Why, hello there! I am FenrirG, but everyone around here knows me as Fenn. I'm a proud Ravenclaw over on the beta boards, and am also a PI Accredited Beta Reader. I'm a member of SBBC, and absolutely love writing and fanfiction of all sorts.
Ahem. More about me, you ask? The truth is, I'm not too fond of giving out personal information. (Understatement of the year) But here are the essentials:
I ship Lily/James and Dramione. I have an unhealthy obsession with werewolves. I love Romance and Maurader Era fics. I was the June Ravenclaw of the Month, and won the Gauntlet Round 4. I love my Turnips!
Now, as for my stories. I have four chaptered fics up currently: Fenrir, Barmy With Love, Peeves and the Blue Fairy, and The Lycanthrope and the Leper. However, the first three are currently on hiatus, as I'm very engrossed with the L and L.
There was a little Ravensprout
Her name was FenrirG
And she thought that Turnip-Land
Was the best place to be
The other 'Claws were kind to her
And taught her all they knew
Now she's a juicy Turnip
Who will do the same for you
Wow… I’m literally floored by this story; once again, simply amazing. Your manner of writing was very simple yet poignant, and it truly did capture the full and complete essence of Peter. The way he thinks he’s worthless and constantly puts himself down… You managed to pull it off perfectly, without making it seem awkward, unrealistic, or forced. Methinks I like this story even more than “Ashes of Blood and Rain”… and that, my friend, is very high praise indeed.
However, my favourite line of all would have to be this simple one: I didn’t want to feel happy. I firmly believe that you captured the entire essence of Pettigrew’s existence in that one brief sentence. It isn’t something many authors would be able to do successfully, but once again you manage to pull off the amazing.
There were so many other things I loved about this fic; calling the fridge and “ice-coffin” was an excellent touch, as was your biblical reference to Judas (quick note, though—I doubt Voldemort would know enough about religion/the Bible to know who Judas was, but that doesn’t really matter.) I also love how you fast-forward the story and show only critical points in Peter’s life.
Finally, the decision to go with a first-person point of view on this was a good one; you managed to capture Peter’s emotions perfectly. In my opinion, this was especially critical in the scene involving Peter’s interactions with Voldemort. I’m simply awed by the way you portrayed Peter’s shame, fear, and even pride at being with Voldemort; and, of course, how you carried these same emotions to every other aspect of Peter’s life.
I could go on and on pointing out my favourite quotes and everything you did well in the story, and as much as I’d like to, I think I’ll instead point out the very few nit-picks that I did notice.
“Yeah, how he thought it would be ‘bloody brilliant’ to send you flowers – lilies. Even though he knows your favorite flowers are roses.” I really don’t think that Lily would get so mad over something like this… However, I did find it rather humourous. =)
Not the part of the baby that belonged her, that was a girl, no. The part that belonged to James. I don’t really understand that you mean by “that was a girl”. Perhaps you could clarify this?
“Don’t mean to interrupt Lily.” There should be a comma before “Lily”.
“No it’s fine, no problem.” There should be a comma after the first “no”.
“Yes Master?”… Yes my lord.”
There should be commas after “Yes” in both of these sentences.
And finally, you sometimes capitalise “My Lord”, but say “my lord” at other times. =) You should probably choose one and stick with it.
All in all, I think this is definitely your best fic yet. It’s going straight into my favourites, and I simply cannot wait to read more fanfiction from you.
Author's Response: Wow. I don\'t know if my fic was worthy of such a incredible review, but there it is none the less. I seem to have the great fortune of attracting the best reviews. I am incredibly lucky. I\'m really glad that you liked the style I wrote it in. Looking back on it I worried if it was a little too boring or even empty, not nearly as dense as my other style. Unfortunately I wonder if perhaps I am a little to versitile and haven\'t really developed my own signature style as of yet and just plung into whatever character I\'m writing, and whil it does have some positive ramifications it also doesn\'t make me a very individual writer. Sorry, I\'m rambling here, pretensiously too. =) Anyways thanks so much for your fantastic review.
Wow! I've been meaning to review this lovely story for ages, and can't believe that I haven't gotten around to it!
Anyways... This story is simply wonderful! I read it late at night when everyone else was asleep, so needness to say it creeped me out quite a bit. o.o It was remarkably well-written, and I love your characterization of Harry. And the end! *dies* It was adorable, really, and I truly love how you portrayed the role reversal between Harry and his daughter.
Great job! This was a wonderful and meaningful story, and you're an amazing writer to boot. I look forward to reading more of your work. =]
Author's Response: Thank you, I\'m glad you found it. For some reason I enjoyed writing this, I never knew I had it in me,
I'm so happy this is up again. =) Kudos to you for getting to the bottom of the problem and solving this little mess. But I digress--on to the real review!
Like I've said before, this fic is simply amazing. Your humour is fresh, witty, and just plain, knee-slappingly funny; it's a true diamond in the ruff, worthy of some of MNFF's best authors. Your brilliant plotline is made even better with your wonderful way with words (hehe, alliteration unintended), strong sentence structure, and natural talent as a writer. I'm so very impressed with this fic, and it's going on my favourites [again =P]. I can't wait until the next chapter is up (although I've already read it *sticks out tongue at others*).
Anyways, Nat, like I said, it's spectacular. You're a truly gifted writer, and I'm so very glad that you share your talent with the rest of us.
Author's Response: Thanks, Fenn! As for the next chapter... I prefer to call it a \"sneak preview\". Thanks again for all your support and constantly listening to all my complaining!
Wow, I really did like this fic! It was a very interesting plot idea, and you managed to pull it off very well.
I'll admit that in the middle of the story, I was doubtful--love doesn't come that easy. So it was a pleasant surprise to see that you agreed with me, and showed this through Red's unfaithful actions.
I find it very intriguing that you chose the names "Ron" and "Lavender for your characters. Could it perhaps symbolize Ron Weasley and Lavender Brown's relationship--that Ron was just using Lavender to get his way? Interesting but clever choice!
Also, I love how you worked in the Wizard Card just at the very end; instead of showing her invent a potion, you instead chose to showcase the event(s) that lead her to pursue her dream. It was very well done and rather empowering too; her decision to become a Potioneer may have partly been for revenge, but it was something she had to prove to both Red andherself.
Like I said, this was a very well-written fic and I enjoyed it immensely. I'm amazed that this is your first story on Muggle Net Fan Fiction, and I can't wait to read more from you. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! While the names weren\'t complete coicidences I really didn\'t think of the paralell until it was pointed out to me by someone else and I love that it works that way. The choice to show the Wizard Card at the end seemed the natural thing to do. I figured it isn\'t the event that makes the interesting story it\'s what leads to it. I\'m very glad you liked it and yes I love to write but this is my first fanfiction here on any site really unless you count FF.net ages ago. But I\'ve just sumbitted the prologue to a chapter fic so that\'s coming up! Also, may I say I loved your review also, yay for long reviews!
You already know how much I love this poem, and I'm so glad it got up! I just read your first one, too, and it's absolutely amazing. *sigh* I'm jealous!
*cough* Anyways, your style is so unique and creative... I just love it! Your unconventional take on shipping is nothing short of beautiful, and your word choice is simple yet profound. Wonderful, wonderful job--I can't wait to read more from you, abd be sure to drop me an owl if you ever need a beta again!
Author's Response: Fenn! Aww, you\'re so sweet! *huggles* I couldn\'t have asked for a better beta or a cooler turnip. *huggles again*
I believe I've already told you, but I absolutely adore this story! You incorporated the plot in brilliantly, and your humour is perfect... Witty, fresh, and not too random, it had me in stitches the entire time.
I couldn't even begin to point out all the things I loved about it. Your style is delightfully light and entertaining, and you incorporation of little side romances was absolutely adorable. All the dares were strokes of pure brilliance (I particularly loved the red lacey bra) and the conclusion was... to use your word, 'guh". =P
As much as I'd love to give concrit, I don't have even a bit for you, Abigail dear. I absolutely loved this story, and thank you so much for writing it!
Author's Response: Fenn! *is pounced and squished* As you know, I\'m so, so glad you liked this fic! I think I\'m going to have to credit you for most of this -- I never would have written anything like this if it weren\'t for your fabulous prompt! (And yes, I\'m rather partial to the bra scene as well!)
And thank you so much for a wonderful review, Fenn. *hugs*
Wow, this was really quite good--especially for a first attempt at HP poetry. I'll admit that when I clicked the link I was ready for a cute and fluffy little poem, but this was anything but. The idea was extremely original, and as I said the title was clever but misleading. Very well written, too; the rhymes are discrete and not at all forced, and it was overall a very enjoyable read. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks, Fenn. As soon as I read that you were expecting cute and fluffy, I knew you hadn\'t read my other stories. *giggles* I have never been accused of being cute and fluffy. However, until you mentioned it, I didn\'t realize that the title would be misleading. But yeah, I guess people might think of something fluffy.
Anyway, I\'m really glad that you enjoyed it. Poetry is a new beast for me and your encouragement is greatly appreciated. Thanks so much. :D
Wow! Miki, that was nothing short of amazing.
First of all, it was such an interesting idea for you to write about; it was very original, and the fact that Norah is visiting their graves for the first time is very touching. And your writing, needless to say, was amazing. You certainly have a way with words; you somehow managed to make this story sad and touching, yet also very hopeful and inspirational in a way as well.
Norah is a lovely and realistic character, and I think you portrayed her emotions beautifully. The way she speaks to Lily and James is so engaging and personal; I almost feel as though I am there with them, listening as she speaks. It truly is lovely.
Oh, and the hot chocolate was a lovely touch as well. It’s so sweet and touching how Norah makes it for Lily; in fact, all the flashbacks were wonderful. And the ending… *cries* Perfect.
I have a few minor nit-picks (it was amazing that you didn’t use a beta, by the way!), but like Star said they’re mostly commas. So I’ll just mention one thing really briefly: you mentioned somewhere in there that James’ eyes were brown, when they’re really hazel. =]
Anyways, I really hope that you place in the category—you deserve it. Good luck in the challenge!
Wow. Just… wow. Tonks, this is amazing. Like, drop-dead wonderful, thought-provoking, and profound. Wow.
*cough* Okay, I’ll try to be a little bit more coherent in my review. First of all, what amazed me was the point of view and tense. Present tense itself can be very difficult to write, and coupling it with something as unconventional as second person point of view makes the story all the more amazing. It is so personal and meaningful; it’s amazing. I know that it was just for this chapter, but... Wow.
Now, your writing itself is fantastic, as is the plot line. I love how you put an unconventional spin on Remus’ father—most people have him as being a kind person, but your portrayal of him is unique yet makes sense. What can I say? I love it!
The end of the chapter was absolutely brilliant, too. The last sentence is absolutely chilling—I may not be a mother, but I think you’ve conveyed her maternal feelings and internal struggle wonderfully. I’m sure that any parents out there reading this fic are really put in a turmoil; it’s that good. Might I ask if you’re a mother yourself?
Now, on to the nit-picking. There was very little, but here is what I picked up on.
“It isn't fair on him, to burden him with this curse.” [I think it would sound better if you said “It isn’t fair to him”]
“No matter how much you cry for him, hold him; love him…” [You should probably use either two commas or two colons, instead of a comma and a colon, in order to be more uniform.]
That said, this is an absolutely wonderful story that I’m definitely adding to my favorites—and recommending over at Fiction Junction. I’m literally on the edge of my seat, waiting for more. Keep up the brilliant work.
PS-Fellow werewolf lover, eh? =] *hugs* Me too, all the way! [Love your penname, by the way!]
Author's Response: Oh my.... *faints* wow! Thankyou so much, Fenn! That was - you\'re so - wow! *hugs* Love you! Thankyou so much for taking the time to review, and all your comments - wow. I really appreciate it, thankyou so much! Thanks for pointing out those two \"nitpicks\" - I\'ve gone and edited them; you\'re right, it does sound better your way. You\'re - you - wow - you - Fiction Junction???? THANKYOU! You\'re awesome! I can\'t tell you how pleased this has made me - I can\'t stop grinning! lol. But no, I\'m not a mother, actually, so I\'m very pleased to hear that I portrayed the maternal feelings well :) Thankyou so much for you rewiew - it\'s made my day, week - month! Now I really ought to shut up before I permenantly damage my face from grinning.... Thankyou so much, it\'s people like you that make writing wort it :) Tonks PS - Yeah, werewolves rule don\'t they? We werewolves - *coughs awkwardly* - I mean, werewolves in general, lol, should rule the world!
This was absolutely amazing. Your imagery was excellent, your puns were witty and refreshing, and you worked in all the prompts so wonderfully into your story... It was amazing. You've managed to create such a real, lovely personality for Theo, and Mr. Deathly, too. Wow.
As someone else said, I would never be able to quote all my favorite parts, as it was alll fantastic. I can't help but marvel how you can work humour into even the most serious of plots... and this was the sort of story that gets you both laughing and feeling more than a little bit creeped out. It was a fantastic combination; you certainly continue to impress.
Oh, and the ending! I absolutely adored it; it was cute, clever, and just about perfect... Great job.
So yeah. Overall, this was a simply amazing story. It's going right into my favourites, and I can't wait to read more from you! Good luck in the Gauntlet!
Author's Response: Ohh, Fenn! I\'m so glad you liked it, having been very impressed by yours. I\'m glad you thinkI pulled off the laughing/being creeped out balance well; my mum thinks it\'s \"creepy\" and couldn\'t finish it. (At least, that\'s her excuse.)
Awww! I'm usually not a Ron/Hermione shipper, but I just found this adorable. Especially since I have a huge soft spot for animals.
Author's Response: Hehe, thanks so much Fenn! Its great when writers I love review my work. I get all fuzzy inside. =]
o.O Hmm, it appears that my review got cut off. Here. I'll copy and paste it again. =]
Awww! I'm usually not a Ron/Hermione shipper, but I just found this adorable. Especially since I have a huge soft spot for animals.
Author's Response: Hmm...I wonder what was happening? I got the review you did the first time...*dun dun dun* \'Tis a mystery.
*growls* Sorry for spamming your review section, but for some reason it keeps cutting off? Last try, then. Continuing where it left off.
"Anyways, this was a wonderfully well-written story, and I loved the characterization of Ron in the story. The entire plot was very realistic--simple but delightful and refreshing.
Like I said, this is a really cute story, and I very much enjoyed reading it. =] Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read more from you!"
*knock on wood* HOpe this works!
Author's Response: Fenn! You may spam my review section as much as you like, seeing as I\'ve gotten nothing but compliments so far. This reminds me, I\'m off to read your story The Lycanthrope and the Leper. *walks over to Fenn\'s place to wallow in werewolf stories*
This was so, so beautiful. I was completely riveted from the first sentence, and I simply couldn't stop reading. You captured Mrs. Diggory's emotions so well; they're raw and painful, but you captured them beautifully.
I've always known it, but I'll say it again--you have a way with words that's truly your own. This is just... Wow. Your imagery was so beautiful and wonderful, but I'm most awed about how you managed to capture her emotions. It was sad but beautiful.
I loved the part where she pocketed the handful of dirt. It almost reminds me of Neville, keeping the gum wrapper his mother gave him. And the letter. The letter was so simple but beautiful. Just like the rest of the story.
So all in all, Andi, I am speechless. This was such a wonderful story, and I'm simply floored. You're a-m-a-z-i-n-g, Anrea! *huggles* Great job!
Author's Response: Fennnnnnnnn!!! Thank you so much for your beautiful and thoughtful review of my little story - you\'re making me cry! I love that the pocketing of the dirt was reminiscent to you of Neville pocketing his mother\'s gum wrapper. I do think we tend to make treasures out of things that remind us of the one we love. I not only take to heart your review of my story, but also your encouraging and up-lifting words about my writing. They mean so much, especially as you are such a very gifted and talented writer that I quite admire. I will constantly refer back to this review on the days I wonder if I have what it takes to keep trying, keep writing. Thank you, Fenn! *huggles and squishes dear friend* ~Andi
We finally checked into a hotel with internet connection [I'm on vacation], yours was the first story I checked--and I'm happy I did! I absolutely love your story! =]]]] Harry's testimony was very real and touching, and I loved how you put in the little details about a female attorney in a predominently male field. Your writing style is absolutely wonderful--it's friendly and personal, but has a distinctly professional touch. And the ended was just awwww.
So yeah.. Overall, this was an absolutely wonderful fic, and I loved it! Best of luck on the challenge!
Author's Response: Awwww! Fenn, my smile is basically jumping off my face right now! You leave such great reviews!! I feel honored that you went to find my story while on vacation (and I understand the lack of internet in hotels - I had three weeks once without connection *shudders*). Thank you for leaving such a wonderful review - my day is infinitely better. And good luck to you as well in the challenge!!
This was an excellent and very beautiful story. =] I think you characterized Draco very well, and the build up of tension and excitement to the ending--a bit anticlimatic for Draco, perhaps, but shocking for the reader--was very well done. You're an excellent author, and I look forward to reading more of your work. Very well done. =]
Author's Response: Gosh, thankyou very much. I\'m actually heading into my final year of high school this year, so posting more work might prove a bit difficult. But I will try my best. Thankyou again. :)
Aww. That truly was a heartwarming and beautiful story. You have all the characters so well-written, and the storyline was just inspired. =] Excellent job, and I hope to read more of your writing.
Author's Response: One of the things that I enjoy most when writing is how I can have the most fun with character interaction. I especially love a good Christmas story. All of my work can be found at my home site, Sink Into Your Eyes. That you for reading. Eric B.
Aw, this was cute. :) I love the dialogue between Snape and Lily - their friendship and one-sided romance was captured perfectly. James was written wonderfully too. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad it was in character and believable, that's usually what I'm most worried about. :)