Great chapter. Still in a lot of suspense though! Remus and Lily have to work it out. they're clever people! and with a little prod from albus... Ach poor George. Poor Remus. Thought Percy was v gd, and ingenious Dumbledore's use of him.
Author's Response: Thanks :) I refuse to comment on who will know what when. This fic lasts 4 years. I have some things that will drag on for a little while. The next chapter gets us through the first half of year one. Some people will know quite a lot by year two. Oh and glad you liked the addition of Percy. Someone needed to throw a fit over Albus's visit to the Potters, and he just showed up unexpectedly. :)
Wow i know you said that this chapter was gonna be shorter but tbh it felt longer, probably because we were sticking around in school and the last chapter felt like too many fragments. excellent chapter anyway.
Author's Response: Ahh, I havve been criticised for abruptness and over-stretched chapters before, so I appreciate you sharing the gut feeling. I've been working on it, and will continue to.
V exciting chapter really enjoyed it. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: :) Glad you liked it. Hopefully the next chapter won't be too much of a change. The vibe is rather different.
i really do love this story. Good chapter but too short I felt, looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Glad you're still nejying the fic, and unfortunately, I think the next chapter is a little shorter...sorry?
nice chapter, gd characterisation and a lot of pathos. However i feel this story is moving too slowly, little has changed since chapter 1, just my opinion, i'm still enjoying the story.
Author's Response: You're right, I'm afraid. While I knew my basic plot by the time I started posting the story, I hadn't thought out all the details, and so I made the mistake of not really setting up the story properly. In a few chapters, the plot is really going to stop snowballing - I think. You've definitely found one of my biggest weaknesses, though - I'm bad at moving plot and characterization along evenly. I'm glad you like it anyway, though; thanks for reviewing.
Hi I've read your fic over the last few days and really enjoyed it. Interesting to see an American perspective, though it would perhaps be nice to see a familiar character from time to time. One point i wasn't clear about, what does each house look for in a student? On what criteria are they sorted? Good stuff.
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. I'm sorry that you won't be seeing any familiar characters...this like Hogwarts is for British wizards, Wentwater is strictly for American wizards. Again, breaking away from the setup of Hogwarts, Wentwater's halls do not have "criteria" for its selection. The wizards whose name are lent to the halls are more important. It's another distinction between the two schools. Try to think of Wentwater and Hogwarts separately, with their own traditions. I hope you keep reading!
This is a really interesting take on lily and petunia, intrigued to know how you think petunia became so bitter.
Author's Response: thank you, i was getting worried no-one would review it.
Nice chapter, good pace, though perhaps more talk than action. Setting up the dilemmas and problems that need to be solved next. Liked Severus/Remus scene especially, and v intrigued by Albert. look forward to more.
Author's Response: I'm saving the action! There will definately be more Albert! And yes, there needs to be a lot of setting up in this fic...there are so many plotlines going on. :-)
Brilliant chapter, Everything i wanted in a Snape/Maeve reunion. I loved the imagery of Maeve following the two patronuses to her husband and i liked your explanations of RAB, Snapes side of things, Narcissa etcetc. Excellent descriptive passages as always.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was worried about the reunion because it was going to be quite important from the main character's POV....so I'm glad you liked it.
Enjoyed the chapter, though very little in the way of action. Liked the wedding, and its contrast with Maeve and Snape's. Lots of strands set up I look forward to hearing more about- Snape's actions, Malfoy, Maeve and Narcissa and of course Ginny and Harry.
Excellent and exciting chapter. V gd shifting between characters, lots of suspense. I liked the involvement of the Sorting Hat, interesting idea.
Evil, evil ending. Please be quick with the update. A chapter really about relationships- pushing the limits of Severus' and Maeve's now that they are together again, and Remus' and Felicia's in its beginnings. No huge plot developments- except Snape's revelation about Regulus, but that wasn't hugely unexpected. look forward to more.
Very impressed by how quickly you've got this up considering how much plot tweaking must have happened after hbp. Very insightful- oh how i wish maeve is right. Brilliant chapter as I have come to expect from you. Fantastic description and insight into characters. Roderick is still a mystery- what a stirrer. And i will be very interested about what you feel there is/has been between snape and narcissa. I felt there had to be a reason for snape to make the vow, when it seems such an out of character thing for him to do, tying himself down. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thanks, ellidiot! I was struck by major inspiration when I'd read HBP and really fell into that chapter. I hope you like my explanation for Snape/Narcissa, which will come later! I did do some tweaking and it certainly wasn't the opening chapter that I had anticipated...but it worked and I'm looking forward to fitting my original story around this one.
Loved Rampton and Maeve's relationship and Snape's reaction to it- very in character though Rampton is still a puzzle. Glad Harry's back at Hogwarts and look forward a little HG, HR romance. Would've liked to have seen Remus though!
Great chapter, hugely exciting and everything fitted very well. Loved Snape/Maeve, and Lupin's realisation. Hopefully he'll get in touch with a certain Irish witch again! Also enjoyed Harry's leadership role.
Author's Response: I'm not sure if Remus has entirely burned his bridges with Felicia yet...I guess we'll have to wait and see! Thanks for reviewing. :-)
Excellent chapter, although perhaps largely here to move the plot along instead of any great character revalations, it has a sense of purpose to it that pulls it together nicely. looking forward to the escapade and to seeing some more of roderick.
Author's Response: You're spot on! I felt that as I was writing it, it was definately a bridge between the opening chapter and Hogwarts. But it needed to be done and we are set up now for the next few chapters.
Nice chapter character-wise. we haven't really seen all that much of Harry recently, or in dotl either, so is nice to catch up with him, see how he's maturing. Arthur was gd, though Ron i was less sure about, i like to think that he is a little more mature, keeping up with harry, not in a serious, saving the world way, but is a calming influence. thats how i've always seen him, apart from his moodiness in gof. cliffhanger ending, look forward to next chapter. and congrats on getting the mod job!
Aww! oo that was a nice ending. and you even resisted the urge for a cliff hanger... Seeing Severus and Maeve together is always nice, and i thought Narcissa was particularly gd. Harry's pissing me off, but thats nothing new. when's he gonna notice the locket's at grimmauld place. is that not a good enough reason to go there? great chapter
Wow. Brilliant chapter. Characterisation fantastic as always, especially enjoyed Narcissa's character, she is a weak woman pretending to be strong just as Draco is a weak wizard pretending to be strong- the effect of breeding on the pair of them is clear. The interaction of Narcissa and Maeve continues to grip me, it is one of my favourite aspects of the story. Hope to see Severus again soon, am missing him! Looking forward to next chapter as ever.
Author's Response: Narcissa and Maeve's catty conversations are still fun to write. Narcissa has disappeared... but hopefully not for long! And I think you have your answer to Severus in chapter five... hope you like it! Thanks for reviewing!
Surely not another cliffhanger? getting annoyed now. Can't wait for next chappie
Author's Response: I'm sorry! I can't resist the occasional cliffhanger. I didn't realise when I submitted that the queue was about to be closed otherwise I wouldn't have left it hanging quite so badly. Chapters four and five are ready to be submitted when the queue re-opens so hopefully you won't have to wiat to long to find out why Narcissa is so upset.