Wow, Sunray. This oneshot was very beautifully written. The rhetoric is haunting and really pulls out intense emotions. Awesome work; you should be very proud.
Author's Response: Thanks hun!...um...Prof Fresca :D I'm glad you liked how I wrote it. Now can you see why the messed up version I posted earlier in class was a total train wreck when compared to what it was supposed to be?
At age fifteen, Regulus Black became sole heir to the largest fortune in Wizarding London. At sixteen, his abnormal intelligence won him entry into the most notorious cult of Dark wizards on earth. At seventeen he made a mistake – one that he would never be able to take back – and his entire world came crashing down.
Enter London, 1979. The story of a boy who managed to defy Voldemort at the height of his regime. But what price did he have to pay?
Doesn't suck. :P
LOL though seriously. When did I say that? Must have been one of those weird comments at 4 AM, eh?
Congratulations on a wonderful first chapter. You already know that I love it and I cannot wait to see what all your other fans have to say!
Author's Response: LOL I'm not sure if it was 4AM, but I said something like, "Uhm the last sentence thingy, does that suck or no?" and you answered "Doesn't suck." Which was pretty hilarious, actually, and typical(coming from you, it was a compliment). :D You should be proud, Fresca; you put a lot of work into this story and now it is here for everyone to read. Thanks to you, they won't be pointing out any mistakes! If they do we can just kill them. :D
A set of haiku telling of Molly Weasley's own war against Voldemort.
**Implied character death
The second to last haiku was my favorite. Nice job!
My muse does great work, doesn't she? :P
Author's Response: She really does. One afternoon with her and suddenly I'm writing like you!
Well hello there, dear Melissa!
I love the narrative style of this story - the use of the parentheses was a really nice touch, a sort of back story that filled the reader in on the post-Hogwarts that you envision. I like that you chose to talk about minor characters, ones that Susan would be more likely to mention, and that the trio wasn't mentioned at all.
I also really liked the description of Susan as a little girl, entering Hogwarts. For some reason, I'm rather drawn to white ribbons. (:
i have to go to class now so I'll stop this review here...*brains*