I am a huge Harry Potter fan and appreciate the numerous talented people who put their time and effort into writing the wonderful fan fiction stories. I just submitted my first fanfic, "Harry Potter and the Reflection of Darkness". Please read and review if you have the time.
I think this was one of the best chapters you've written! I love Harry's discomfort at the birthday party and the fact that he was the one to try to smooth things over with himself and Snape. It was brilliant how you drew the parallels between their lives and I think that the fact that Harry was so persistent in making things right between them shows he is maturing and realizing that there is more than one dimension to people. I have read in Celtic mythology that phoenixes are red and gold, but it's a minor thing and I'll attribute it to artistic license!
Author's Response: hehhe- whooops. I suppose I should do some research before I write down my ideas. Oh well- in my 'world' Phoenixes come in a variety of colours. Wow- you really put a lot of thought into your review, and that makes me so happy (esp. since it's all complimentary!!!!) Heheh- I even get an "artist's license" THanks!
I really enjoyed this one-shot and you had so much material here I think it could have been drawn out into many more chapters. The archway has always intrigued me and I thought it was very creative how you drew it into the story. I have a feeling we will learn much more about it in the future from JKR. I think what I loved most about this story is your use of dialogue. It was so well written and flowed as a conversation should. You also portrayed emotion between the characters very well. I can completely see Harry acting just the way he did in order to protect his friends. For all he's been through, he's kind of immature about things and he can be a bit of a brat. I have a feeling he will meet his match in Ginny and she may very well be what saves him in the end.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it despit my errors in canon. I think you are correct in that we will learn more about the arch from JKR. Infact, I think we will learn a lot about the Department of Mysteries in general from her. I can see Harry going the route he did in this story, but being unable to maintain it. He almost cracks under Hermione's pressure, she is just not strong enough to do it. Ginny is. I think you are correct about Ginny saving Harry in JKR's writing. This is a hero, who is going to be broken by the time all is said and done. Someone is going to have to save him. It is interesting that in CoS, Dumbledore takes the time to point out that there is an unbreakable bond between Harry and Ginny, now that he has saved her life. What about book one? Harry and Ron save Hermione from the Troll, why is nothing said about an unbreakable bond there? How about when they go after the stone? Hermione saves both Harry and Ron when they end up in the Devil's Snare. No mention of a bond there either. What is so improtant about Ginny that JKR takes the time to mention the bond?
I completely loved the duel! Perhaps the tensions between Harry and Snape will be eased somewhat now. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I'm quite impressed with the first chapter. I can completely see Harry obsessing with learning new skills, but I was a bit surprised to see him able to turn himself into an Animagi so quickly. I did think it was cool that he turned into a gryphon, like Godric Gryffindor. I'm off to the next chapter...
Rats - after saying I was off to the next chapter, I realized that only one was posted - LOL! Oh well, I'll amend it to say that I look forward to your next chapter!
I really like the direction this story is taking. I hope you decide to take it through the entire year. Can't wait until you post the next chapter.
I love this story!!!!! You literally made my heart jump when they kissed. It was brilliant how Ginny took matters into her own hands when Harry was rattling on before the game. I think with the little hints we've been given regarding her character, Mr. Potter has met his match.
Author's Response: Thank you! He has met his match!
This chapter completely blew me away (and I mean that in a good way). I love how you combine humor with more serious things and I thought the entire Weasley betting pool was a riot. I can completely see it happening. I also thought the backstory about Borgin was awesome. It made perfect sense and the part about bringing back the dead was so creepy (again, I mean that in an entirely complementary way). You really care about these characters and that comes though so well in your writing. I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: LOL - thank you! These characters make good company in my head so I have grown to really care for them. It's nice to know that shows through. I loved the idea of the betting pool, too - so Weasley, poking fun and totally supportive at the same time. Thank you so much for your wonderful reviews - I look forward to them! Next chapter is in the queue.
Your story is very well written and interesting. I enjoyed the background of B&B and who couldn't love a story with the deliciously evil Lucius Malfoy!
I think you've captured Ginny's character so well. In the first four books, she was more of a background character and in the fifth book we finally found out how cool she really is. She's the perfect match for Harry and I think you really captured how he would start to see her as more than a friend while still trying to come to terms with the loss of Sirius.
Excellent chapter! I love the tentative beginnings of a relationship between Harry and Ginny and how you tied in Firenze and Dumbledore.
I am really enjoying your story. I think you are really staying true to the nature of the characters and your story flows nicely. I am wondering about timeline, however. If Borgin just started at Hogwarts and has been there for six weeks, shouldn't it be October? I was just confused when it mentioned that it was spring. Anyway, I think Ginny and Harry are so sweet together and it's nice to read a story where they aren't shagging by chapter two :-)
That Dumbledore is a sly old fox! I have to say that this is one of my favorite fanfics so far. I am officially addicted to your story and I need more!!! Please update soon. Oh, by the way I think you're right about Percy. He may be a prat, but one would hope that there is enough Weasley in him to allow him to make the correct decision regarding which side to align himself with.
Author's Response: What wonderful feedback! Thank you! I'm glad to hear you think I've captured Ginny - that means a lot! I love it when Dumbledore plays cupid, too! I'm looking forward to seeing where JKR takes Percy because he is a Weasley and can't be all that bad! Thanks for reading! Next chapter is in the queue just waiting for validation...
I am so impressed with this story. Your writing style is exemplary and I love how you've realistically portrayed the characters. I think it's also wonderful how you infuse the story with humor, like the Canary Creams password and the reference to Tom Sawyer. It's a shame the highest rating I can give you is a 10 because I think it warrants at least a 20! Looking forward to the next chapter...
Author's Response: Thank you! It means a lot to know my version of these fascinating characters is close to the real thing. That is quite the compliment! And can't you just see Dumbledore on a raft? Or with whitewash in his beard? When I was trying to think of a story, I could totally see Dumbledore and Mark Twain, hanging out and having fun. So I went with one of my childhood favorites. The next chapter will be up next week.
Another great chapter! I was so impressed by your description of ancient magic. I also liked the fact that Percy is finally beginning to realize that his father knows what he's talking about. I love the direction your story is taking and I can't wait until you post again. You are a very talented writer and I am truly enjoying your story.
Author's Response: Thank you! Percy's a bright (albiet stubborn) bloke. He also has his pride, which will make any reconcilliation difficult. Lucky for him, his parents are Arthur & Molly, eh? Glad you enjoyed it! More to come!
I love being the first reviewer! This was another excellent chapter. I love how you take the time to add all the little things, like the cushioning charms on the barstools. You've really built up the tension in so many different aspects - Percy and his parents, Nathan realizing what the adendum means and Ginny being transported to some unknown place. It was the perfect cliffhanger and I will be the first to say that I can't wait until you post again!
Author's Response: Yay! Why as an author do I always hold my breath until I get that first review? I'm so glad it was you! All that tension - it's about to explode! I'm glad to hear you thought it was a good cliffhanger - I have to admit, I let out an evil laugh that caused my husband to look at me funny when I wrote it! And you thought the Malfoy's were evil... :)
For some reason I wasn't able to post a review and had to reload the page twice. Anyway....not only do you have a gift for writing dialogue, but you also have a talent for writing action. I felt like I was there! The only thing I had a problem with was Ginny's comment to Malfoy about the Prophecy. We know Voldemort suspects what was said, but he doesn't know for sure, so I just found it a bit odd that it was mentioned. Other than that, this was a terrific chapter. I really like the idea that even under the Imperious curse, Ginny's hatred would have an effect on the blood.
Author's Response: Gotta love computers! As far as the prophecy goes, you are right - Voldemort doesn't know the full prophecy. He just knows part - the part that Harry has a the ability to kill him. He doesn't know the rest. I put that in there because Voldemort wants to make sure Harry can't defeat him. I assumed the Prophecy and V.'s knowledge was known to the Order which is why Nathan would have known. Thank you so much for your reviews and input! They have been wonderful!
This story is awesome in so many ways and I'm sad to see it end, but very thankful you're writing a sequel! This was a great ending chapter. I love how Ginny refused to let Harry break up with her. I think Mr. Potter has finally met his match - and she may be a tougher opponent than Voldemort, although in a VERY good way.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was sad to see it end, too. Which is exactly why I'm working on Part II! Mr. Potter has met his match, his solemate and his supporter - he will need all the help he can get, in my story and canon! Thank you for sticking with this! I love the input!
That was a truly enjoyable chapter. I thought it was great of Harry to still want to ask Ginny to the dinner, rather than just assume she'd be going with him (which is what I would expect Ron to do). I am intrigued by the adendum that fell off the shelf.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, it's not that Ron is not honorable, I just think he may take having a girlfriend for granted a little more than Harry. Harry's upbringing makes him a little more sensitive to the good things in his life and he doesn't want to screw those up! That adendum plays a rather important role in the next chapter. Thanks for reading!
Great chapter! I was hoping you'd update soon and I have to say the wait was worth it. I really enjoyed McGonagall in this chapter - it's always fun to see someone go head to head with Snape, but it's even better when it comes from McGonagall. I thought that the idea that Harry's love for Ginny can cause the protection from his mother to falter - it's a very interesting concept.
Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed it. Thankyou for your review. However I just wanted to say that Ginny's love doesn't override his mother's. McGonagall was referring to the spell which used Ginny. I am sorry that it wasn't clear but hopefully the next chapter will clear it up.
Author's Response: Ok, I just read that and it didnt sound right. The spell being referred to is Pereda Venenum by Voldemort, which used Ginny