I'm Jennifer. I write fics for your enjoyment (well, mostly my own, but I hope you enjoy it too).
That was such a sweet story! I really really liked it. Ron was brilliant, you had a perfect mix of his feelings for Hermione and embarrassment of everyone knowing. It was beautiful!
Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments! This is my first story ever to be accepted by MuggleNet Fanfiction, so I was really hoping everyone would like it. Your review means a lot.
That was heaps good, I loved it! Come to think of it, I love all your stories! I haven’t seen the play or anything, but I want to now. I loved how straightforward Lily was with Sirius and Henrie, and the "Flitwick Incident of '73". Hilarious. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m glad you enjoyed it, and the rest of my stories!
That was a really good chapter! I'm getting excited. I want to find the play so I can find out what happens *hangs head guiltily* but I can't find it anywhere!
“I think with people like Lily and James,” Remus began, thoughtfully, “they’ll either be the greatest, fiercest, indomitable twosome you’ve ever met, or they’ll hate each other so much that they ... well, act like they do.
That was really good, and suits Lily and James perfectly. I've always thought of them like that, love or hate, but the way you said it was better.
Methinks the Slytherins will try to get Izzie and Sirius to hook up, so he breaks up with Henrie and then the twins hate each other.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Well, I guess you\'ll find out what happens (either through the play or the fic, it happens ... well, similarly) Thank you thank you thank you, this was a great review!
I love this story! It's short but sweet, just how I like 'em. I noticed how you wrote 'love' on the end of James's letter to Lily - sneaky! I can't wait for the final chapter! I think it's gonna be good!
Author's Response: Ah, you picked up on that, did you? Sneaky, indeed. I\'ll update as soon as I can.
Ooohh! A cliffie! How exciting! I really like this story. I studied up on the plotline of Much Ado About Nothing, and now I think I've pretty much figured out who's who and what will happen. But I wouldn't put it past you to totally change it so it's not so predictable! Great chapter!
Author's Response: =D Thanks. I\'m going to try and stick to original plot (I don\'t want to feel like I\'m cheating Shakespeare) but I\'ll hopefully make it entertaining along the way, whether you know what\'s coming or not. Thanks, as always, got the great review!
Okay. I actually did clap then, and my brother looked at me weirdly. That was great! I loved how there was the big plan, that didn't even go the way it was supposed too and they got back together anyway. *sighs*
You do such a brilliant job on you're stories, and I just hope that one day I can write as well as you. Congratulations!
Author's Response: Thank you! Although, if you really did just clap, I don\'t blame your brother for looking at you weirdly. But don\'t worry, because ne\'er a day goes by when MY brothers don\'t give me a funny look ... I\'m really glad you enjoyed the story, because I enjoyed writing it, too. My advice if you want to write well: Practice. It\'s not quite as overrated as you may think. It\'s taken me over two years to get this far! Thanks again, you\'re a great reviewer, and I\'m always happy to hear from you!
OMG! That was so funny! Selina seemed too nice to be a Slytherin though, I think you should have made her do a Sirius and end up in another house. You handled the subject really well, it wasn't gross like I was expecting it to be. I've always wondered what happens to girls at Hogwarts when ... you know. That was really good!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review. I understand your concerns on Selina\'s house, however, I have always hated the idea that all Slytherins are mean and terrible people. Selina is cunning enough to try to deal with this on her own, and she is very self reliant. I find these to be more important Slytherin traits than simple meanness. Anyway, thanks again!
I just read all three chapters, and let me say, that is one of the best stories I have read in a while. Congratulations!
I loved the whole "drunk Sirius trying to work a video camera" idea, and the way you portrayed all the characters ... brilliant. Especially Remus and Lily, I thought you did them very well.
Keep up the good work!
*Squeals and jumps around in delight*
I'm sorry. James Potter does that to me. This was adorable! You've made me delirious. *Squeals some more*
Author's Response: Ooh, James Potter does that to me too! He\'s hot, rich, smart, and sexy- what more can a girl want? :D Thanks for the review!
That was HILARIOUS!
I was laughing when I read the summary, and didn't stop. You can't exactly blame Myrtle, I s'pose ... *sighs*
Author's Response: Yeah....
Sirius alone, in the bath. - it would be hard to refuse the temptation. lol. And thank you for telling me how much you enjoyed it in a review!
I was looking through the most recent stories, and I saw this one and it caught my eye because you don't hear much about Merope.
It's really good! You write brilliantly. The only thing I found weird was that it doesn't seem very canon. I'm just a little confused. So this happens before Marvolo and Morfin get sent to Azkaban?
A really good story still. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, it does take place before Azkaban. Your review means so much. :-)
Yay! SPEW buddy!
The title of this fic immediately made me want to read it. Very catchy! I’m jealous of people who are good at titles. Mine always suck. :]
It was very easy to tell that Jane was James’ twin, even if you didn’t say anything about it. They were really alike. I just hope that you don’t continue to make her a female copy of Jane, because even identical twins have different personalities.
All of your characterisation was excellent for the first chapter though. I’m just not really that fond of making Peter their friend because he was alone. Taking pity on him is something James would do, but I can’t really imagine Peter just sitting there all alone. He was a Marauder, after all. And yes, I know I have a soft spot for the teenage Peter. :]
I found one tiny typo:
Most people don’t talk about being a Squib or about they people they know that are Squibs.
It should be the people.
I hadn’t read any of your fics before, but you do write beautifully. I love the way you make everything unfold, without having to tell it specifically (one of the things I always have trouble with!) I adored this story, and I can’t wait to see what you come up with for chapter 2!
Brilliant, as per usual.
I love the characterization on everyone, and how you make the lesser known characters have developed personalities. That was a really smart sounding sentence, hey? :)
Anyways, I absolutely LOVED the ending, even though it made me a little sad, to think of what would happen to them all. I liked the little detail about the Potters cat, too.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! And thanks for nominating me as well in the QSQ ... *huggles*
Hi Rachel! I thought I may as well review your first few chapters.
You have excellent characterisation. I loved how you described Peter, especially the last line:
“But James, Sirius, and Remus knew that he would always have their back, just as they would for him.”
That bit just made me go ‘aww’, because you can see the unconditional love they had for Peter, and all the trust they put into him, even though he wasn’t as cool as them and didn’t fit in much.
James’ feelings for Lily were very well done, because you’ve made him really love her, and he’s not just obsessed with chasing her.
I absolutely loved James’ astonishment at being made Head Boy. He seemed so terrified! I can imagine Sirius saying something about the Head Girl too. It’s so very Sirius for that to be the first thing that comes into his head! And “Moldy Mildred Plotker” and “Patty the Fatty Jordan” made me crack up laughing. :]
I found a mistake though, when they travel by Floo Powder to Diagon Alley. In the books travelling to Diagon Alley will make you come out through the Leaky Cauldron, won’t it? You can correct me if I’m wrong, but I thought that’s what happened.
I really like this fic so far!
Author's Response: wow jennifer that was a very good reveiw :D Thanks for everthing on characterization, i totally stuggled trying to get them perfect while i was writing those chapters so that means alot. And as for the floo powder thing, you\'re probably right. I didnt have a clue when i was wrinting it so i thought id just wing it. Well this reveiw really made my night! Thanks again!! -Rachel
I like how you’re doing the switching between Lily and James. I love fics like that, because you can see feelings developing on both sides.
Hollie reminded me so much of my older sister (who, coincidentally, is called Holly) with how she annoyed her brother, took ages to get ready and has boys chasing her … but Hollie seems nicer than my sister! :]
“AH! IT BURNS!” he shouted, covering his eyes in shock. “Hollie Madison Ashford, you go put some clothes on, you filthy little wanker!”
I loved the first part of this, but Luke calling his sister a “filthy little wanker” seems to be going a bit far, when all the other teasing between them is light-hearted.
All the descriptions of what James has done to Lily were good, because it gave a bit of background to what their relationship was like. I laughed at the love potion bit. It was so typical of Lily to notice and switch them.
One more chapter!
Author's Response: wow jen, another great reveiw :D And i love that Hollie reminds you of your older sibling becasue she is...somewhat based off of my older brother Kyle...sorta. I suppose that the wanker bit is a little mean but...its just so much fun to say! HAH. bye! -Rachel
Oh … I adore James. He’s so gorgeous! *fangirl squee*
This chapter was good, but you seemed to be rushing through it a lot, and it didn’t flow as well as the first two, especially when they were on the train. Writing journeys on the Hogwarts Express is definitely the hardest part to write of any fic, because they’re all pretty much the same. :]
The part when Sirius came back from saying hello to his “friends” was funny, but I don’t think that Sirius is really that kinda guy. Sure, he’s good-looking, but I don’t think he’s that … easy.
I still love this, though.
Author's Response: Haha isnt he though :] and as for the Sirius issue, bit of a backstory for you... Sirius really was going to see his friends, guy friends i mean, their names are Jon and Chuck. And sirius\'s clothes were messed up becasue they challenged eachother to a bit of a wresting match. so you see, reading is very subjective. everone interprets it differently thanks again jen. *proud of rhyme*
That was hilarious! Somebody actually being called Roonil Wazlib ... and George's reaction at the end was amazing. *wipes tears of laughter from her eyes*
Ahhh! My computer crashed and I was panicking that this story would be updated before I got it back! It was, but thankfully the computer man (whoever he is) was a lot quicker than I expected. Anyway.
I loved the start of this chapter. Sirius never fails to amuse me. Even if what he is doing is er ... slightly disturbing. I love seeing Remus's perspective on things, becuase it's not very often you see it and he's different to the rest of the Marauders. Funny, yet slightly serious and cynical of his friends.
Marty. Gotta love her. She's a brilliant character. I just want to know, what on earth is she going to do with their signatures?
Oh, and one more thing: can I have a T shirt? Pretty pretty please?
Author's Response: *grins* Maybe I should start selling them! I\'m glad your computer got fixed (yay, computer men!) and that you enjoyed the chapter. That\'s what I\'m here for, after all! As for the signatures ... well, it\'s up to your imagination I guess! But probably she\'ll just put them with her notes, and analyse their handwriting later on - for someone with her ... um ... \"hobby\", their signatures would be a gem!
Aww! That was such a great chapter. I’m glad it was a happy chapter, because I think I’ll cry if you make any more sad ones. And it’s Christmas! You can’t have sad chapters. Merry Christmas, by the way! :]
I’m so happy that Marty is beginning to make friends.
Is there a word that can sum up Marty Price’s persona? I don’t think so.
I loved that line! It’s so true for Marty. She’s such a great character.
This isn’t a very good review, but it’s Christmas! Yay!
Author's Response: Merry Christmas to you too! You\'re right, it would have been HORRIBLE of me to put out a sad chapter right before Christmas, so it\'s good that the timing worked out that way ... thanks for reviewing, as always! I\'ll try and update as soon as I can in the new year. =D
I don’t mind it being short! This is probably my favourite chapter so far, even though I do say that every chapter. :]
I feel so sorry for everyone! Marty … Aunt Tabby … Remus … Remus’ mum … James …
I loved the part about Remus’ transformation (well, not really, because it’s sad) and you wrote it really well. It’s not very often you see fics where he undergoes his transformation alone, and I think you described it brilliantly. You’re amazing at description and people’s emotions.
I really love Remus. I have suspicions that this story will make him overtake Sirius in my “Marauders I want to marry” list. Not that I actually have a list like that, of course. :]
I can’t wait for the next chapter! *fangirl squee*
Author's Response: Thanks! I love your reviews! They\'re always so nice ... I feel sorry for a lot of people, too. Poor them. At least it\'s in my power to make things work out for them. Thanks so much for saying I describe people\'s emotions well, you\'re the second person to say that, and I do struggle with it sometimes. So it\'s really great to hear. Thank you!