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Hello, readers and authors, alike,

Welcome to my authors page! I, for those of you who do not know me, and Claire. You might know me from the forums, of which I have been a member since April 2007.

I love to act and sing, and have taken the lead in a school musical. I am known around my high school as the "Harry Potter Expert", and writer. Gryffindor is my house on the boards( Toaster pride!).

I have one dog, but have had several fish that sadly expired.

I love musicals, though my favorite has to be either Guys and Dolls or the songs from Chicago. I am an utter Broadway drama queen, and my iPod is filled with showtunes. Any thoughts on musicals? PM me!

My favorite character in Harry Potter is Tom Riddle, though I do have a crush on Harry. My other favorites include, but are not limited to, Neville, Luna, Ginny, Sirius, Remus, and Lily.

I don't have an die-hard ships that I support, but have several that I favor.

But, my favorite have to be: Tom/Minerva, Remus/Tonks, Ron/Luna, Harry/Luna, Draco/Ginny, and Neville/Luna. As you can see, I love Luna related ships.

Favorite musicals: Guys and Dolls, The Drowsy Chaperone, Mary Poppins, Into the Woods, Chicago, A Wonderful Town, A Chorus Line, Peter Pan, and Annie Get Your Gun!

My favorite books: Harry Potter(obviously!), the Cherub series, the Twilight series, anything by Mary Higgins Clark, Sherlock Holmes, To Kill A Mockingbird, The Pearl, and the Bible.

My Favorite Singers/Bands: Daughtry, Queen, Mika, Maroon 5, Fall Out Boy, Taylor Swift, Nickelback, Black Eyed Peas, Kenny Chesney(*drool*), Bon Jovi

My stories:

I have since deleted all but one. If you would like to see it again, please email me.

I Don't Really Know What To Say: A one-shot about James talking to a Harry that hasn't come out of the womb quite yet. Thanks for al of the reviews!


Facing Death-A poem about the veil in the Department of Mysteries.
Upcoming Fics:
Burning Hearts(J/L)

Deleted Fics:

Betrayal-I have decided to discontinue this fic after Deathly Hallows simpy because of lack of interest from myself and readers.

Can't Help Falling In Love With You-A one-shot in which Tonks falls in love with an unlikely person.

Who We Grow To Be-A Minerva McGonagall character study.

If you read, please leave constructive reviews! No flamming!

Thank you for making a visit to my author's page!

It's not right, not okay,
Say the words that you say,
Baby, we're better off this way,
It's better that we break,

Maroon 5, Better That We Break

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Passion, Pain, and Pumpkin Pasties by beauty and brains

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ever wonder how Ron and Hermione really got together? How constant fighting seemed to lead to a romance? What happens when a letter to a certain Durmstrang student sends a certain Gryffindor over the edge? Join Ron and Hermione on the night they came together, and the pumpkin pasties that seem to get in the way. All told from Colin Creevey’s point of view, of course!
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/06/07 Title: Chapter 1: Passion, Pain, and Pumpkin Pasties

That was amazing! You have a gift, for romance, and it really showed in this. Now, whenever I see you on the forums, I always hook you up to that. When yu made the reference to tongues dancing, it was like a string had closed my mouth, and I just stared at that line over and over again. Have you ever felt that way?

Giving the reader the information they need can be hard when writng first person, but you succeeded. Colin was such the perfect person to tell the story, because he's funny, a bit annoying, and loves fun. I had never honestly ictured him in this setting and situation, but you made it work so it flowed. It was funny, and showed me a great romance. This is the kind of story the you curl up with around the fire. It is that good.

The title really drew me into reading it. It made me think that the author was really going to tie it in well, so for the entire fic I was on the lookout, and when it came, I thought, "What a perfect title?"

*Claps* Your betas did a great job, but a really good fic is always good from the start; it doesn;t start bad, and then become better. As soon as I started reading, I couldn't stop. I felt like I was there, in the common room, laughing at their arguement. How good is that?

I loved the figures of speech and references you used. As I already have mentioned, the tongues dancing was perfect, and the pumpkin pasties tied right in. Some authors force an element in, just so the title maks sense. But, in your case, it was needed, and I congratulate you on that.

This most definitly going onto my favorites list, and I'm glad you've had so much success. I can tell, because not all readers stick with a fic this long; only if it's god, and you made it great.

(Gryffindor Review Crew)

Author's Response: *huggles tightly* Thanks a billion Claire! It\'s reviewers like you who help the writers want to keep doing what we\'re doing. The positive flow is an amazing help, and I\'m so glad you enjoyed it!

Romance is such a complicated thing, even though most writers think it isn\'t. But I\'m sure they would be speaking from their arse if they tried to write an original romance. It is so incredibly difficult to write something that hasn\'t already been used by another author, and takes quite a bit of cunning to accomplish such a feat (hint Slytherins =]). To say that I have a gift for romance is a very high compliment, which I thank you for.

Some things, however, can come from a tiny burst of inspiration - like the Colin situation. I just thought, \"Wow, we never hear anything about him anymore.\" And voila! Colin vs. a pound of pastries was born. *chuckles*

All in all, I am very happy with the good results of this humble one-shot. It has exceeded in popularity anything I imagined. Thanks for reading, and I hope you have time to check out some of my other writings.

The Losing Side by Jazzinator

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: A Final Battle fic from Draco's point of view. Is this the real life? Is this just fantasy?...
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 06/22/07 Title: Chapter 1: The Losing Side

I liked it a lot! The plot was very good, and well as I imagined the final battle. It was realistic, and we have been shown throughout the books that Draco really does care to some extent. Killing his father was very interesting to read and added a dark mood to the story, which is what you intended I believe. I also enjoyed his thoughts about Hermione fighting. They were very in character for Draco. Some people can't write him, and you can very well. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I knew I was going out on a limb to use Draco\'s perspective, but I have always been facinated bywhat may go on inside his mind. I really wanted to portay that there was more to Draco then everyone seems to think.

Keeping It Real by Poppet

Rated: Professors •
Summary: The year is 2032, and the Triwizard Tournament is back. Yes, ladies and gentlemen, back, after almost forty years and many safety modifications. Please take your seats to watch the daring feats of these three brave students, from the magnificent schools of magic: Beauxbatons, Durmstrang and Hogwarts! And don't worry, ladies and gents, with the huge number of security measures we have here, what could possibly go wrong?

Oh dear. I wish you hadn't said that.
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Clandestine Manouevring

I liked it a lot! I really want to see how this story progresses throughout. I'm guessing that his dream is the Triwizard T., correct? Well, I liked it a lot. The detail was great, and you had your OC characterized perfectly. Great job! On to the next chapter!

Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 06/30/07 Title: Chapter 2: Athos, Porthos, Aramis

I would like to see what Adolf is doing with this. I guess that the other was like a prologue, correct? I liked this chapter!

Jackie and her Giant by Thoth

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: As hard as it is to believe, Rubeus Hagrid was once eleven. Follow along through his awkwardness of being half giant, the death of his only parent, a very scandalous third year and his friendship with Jackie O’Reily, the only person who saw him for what he really was.
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/06/07 Title: Chapter 1: When They Met...

I hope you don't mind me putting this one my favorites list, because that's where it's going to reside forever. The vivid verbs and adjectives you used really painted a picture in my mind. I loved when you described the Great Hall.

When Professor Flitwick called, “O’Reily, Jacqueline!” Hagrid waited with bated breath. He liked Jackie, and it would be good to have someone he already knew in his own House.

Jackie, looking flushed, sat down and put on the hat. After about thirty seconds or so, the hat opened its rip and declared, “GRYFFINDOR!”

That was one of my favorite parts. You are such a great author, I am going to see what else you've written. PLEASE CONTINUE!

I can't find very many thing to nitpick, surprisingly. I admit, I wasn't very excited when I saw the summary, but decided to read anyways. I'm find it hard to believe that no one besides me has reviewed.


Author's Response: aw, thank you very much! I think you\'ve just made my day. I\'m not the greatest with summaries, but maybe I should try and think another one up.

Narcissa by StellaSirius

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Narcissa isn't really all gung-ho about killing muggles- she'd rather watch others do it. And yet, she has to follow her master's orders. A poem about Mrs. Malfoy.
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 02/12/08 Title: Chapter 1: Narcissa


This was wonderful, StellaSirius. I walked into this story thinking it would be horrible, but it wasn't at all! You are really good, and I see that you put a lot of time into your ideas. You also use good vocabulary, that you think that a real person would use, not something that is too forced. It was easy to understand, too.

One thing, look at your rhyme schemes. Make them consistent throughout the piece. In the first stanza, your scheme was AABB. In the second, it was CCDD. In the third, it was EFGG. The last, and fourth stanza was right, with HHII. Make sure you pay attention to tiny details. It looked like you were searching for a word to put there, but didn't really care when you couldn't find one. Quality!

I love your first two lines, when you refer to Narcissa as a puppet on a string. But, under who? Obviously the Voldemort and the Death Eater, but I wuld mention Bellatrix, her sister, too. She actually cared about her.

Thanks for a good read!


Home Improvement by Schmerg_The_Impaler

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: When Ron Weasley is promoted to a rather high rank in the Auror business, his mother congratulates him by informing him that it's high time he found a place of his own.

Ron may be quite good at his job as an Auror, but he now faces the most difficult challenge of all...

Ridiculously short one-shot that I wrote for some challenge about a year ago and never submitted. It's also my first one-shot that's not about Voldemort and the Death Eaters! Gasp!
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/20/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 and Only

The end was hilarious! The only fic by you that I've read is TDLB. This was very creative, and addressed an issue I haven't thought about.


Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ Oh, and if you read anything else by me, I recommed \"A Quest For Ice Cream\" (VERY silly humour story about Voldemort) or \"Love A Duck\" (chaptered Marauder-era story that\'s a combination of adventure story and silliness.)

Abracadabra by whatapotter

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: When Harry was seven years old, he and Dudley were invited to a costume party by a girl in their class. While Dudley wanted to be a soldier, Harry wanted to dress up as a Wizard. As you can imagine, that went down well.
Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/20/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

That was one of the most original humor fics I've ever read. It was good writing, which is rare in a fic like this, and was really funny! Congrats!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I\'m glad you enjoyed it! x

A Day at the Spa by Nevilles Girl

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Dear Mister Snape,
We are very pleased to present you with this once in a lifetime offer: A free day at Deena’s Magical Day Spa! Just Apparate to the address below and present this coupon to redeem your prize! We hope to see you there!
Deena’s Magical Day Spa

Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Day at the Spa

That was so creative! I never suspected Hermione being Deena.... What else have youw written?

Author's Response: What else have I written? Well, nothing as of yet, but I\'m working on a few different things. I *might* do a Lily/James, The Next Great Adventure, and/or a future generation story. I\'m already working on the future generation story, so hopefully I\'ll have some of it up soon!

Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 10/05/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Day at the Spa

That was so creative! I never suspected Hermione being Deena.... What else have youw written?

Author's Response: Whoops! \'Tis a double post!

He Loves Him by Celestial Melody

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: When you love someone, the last thing you expect them to do is break your heart ... but it frequently happens. Salt-tears cannot express the pain that a heart crying blood feels. Yet, even though our torn and tattered hearts are in pieces, rattling sonorously around in the emptiness of our chests, we still love that 'someone' because no one and nothing can predict love ... It just happens.

For Rose Weasley, her impressions of her own “love” were shattered when she found out something she shouldn't have, something that made her wish for revenge ... something that made her unable to take it.

Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 03/28/08 Title: Chapter 1: He Loves Him

Hello Julia!

I really liked this story. What drew me in was the use of second-person point of view, which made the story seem even more vague. You don't see many stories using that, and it was nice to see a fic like that for a change. I was also impressed in how you were in control of your tenses, and I didn't spot any times where you switched, which is a hard thing to accomplish.

I think that it made the story unique, and beautiful without copying the other successful 2nd person fics. It made it sound so much more like a 14-year-old girl saying it, and reminds me of the sadness that my friends and I get over guys. You really dug into the heart of Rose using 2nd person, and it fits your style of writing.

I love the pairings that you put together, but I think that you should have expanded on Albus and Scorpius's feelings for each other. I think that it would make Rose seem like she is going through a lot more than is put forward, and add even more dimension and depth to the story.

I, though it is probably just me, didn't like the way that Rose had a crush on her cousin. I think that it would have made it a lot better if she was angry at Albus for liking Scorpius, maybe because of homosexuality, and the Weasley family disagreeing with those views.

I liked the friendship between Scorpius, Rose, and Albus, but would have liked to have seen more about the "roots or beginnings" or it. A flashback might have been nice, to show when they first became friends, of even the train ride.

I was very confused about them all being in the same house. I liked that you chose Ravenclaw, because I guess it is sort of the house in the middle of Slytherin and Gryffindor. But, like I said, there must have been some explanation for that. Another flashback? The only things about flashbacks, is that it wouldn't have flowed well with your second-person.

Albus and Scorpius's first kiss. Wow, that was moving. I think that you displayed Rose's feelings very well, and you kept on building up to that from the beginning and middle of the fic. We knew it would come, but didn't exactly know where. Wonderful job as to that!

Overall, I enjoyed this piece of fanfiction emmensly, with my few plot nitpicks. You are a great author, and this is my first fic that I have read by you. It actually inspires me to become a slash writer, which is a hard thing to persuade me to do. Great job, again, and I'm looking forward to reading more by you.


Author's Response: Hello Claire!\r\n\r\nThank you for the wonderful review. I\'m thrilled that you didn\'t find any discrepancies in the tenses. I worked hard on that thinking this would become a competition entry, which, sadly, it did not achieve.\r\n\r\nI\'m glad, too, that you felt Rose coming through the story. I like having my characters walk off the page for my readers and I\'m always pleased when anyone mentions that.\r\n\r\nAs time has gone by, I\'ve felt that it might have been better to capitalize on the friendships between this new trio rather than Rose\'s romantic feelings toward her cousin (*headdesk*). But I\'m afraid I disagree about expounding upon Albus\'s and Scorpius\'s feelings for each other. This story was a snapshot and Rose really couldn\'t positively pinpoint the exact nature of the relationship between Albus and Scorpius. Thus, I don\'t think it\'s possible (or quite plausible) to reveal more about Albus\'s and Scorpius\'s relationship without Rose catching on and spoiling the story.\r\n\r\nIf I had had more time (contest entry, forsooth!), I might have added additional scenes. For instance, the beginning of Scorpius/Rose/Albus would have taken place on the Hogwarts Express. I don\'t believe Harry, Ron, or Draco spoke badly of one another after Voldemort\'s defeat. The memories would have been too painful, so I don\'t think that the kids ever really had that bad footing to start out on. As for Ravenclaw House... I just see Scorpius and Albus as smart lads; and Rose? Well, we know she\'s smart! Hermione for a mother? Come on... *grins* Harry and Draco could always hold their own, as well. At least, I thought so.\r\n\r\nOf course, I\'m overjoyed at your reception to The Kiss. That was such a fun part to write and I think you, as a reader, can see that. So, thank you.\r\n\r\nI, too, am looking forward to a time when you can read my other works. =) And slash writing ftw!!! Seriously. I hope that you pursue slash fiction. It is--IMHO--some of the best HP fanfiction out there.\r\n\r\nThanks again!\r\n\r\n~Julia

Colours Of Life by xombie

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Each moment is a decision, defined by the circumstances. Who knows? Had it not been for an overprotective cousin, perhaps Rose Weasley and Scorpius Malfoy could have been the best of friends. Perhaps in one point in time and space, they are. As it happens, their relationship was defined by one catalytic factor, James Potter, and now,they are sworn enemies.

This story is a chronicle of their first year at Hogwarts, and their last. It is a tale of happenstance and familial influence, of an enmity that was not theirs to decide. Read and find out how such an enmity can influence the lives of two innocent children and wreck them. Will the injury last forever?

Due to my heavy work-schedule, this fic will be on hold till early June. My apologies to all.

Reviewer: bertiebott12 Signed
Date: 12/21/07 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Wow Manu, I'm so glad you've gotten validated! Don't you feel good? This was a comforting story. I was pleased with the direction you took it.

One thing that I would work on, in drabbles and one-shots, is your amount of detail. You skip from Rose's POV to Scorpius's POV so often, that we need to be able to tell the difference. Adding more detail, mayb, about their appearance, and feelings would help us readers distunguish between the two.

I love when they meet on the train, and how Rose gives up her feelings for young Misser Malfoy. But, I would have liked it to go on! Why not show somemore of the train ride?

Great job, overall, Manu!


Author's Response: Now you\'re forcing me to reveal the first chappie, Claire! XD Thanks for the inputs! I\'ll be careful about the sudden POV shifts in the future chapters. Just another note- the first chapter is going to be detailed, I promise you, and the style of writing is also quite different. Thanks for the constructive review, I love them *hugs*