I guessed right! go me! v gd chapter
Author's Response: Thank you.
yay! success all round. hmm will dd tell snape the whole story?
Wow i just read the whole story from scratch and it is fantastic! Brilliant characterisation, complicated plot, intelligent discussion of important issues and a brilliant interpretation of the harry potter world. Sorry i didn't review earlier but i've only just registered.
just read 33 and 34. Brilliant. This is the cleverest, most entertaining, sweetest, most exciting fic i've ever read and probably compares favourably to some actual books. So gd.
great chapter. nice now ron is back and can add some humour. vd's plans will be well and truly foiled...
Bloody cliffhanger! bloody vd! just hope they can get ginny back. Rick to the rescue! etcetc. v gd chapter
wow. This whole story is so good. Glad you went for the happy ending- dark materials made me cry! A truly fantastic, original, creative, intelligent story. Really hope you decide to write another story!
starts well but i'm gonna need a lot of convincing to believe that dd and harry's friends would turn their backs on him. after all dd can always seem to tell when harry is telling the truth.
This is a brilliant story. Just a coupole of points: harry would not use a quarter in england, and the french should be Les phooeys de mon petit chat. Other than that i really like the story and your interpretation of the characters. Tyler's a really great new character as well. Is he magic in a conventional sense? will he be getting a Hogwarts letter soon?
Author's Response: That is so great that you can tell me what I wanted to really say on the box of chocolates! I don't know anyone who speaks fluent French, so I really appreciated that so very much!! Also, of course! Harry wouldn't use a quarter.......I could just 'he put in his coin, or something, unless you know the name of the coin he would actually use?? I don't know much about this site. I have to find out if I change that information to the correction you have helped me with, will the chapters have to be validated again with the changes? I am definitely going to my other posted sites, fanfiction.net and SIYE to change that right away. You have really helped me with that information, and I'm so pleased with the way you present your review....very kind, AND helpful. Tyler is more of a wild magic character, but yes, he will be going to Hogwarts and he is tied to the reason why the story is called , The Fifth House. He remains in the whole story, but once back at Hogwarts, everyone is very prominent in the story again. I wanted to keep it to only one new character, because someone told me that people don't like non canon characters. I think it's okay as long as they don't take over the whole story, which I haven't let this one do, especiallly when back at Hogwarts. Anyway, any infomation you can give me is well appreciated and your review is so appreciated. Thanks so much!
no problem but i can promise you i'm not fluent in french! doing it for gcses can quit this summer! hurrah! anyway just thought you might like to know my french dictionary informs me that the word for droppings is les crottes, so you would say les crottes de mon petit chat. mind you i think phooeys looks better.
I can't believe they rejected one of your chapters! your story is superb! anyway i'm gonna go take a look on fanfiction.net! great chapter.
Author's Response: HI! I'm so glad you're still reading!! The night the chapter was rejected, it was approved by someone else, so I was so happy and relieved! I'll have to be more careful with errors and stuff, because I still have no idea why it was at first rejected. I feel much better now, but what made me feel better was nice reviewers like you who encouraged me to continue to post. That was such a lift. Thanks so much for your help and I hope to hear from you soon as chapters come out, because you have good advice!
What a great story! really looking forward to reading more of this one.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I have submitted the second chapter over six days ago, but heard nothing. I guess they're busy. I really appreciate the review! I didn't know if I'd get any at all. I have about sixty on fanfiction.net I have fourteen chapters up over there though, so that makes a difference. The whole story is complete and has about six hundred pages to it, but I'm posting once or twice a week to make sure I check carefullly enough for errors. It's so easy to miss them. I hope you can stick with this story and that you like it. I was so nervous writing it, because it's my first. Voldemort comes in at about chapter three for more action. Again, thank you so very much for your time, it is so appreciated and gives me a smile!
Author's Response: HI, I don't think I can get anything else posted here for some reason. I tried as much as I have time for, so I hope to see you again on fanfiction.net. I'm so bummed out about this.
yay first review! great chapter. ten out of ten etc. I said some more on fanfiction.net but have tried to resist reading ahead too much...
Author's Response: Oh, you have been so awesome and supportive and I can't tell you how much that means to me as a first time writer of fanfiction. I am submitting another chapter tonight, so hopefully, it will come up soon. Soon, there will be Griffins, animagi, and dragons, oh my! I hope people can hang on until something really big starts to happen. A family week has been planned and of course, Harry has no real family, so it kind of sucks for him, but he will get a love interest that will become very serious and is even a part of the weapon that the dark lord knows not.... Hogwarts will not be spared in this one either, because the war has begun. I really hope you can stay and tell me what you think, as I know I've taken my time getting to all the big points of interest, but I didn't want to rush it either. Your reviews make me think I didn't make a mistake taking things slow to build up into something when Harry returns to a place he considers home, and that makes me so happy! I can't express how pleased I am that would take your valuable time to review for me! It is appreciated whole heartedly! thanks a thousand fold!! You have made my day!
ah wow just read whole practically brothers/wounded and the next one on fanfiction.net, i love these stories! you're very talented and have captured both characters well. also interesting to see how lupin is affected by being a woman- v insightful. fantastic stories, please keep writing!
Hey i've been trying to review for a while now, but it keeps logging me out. I like the story as a whole and Sam is a great OC. However i found the first two chapters more interesting than the rest, because they were both more exciting and i enjoyed sam meeting the characters initially. It's still good though, keep updating!
A sweet chapter but needs some more action I feel. And i personally would've preferred Harry to be a whole lot less polite to Cho.
Nice chapter, enjoyed movement between characters, flowed well. But not sure i can take the strain of any more suspense. So many cliffhangers not sure i can keep track tbh. look forward to next chapter anyhow.
Author's Response: Not sure you can keep track? *weep* I don't want to confuse anyone. That is a very bad thing. This review is causing consternation, but that's a good thing. I need to know when a chapter (or a fic in general) isn't working. Thanks very kindly, ellidiot.
Ah this story is so addictive. I love the Draco/Malfoy incidents and Draco/Lucius conversation. However I think you could've made more of the Halloween party, esp Hermione and Harry meeting Ron's parents and Dumbledore interacting with the first years. Looking forward to Dumbledore making the connection between Harry and the Potter's child who 'died'. I wonder how he will react to it, whether he will tell Harry or the Potters when his connection with them must not come to light.
Author's Response: Yeah, the revelations are always the most fun parts. I'll get there someday, and hoepfully it will be cathartic as it should. Chapter 8 has a big revelation in it! Now if I could just finish the Lily section it could go to beta :)
As for the Halloween party. In my outline the entire section was supposed to focus on Dumbeldore. He was supposed to take us around the party and have a nice talk with Melinda Potter at some point, but then Harry and Draco absconded with the chapter and had their karyoke party. After reading your comments...it would have been a reasonable segue to have Albus and Melinda talk about the cute fairy-light-stoned kid that looked like a Potter-cousin. Maybe I should go rewrite?
Thanks for the comments. :)
well whatever you say about writers block, i thought this chapter was excellent. Dumbledore and Fred I particularly enjoyed, very poignant. And i like Draco and Harry being friends as well, and background to Hermione's rage. Very good chapter, look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I love Dumbledore and Fred. Hermione is a work in progress... :) The boys, Draco and Harry are good for each other, don't you think? Until next chapter!
What a great story and original slant on things. Brilliant idea and clearly well thought out not to mention very well written. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind comments! :)