It seems like time to update this. As you'll be able to see, i have been around for quite awhile, i tend to just read, and become absorbed in all of the spin-offs and tales. Although i have in the distant past attempted to write something, and i shall never fully rule out the possibility of repeating that.
I'm a Geordie, and usually proud of it, i love the world, have a very Romantic idea of myself, plan on avoiding the real working world for as long possible, and happen to periodically despise the fact that i am not, after all, Harry Potter.
wow nice cliffhanger! you do realise that if you don't update soon i will kill you? anyway great start keep going!
Author's Response: I promise, you don\'t have to kill me. There are two additional chapters posted. More are coming. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Author's Response: Yay! thanks heaps for the review!!!
At age fifteen, Regulus Black became sole heir to the largest fortune in Wizarding London. At sixteen, his abnormal intelligence won him entry into the most notorious cult of Dark wizards on earth. At seventeen he made a mistake – one that he would never be able to take back – and his entire world came crashing down.
Enter London, 1979. The story of a boy who managed to defy Voldemort at the height of his regime. But what price did he have to pay?
Wow. Such an intense fic! Really impressed.
I think that the way Regulus and Sirius's relationship deteriorated was very well handled, and the way Regulus's regret almost consumed him was very believable too.
Btw, did you see the closing quotation in A Darkling Plain(Phillip Reeve) by any chance? 'Tis an awesome book if you didn't.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love your choice of words (Regulus's regret almost consuming him), because that's exactly what I wanted to convey. I just wanted to accurately depict the mindset of somebody who is SO SORRY for what they've done in the past. No, that's not where I got the quote! I took it straight from the poem, actually. I'll look up that book, though, as any book that has that quote at the end of it is bound to be wonderful. Thanks for the review and the recommendation! :)
It was like a wizard tale. The clever Slytherin helps a hag who later repays the debt. Except that Rose Weasley wasn't a hag, and Scorpius didn't expect to call in the favour.
*Winner of the 2010 Next Generation QSQ award*
Argeles sur Mer! You've been there i guess? I went there 3 years ago! ;)
Anyway, absolutely love this story, which is strange for me to like a next-gen fic! Most of all though, i like how you haven't made Rose, Lily et al clones of their parents which is what most fanfic writers seem to do! Keep up the good work! ;)
*hums It's a Small World* Wow, what a coincidence! No, I've never been there, just googled best beaches in Europe and picked the one that sounded like wizards would like it! :D
Thank you for liking Rose and Scorpius! Children do share traits with parents, but you're right, they aren't clones and shouldn't be characterized that way. Scorpius has been raised in a very different time and way than Draco was.
Firstly i should say that i've just re-read the whole of your Girl Who Lived stuff. And i don't know whether i reviewed when i first read it (probably 2-3 years ago.?) but i absolutely love it. It is probably te best bit of fanfiction i've ever read (possibly because you started it early enough to not have to do all the horcrux stuff which i reckon is pretty badly done in most fanfics) . I just love how well you integrated Ellie into the story, DEFINITELY the best OC i've ever read, and i also think your style is very similar to JKRs.
On to this Snapshots then:
It's great! Really is. I think i just about got to grips with the different children, and found the whole thing quite a charming little piece. Large families are obviously popular in your wizarding world!
It was a pleasure to read,
Perhaps contrarily to some of the other reviews, i reckon Lee Jordan stole the show. You give him a really authentic radio voice which seems a pretty natural progression from his canon Quidditch commentating and Potterwatch!
Otherwise, my only bugbear was that i didn't really see why Mcgonagall (i've just had an absolute brainfade on spelling that name, forgive me if i've committed such a sin!) was ill, didn't seem to add anything other than giving us the presence of a pretty inconsequential character we've never really met. And i think there'd have been interesting places to go with her having chastised Lee's commentary and stuff like that.
Did really enjoy it though!
Author's Response: Thank you. Yeah I like Lee as well. Hmm, McGonagall. Okay the point about her is that the story was going to continue and she would have turned up for a later round, but I doubt I'll finish this now. Also. JKR said that McGonagall wasn't Headmistress at the time of the epilogue, but was Headmistress when she wrote Beedle the Bard. This was going to be her shift to retirement. Thanks for reviewing. ~Carole~
As always you've had me entranced start to finish, and most of all i'm absolutely chuffed that i guessed the killer was Regulus way back, something like chapter 6!
Content-wise, i think you said in an A/N at somepoint that Lily needed 'sass' and you were exactly right, i think i've liked your Lily much more than some others, a very three dimensional character. I really thought that you handled the whole Sirius/Regulus relationship very well too, especially the final bit with Sirius refusing to have Regulus given up, it really did leave me with feelings of that it clearly couldn't be a total resolution.
As for your other characters, Marlene was definitely interesting, but perhaps we didn't seem to get to know Lenore enough, i don't know, just seemed a pretty 'painless' death...
The James/Lily stuff was perfect and believable though, while the epilogue with Harry and Cassie was a lovely touch.
Yeah, i loved it though.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it--and I'm impressed that you guessed it was Regulus so early! Good job! :)
In times of peace, tales of strife and angst tend to fall out of favor with the masses, but stories of happy endings and the concept of everything turning out all right don’t often make for good reading. There are rare occasions, though, when both can be met with equal accord and form a bond in the written word.
The first sentence in the Charles Dickens classic, A Tale of Two Cities, simply states that ‘It was the best of times; it was the worst of times.’ An anonymous writer sent in a letter to Roxanne Weasley’s weekly featurette in the Daily Prophet, telling the story of his father’s murder and his journey to recovery, which seemed to be the incarnation of that very line. Sometimes, it takes a loss for one to truly appreciate what one has in life and even in death.
Think this is just lovely and elliptical. And i am of course intensely curious about who the wife and the Uncle are! I think, for some reason the Uncle sounded very Harry-ish, in his anti-Malfoyism, but that wouldn't work as well as if it were a Weasley (i think i'd immediately think Ron or George). Certainly got me thinking anyway.
The letter form did seem to capture the poignancy of loss very very well though, Although i think perhaps strangely, i think the saddest bit was when 'he' mentioned the 'War fought before i was born'. Caught me 'right there' twofold really, there's the fact that time has really, really moved on and the wizarding world we know has grown past us, without us(!) but also it reminds me of our muggle wars, and that soon we'll have no living reminders of our past.
B'yeah, it's some achievement to bring those ideas to mind so, well done.
Wow, I'm glad you liked this story so much! What I wanted was for Scorpius's loss to be conveyed, but I also wanted it to be a commentary about how, while conflicts of the past are dead and gone, it still followed his father his whole life. It was his hope that, in writing anonymously, Draco could be remembered in death by people who had no idea who he was, rather than go unhonoured as he had been in life. It's human nature to not feel as bad about someone's death because we know and don't like them, yet we find it in ourselves to stop in our tracks when a celebrity dies.
And as for the wife, I left it intentionally vague, since everyone tends to ship him with a Weasley/Potter, so without a specific one mentioned, it can be whichever you want. However, that being said, I really meant it to be Rose. :)
Thanks for the review, and if you got this far with my ramble, good for you.
Very cute. You nail emotion pretty well, in all of your stories.
A slight bugbear though, i think sometimes, you use a slightly more verbose term, when something clearer would do, and would obscure your meaning less, if you get where i'm coming from. As an example, i think you use 'conglomerate' near the end of this, and it seems as though it's perhaps overdoing it... Perhaps. (I speak as someone who's been told pretty much this by various people in regard to stuff i've written....!)
B'yeah, that's a very minor point i wanted to bring up. What i do love about your stuff is, it really revels in the idea that, now the canon's finished, it's our world to play wth. Great stuff.
Thanks for the review.
I should follow my own advice and eschew ostentatious sesquipedalian circumlocution. :-) Actually, that is completely the wrong word there. I’m pretty certain I intended to type congregate. It seems that coming back to a story over a year later allows me to spot my errors. I have fixed it and I will look at the entire story when I get the time.
Not only is it our world to play with, but JKR has told us (in quite some detail) where it’s headed. What could be better than trying to follow a plot outline by JKR? -N-
You have really, truly encapsulated the poignancy of it all. I absolutely adore the monologue-stream of consciousness stuff. And it all fits, it's just the filling in of gaps, and you make it work. You're a wonderful writer.
Thanks for the review.
I had a lot of fun with these stories. Trying twenty five different points of view was interesting, as was experimenting with styles. I think some worked better than others and some (like Die Dumb) were a struggle to write. -N-
Nicely done, Draco's clearly being very chivalrous in his old age. ;) I like how you've used Narcissa too. Otherwise, i'd be interested to know the reasoning for Hermione not marrying Ron and living happily ever after. Otherwise i think Dolohov was a good choice for a new dark power, although he probably would have been pretty damn old, not that it matters.
Oh yeah, you've got a guy called Rowel or similar, do you mean Rowle (Thorfin, the big blonde death eater)?
B'yeah, have enjoyed this so far and i look forward to the next chapter! :)
Author's Response: Ha. Old age! I liked including Narcissa because she obviously had a lot of love for her precious son, enough to lie to Voldemort when it most mattered to him. I honestly randomly chose Dolohov. My friend was rereading the books and I asked which Death Eater was still supposedly alive by the end of it and she said him. I think he was probably in his 50's by this time. Not too old! And yeah, I got the spelling wrong on Rowle. Have to go back and change that. Oops :) Thanks for reviewing!
Lily Evans is pretty, intelligent, vivacious… and accused of murder. James Potter is privileged, arrogant, and conceited… and her best chance at avoiding Azkaban. If only he wasn’t convinced of her guilt.
With a war looming in the background and evil slowly seeping into the wizarding world, seven years of secrets unravel, and two very different people find themselves caught up in a battle against privilege, intolerance, and greed.
But even in the darkness, and even in the despair, there is still friendship, and love, and hope.
Well! I'm really enjoying this so far, it's perhaps one of the most truly original fics i've read in a long time, and i really like some of the little tics your characters have, particularly the Mckinnons.
And i do like that you killed Lucius Malfoy off too.
I await the next chapter with baited breath!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked the little oddities of my characters. I like writing about characters we don't know anything about (like the McKinnons) so that I can add such details.
Have to say i'm overly impressed with the north-east stuff! Fellow geordie here y'see.
I am getting quite annoyed with this woman though, she has a go at 'Scary Mary', think she's a bit of a nosy one herself! Although i guess you'd be a bit bored out in the hills maybe?
Good going though. :)
Thanks for the review.
I have plans for Harry to visit “the Toon” (or at least Heaton, and Stowell Street)
Jacqui is nosey, true. But she’s not as judgemental as Mary. If she wasn’t at least a little bit nosey I’d lose my narrator!-N-
Well, despite not having seen either film, i found this wonderfully funny. Draco was undeniably far too likable! Really enjoyed the interplay between Dean and Draco though, it really is interesting to speculate on how all the old Hogwarts alliances would manifest themselves in adult life.
And the Greengrasses had the whole tragic fame thing down to a t in this!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Yes, I agree Draco was too likeable, but I think he's probably very different in that type of setting than when he's with the dratted Potter. Hmm, I wonder if anyone bar myself and Lori have seen the film ... ~Carole~
I have to say i do rather like Penelope here, there's something very admirable going on. The mirror was a beautiful little touch too. As for Charlie, he's just 'cool', still, the idea of him trying to climb into the dragon pen on his first day was great.
It's becoming a crime to miss any of your stories these days!
Author's Response: I rather like Penelope, too. I wasn't sure I would, but then I made her less prim than I first imagined. Thank you so much for the review and the praise. ~Carole~
I'd absolutely love to hear each of these interviews, not sure whether it's just because it's more authentic-sounding HP stuff or what...
Just love the idea really, always like Lee Jordan. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I know the interviews would be interesting, but this isn't about Fame and Fortune-- it's about Lee. I like him too.
Reading this was a rather lovely experience. The different scenes work to create this impressionistic sense of life being really quite difficult for Harry perfectly. Very poignant, at times painful!
Tense-wise, when I started to read I was sceptical, but as it progresses i felt that it was stylistically on the nail.
Wonderful writing. x