My favourite characters are Remus and Teddy Lupin, and of course I have a soft spot for Tonks and Sirius. I love reading AU stories, and stories where the books are rewritten from another characters point of view, including missing scenes. I you know of any stories I might enjoy, please drop me a line!
please update this soon!
I really really like this story. it's very well constructed and the writing is fantastic! the only minor criticism i might have is that some paragraphs in earlier chapters were a little heavy, but this is also possibly due to my lack of intellect and attention span! keep up the good work and i can't wait to read the next chapter!
oh this is just a wonderful story! i love it! imaginative, well thought out, brilliant writing...its amazing! keep going! i cant wait to find out what's going to happen next.
I just have to tell you that this story has just penetrated my mind, my consciousness.... i keep thinking and thinking about it! you've really done something very original here and i'm on tenterhooks to see where this is going to go; what's going to happen now harry and remus are the same age? how can remus and tonks ever have a life now? i think (my theory) that they are going to experience life in the future, but be unable (mentally) to stay, and they realise that it was worth them dying for everyone else to live....so they go back.
but yes, well done, and please keep updating!
Nice original idea and generally well written. However, a couple of Briticisms for you:
Cell phone = mobile phone.
July 15 = 15th July. Just the way we say things! Also, I would like to discourage you from using 'totally' in front of an adjective; too American for my tastes.
Keep going! I shall look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! I totally knew about the date thing *smacks head* *goes to change it* Ope, and there I go with the "totally..." I guess that is pretty American. And I knew about the "mobile phone..." it just never occurred to me to do that. Thank you thank you thank you for the constructive criticism!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
TOM RIDDLE â€“ THE SELF-STYLED LORD VOLDEMORT
Editors Note: At the request of the Ministry for Magic this Official Statement issued by the Office of the Minister is produced full and unedited.
OFFICIAL MINISTRY STATEMENT
This official statement has been compiled with the assistance and co-operation of Mr Harry Potter.
â€śLord Voldemortâ€ť was, in fact a man named Tom M. Riddle, son of a witch, Merope Gaunt and a Muggle, Tom Riddle Senior. The Ministry has decided that in all future official publications Riddle will be referred to by his given name.
There has already been much speculation and wild rumour regarding the events at Hogwarts School. The Ministry can confirm that Tom M. Riddle was killed at dawn on the morning of Saturday, 2 May. Riddle was disarmed by Harry Potter while in the act of firing a killing curse at Mr Potter. The curse killed Riddle rather than its intended target.
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WHERE IS HARRY POTTER?
Despite the Official Ministry Statement (published above) we are no closer to receiving an answer to the question on the lips of every witch and wizard in the country. Where is Harry Potter?
It appears that Mr Potter left Hogwarts School early yesterday morning, apparently in the company of his close associates Hermione Granger and Ronald Weasley. An attractive young Ministry clerk, who did not wish to be named, told The Prophet â€śHeâ€™s at the Ministry, having an important meeting with the Minister. My friends and I saw him. He asked us out to the pub, but we had to turn him down.â€ť This statement is at odds with a report from the Portkey Office that Mr Potter has fled the country, travelling to Australia with his companions.
Continued on page 2The days after the battle were days of grief and mourning. Grave Days.
First off I want to tell you how much I am enjoying this story, especially the first few chapters, where the level of detail was wonderful. I also felt earlier chapters were very plausible and that you avoided lots of the cliches commonly found in less well written fics. However I have to agree with a previous reviewer who has issues with Harry and Ginny's relationship. It seems completely OTT to me. Sometimes it is the smaller and simpler moments that really make something romantic and special. The past few chapters have more of a rushed feel to them; I'd rather you take your time and produce something amazing, than rush through just give us what we want: another chapter. And my final piece of con crit ... when you start a new paragraph with the same person continuing to speak, you don't end the previous paragraph with a speech mark. For example, in this chapter:
‘You’re doing a good job,’ Harry told Justin as he followed Ginny, ‘I’m sure that you won’t have trouble with any of the others.’
‘And Justin,’ he added, ‘Colin knew what...
Harry is speaking in both paragraphs, so there should be no speech mark after 'others'.
Hope you find this constructive. Keep going, you're doing a really good job with this, and I love it!
Thanks for the review. I think I’ve figured out how to break my reply into paragraphs, apologies if I haven’t.
I’m probably over-analysing your comments, but your remark that you “felt earlier chapters were very plausible” makes me wonder where you think that I started to go wrong. Chapter 4, Chapter 6, later?
As for the Harry/Ginny relationship, Harry is rapidly approaching his eighteenth birthday and Ginny is rapidly approaching her seventeenth. The only two canon kisses took place when Ginny was fifteen (admittedly, the DH kiss was a matter of weeks before her birthday. As I’ve said, Ginny, not Harry has instigated the only public kisses. After nine months apart I’m trying to show her being a little more possessive of him than she was.
Rushed… During the gap between the acceptance of Chapter 1 and Chapter 2 I continued writing and rewriting. I had ten chapters beta’ed when chapter 2 was finally approved and I suspect that I have panicked at the rate of acceptances. From your comments it seems that I have pushed the last couple of chapters through to my beta’s earlier than I should. I will try to slow down.
I was completely unaware of the speech mark thing. But making punctuation errors is something I’m very good at. Thank the Forum for my beta readers.