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Hello everyone, I'm an adult female student from India. I'm obsessed with fanfics, like everyone else here at MNFF.
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1983. In a world where Voldemort has won the First War, where hope has fled from an Earth moaning under the Dark Lord's iron hand, marriages are broken and others are arranged in order to preserve the sacred purity of blood. James Potter loses his wife; now they have to find another for him.
Nice plot development in this chapter! I don't mind the cliffhanger at all (I've done that myself). Aimee's letter was very amusing, and Olivier's letter was touching. And no, I didn't mind the "gardening lesson".
Yes, Sirius is as cheerful as ever! I was completely surprised when the Marauders - all four of them - met in that pub. The last flashback line made me laugh out loud. I tend to avoid Marauder-era stories because of the unearthly amount of clichés in them, but I can tell you with confidence that this is the only exception to that "rule" of mine.
Author's Response: Is it? I have another Marauder-era story, and I\'ve been told it\'s quite good, but I can\'t tell you if it\'s cliché or not :). I thought there was no way that the Marauders wouldn\'t manage to keep in touch, even if they are separated by their new social status. But the plot isn\'t at all about them, so it can hardly be called a \'Marauders\' story.
Thank you for the review.
A very sweet ending ... *sighs*
This fic does seem a bit AU, with the "door of the dead" thing and all that.
But never mind. It's beautifully written, and as good as JKR's style of writing.
Author's Response: Cheers! \"Door of the dead\" that\'s good! I guess I\'m kind of into all the dark stuff at the moment, maybe it\'s the bad weather that we\'ve been having in England, or the need of a holiday! As good a style as JKR??? I\'m honoured, even if I disagree! Thanks again, and look out for some later fics coming up!
Ah ... subtle IC humour. A rarity amongst most humour fics ...
You had me chuckling throughout. The funniest parts will have to be the ones with 'Mollywobbles' in them. The word itself is quite funny ... *giggles*
I love Arthur's child-like amazement and curiosity. Like I'd mentioned earlier, it's very in-character: your version of Arthur seems to remind me of the chapter in GoF when he visits the Dursleys for the first time.
I wish it could have been more humorous, though. All the same, it was good!
And, my review doesn't seem to be long enough for my satisfaction this time. *sighs* Anyway, I'm looking forward to read more humorous fics from you! Good luck!
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked this too! To be quite honest, I\'m not really much of a humour writer. This was my first and probably only attempt, though I do bring humorous elements into as much of my work as I can manage. I think my type of humour was described as \"honest\". I take thec truth and make it funny. This is probably something I have from watching a lot of stand-up... I have my moments, and I have enough self-irony, but I\'m not a naturally funny person.
I was fascinated to find out about Arthur\'s cute little nickname for Molly. It\'s so cute, but at the same time it made me laugh out loud because of the nickname of a friend of mine. We call her Wobbles because when she moves she... wobbles. Her chest does, that is. And Molly is a rather plump woman, who back in the day was most likely rather curvy and sexy. This nickname is extra funny to me for that reason.
I\'m glad I managed to keep Arthur IC, I\'m always very worried of having the characters fall out of character, so I really think things through before I write them. My plot bunnies are most likely to start with, \"How would such-and-such react in that situation?\" or \"How does this theme aply to such-and-such?\".
Don\'t beat yourself up, I always enjoy your reviews, and they\'re still far longer than the standard, \"OMG, I luv this! You are a good writer!\" or \"I don\'t like it, it sucks.\" I once got a review that only said \"Good\". It didn\'t even have punctuation.
Hilarious!:D Ickle-Voldie-kins deserves it! (lol! Sorry, SarahGitty, couldn't resist!)
Amazing! Let me guess ... "Auntie" might be ... the Fat Lady (terrible guess) or Aunt Marge (since when did she become a baby-sitter! Won't work) ... I can't make up my mind ... I give up! Who is it? Please contact me by visiting my profile (and leave a review for my fic if it's okay with you).
Once upon a time in the far, far, away land of California, Miranda Aramintha Rowena Ysabella Slyvia Ursula Evangelista- Mary Sue, for short- accepted an invitation to Hogwarts. As she searches for her one true love, will her soul mate be Draco? Harry? Snape? Colin? Fred and George? or...gasp...Voldemort?
Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Humour Fiction.
*rolls around laughing on the floor*
*becomes serious for a moment - hem hem!*
This fic once again proves that Mary Sues can work ONLY in humour fics and not in serious fics.
So, I hope you can write different types of fics in future. Please read and review my fics if you're comfortable with them. :D
Author's Response: Yay for rofl! I\'ve written lots of fics I\'d love you to read, they\'re just in other cats! :D I\'ve got a Snape Marauder Era fic, a Sirius one, D/G, a Remus and Tonks series, and several other pairing romance one shots from James/Lily to Fred/Angelina. I\'m a shameless plugger, lol, so I admire anyone of like mind, and will read anything that\'s not Professors rated, so thanks for asking! ^_^
The authors who delight in tearing canon to shreds by introducing terrible OOCness and Mary-Sues in serious fics should come and read this.
It's hilarious! Oh yes, my favourite parts will have to be the CAPSLOCK!Harry and LeatherPantsSexGod!Draco. I've seen enough Hot!Draco and Hot!Snape on other sites in serious fics. Good job with the cliché bashing! You're right, there aren't many clichés to ridicule. I'm looking forward to the last chapter!
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much for such a good review. If you\'ll excuse me, I have a large pile of cliches beside me and a wooden bat in my hand and I must go bash them... :)
Ahhh, lovely ending chapter there! Perfectly indiscriminate use of clichés - I know they were done on purpose!
I don't have much to say ... but I never expected Ron and Hermione to get together after the SS/Hr thing. NiceHandsome!Snape ... thanks for poking fun at that one - I roll my eyes in frustration whenever I see that in most non-humour fics.
Good luck with the rest of your stories and RL!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great review and all the other ones before. I\'m glad you liked Handsome!Snape, it\'s really distorting our view of him... he\'s supposed to be ugly. Oh yes, I did it on purpose, not in a serious fic!
Wow - a very short fic, and a very moving one too. I think Merope was half-expecting Tom to get the letter. But even if Tom gets it (an extremely big IF), he won't acknowlegde it.
I didn't think I would find another Tom Sr./Merope fic here (I've written one). Now I realise that it was completely silly of me. Tom Sr./Merope may be a rarepair, but it's canon after all.
Author's Response: You\'re right, I did intend for Merope to be hoping against hope that the letter (even though she never sent it) would somehow reach Tom, but that she knew in her mind that it never would. By the way, I read your one-shot, too I liked it a lot.
Wow! Another good fic by lily_evans34!
The characterisation of Cedric was just too good. I'm thinking that it must have been easy to do. I loved the emotional depth that you showed, instead of the hollow character that many others project in their fanfictions. Thank goodness, this is not another playboy!Cedric fic.
The only thing I could see was the repitition of certain words and phrases in the last paragraph. You use the word "fading" many times, and the phrase "let himself fade" twice in two consecutive sentences. That distrupts the flow in a bad way. I'm sure you can change it to "disappeared gradually" or something like that to prevent dull repitition.
Congratulations on a job well done, despite flaws that can be corrected eventually.
Author's Response: Haha, repitition is always my weak point! ;) I\'m glad that you liked my characterization of Cedric. I actually haven\'t seen too many playboy!Cedric fics. This is just how I always saw him. And thank you for the con-crit. I\'ll be sure to look back and fix some of the sentences that you mentioned. Thanks again!
The first time I read this story, Gina; I couldn't help beaming broadly. :D
You're not the only one who takes delight in such emotional connections between Harry and Dumbledore ... I'm one of those people too!
Oh, I love his unusual quirks (and I share some of them). I knew that there weren't enough stories that portrayed his casual side, and I'm glad I found this one. *chuckles at the A. P. W. B. D. bowling ball and those odd purple shoes*
Like many of your other stories, this one is very moving. It made me sympathise with Harry all over again for losing yet another father figure. *sighs*
But Harry knew that it was only his own wishful thinking; he had learned the hard way last year that death was final. Still, he was glad for this chance to connect to something Dumbledore had enjoyed. It somehow lightened the sorrow that Harry knew would come crashing down later that morning at the headmaster’s funeral.
These lines had to be the best ones in the story. They managed to bring me close to tears.
Overall, I can see one outstanding symbolism in this fic. It was about how Harry rejected the darkness (the HBP's book) and embraced the light (Dumbledore's things and Harry's acceptance that Albus has moved on).
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review, Mini! I am so glad you read this story and liked it, and am really touched by your kind words. This was the second story I wrote, and I\'m fond of it, as its rather different than some of my other stories. The relationship between Harry and Dumbledore is very special. I\'ve written about it a few times now and really enjoy tackling their characters. I am glad I did them justice! And yes - poor Harry, I hope he doesn\'t lose any more of the parental figures in his life. I think, though, that he will suffer more losses before the end. Yet I also believe he\'ll weather the storm and indeed reject the darkness and embrace the light. Thanks again for your great review! I really appreciate your taking the time to leave such wonderful comments! ~Gina :)
In the far, far away land of California, where the moon was in the seventh house, and Jupiter aligned with Mars, an Aquarian girl was called to Hogwarts, met the Marauders, and let her love steer the stars!
*Groovy prequel to Mary Sue, I love you!*
Nominated for a Quicksilver Quill for Best Humour Fiction.
Amusing and amazing! Great job, kerichi!
"Grampy" Dumbledore. That was the funniest part! *rotfl*
Author's Response: Thank you! Just the thought of the look on his face when she called him Grampy. *giggles madly* (My mental image of him is still Richard Harris- he had the best voice and the twinkle down pat! ^_^)
Simply beautiful! The pairing is pretty interesting ...
This fic seems so ... realistic. I like your portrayal of Susan's hesitation and the family's denial of her relationship. The fact that Hannah knows nothing about Susan's infatuation makes it still more moving for the reader.
As for the charm ... that was excellent! The title, of course, was very apt.
I do have a question, which can be considered partial concrit:
Upon re-reading the story, I felt that Hannah actually knows about Susan's love for her. But the story seems to indicate otherwise. Can you make this more clear?
I was just being a little nitpicky, feel free to do the same with my stories!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I\'m glad you find it realistic. The charm wasn\'t actually in the original version, back when I had it as the prologue for a chaptered fic, but when I turned it into a one-shot, I had the idea to put in the necklace. I\'m really glad I did. :) As for Hannah knowing about Susan\'s love for her, I re-read the story myself and I can\'t find what you saw. Could you tell me anything specific I might look at that could indicate Hannah knew? Thanks for the review! :)
Impressive, Maia dearest ... simply impressive.
What struck me most about the story is the way you manage to keep both Harry and Ron in-character and explore their emotions at the same time. They don't sound feminine (thank goodness) and that is obviously not easy to pull off. But you've done it well. Awesome job!
He was absentmindedly flicking pebbles at a gnome that kept re-emerging from behind a bush ever so often.
This is a nice sentence in the first paragraph. It seems to lend a sense of realism to this fic, showing Harry doing something in an idle manner which hasn't been projected in canon; yet perfectly believable.
This made him think of how clueless both he and Ron had been to Hermione’s hints and advances. An entire romantic drama had taken place right in front of Harry’s nose, without Harry noticing anything, really. He smiled even more.
Nice job with the obvious Ron/Hermione hint. It made me giggle for a while. I like the way you manage to slip in something comical in an emotional fic.
The friendly bond between Harry and Ron in canon is strong, and it comes out stronger in this little fic. I loved the hug, by the way. It didn't feel girly at all to me; just a sign of their eternal friendship. This is instantly going into my favourites!
The only thing I'm not entirely satisfied with is the length of the fic; I wish it could have been a little longer. In spite of that, the story is really cute. I love it!
Author's Response: OMG! I can\'t believe I haven\'t responded yet! Thanks for an amazing review, as usual! I don\'t really know what I can say to a review like that except thank you very much! I\'m so very happy you enjoyed this fic as well. :)
After eviscerating Mary Sue in fiction, Mary Sue, I love you! and Mary Sue, Marauders love you!, I was seized by the irresistible urge to skewer her in sonnet. (my version of one, anyway, choosing content over iambic pentameter :D) Shakespeare's 18th sonnet, Shall I compare thee..., was my inspiration, since when it comes to Mary Sue fics, (including the humorous ones) So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this gives life to thee....
*Rated 3rd-5th only due to a belief that younger readers shouldn't be exposed to unpleasant 'facts of life' like Mary Sue. ^_~ *
Sugar coated poison is Mary Sue.
I couldn't agree more. :D Great job again, kerichi!
Author's Response: Ta, Thanks! I\'ve become fixated on Mary Sue as a arsenic sprinkled sugar coated donut. Beware the donut! :D
Wow, great story!
I like it how you picked Ron instead of Hermione and/or Harry to go through the maze. Thankfully, you steered away from the stupid!Ron cliche and gave us a smart!Ron.
It's good that you brought out the lion within him, you know, that is precisely what makes him a Gryffindor. Congratulations for the good characterisation.
The last part is very funny, you managed to make me laugh as well! But then again, you were the one who wrote Dear Dumby ...
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I love Ron - I\'m glad you thought I portrayed him well, as he really is smart, it\'s just that Hermione often overshadows him, and sometimes his brains aren\'t realised (for instance, he\'s the one who noticed something was up with Hermione when she had the time-turner, but at the time it seemed ridiculous). So, I\'m really glad you thought I had him down well, thanks! I really enjoyed writing the last part, so I\'m glad you enjoyed reading it! *giggles* Glad to know I\'ve still got the humour, even out of Dear Dumby! Thanks for reviewing!
The ending was pretty funny!
I must admit, when I read about the Christmas Ball, I was disappointed and reminded of the masquerade ball cliche. I'm glad that you gave it a new spin.
You seem to have a talent for writing songfics. Yes, I've read your other story, Memories.
Overall, good fic, despite the use of typical Marauder cliches.
Author's Response: Thanks! This was orignally my first fic, so I suppose I had caught on to the Marauder cliches from all the other many fics I had recently been devotedly reading, so I apologise for that! I found all the masquerade ball cliches extremely funny and thought maybe I\'d change it to sort of in a way counteract them! I do enjoy writing songfics as I am a huge fan of Musicals and Harry Potter (why not put them both together?!) Although, I am continuing \"On My Own\" as a normal fic. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Very funny! Lily loves James ... and isn't ready to say it out LOUD. :D
Author's Response: Lily and James sitting in a tree! (When she\'s not with Remus... lol)
The fic is beautiful! I like it how you brought Filch and Pince together. I agree, they're an obvious couple.
Their relationship strengthens Dumbledore's argument: love is the most powerful thing in the world.
The best part: Ron got to hear their conversation! I was chuckling about it, remembering his terrible time with Lavender!
Thank you so much for your comment about Amor Non Mutuus. Sadly, it's hardly getting any reviews ... *sighs deeply*
It was very good, despite having sinister touches to it.
A few mistakes that you ought to tweak or correct:
I don't see Hagrid patting/stroking a kitten. He doesn't like cats.
In one of the books (don't remember which one), it is said that Mrs Norris and Filch's eyes resemble each other. But this fic seems to be contradictory.
I'm just being nitpicky, it's a very original fic!.
Author's Response: Wow really? I didn\'t know he doesn\'t like cats. Definitely didn\'t remember that Filch\'s eyes were like Mrs. Norris\'. Hmm better go tweak it. Thanks! :)
Wow! I liked the writing style, even though it was short. It made me feel for Merope.
I seem to be developing a liking for Tom Sr./Merope fics (I've written one) ...
I have never celebrated a birthday.
This was the line that moved me the most.
Author's Response: Thanks, ill read yours and maybe it will help me understand a little better, you know when you write a h/g fic you have a lot to study and learn from, but i dont so this will be really hard for me. thanks for the kind reviews though