Just your average HP fan, with a special interest in the H/G relationship.
I've just submitted my first fan fic, He Didn't Stand A Chance. Please read and review!
July 19: For anyone who is interested in reading the other two chapters of He Didn't Stand A Chance, they can be found on the SIYE web site, where it was nominated for Best Romance and Best Overall. The story can be located either through the title or my pen name, The Seeker. A second story, a one-shot called A Trunk, Some Magic, and a Girl, also can be found there. Two guesses who the girl is! If you do visit, please leave a review. Thanks!
What an incredible start! I'm sitting here with my stomach roiling. Harry's alive and he's going to sentence Ginny and his kids' lives to Dick!!!
I normally don't review the early chapters in stories that are well along. But your concept is so exceptional it warrants a Bravo.
I'm really looking forward to reading the next chapters!
-- The Seeker
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you liked the first chapter alone so much!
OMG! You've taken the story from bad to worse! You're doing a remarkable job creating tension so thick it drips off the page. And your use of Lily as the narrator is both daring and superbly done.
Things I'm looking forward to you explaining in subsequent chapters: Why didn't Harry return to his family? I don't see the party as something strong enough to keep him away. Second, why Ginny is not acting like herself. Granted the emotional toll of losing Harry is a given. But Dick (!!!) is a monster. Even in her needy state, she should see that. So, I'm looking forward to your explanations of why these are happening.
You're already on my fav's list. On to ch 3!!!
-- The Seeker
Author's Response: Some of those explanations you won\'t get for a while yet, I\'m afraid! Thanks for the review.
You're very adept at conveying the emotional turmoil these people are going through, Lily's especially. Ginny's desperation is palpable.
On to ch 4!
-- The Seeker
Author's Response: Thanks, portraying thoughts and feelings of the characters is something I strive for.
Showing H and G's first kiss was a perfect pensieve memory.
Loved Sirius's comment to G when they returned. Hopefully, she'll wake up to the toxic effect Dick has on her children.
It's 1 am and I can't stop reading. See what you've done to me?!
-- The Seeker
Author's Response: Haha, I\'m sorry! Though I\'m glad you like it so much, thanks very much for the review!
You hope it's good? Sorry, MagEd, it's not. It's marvelously written, unbelievably exciting, narrated superbly by your brilliant creation, Lily, and ultimately really frustrating, because we have to wait again.
You've created a whole new Potterverse by using Lily, Just write faster. Please.
When's the next chapter expected???
Author's Response: Haha, thanks! I feel bad that I promised this chapter so much sooner and then life got in the way--so while I\'m not make any promises . . . hopefully soon?
I started your story tonight and couldn't stop until I got to your last chapter.
Lily continues to be adorably sarcastic. She's a joy to read.
Now, all we need is Arthur's plan to send Dick to some AU, then everyone can start breathing again. But we need chapter ten to do that. Please?
-- The Seeker
Author's Response: Lily\'s sarcasm is extremely fun to write, I admit. Thanks so much for all the reviews, hopefully I\'ll have the next chapter up soon!
Six reviews and the story isn't even accessable yet!
Does this tell you how excited people are for your updates?
Author's Response: It does make me feel loved ;)
MagEd, you really need to include tranquilizer pills with your chapters. This one was absolutely wonderfully written, so full of emotion, telling details, your usual twist and turns, and it got us close enough to Dick's demise that we can finally start breathing again.
I truly think my heart rate is twice its normal rate. The wait for this chapter was definitely worthwhile, with your flowing, evocative prose. But please don't make us wait too long for the final chapter. Please?
I also think moving the pov between the precocious Lily and a third person perspective worked very well.
Are you a Virginia Tech grad? It hit home with us, too. Hope all is well with you!
Author's Response: Haha, that had me laughing out loud! I\'m glad you liked the chapter, and it was able to evoke emotions in you! I\'m not a Virginia Tech grad, but I was born and raised in Virginia and I know many people who go/went there.
MagEd!!! You leave us hanging like that???
This chapter was supposed to have Ginny waking up, dumping Dick (dramatically!), and getting back with Harry, while their kids and everyone else cheers.
Instead, you give us an absolutely beautiful, mesmerizing, heart stopping, emotionally wringing, incredibly detailed, and wonderfully written chapter. Among the many highlights are the pitch perfect conversation between Harry and Hermione, Hermione's caring for Ginny during the nightmare section, and the raging exchange between Lily and Ginny when the kids were found. Also, it was very sneaky of you to trick us into thinking Ginny had snuck into Harry's bedroom.
Wow!!! I'm sitting here, stunned by the strength of the emotions you conveyed. I almost feel like jumping through the computer screen into your story and taking matters into my own hands. And I'm sure I'm not the only reader feeling that way. But it looks like you're going to torture us. Right???
Please have mercy on your loyal readers and update quickly.
The first person pov can be limiting, even though you are doing a brilliant job with Lily. The times where you broke from her pov in this chapter, however, worked very well. So, if you think it makes sense to break from Lily's pov, do it.
Again, this is an absolutely wonderfully crafted chapter!
Author's Response: Oh, I love reviews like this, they really do make me want to update faster! I promise to try, I really do. I\'m starting to form a plan in my head, based on the reviews I\'ve read, on how I want to do the next chapter concerning POVs, thanks for your thoughts though, it really does help!
Whoa!!!! What a roller coaster you put us on. I was cursing myself because I couldn't read fast enough.
I thought there was a possibility Harry could be brought back, and you made it even better by having Sirius and Remus return with him. Having Remus no longer be a werewolf was a wonderful addition.
The ending was perfect, with Harry, Remus and Sirius returning to The Burrow and meeting up with their friends and loved ones. After struggling with expressing their feelings to each, I doubt if Ginny and Harry will ever hold anything back from each other.
Well done, Nuw!!!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m really glad you enjoyed the ending. Thanks for sticking with me.
Nuw, I read this story in about a day while waiting for you to update Myths, and you kill Harry???
Or did you?
Your responses have pulled me both ways. Mainly, I can't believe you would do that to Ginny. To have the #1 impediment to their happiness eliminated, and in the next second have V pull Harry through the veil, thus eliminating any chance of that happiness. I'm hoping you wouldn't be that cruel to Ginny (or us). Please?
Your writing, plotting, battle descriptions, humor -- everything, in other words -- were outstanding. Your creation of Tyler warrants special praise, What an amazing honorary wizard he is.
I'm just going to hope that your last chapter pulls Harry back to the right side of the veil. Regardless, thanks for a very entertaining ride, even if the ending was shocking!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. It seems you\'re on the same page as most of the reviewers, wanting me to bring Harry back. Well, now you can find out what happens: the chapter was just approved!
I just read the entire story again and had to write another review, because the first one just didn't convey the depth of my appreciation for how well written your story was.
Your story lines, canon-correct characters, dialogue, humor and events were amazingly creative! The feelings shared by Harry and Ginny were so real they JUMPED off the page (er, computer screen).
This last chapter was the proper length for what preceded it. Your combination of the Veil leading into the "Love Room" was inspired, as were Harry meeting up with Remus and Sirius, Harry's blood left after LV disappeared, and how you showed it was the love room by the locked door and melting Sirius's knife. Adding to the excitement was the realization that love had destroyed the evil werewolf curse Remus had. And finally, the return to the Burrow was understated but very powerful. The others had to be dumbfounded by the return of Harry, Remus, and Sirius. We can all imagine the explosion of sound and activity after the group overcame their shock -- it wasn't necessary for you to include it.
Other outstanding elements include the twins developing the squib "magic" tools,
your use of St. Brutus as a springboard for the story, the characters of Tyler and Hassseth, your incredible use of the False Death Charm/Curse, and all of the wonderful lines you created that have been quoted by many of the reviewers.
I continue to look forward to your updates of Myth and anything else you write. You're on my favorite authors list, so I'll be updated whenever you submit anything new.
Thanks for your truly entertaining stories!
Author's Response: Thank you so very much. If you enjoyed reading this story half as much as I enjoyed writing it, then I feel it was a success, because I had a blast. It really means a lot to me to get these sorts of reviews. Again, thank you, and I look forward to hearing more from you on my other stories.
Nuw, your handling of Harry revealing the Prophecy was exceptional. I found myself cheering for Ginny, when she took the positive side to what it said. It's exactly what she would do, and unfortunately what most fan fic writers don't have her doing. So, kudos to you for coming up with the best reaction possible!
On top of Ginny's revelation, the reactions of Hermione and Ron support your approach. They don't blow it out of proportion, and instead, comment positively and offer their support. Really well done.
Combining these with your usual sense of humor made this another excellent chapter! The good news is I still have 15 more chapters until I catch up with you.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'ve always thought that most fanfiction writers tend to blow the prophecy way out of proportion, so I\'m glad you agree. In case you didn\'t know, the final chapter is in the queue right now, so it might even be up before you finish the others. :-)
Harry's life stands at a crossroads.
He is torn between a return to the only true home he as ever known or a dark and dangerous winding and twisting road through Horcruxes and ending with murder.
But can he become a murderer? Can he over come the Dark Arts, while dabbling within them? Will Ron and Hermione stand beside him on the road to doom? And if love is truly his greatest power then why did he let his only true love go?
To defeat evil, Harry must climb a mountain of dark Death Eaters and Ministry mayhem - but will he come out on top in the Final Battle?
Great chapter! You really captured all the canon personalities.
I really liked how you had Mr. and Mrs. Weasley react calmly toward Harry at the end and provide an avenue for him and Ginny to work together.
Author's Response: Past experences have taught me that our parents know those who suit us best, they have watched us live, grow and develop from childhood to adulthood.
I am firm believer that Mr & Mrs Weasley know Harry and Ginny should be together, its just Harry and Ginny who have to see that now.
I've already left a review on siye. But wanted to comment how much I'm enjoying Harry and his increasing power (no, not in morning with Ginny!!!). I noticed in your responses here that we should be getting another ch soon and a further demonstration of Harry's magical power. Can't wait!
I'm sure you've checked on this for the centering problem at siye. But I wonder if you left a / out after the second center for your section break: .
Just a thought.
Oh, if you have a spare minute, ch 3 of my story is up on siye. I'd love to read your comments on it. Thanks!
Author's Response: Jim, yea i checked that out but the / was there and it appears it will also occur in the next chapter that I have already posted over at .... you know where .... Am off to play football but I\'ll check out chapter 3 when I get back.
As I wrote in the other site, this chapter is one of the very best written, most involving yet from your creative pen (computer?).
Cheers to you! -- Jim
Author's Response: Jim, cheers for another review, nice one.
This is really such a good chapter, you might want to see if you can go back in and correct the spacing. As someone else already said, it is difficult to navigate. It seems like all the paragraphs separations were lost when you uploaded.
Anyhow, another excellent chapter, from Fleur making sure Harry and Ginny would be partnered at the wedding to the strengthening of the wards, the bachelor party, and the excruiatingly embarrassing discovery of H's tatoos. At least, Ginny now knows how important she is to Harry. All in all, a very warm lead up to the wedding!
Another chapter, please.
Let me see what i can do about this poblem, its worrying me what you and Evie mean so i will go check now.
That should be it sorted, totally my fault, sorry to everyone who had to suffer through those large chunks of text.
Another fun, fluffy chapter. I really like how Harry has brought Ginny into the Trio. I'm sure she'll be an important contributor. Loved the Valtego spell and how it rebounds on the curser -- kind of like it's both a defensive and offensive spell. Very powerful, and I hope Harry gets to teach it to the other three.
Please allow me to bring up two points:
As July and Deathly Hallows get closer, it's important for these seventh year stories to be completed before the book is out. I'm worried if none of your chapters are beta'd in May there will be a rush to finish. Can MuggleNet set you up with another beta during that time period? Just a thought.
For the second item, I'm very hesitant to even mention it. But . . . Harry's use of 'honey' when speaking to Ginny just didn't feel right. It doesn't seem like a word he would use. Now, when he used 'Gin' later in the story, that felt right. Just my two cents. You know how much I like the story and your writing, so please don't look at this as criticism, only a comment. Thanks!
Looking forward to the next chapter and hoping the beta situation gets cleared up. Lastly, hope all is well at home and at school.
Uni is tough at the moment with exams fast apporaching.
Firstly this fic will not be completed by the time Deathly Hallows comes out. I don\'t see that seventh year fics do have to be, my best example has to be that i love reading sixth year fics even though i have read the sixth book a million times.
I think Harry using honey is a way for him to show his affection for Ginny. Dont have aclue as to why i use it but i know it appears more often as we move through the chapters.
I felt since Ginny is the \"source\" of Harry\'s power she ahs to be involved with the trio and the things they do.
Never be worried about mentioning something you dont like, not all reviews have to positive and i like reading what people think about my fic.
All the best,
I had no idea you were such a romantic. If only JKR would get Ginny and Harry together like that. Thankfully, you did a great job, showing how much those two sparkle when they are together.
Loved the beyond the veil ending. It created a very warm feeling to see Sirius and Harry's parents watching over him.
Do we get the next chapter soon?
Yea the next chapter is waiting for validation.
I felt i had to show the romantic side of things before we get down to the dark side of things, the action ,adventure, violence and generally \"Rated R\" material. But hey of course i can be romantic, although a lot of my ex-girlfriends might beg-to-differ. lol.
Hi Theresa, Another chapter seamlessly written. All of the interactions Lily was in and all of her thoughts seemed to move her in one direction -- isolation -- not unlike what her dear dad does. The dream, where everything was felt, and not seen, continued that theme, culminating with the epitome of isolation -- a free fall into nothing. The obvious question is: Do we see more of the dream or does Lily wake up?
Again, Theresa, just wonderfully drawn, with everything showing that Lily is living too exclusively in her head, as shown by her snapping at the well-intentioned Nat and justifying not sharing her concerns with her friends by thinking she would be burdening them.
Very well done, and I can't wait for the next chapter! -- Jim
Author's Response: I will answer the obvious question...more of Lily\'s dream is seen. But Lily is definitely isolating herself, for the good of others though (at least that\'s how she justifies it to herself). I\'m glad you mentioned the snapping at Nat because I debated on whether or not I should keep that part in...so i\'m glad you noticed it. Thank you very much, Jim. This chapter was incredibly difficult for me to write and the fact that you enjoyed it tells me I didn\'t muck it up horribly. Hopefully, I will be submitting 17 shortly.