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Mary, Bloody Mary by Chaser47
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 8]

Summary: Embark on a dual tale, the one of both Mary Worth and Romilda Vane. But, reader, beware, this story is a frighening one, one that proves that beauty can't get you all that you want, and that stories sometimes become all too real.

Written orginally for the amazing Eliza and the SPEW T/T fic exchange.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Suicide

Word count: 3679 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/06 Updated: 11/02/06


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 06/10/07 Title: Chapter 1: One-Shot

This piece was exceptionally written. Your description made the words leap of the page and I was sucked into this story almost immediately. I think my favorite part was your repeated use of "Mary, Bloody Mary". To that end, I particularly liked that throughout the piece, you used ellipses following that phrase and at the very end, you ended it with a period. Very nice!

I'll admit it: I was frightened by some of the description in your story. It was so raw and so real and utterly perfect, although it was also a perfectly horrible sight that you had to describe. You are truly a master, and I think that your strength in this area is what makes the piece so dark.

I also want to say that you did an excellent job with Romilda Vane as the main character. Her few words were perfectly in character, and you managed to maintain that character despite writing something so drastically different from JKR. Very well done!

I enjoyed reading this immensely.

-Fresca

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your brilliant review! I\'m glad you enjoyed the story so much. :]

 

Love Leads to Grief by Ginny Potter101
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Lucius Malfoy has been a Death Eater for many years. He has been trained not to show his emotions. Yet, when his wife and son are brutally murdered by Lord Voldemort, Lucius' barrier breaks down. This is the touching story of Lucius Malfoy's love for his family. Written Pre-DH. One Shot. Lucius/Narcissa



(Part of Lucius' monologue is directed at Draco)



SUICIDE WARNING




Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 1888 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/06 Updated: 01/10/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 08/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: A New Day

Wow nice. Really sad and tragic.

Author's Response: I tried to make the end dramatic, to show Lucius as a broken man, but then reunite him with the person he loved most. Glad you liked it!

 

Summary: While sleeping after a long day's work for the Order, Remus Lupin's dreams take him back to his sixth year as he remembers his good friends, the creation of the mysterious Marauder's Map, and his growing crush on Lily Evans. It's one interesting adventure after another, so climb aboard the Hogwarts Express and view the magical world through the eyes of the werewolf.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 8450 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/28/06 Updated: 12/18/06


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 04/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chasing Memories

Well then! Since you left me such a lovely review for my one-shot, I thought I’d return the favor for you!

Your attention to detail is incredible. Your descriptions of the werewolves at the beginning were admirable, for you painted the picture vividly in my mind. I felt like I was standing there, watching them sleep. Oh, it was interesting! I could hear them too…maybe I’m just weird. Your use of the present tense is probably what was the most intriguing. It made it feel like the reader was there because it was happening as I read it. A very nice style of writing that you pulled off beautifully! Your writing sucked me right in immediately. A great way to start the story!

I actually think that your description at the beginning is the best part of your story. Although you write dialogue well, you write description better. I think, though, that your characterizations of Lupin’s parents were very believable and they felt canon to me. I could imagine them being overprotective of their son – at first it had me shocked, but then I accepted it to be true.

My nitpick about the section with the parents was that you alternated between “Mr. Lupin” and “Ralph” and “Mrs. Lupin” and “Susan” while you wrote the prose. Let me explain:

“I know, darling, I know,” Susan said with a sad laugh. “I will just miss my boy so much!” As she had said this, Mrs. Lupin pulled a handkerchief out from behind her back.

You use both “Susan” and “Mrs. Lupin” to describe Lupin’s mother. While the meaning is clear and this is not necessarily wrong, it is better to pick one or the other for prose. In dialogue, she could be addressed as either “Susan” or “Mrs. Lupin” and both would be acceptable. It makes for cleaner writing to use only one in prose.

You do the same for the father, but I think you have the idea. You only did it once for the mother and once for the father, which was the interesting part for me. Perhaps you just made a mistake?

The only other thing I have to point out is this:

alright

As my beta felt compelled to tell me, you should be “AK’ed” for that. (I think the curse, but perhaps the gun? I wasn’t really sure…) Anyway, the point is that “alright”, although used often, is actually not a word. “All right” is the way to go!

Sorry to turn into a beta at the end there.  I really did enjoy reading this story, and I think that you are a very strong writer – your description at the beginning proves that to me. I am looking forward to your next chapter, and lucky for me, it is right there! I am off to read it now!

 

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Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 03/30/07 Title: None

Hey you!

Great chapter! I just wanted to say hi and let you know you're doing a great job. Hope to see the next one up soon and another one in my inbox. :)

Author's Response: Hey! I love the review! It\'s only great thanks to you for beta-ing it so thanks so much! My laptop is broken so I use a friends computer when I have the opportunity until it is fixed. But anyways, I just have to make a few changes and I\'ll send it back to you! Thanks for the lovely review! ~LMPH3

 

A Dying Flame by bluerosemarcella
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Post HBP. Spoilers. Oneshot. Draco remains in captivity as the war surges forth. He explores his thoughts and contemplates how he became so lost, much like his father. He faces a choice, but his dying soul has become apathetic.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Self Injury

Word count: 4476 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/08/07 Updated: 01/11/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 06/10/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Dying Flame

Wow. That was ever so dark. The mood that you set from the first words on the page continued throughout the entire piece. I really felt the lyrics used as the beginning were an asset to your moving piece.

The exploration that you conducted into Draco's mind was brilliant. I felt like I could connect to him, and that I could really understand his pain. Your analysis really helped to complete the picture and offered an argument to justify all of Draco's actions. It is perhaps the discovery of that truth, or what really goes on in Draco's mind, that is the tragedy of the story.

The setting you set, the character you develop, all of it ties back to the dark/angst theme that you established right from the beginning with those lyrics. Well done and wonderful work!

 

Fallen by StaceyLC
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 29]

Summary: The deathly hallows of a man’s mind are a dark and dangerous place; a place which one can be easily lost if they walk the line between light and dark too carelessly. It’s easy to fall in, to lose yourself. You may think you’ve not strayed too deeply into that gaping maw of death and despair until you look back up from the hole and can no longer see the light. And then… then it is too late. You will be truly gone.









First place winner of the The New Years Challenge: The Deathly Hallows

Nominated for "Best Dark/Angst" story in the Quick Silver Quills!
!

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death, Suicide

Word count: 2428 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/19/07 Updated: 02/20/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 06/10/07 Title: Chapter 1: Fallen

Look at what can happen just by browsing around the Badger Bulletin! I found your interview about this piece and thought I’d take a look at it. I am so glad I did.

I adore how you used the quote at the beginning as the underlying theme for your entire piece. The quote itself was beautiful and so angst and dark and the fact that you used it as the backdrop for the piece helped hold the mood and keep the feeling alive.

I really enjoyed how you explored the darkness of the mind. You were right: your metaphor of the deathly hallows made your piece truly original. That was one of my favorite aspects. The sinister feeling of the piece was further exemplified by the fact that Harry narrated through the entire ordeal. The change of character in our favorite hero was actually quite frightening.

Definitely one of my favorite dark/angst pieces, and truly beautiful, in a dark way. It’ll be in my favorites!

-Fresca


Author's Response: Thank you very much!! :)

 

A Choice by harry_kissed_ginny
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 13]

Summary: Hermione is having a fine and healthy relationship with Draco Malfoy. That is, until someone else kisses Hermione, and her entire world is turned upside-down.





I am harry_kissed_ginny, entering a late submission to the February One-Shot Challenge Submisson for the Hufflepuff House.





Rating is due to language towards the end.





Warning is for kissing only.

Categories: Various Pairings Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Sexual Situations

Word count: 3704 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
02/27/07 Updated: 02/28/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 03/29/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Choice

Your writing at the beginning of the story was stronger than your writing as the story progressed. The rest of it wasn't bad at all, but it just wasn't the same quality as it was at the beginning. Your beginning writing was awesome. You really captured Hermione's thoughts perfectly and you gave a lot of wonderful description.

As the story progressed, I think the biggest weakness was just that it moved too quickly. Hermione seemed to be flitting between Draco and Ron and the speed with which she made her decisions was not very Hermione-like, from my perspective. I realize their may have been constraints on the writing that made you write the scenes so quickly, but maybe here would have been a way to make it seem less rushed? I don't know.

I do love the romance part of the story, however. I think that Ron's actions to get Hermione were really sweet and I am happy she ended up with him in the end. I must say, at the beginning, I thought she was choosing between Harry and Draco, instead of Ron and Draco, but I like that she ended up with Ron. Good job at keeping it ambiguous! It shocked me when I found out later on in the work.

Great job at writing romance. You seem to have an eye for it that I don't. :)

-Colores, of the Hufflepuff Review Circle

Author's Response: Awww thank you! Thanks for the wildly amazing critique. The reason for the strength of the writing was because some of it was after being rejected a few times, and I did submit this the night before the deadline. --HKG

 

Mercy is Not Apparent by Ron x Hermione
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 11]

Summary: “I can make things move without touching them, I can make animals do what I want them to do, without training them. I can make bad things happen to people who annoy me. I can make them hurt if I want to.” Tom Riddle / Half-Blood Prince

Albus Dumbledore and Harry Potter have just discovered that a cave could contain one of the missing Horcruxes of Voldemort. They have ventured quietly out of Hogwarts to extend their search.

But why is Dumbledore moaning and screaming while he is drinking a certain green potion in the cave where the Horcrux is?

This is what happens when Albus Dumbledore has to relive someone’s worst memory: In a cave with Harry Potter, and whatever horrid thing Voldemort has come up with. This is what Dumbledore saw while drinking the potion.

This was originally written for the March Challenge - Prompt Number Six. I am Ron x Hermione, of Hufflepuff.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mental Disorders, Violence

Word count: 5130 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/19/07 Updated: 03/21/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 03/29/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Cave

Wow that was really good! I really liked how you incorporated a scene that Jo talked about, but never really described in great detail. It was a very creative thing for Dumbledore to witness. Awesome writing!

Author's Response: *giggles* Aw . . . thanks so much! I\'m so glad that you liked it. ~Lindsey :)

 

What is One Picture Worth? by lucilla_pauie
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: A honeymoon gone awry...A wedding portrait gone blotchy...

The honeymoon going awry led to the portrait going blotchy and the portrait going blotchy could lead to the honeymoon going very awry!

What's a witch to do except perhaps travel time, to save the portrait and the honeymoon?

Hermione meets the master of Time-turners, however, and gets much much more than she bargained for...

This is LucillaJoanna of Hufflepuff, traversing A Shift In Time in the Spring Challenges...

...and won Second Place!



Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 21946 Chapters: 6 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/27/07 Updated: 05/22/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 03/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Temper and Time

Ooh I'm really intrigued by this story! I love how you wrote Rashleigh and I think it was very clever of you to make him the master of the Time-Turners. Very, very intersting. I really like your writing style and the writing itself was very crisp and clean. Good work!

Author's Response: thank you, colores! first review! what you said means a lot! i hope i deliver to the end! and i wish you luck with your own challenge submissions! Go, badgers! ^_^

 
Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 05/20/07 Title: Chapter 5: Wasted time...

Oh I hope your final chapter gets validated soon! This story is excellent. Great work! I wish you tons of luck in the challenge! Go Hufflepuff!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot, fellow badger! *sniffles* You, too! Yeah, Go Hufflepuff! ^-^

 

Sobs of a Child by tc015
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: Second Place in March One-Shot Challenge.

What did he see in the cave that night? What made Dumbledore so frightened. A look at what Dumbledore saw that fateful night?

“Professor, can you hear me?” he says loudly, looking at you.

Who is he talking to? Is he talking to you? He can’t be. You aren’t a professor. Grown-ups are professors. Professors are wise; they would know how to stop the men. You don’t know how to stop them, so you can’t a professor.


Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Abuse, Character Death, Non-Consensual Sex, Sexual Situations, Violence

Word count: 2607 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
03/28/07 Updated: 03/29/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 03/29/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

*sobs* Wow, your writing was so powerful! Your use of second person to portray this story was very effective. The only thing that struck me as odd was that Dumbledore referred to his mother as "mommy." While it really got to me as the reader because it made Dumbledore seem so young and innocent, it also did not seem to be truly "Dumbledore-like" But the message it portrayed was powerful and well done. Good job and good luck!

Author's Response: Thank! I imagine that Dumbledore wasn\'t always the great wizard he was before he died. He was only nine, so there is a lot of time for him to grow. I imagine that this was the beginning of the Dumbledore we see today.

 

Coping by social loner
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: Three years after Voldemort’s final defeat, Hermione finally realizes that it’s time to move on with her life, even though it means going back to her pain stricken past. Knowing she can’t do it alone, she calls on Harry for support. However, Harry has his own demons that are keeping his life from progressing as well.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3174 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/28/07 Updated: 07/03/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 09/01/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Hey Olivia,

I had a weird sense of deja vu when I read this story. So then I went back up and realized BloodRayne had beta'd it, which means that I had already read it because I was her mentoree at the time! LOL But...

It's a great story. I remember thinking that the first time I read it, and now here we are the second time and I still stand by what I said before. I just loved the characterization and it's just a really cute, nicely written oneshot. Great work, and thanks for the banners!

 

Summary: Anyone heard those rumours about a Harry Potter musical?



It better be just like this.



No, but seriously, it's a spoof of the songs from Disney channel's infamous "High School Musical," telling the tale of JK Rowling's infamous "Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets." (I was dared; I took the challenge.)



You will never see the Basilisk the same way again.



P.S. You may also want to check out my Beatles and Phantom of the Opera spoofs. Just click on my username and it'll take you to my delightfully chaotic author's page.
Twice nominated for Best Poem in the Quicksilver Quills Awards!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3145 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/28/07 Updated: 08/29/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 09/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 and Only

OMS this was the most amazing parody of HSM I've ever read. Congratulations on writing such a hilarious story! I absolutely adore it!

Author's Response: Oh, thanks, Colores! Incidentally, have you read other parodies of HSM? I\'d love to read them!

 

Keep Holding On by BeautifulDreamer07
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: On a dark Halloween night many years ago, a young mother died shielding her infant son from certain death at the hand of the Dark Lord. Her love and the protection of her sacrifice turned the Killing Curse meant for her son back on the Dark Lord who cast it. The Dark Lord was ripped from his body and left formless, weak, and pathetic.

Many years later, the Dark Lord regained his body and set out to destroy the Boy-Who-Lived. But in the final battle of good vs. evil, will the love of his mother's sacrifice be able to save Harry Potter again?

AN: Avril Lavigne owns the lyrics to Keep Holding On

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 1915 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/31/07 Updated: 09/04/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 09/04/07 Title: Chapter 1: Keep Holding On

GAH! Hallie! I love it! I adore the parallel between Harry and his mother, and the quote at the end is really, really fitting. You did an excellent job with this story, and your use of the lyrics was really effective. Some people just have song lyrics in songfics for the heck of it, but yours actually served a purpose, and helped to move the story forward. They really added to the story. *loves*

 

The Angels Come to Visit Us by social loner
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 14]

Summary: “Yes. I’ll just ask an angel to watch over me,” Maura replied with steady certainty, like it were the most logical thing in the world.

Oliver laughed again, readjusting Maura on one knee so that he could face her. “Oh, I see. And where are you going to find this angel?”

Maura shook her head. “Everyone has an angel, silly. I already know mine. They just don’t show up unless you really need them.”





When Oliver Wood's daughter once again begs to learn how to fly, she makes a promise that brings Oliver's past memories back to life, as well as his belief in Angels.


Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1470 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/05/07 Updated: 11/05/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 12/17/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Angels Come to Visit Us

Olivia!!! *huggles* This story was so beautifully written and the characterization of Oliver was perfect. I also enjoyed the way you developed Maura throughout the story. At the end of this admittedly brief oneshot, I felt as though she could have been canon. Excellent work, I loved it!

 

Summary: Harry finally decides to go and fight Voldemort for the last time. He is successful in doing so, but is left weaker than ever. Harry is then conveyed to St. Mungo's where he has been ever since. He now writes a letter to his newly married and pregnant wife Ginny Potter explaining his love for her and the baby, but most importantly how he will be watching over her.



How will thise leave Ginny?

What about the baby?

Ron? Hermione?

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1316 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/20/07 Updated: 11/20/07


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 11/23/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh my god. This fic was truly heartbreaking. I just read it to get a feel for the banner, but oh my god this is really sad. My favorite line, the one I feel best sums up this story: "Please remember me more than “The Boy Who Lived”, for I shall not live." Great writing there! *sniff* You have me in tears and that's saying a lot. Great work.


Author's Response: Wow, I must be really silly because guess what? I\'m crying now too. Thank you so much, I really appreciate it and I couldnt agree more with you. Wow, just wow. :) You have just made my day and I couldnt be happier. Great Review. -- Sophia

 

Summary: Sometimes it is not enough to see with the eyes alone. Aurelia, scarred from birth by a curse is tired of being judged by her face alone. But can she let go of her fears enough to learn to love and trust another?

A Fairytale written for the May One shot challenge by coppercurls of Hufflepuff.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe

Word count: 7326 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
05/30/08 Updated: 05/31/08


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 06/07/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, Kristin! That was such a beautiful story. I absolutely love it. The fairytale was so creative and it had a great message. Congratulations on an excellent piece of writing!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Fresca. I\'m really glad you liked it. Fairy tales are my favorite so it is always great to hear. Thanks again!

 

Requiem for Tom Riddle by leahsm2
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary:

Tom Riddle has learned the truth about his past. He doesn't like it. He's about to change it.

I am leahsm2 of Slytherin and this is my entry for the Horcrux Portion of the 2008 Summer Challenge.

I came in second in a two horse race, but both horses were strong, in my opinion, so I am thrilled!

This is also my Final for Colores' Newt Level Advanced Rhetoric and Style Class for Summer Term, 2008.



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1667 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
06/22/08 Updated: 06/29/08


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 08/22/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Excellent story, Leah. A very enjoyable read. I could definitely see the rhetorical devices being used to their full advantages. You should be proud!

 

As One Door Closes... by Cwiddy
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Lily Evans just finished her last exam at Hogwarts and contemplates her life. Meanwhile, James Potter is contemplating his own life, with her.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1269 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/13/08 Updated: 07/22/08


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 08/22/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, what a sweet and wonderfully written story, Cwiddy. Great work, as always. I loved it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! :) Had a lot of fun writing this!

 

A New Beginning by harry4lif
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: Its the day of Lily's wedding, and she hopes that she will finally get to talk to her sister. Things happen, and tears are spilled. Will Lily tell her husband the truth?

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1192 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/24/08 Updated: 07/24/08


Reviewer: Colores Signed
Date: 08/22/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

A very nice story, Alyssa. You should be proud of your work this term. You did a great job with the rhetorical devices in this story!

Author's Response: Thanks, Fresca. It means alot to here that from you. I promise to try to use the helpful things you taught us in other stories! ~Alyssa

 
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