Wonderful story. Like everybody else said, your characterisation is spot on. I like the way you created the Christmas atmosphere, and included them, but also set them apart. x.x I suck at describing that. Anyway, it was lovely. One thing, tho. I really don't think Hermione would call Mrs Weasly "Molly".
I like their entire dialogue. Perfectly written. It was obvious that they were very close. Harry's appearance and the familiarity between the three was very good, too. :)
Oh, one other thing. Paragraph formatting. x.x A new paragraph should begin with every new line of dialogue.
:( It's sad.
This story has almost no formatting. But why did it touch me so? I mean, I'm a beta, I should have looked at the fisrt few lines then just close the window.
But this story... Very, very emotional. And the way you wrote it, with so few words on each page.... *sigh* beautiful.
One mistake I saw: there is a "t" where it should be "it"
Once again, beautiful.
Great story. i can't wait to read your sequel, though i kinda really hate you right now. there were so many things that just... sounded right, in your story. i won't be surprised if we see something similar to what you wrote in HPBP. Why i hate you? i'm working on a fic right now, and after three chapters, it lloks like rubbish when i put it next to yours (that doesn't mean i won't try to post it :)) your fic is really great... blah blah blah blah put together all the praise from the others, multiply it by 100000 and you'll have an idea of my opinion. Can't wait for your sequel!!!!!!
I've been keeping with your story for some time, but I didn't review (shame on me, you definitely deserve it). But as the last chaper is up... It was a great read, and I'll stick your name on my fav author list (just in case you write a sequel... hint...hint) Thank you for thaking to time to delight us with an awesome story... Best wishes, CRS.
Author's Response: Oh wow thank you so much. You have no idea how happy that has made me feel! :-) I will try to write a sequel after my exams.
Wonderful chapter :) Fred and George are fun as always, (you're very good at writing them, btw), and the Harry/Ginny interactioon is well-written. The description of how Harry felt about Ginny being stressed, and the lengths he would go to, just to help her is good :) I can't wait to see what Mrs Weasley does :D
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I hardly ever write Fred and George, so it's good to know that. xxx
lol. Very funny story. Looks like Snape finally gets his way. But if nearly all Slytherins are Snape Sensations, what about the Slytherin girls? I mean, while Snape might like the fact that they can stare at his... ahem... naked body, what do the girls think of that? And can we please get a scene of somebody drinking the Snape-d Polyjuice? :D
Great chapter! Great story! etc.etc...
Please update soon, the wait is killing me. I think this is the first time I review your story, sorry about that, but I'm a busy person...
Can't wait for chapter nine, update before you leave! Bye and have a nice holiday!
Author's Response: thank you! I'll update soon.
Harry is seventeen years old, and left unprotected now that Petunia is in Azkaban. The war has really begun, and The order will do whatever it takes to get as many magical races on their side that they can. Follow Harry through his last year at Hogwarts as he meets the new DADA Teacher, the new Quidditch Captain, Goes on a mission for The Order, and much, much more that I won't tell you about, so that while your reading the story you can fall off your chairs in shock. Let's just say this fic is packed with action, and you don't wanna miss it! PLEASE READ AND REVEIW!!!!!
Very touching chapter, and like you put it, sad. There is a startling similarity to HBP, and you wrote this long before that... congratulations.
There were a few spelling mistakes, but they don't take away from the beauty of the chapter.
Wonderfully written. Thank you :)
*chuckles* Ron is soooo smitten. I never thought about R/Hr, I just took it for granted. x.x But I love the way you wrote Ron's feelings. I doubt he is like that in canon, but just the image of him tying a ribbon to his bedpost makes me grin. It's so... sweet. :D Wonderfully written. :)
PS: I love the line about him and the books she's read. :D
Author's Response: Thanks! I really liked this idea when I came up with it, and I'm glad you liked it too. :-)
hey, i just found ya story and i want to say it's great. awesome. it's also the the one that touched me most (and i've read lots) 10
Author's Response: I'm so honored :D Thanks for your kind words !
lol. I never thought about how Hermione would react to being treated like that. But I doubt she'd actually be all submissive. But since you added that A/N, I guess I'll see. It's a good story, and it promises to get better.
*laughing* Great story :D Like the others say, the end is a bit confusing. But the free-for-all in the common room was hilarious. :D And the general confusion was the best part :D Everybody assuming, and plotting, and then just full-out war :D Wonderful! *grins*
Wonderful story :) And I like Ginny's attitude :D You wrote the entire Weasley family very well, and they fit the image I have of them.
I love the Harry/Ginny moments, when they are alone. You describe their emotions very well.
Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I don't mind if you kill Ron, or Hr, or anybody, but don't break up Harry and Katie, please. At least kill if you want them to be separated and hook Harry with Siobhan. I will read this to the end, because if I don't I'll always wonder.
Wonderfully written. I'm just a bit confused. When you talk about Ron, I got the impression that there was a R/Hr pairing. Then you make it obviously H/Hr. Aside from that, it's a beautiful story. Hermione's emotions are powerful, and her despair is clear.
It's sad... but it's good. Very good.
Author's Response: Thanks! - the story just came to me one evening and I wrote it down. I hopeyou enjoy my other fics as much.
Than you ever so much! You've helped a lot! I've submitted the story and it should be approved in a day or two, read it and let me know what you think of the edited version. I can't begin to tell you how much your suggestions helped. I've also modified the Petunia coming around stuff, and some other things. How could you think Harry was going to kill himself? I will never kill Harry in my fics. Also, i re-read the final scene and you were right (of course) about R/Hr. It's much better now. I didn't intend to ruin their friendship, it just came out that way, thanks for pointing it out for me. [ btw, you do have a 'that' problem, but it's nothing serious. ;-) ] Now on to the most serious business. Sorry for using your review section for advertising my story, but there's that log in problem and the limited amount of time i get to spend online. first, a few questions: are you proficient in Divination (or watever they call it in the real world)? Are you a medium? Because I could swear that you are chanelling JKR. I'm not joking. HP and the Power of Emotion sounded so... how should i put it... right, and so does the sequel. Just update very often, i can't wait to find out what happens next. yeah, about the 'sounds right' thing: things just click into place, like the ships (but that's no big surprise really, tough i think Harry will take more time to noticed Ginny, maybe get involved with somebody else for some time.), their behaviour, their relationship with the other caracters... i usually have trouble keeping to canon, but i'm glad there are people like you, who can just take the caracters and 'play with them' without changing who JKR made them. About the curse of the damned. this is where things go off-course. Don't get this wrong, your fics are among the best I've read, but they are fics, and I think JK has different plans for year seven (I don't think she will kill the dursley's, not all of them anyway. I sincerely wonder if Harry and Dudley will actually talk about girls, though i doubt it.) That's it for now, i think. Oh, that was a low blow, that warning about drinking 'in the next chapter'. I can't stand the waiting! Thanks loads for your help, you helped a lot. Hope you like what it became too, tell me what you think, i'm open to anything. If there's anything I could do for you, just ask. THX!! CRS
Great vhapter, i can't wait for the rest! 10!
Okay, this is a dark chapter. Very dark. It pained me to see Harry and Co go through that. Oh well, i just hope there is a happy ending. Or at least that Voldemort doesn't win.
*om my knees, begging you not to kill Harry*
Author's Response: I promise you Harry's not going to die in this story because there is a sequel coming! As for the happy ending... I hope it's as happy as the real books. There is (obviously) going to be more dark chapters but I hope the lighter moments will balance it out :)
I'm a H/G shipper, as you probably know, and this chapter is great! I'd like to know more about their kiss, but i'll wait for the next chapter. A little bit of advice: If after some time, we discover the reason for Ginny's distancing from Harry, and they get back together, don't do the push-you-away-to-protect-you thing. And i's like them to get together and live happily ever after, but it's out of my hands. Anyway, great chaper, and don't worry, you got the romance part just fine. A little more description of the feelings involved with the kiss wouldn't hurt, though. Can't wait to read your next chapter. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it :) I was fully expecting someone to send me a curse by email if I didn't include romance, lol!
The next chapter will show the reason for Ginny's distance from Harry. The pushing-you-away-to-protect-you thing isn't going to feature with H/G because I think that the story line has got a little bit overused. Thanks for the advice on description and I'll do my best to include it in the next chapter. I didn't want to go too far overboard with description as I wasn't too sure how much detail I should include. Thanks again for the review and I hope the romance becomes a little more descriptive in the next chapters! ~Stormy x