I am 16 years old (jailbait no longer!) and live north of Lansing, Michigan. I loooooooooove to act, sing, dance (when no one is watching) read, write, read, write, and hang out with my best pal Kate Mari, who is also an author on Mugglenet.
I'll agree with you that its short, but I really like all of the
context and adjectives that you used. It should be really interesting.
Author's Response: Why thankyou my Beta. I look forward to letting you have sneak peaks.
I hope you take this story far!! It's going to be great, I just know it!! I love it! Keep it up!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I appreciate the review! I hope it goes far also!