 

Ballad of A Boy by SnowyHedwig112
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Harry fights in the Final Battle. This ballad tells of what happened.



Written for the Ballad Challenge by SnowyHedwig112 of Gryffindor House.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 218 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/11/07 Updated: 02/15/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 05/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Ballad of A Boy

Woah- I did not expect him to die. That was like so unexpected.

This poem was good, and this is my fave part:
But, woe, Voldemort was too quick.
He flicked his evil wand,
and The-Boy-Who-Lived went flying--
his soul to the beyond.

Now this place is drenched with evil...
Cursed, some locals will say.
Marked with many a plain white cross
To signify the day.


Very sad, truly sad. Don't know why I like this part, maybe just because it is very sad and shows that failure can always happen, no matter how hard we try, and those who remember us may not remember our strengths, but will remember that we failed. Sad, I know.

The one part I must pick on is the last line of the first stanza.

and one made Harry choke.

I think you could've thought of a stronger ending to the stanza, but that's just me. Ignore that comment if you wish.


Anyways good job on this. You should write more poems.

^_^

Author's Response: THANK YOU! Teehee, well, it\'s a ballad, so you have to follow meter :(. Or whatever it\'s called...I\'m not too good at terms :(. ~Kathy

 

The Birth of Bravery by crazy_purple_hp_freak
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: Two brothers closely bound in blood,

They walked two different paths,

Two choices made (opposing goals) Ė

One bloody aftermath.








Of blood ties and bravery, and of breaking free.





Written by crazy_purple_hp_freak of Slytherin house, for the Ballad Challenge.



Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 705 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/12/07 Updated: 02/15/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Birth of Bravery

Wonderful poem. I like the length and your choice of words. And I liked how u used the (parantheses). It really added something to the poem. Good job. ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I\'m glad you liked the poem and the parentheses.

 
Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 04/13/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Birth of Bravery

Wonderful poem. I like the length and your choice of words. And I liked how u used the (parantheses). It really added something to the poem. Good job. ^_^

Author's Response: See below :p

 

Parts Left Behind by hpluver365
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: A poem about leaving a part behind when Apparating versus leaving a part behind when leaving a relationship.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 139 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/23/07 Updated: 02/25/07


Reviewer: Lalalalatina Signed
Date: 05/18/07 Title: Chapter 1: Parts Left Behind

Very cute poem? The second stanza was about whom I'm wondering...

I don't really have a fave part, the whole poem is great and the idea behind it is excellent. You should definetily write more poetry! ^_^

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I will definetely try to write more!

 
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