Just your average HP fan, with a special interest in the H/G relationship.
I've just submitted my first fan fic, He Didn't Stand A Chance. Please read and review!
July 19: For anyone who is interested in reading the other two chapters of He Didn't Stand A Chance, they can be found on the SIYE web site, where it was nominated for Best Romance and Best Overall. The story can be located either through the title or my pen name, The Seeker. A second story, a one-shot called A Trunk, Some Magic, and a Girl, also can be found there. Two guesses who the girl is! If you do visit, please leave a review. Thanks!
I finished your twenty-eight wonderful, well-written, exciting, romantic chapters and noticed the last one was posted in July.
You've done such a great job so far. It would be disappointing if you don't finish the story.
Would it be possible to let us know whether you plan to finish or not?
Author's Response: Thank you, Seeker. I hope you don\'t mind if I use this response to respond to all. Here\'s the scoop. As of March 8, 2007, I\'m the proud mommy of a gorgeous little boy. Pregnancy did not agree with me, thus the months of no updates. Now I\'m learning how to be a mom and I have no idea when the creative juices will return and/or when I will get a chance to write. Most importantly, I have NOT abandoned the story. I do want to finish it to find out what you think of my ideas. I know many of you are frustrated and I\'m sorry I can\'t give you an update now, or even an indication of when you can expect one. I simply have no idea. I do thank you for sticking with me and for continuing to offer your support. You loyal fans are what will keep this fic alive. Thank you and keep in touch! L
Congratulations on your baby boy!
Hope all is going well for you and the family. The story is logged onto my favorites, so whenever you submit I'll be notified.
Best of luck and hope you're getting some sleep!
This is my first review of your story. I just started reading it and wanted to catch up before commenting.
Your character of Gem really adds an edge to the story. You did an excellent job of showing what Ginny really meant to Harry by having him spend time with Gem.
I'll be interested in seeing where you take the relationships and whether Harry learns more about Sirius or Remus from Gem.
Next chapter, please?
I recently found your fantastic story and just finished it. I've not reviewed individual chapters, so this in an all-in-one comment.
Your story lines, handling of characters (both JKR created and new ones), creativity, humor, and flowing writing style made this story very easy to read and extremely enjoyable. As many of the other reviewers have said, I will truly miss it, especially since I've read all your other stories.
Special attention needs to go to the depth of the Harry/Ginny relationship. You've created a bond between them that most of us hope JKR has in DH. You were able to take their canon relationship and take it so much further. You captured young love so well, I'm sure you're a romantic at heart!
Nathan, Anna, and Joanna are all characters who easily could have been created by JK. They fit seamlessly into your story and added tremendous interest. They seem like real people to me, and I don't think there is a higher compliment I can give.
Thank you so much for this wonderful story, and best of luck in whatever you do. Do keep up with your writing, whether for here or the general public.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! What a wonderful review. I am a romantic at heart, that is very true. Happy endings are just too good to pass up. I\'m glad you enjoyed the story. Thank you!
I'm getting a sugar rush from all the sweetness and fluff. You capture the banter between H and G very well, also between Ron, H and G.
Loved the twins' "Christmas decorations," and G's trick on H. Very clever of you!
Including the Dursleys and H outshining them was a treat. In fact, everything was well done! May we have another chapter, please?
Author's Response: haha yeah sugar is abundent in this part of the story... and im glad you like the banter...especially with Ron, i have a bit of problems with his voice sometimes.... and soon...the next one is already like 8 pages long....
Now your chapter title makes sense! Looks like they'll be stuck in there for a while. I really like the easy, teasing, flirting relationship you described between Harry and Ginny. You use descriptive details so well to convey their increasing comfort with each other. I hope we soon get to see the first piece of jewelery Harry had made from that monstrosity he bought at the department store. Also, really cute how you had Harry totally disarm Molly by calling her "Mum."
Can't wait for the next chapter.
You handled both very different sections of this chapter very well. Harry and Ginny getting together was described in appropriate detail, and the George/Katie situation was heart wrenching.
It's been almost a month. When do we get the next chapter?
Another wonderful chapter! You know you're quite the tease, Ginny being "late," dragging out telling us she wasn't pregnant, and having Hermione mention her false alarm. I bet you have fun teasing your readers!
Your writing style is very fluid, the paragraphs flow nicely, and your dialogue is well done. Your stories are a pleasure to read.
All we need now is another chapter!
Why do I think the cut on Harry's finger is more than a simple cut? And why did his blood disappear into the mirror?
Something tells me the mirror will play a part in subsequent chapters.
Nice twist by introducing Draco and his mysterious comment at the end of the chapter. You're very good at ending each chapter with something that strongly motivates us to read the next chapter. That works for me for only five more chapters, then I'll be caught up.
Author's Response: Hmmm...you may be on to something, but you will have to wait to see. Rather odd behavior for a mirror, don\'t you think?
Well, we knew that was going to happen, didn't we? Draco was too calm. The only question is the method used to get to Fudge.
Even though the tone of this chapter was quite different than most of those preceding it, your details, characters, and dialogue made this chapter another quick read.
Excellent use of the Daily Prophet headlines and articles to convey information.
Author's Response: Yes, I think it was rather obvious that it was going to happen. I agree that the question is the method used - as well as who was responsible for using it. All will reveal itself in time. Thanks, as always for your kind reviews.
Wonderful job with the will! Having the lawyer provide insights into Sirius, as well as being very friendly, helped to make a very stressful situation somewhat easier.
On a lighter note, your creativity shone through with the twins' travel tunnel. Excellent idea! You also continue to move Harry and Ginny's relationship at the right speed.
Another very good chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I do feel that there is so much about Sirius that we don\'t know, so I took some artistic liberty with his past. Don\'t you wish those tunnels were real? I could certainly use one! Glad you enjoyed the chapter!
Hi Czarina, It looks like you've set up your next few chapters -- Death Eaters released, families at risk, Fudge demoted, Umbridge as a mole, Percy working for his father -- all sorts of interesting threads.
I like how you use simple physical acts -- Ginny sitting on Harry's lap, Hermione and Luna resting their head on Ron and Neville's shoulders, etc. to show the increasing comfort these couples have with each other.
I find myself wanting to slow down as I approach the last chapter you've sent in. There's only one solution: submit more chapters . . . quickly, please.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love hearing that my chapters are quick reads even though they are rather lengthy. There certainly are quite a few things going on and I\'m sure you see that I am leading up to something big. Thanks for your reviews!
Was it just coincidence that the Slytherins were watching practice, and then Ginny was injured?
You continue to develop Harry and Ginny's relationship in a logical fashion -- you really do convey the warmth and wonder of first love very well.
But as to this cliffie, how can you leave us hanging with our favorite female student in jeopardy? You're still taunting us, Czarina. You've just moved from H/G romance to an injury.
Author's Response: I am not a big believer in coincidence, so you can pretty much gather they were there for a reason. I am so thankful for your comments regarding Harry and Ginny\'s relationship. Teen angst/ love is much more difficult to portray than I thought. As for the cliffie - it was rather Slytherin-like of me, wasn\'t it?
Nothing like an almost fatal accident to prompt Harry to speak those three special words to Ginny!
Very creative of you to create the Detonation Hex, with the fingerprint trigger.
You showed the two steps forward, one step back progression of teen maturation very well through Ron helping Harry. It will be interesting to see what you make Harry do to overcome his harsh words to Hermione.
Your chapters continue to be very well constructed and flow so easily I'm always surprised when I reach the end.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I thought Harry needed a bit of a push, even though it was quite obvious that his feelings for her ran deep. Glad you liked the Detonation Hex. Coming up with new hexes is a challenge, but I was particularly fond of this one. Thanks for the kind review.
You do a good job of playing with our emotions. Welcome fluff with Harry and Ginny, as she recovers; then the reconciliation between Hermione and Harry and the evidence against the Slytherins; and finally the dark overtones of Dolores's meeting with Percy.
You captured Dolores's penchant for manipulation very well. Despite Percy's academic intelligence, he can be very dense in real world dealings, and you accurately employed that quality in their conversation. Well done!
There's only one problem. I've caught up to you, so now I have to join the legions of readers begging for the next chapter. When can we expect it?
Author's Response: Wow - you packed a lot into this review! I was trying to balance some lightness with the coming darkness and you identified that right away. I\'m rather afraid that Percy\'s trust in Umbridge may be his downfall one day, but perhaps he will surprise us. I assure you I am hard at work on the next chapter and I will try not to make you wait too much longer. Thanks again for reviewing each chapter - I really appreciate it!
I was going through old email correspondence and two, no, only one guess whose emails I found. So, I checked to see for any updates.
Your prose continues to sparkle. It was like visiting a well-liked friend I hadn't seen in a while. All of the strengths I've referred to in previous reviews still are evident.
Three parts of the chapter jumped out at me. The first is an old favorite. I reached the end of the chapter and was shocked it had arrived so quickly.
Harry's ability to sense trouble seems to have moved to the next level, and he appears to be coming more trusting in these feelings. When I left to write my stories at SIYE, we had discussed Harry's feeling of foreboding. Well, the attack, and the subsequent shuffling of the trio and Ginny to the Common Room in Harry's wardrobe certainly qualify.
Speaking of the wardrobe, I laughed when the thought came to me that it was a very nice play on C. S. Lewis' Narnia, where the back of the wardrobe transported the four kids (Penvenseys and Gryffindors) to their fantasy worlds. Wonderful use of that construct.
Now I'm off to the next chapter, knowing it, too, will be wonderful.
Hope RL is treating you well, and your work schedule has calmed down a little bit.
Best, Jim/The Seeker
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear from you again! I am thrilled as always that you liked the chapter. You picked up on the importance that Harry is trusting his feelings, although I do wonder if his stubbornness may cause him to ignore some things he should be paying more attention to. I've often wondered if Harry's propensity toward broodiness had anything to do with him picking up on approaching danger, so I'm testing the waters with that right now. I laughed when I read your comment about the wardrobe. When writing it I didn't even think about the Narnia parallel, but it is kind of funny. Who knows what may happen in Harry's, though - remember that Fred and George created it, so it's sure to have a few surprises other than the Insulting Toilet Seat. RL is good, still hectic, but in a good way. I look forward to the day I have my PhD completed and having more time on my hands than I know what to do with...although I think writing will be filling that void! Good to hear from you, Jim. Take care. Czarina
I'm going to have to come up with something other than "it was a wonderful chapter!" But it was!
You continue to take the canon characters and add new life to them, going to places where JK feared to tread -- THE TALK!?!?! Well done and very sensitive, having Remus conduct it was logical and ensured at PG rating.
Ginny, Ron, and Hermione waiting to open their long-anticipated owl results and school letters was a great touch. It was a great way to show how they feel, rather than just telling it directly.
And as always, the sentences, paragraphs, and the entire chapter flowed as smoothly as silk.
Author's Response: I will have to come up with something other than \"thank you\" as a reply! I am glad you enjoyed the chapter. I wasn\'t sure how The Talk would be received, but I wanted to make sure it was addressed at some point. I like to think I\'m being socially responsible :-)
Czarina, I loved how you laced humor through this otherwise serious chapter.
Ginny's comment of "Well, let's all get naked," when DD left was hilarious! Ron focus on food and Hermione's on homework and bathroom schedules were fun, especially when Harry discovered the twins' Insulting Toilet Seat. While not humorous, Ginny's touches to reassure or calm down Harry fit their relationship very well.
Moody's eloquent comment to Arthur was wonderfully written. While Arthur's thoughts that Mad Eye's external scars reflected those emotional ones he carried inside were insightful. Well done!
All the other "boring" compliments I've given you in the past still apply. :-)
But now I've caught up again and marked the story as a favorite, so I'll get update notices (I hope). All you need to do, dear Czarina, is to write more chapters.
Author's Response: Seeker Jim!! How wonderful to hear from you again. I was really happy with the balance in this chapter. I knew how dark I wanted the Percy issue to become and that really meant I had to lighten the tone a bit. I absolutely had a great time with Moody's character in this chapter. I thought about how much we really know about him and what I could do as far as a back story. I do feel badly for Arthur though, so maybe it's a good thing he can benefit from the wisdom of Moody. Thank you so much for reviewing - I really appreciate the thought your put into each and every one. Czarina
Outstanding OWLs. Your description of Hermione's excitement was pitch perfect. Cute trick by Hermione to give H and G some alone time.
The way you combined Ron and Harry's nascent maturity with their continuing cluelessnes was both funny and poignant.
Now, I want to see what you do with Harry and Ginny during their time alone.
Author's Response: Thanks. So much emphasis was placed on the importance of OWLs that I felt Hermione needed a moment to revel in their glory and excitement.
Czarina, Your level of detail is marvelous. You paint a very complete picture of the scenes and the characters' interactions within them, but you do it without bogging down the story. Well done!
The contrast of Ginny performing a very powerful wandless magic act, then talking to Harry "in a small voice" was an excellent contrast and certainly represented all of the teens being on the cusp of maturity, moving between childhood and young adult from one second to the next.
One benefit of coming to your story somewhat late is that I can move to your next chapter now!
Author's Response: What a lovely review! You truly understand what it is I am trying to convey and that means so very much to me. The teens are a time of exploration and discovery. Growing up isn\'t easy and we tend to experiment with who we are going to become one day. Yes, it is a good benefit that you get to read so many chapters at once. I am the first to admit that I am slow to update. I want each chapter to be the very best it can be before I am ready for anyone else to read it.