Very goood story. I am not a fan of slash, but I like they way you described their relationship. And the way Remus reacted to seeing James dead brought tears to my eyes. Very well-written. Thank you.
Very nice story. :D Thanks for sharing :) I like the argument between the two boys. Very... kid-like :D
Good beginning. Like others said, I find Lily a bit too anti-James, but it is plausible.
The Marauder interaction is well-written, and I like the fact that you introduced Frank and Alice :)
Looking forward to seeing more of this.
Written as a Term Challenge: Holidays Abroad submission for Slytherin.
Woo!! :) Nice chapter. The way you write Tom is great. His thoughts, especially, showing the change the potion makes.
I'm not certain about Mereope, she didn't give me the impression of being that enterprising. But then again, her father didn't give her a chance to do anything, really.
I can't wait to see what happens next :)
Author's Response: *huggles my Tom* Thanks, I love him, too. Heh, thanks for the review, Chris!
Hahaha :D I WAS in the Ciucas Mountains, like a month ago. Great mountains :)
One correction: “A face pe plac la a păstra al tău chipeş şi picioare interior art.hot. film tren la tot timp.” should look like: "Vă rugăm să păstraţi mâinile şi picioarele în interiorul trenului în timpul mersului."
art.hot is a grammar note, and really has no bussiness being in a story :D
Anyway, I like the way you build the history, using her memory, and the short scene with the dresses. Gives power to the character. I wonder what that thing with the potion means?
Of course, we know that she'll stop feeding him the potion, so I'm waiting to see what happens :)
Great work, keep it up :)
Author's Response: *worries* Wow, I really had never imagined someone from Romania actually reading this! I hope it didn\'t stink too badly...and I shall change that translation when I go through this next time. Thanks, Chris!
Ooh, things are getting interesting. I like your description of the holiday, sounds like the real thing :D It's not exactly a celebration of love, but more of a coming-of-spring thing.
The small amulets, as you call them, are given to girls, but not just to a romantic interest. You'd give one to a sister, a friend, a relative, etc. :)
I have this essay abut it, but it would be useless to dig for it now :)
Great chapter. The jealousy was well-written, and it tells us a lot about her. Wouldn't the potion make sure that Tom was faithful to her? Silly girl :D
Tom's actions are great, too. Very well-written.
Author's Response: Yeah, the research I did for that said it could be given to anyone, but I just thought it would work better with the plot just for it to be romantic. Thanks, though. I wish you had been here when I was writing this so I could ask *you* questions.
You know, I didn't think AT ALL about Voldemort. So yeah, I'm surprised. :)
Very nice development this chapter. Still, why isn't the potion-free Tom acting more like the Muggle he was? I'd think that he'd act more harsh towards Mereope.
Another well-written chapter, and I can't wait to see what will happen now. :) How will Tom react?
Author's Response: Heh, I sort of think of him as someone who isn\'t a morning person and doesn\'t really realize what\'s going on until after he drinks the potion. Does that make sense? Thanks for the review, Chris.
Well, that answers my question. Great chapter, altough angsty. I'm not a fan of angst, but I knew what I was in for the moment I started the fic :)
Tom's actions are plausible, and well-thought out. Writing it from Mereope's PoV was a brilliant choice, as it gave us a glimpse at how mush she had lied to herself.
Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Chris. And too bad you don\'t like angst, because that\'s pretty much all I write. You should learn to like it, though. It\'s fun!
Whoah. Very emotional chapter. Nicely written, too.
This paragraph could use some work, tho: "Merope noticed here how alone she was. She had no one to go to, no one to lean on, and no one to go to for help. She was stuck in an exotic country with no where to go. She felt useless."
You could write it as, "Looking at the flowing water, Mereope realized how alone she was. She had no one to go to, no one to lean on. Nobody was there to help her. She was stuck in a foreign country, and had no idea whwere to go. She felt as if she had no more use."
Well, I hope that helps. When I read it, it sounded a bit off, so I tried improving it. Wether I did that is your choice.
The decision to snap her wand seems a bit harsh, I think. The circumstances excuse her, tho.
Masterfully written chapter.
Author's Response: She had to snap her wand or it wouldn\'t follow canon, and then just seemed like the best time to do it. And yes, many people have commented on that line, I will fix it eventually. Thanks for the review!
This chapter is written differently than the others (I'm good at stating the obvious, eh?)
Nice change. Mixing present and past worked great. :) I disliked the inclusion of Sara, but hey, you're the author :D And it did help advance the plot.
Nice story, over-all :) not a pairing or time-frame I usually read, but I like it :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I wrote this chapter almost a month after finishing the fic. But I rather like the way it\'s written. Thanks for all your reviews, Chris.
Oooh nice fic :)
Sad fic, but it ends happily, so that's great :)
Very good imagery, and you did a wonderful work with the emotions, especially Draco's.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing, Chris. :) -Debbie