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Hello everyone, I'm an adult female student from India. I'm obsessed with fanfics, like everyone else here at MNFF.
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I see the chapter hasn't come up yet ... NINE DAYS!!
Author's Response: its in the mods hands now! *sigh of relief*
Have you really given up now?
Author's Response: everyone, for the last time: NO I HAVE NOT GIVEN UP BUT IF MUGGLENET DOESNT GET ITS ACT TOGETHER I JUST MIGHT!!!
YAY!! New chappie ... but not going as I hoped. Memories changing topsy-turvy,and yeah this needs an AU warning
Author's Response: im sorry, but the overwhelming response was that the readers wanted lily to hear them. hope youll continue to read!
Post next chappie soon!
Author's Response: please dont hate me guys.....this next chapter i can promise you is going to take a little longer to get up. im sorry!
Did the chapter get rejected? *I hope not*
Author's Response: thanks for your loyalty to my fic...as for it being rejected, i dont know yet, but i promise you, its in the queue....and GUESS WHAT!!! for the first time ever, as soon as chapter 7 is accepted, i can submit chapter 8!! yeah!! hopefully thatll make up for this long wait.......sorry about that :-(
DISASTER (for Harry)!! Now Harry needs to get out of that virtual reality ... getting more and more messy!! Great
Can't wait for the next chapter!!! 9/10
Author's Response: thanks for your review! im glad you like my story.
Great Chapter!! Harry needs a bailing-out now, only Dumbledore can help him!
Author's Response: thank you for all your reviews! you are one of my most faithful reviewers. i am taking your thoughts into consideration, but remember, time can't be affected by his actions.
Cool fanfic! What does that warning stand for?
Author's Response: It stands for alternate universe-it means the characters act differently than they do in JKR's books.
Good chapter, but Harry must get back to the present for his own good!
Author's Response: wow--you guys are fast reviewers! thanks :-)
Wow! That was hilarious, Scheherezade!
Thankfully, I was able to tolerate the OOCness. Scheming!Nagini was funny to read about - definitely. Her escapades were even more funny. I love the way you poke fun at almost every canon character. I roared with laughter at the McGonagall one.
While I'm sad that it's over (I would have loved to see more of Nagini's ... musings), I'm happy that the fic is a success!
Poor Voldykins ... *giggles*
I do have some constructive criticism to make, though. There were too many Amricanisms in the story, and even though they don't take away the humour itself, they can distract the reader. Apart from that, I loved the story!
Author's Response: The Mcgonagall poke was my favorite character poking. lol. I\'m sad it\'s over too, but it was time for it to come to a close.... Thanks for telling me about the Americanisms. Unfortunately, I don\'t know many Britishisms, and wasn\'t able to include them much in the story. Thanks for R&Ring, though! :-D
It seems that my suspicions about Lucius are becoming true, after all ...
That was a nice twist in the chapter, Jenna. So ... now Snape knows, and Siobhan is as suspicious as ever about Harry.
Nice characterisation of Lucius and Snape in that little argument. Lucius resorting to his usual threat tactics was completely IC. I like the way you showed Snape's nasty and sinister side: I've seen too much OOC!Snape. Then again, is it possible to expect OOCness in one of your stories, Jenna?
Interesting story, Jenna!
I've seen many references to your OC, Siobhan, all over the main site and the forums. I'm glad that I finally made up my mind to read this.
Siobhan is a well-developed character and definitely not a Sue. Her daring seems just right for a Slytherin and definitely not righteous enough to make her a Gryffindor. Good job on getting her Hogwarts house right! Most writers (including myself) seem to give the physical description of an OC in a single chapter, as it's more convenient. Your way of describing Siobhan was rather unique in this aspect.
It's good to see that she has weaknesses and ironically, she herself is being decieved while being physically attracted to a much older man.
This fic is one of the many stories that have reinforced my assumption that Lucius is not a faithful man. I can't say that the plot is "good" (I think you know what I'm talking about), but then again, I'm not very fond of romance fics. But this fic does have a rather interesting, intriguing and scandalous plot.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you. As to the \"plot\". Er -- it actually hasn\'t gotten started yet. >.> We\'re still in exposition. *giggles mischeviously*
Oh dear ... your writing is powerful, Jenna. Very, very powerful. I'm feeling sorry for Siobhan even though I know she's done so many wrong things (from the wizarding world's point of view). And I have a feeling that she's going to do many more terrible mistakes in future ...
And ... Blaise Zabini. Phew, that was too close for her comfort, wasn't it? It would've been a case of dubious consent if he'd gone any further ... poor Siobhan. I hope she can sort her emotions out as soon as possible and report Lucius to the Ministry. But I don't think she's going to do that anytime soon ...
I'm eagerly waiting and watching ... I mean reading. *chuckles*
Thanks for saving the review ... here's the repost ...
Hmmm ... interesting development ...
I've always thought of her as a watchful girl ... it seems I was wrong. It never occured to me to think of Lucius's Dark Mark ... that shows how captivating your writing skills are. Co-incidentally, I was intrigued by the chapter title, and, of course, I forgot all about it when I was pulled into the chapter.
There's not much constructive criticism to give, but I did notice that there are minute details (that could have been left out, perhaps). For a few moments, I nearly thought the story was going to be NC-17 or something like that ... but it's definitely borderline. I know it's rated Professors, but I think it would have been a lot better if the sex scene was a little less detailed. Okay, I think my comments have stopped making sense ...
There are lots of questions in my mind though. The main one is: "What will be the fate of HMS Tiramisu?" Of course, I'll have to wait and watch ...
I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Well, well, well, the manipulative snake is back ... And I'm still feeling a little sorry for Siobhan. She knows what kind of a man he is, but just cannot let go. Does Narcissa know about her husband's affairs? And if she does, does she even care?
Lucius, Siobhan and their 'relationship' is still intriguing. And Lucius is as slippery as ever ... almost perfect. Getting into the Great Hall without arousing suspicion or attracting unwanted attention? Hard to do, without possessing an Invisibility Cloak of course.
I'm waiting for a Lucius-centric chapter to resolve many things and shed some light on him. In any case, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, now that my HP fan fic obsession has returned.
Ahhh, Siobhan's back! Okay, I know she wasn't "missing" from any chapter, but I was longing for an update. Take your time in finishing the story, though, I'm not in any particular hurry!
Across the aisle, Potter stared at the board equally blankly. Siobhan thought he was probably forgetting more than he was learning.
You have a way of making your readers chuckle and dissolve into maniacal laughter in the span of a few seconds ...
The girl is devilish and sacrcastic as ever - a classic Slytherin. Of course, there was never real "love" between Siobhan and Lucius; it's hard to expect something like that from a Death Eater like Malfoy Senior.
And now Harry knows about their scandalous affair! I know he'll go to any lengths to stop it. He'll manage to persuade Siobhan from meeting Lucius in the next few chapters, perhaps? Or is this discussion over for good? I can't picture Harry giving up that easily ...
Awesome job, Jenna!
Author's Response: Thanks for the Review, love.
So, that line you quoted, Bridget/Deanine wrote. I wrote the original line, but she wanted me to restructure it,; instead of doing so myself, I yoinked the \"example\" she gave me. *giggles*
Harry, of course, would never/will never just be at peace with Siobhan/Lucius -- but given Voldemort\'s antics, he doesn\'t have time to make it top of his agenda. I imagine Harry will find himself occupied very, very soon. :X
This is the most emotional chapter of Sins so far ... and in a good way, Jenna. Siobhan's disillusionment with Lucius is almost heartbreaking - because even though Siobhan is devious, she is a strong girl. It's almost as though she herself is being used in the process of using others to get to her now ex-lover Lucius - even though the situation is partly her fault, I can't help but feel sorry for her.
“Yeah?” Pansy asked, and Siobhan heard a tremble in her voice. “So, is that why you spent all last term warming up to him? And then spending the holiday at his house?”
Pansy can be extremely thick sometimes, can't she? If only she could have pieced two and two together and figured out who Siobhan was after ... but the plot can still take unexpected twists that I can't even fathom.
And speaking of twists ...
She let out a troubled sigh and rested her face in her hands, wondering whether or not she could bring herself to turn Lucius Malfoy in for his crimes.
Nice cliffhanger ending, dear! The story is sounding more and more like a romantic thriller. The chapter ending is really thriller-esque, and I can barely wait to read the next installment. Good luck!
Now that was good. A little smutty, perhaps ... but still good. I liked the implied Ron/Hermione parts the best. This was a different side of Hermione. Who would have thought that she would be so interested in this subject ...
If there's a delay, contact the mods ASAP!
Author's Response: I'll do that. I'm getting a little impatient and its been over 2 weeks...:(
Please update soon or tell me if you're posting the story anytwhere else.