I'm never really here but I appreciate reviews, they make life a little brighter. I try to pop in from time to time, but I'm terribly sorry that I'm neglecting MNFF.
A shout out to any people still reading my wimsy little pieces. =D
BANNERS [[temporarily removed. I'll add links later]]
Fantastic banner by sayiansirius ^_^
Wonderful banner by Hatusu!
Incredible banner by social loner
Extroardinary banner by potter101
Awesome banner by Hansolohpfrk! ;)
Breathtaking banner by Celestial Melody!
Amazingly creepy banner by Disappearance_26
Beautiful banner by blacsilver_serpent (here on MNFF) or Wulfric Brian Dumbledore (on the boards)
Another outstanding banner by pixichik118!
Another brilliant banner by blacsilver_serpent (here on MNFF) or Wulfric Brian Dumbledore (on the boards)
another superb banner by social loner
Great poem, that last line was brilliant. One of my other favorite lines was
Once upon a time there was a puppet on a string. I think that it was an excellent start to the poem and clearly showed the angle at which you were going to describe Narcissa's character for the rest of the poem. My one bit of critique are that last two lines of the first stanza. They seem a bit short compared to the rest of the poem. Anyways, excellent job. =) Keep writing!
Author's Response: Yeah- this poem was more about the lines and meaning and stuff, and it was one of those that just kinda flowewd onto the computer? I didn\'t really check it for meter and accents and length and stuff. Thanks for reviewing- I love your stuff!
Very sad poem. You did a great job of describing his faults and of how he probably feels about them. The last two lines were brilliant. My bits of critique:
A family again,
These are the things I wish for you
when I whisper your name.
While most of the poem rhymes, this stanze does not, and it kind of wrecks the flow.
The memory of myself, so unspeakably vain...
This lne is a bit long and I think it could be separated into two.
Anyways, great job. Keep writing! ^_^
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I\'m especially grateful for your critique. It helps make me a better writer. Actually, for that stanze I meant for again to be pronounced like \"a gain\". (I know it doesn\'t totally rhyme with name but ti sounds a bit better that way). As for the other line, I\'m glad you pointed that out to me. I might have to go change that now. Thanks! fawkeshermione
That was brilliant. It was great the way you described ever lost character. My only bit of critique:
Pink-haired she loved him,
That line is a bit confusing. I think that the "pink-haired" is not a necessary part of that line, or if you want it to be in there perhaps you should include a comma or reword the line.
Anyways, fantastic poem. ^_^ Keep writing!
Author's Response: Yes, I had a bit of trouble with that line, but my reasoning eventually was that when she was depressed about his rejection, her hair went brown. But when she was happy, and by his side, her hair changed back to pink. Odd, yeah, but I had poet\'s block (if it exists lol) on that line. Glad you liked the rest, though! Thanks for the review and critique!!!
Very well done, you expressed her thoughts creatively such as in this line...
I’m writing us away,
The us that never was.
Your use of words made this poem so much more "poetic" and original. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I actually wrote the poem for a different reason, but it fit this topic so well I just tweaked a few words and sent it in...
Wow, this was quite powerful and very unique.
And no matter how much I want him to
he will never be waiting to catch me at the bottom.
And I will spend a lifetime
falling and breaking over, and over, and over.
I hate to think that Ginny was this unhappy, but I still think you did an excellent job of describing the pain of a lonely heart.
Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you! Reveiws make my day. I think that Ginny is unhappy but more than that I think she is trying really hard to convince herself not to love him. Thanks again for the reveiw!
I like how you incorporated the actual lyrics of the song in the poem. great work, keep writing!
Author's Response: thanks!
I cannot believe you wrote this in two hours... it's amazing. You do a great job of describing the emotions of the characters. The scene in which Harry played dead is probably one of my favorites in DH, and I greatly enjoyed reading it from a different point of view. Amazing job as always-- you are a very talented writer!
Author's Response: It\'s one of my favorite scenes as well; probably one of the ones I\'ve read the most. Thanks very much for the review; I\'m glad you liked the story!
But great- I like the shortness of the poem; you were able to send out the message in so little words. The last two lines are my favorite. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I was challenging myself to write a quality poem, with as little words as possible, and I think I did a good job. Thanks for the review. ~HermyRox12
Yey! This is the type of story I've been looking for-- one that fills in that space between the last chapter and the epilougue. I'm enjoying the story. ^^ Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to review. I\'m pleased you are enjoying the story! cj
Hi professor Katie!
I really like this piece, mostly because the ending left me thinking. The last stanza is very symbolic of Hermione''s angst, [that is what you said you were aiming for right?] I also really like the title, it got me interested. :]
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I was really trying to get some Hermione angst in there; glad that came out in the end. :)
Thanks again for the review!
Great poem, Dumbledore's death was very sad, as was the poem. A stanza that I especially liked was:
Even the very bravest amongst us–
Those who are noble, kind and wise–
Have pushed aside the ones they love, thus,
In pushing them down, letting evil rise.
[I really liked those last two lines!]
The only suggestion I can give is to divide up or reduce the size of some of your longer lines. I know how that can be hard sometimes, especially with poems that rhyme, but it will overall help the flow and appearance of the poem.
Great job and keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks! I love that part too!
That was an interesting event in the book to choose to write a poem of. I think you captured Hermione's bravery well. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I try to find moving events to write about. I really honor Hermione\'s bravery, and think that chapter was a life-changing chapter for her!
Excellent poem, I loved the repeating stanza. It really emphasized the main point of the poem. Great job. :]
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it!
Very sweet poem-- congradulations [hope my spelling's alright] on winning the challenge.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I enjoyed writing this!
Great summary and rhyming :]
Author's Response: Thank you!
aww.. so sad! I loved your choice of words, they really reach the heart. Great piece!
Author's Response: Aww, thanks!\r\n\r\nxoxo Michelle :)
Cute poem. ^^
Author's Response: Thanks!
This was a very interesting piece. The flaming red hair kept bringing to mind Lily. Is that whom you were referring to?
Anyways, I liked the structure and repetition of this poem. Great job!
Author's Response: Yes, it\'s a Snape/Lily poem :). Thanks for the review!
I think this is an excellend beginning to your story. It's a great introduction for the characters and who they are, or appear to be to others.
I think my favorite part of this was ther very last line. Poor Dacia, her loneliness is heartbreaking. Excellent work. ^_^
PS. Thank you for the fantastic banner!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it, and yes poor Dacia. And you're welcome. (: