I love the Harry Potter books. I even sort of maybe very probably might like the films (I think), even though they left out Peeves. John Williams is a genius - I was sad when he stopped doing the music. Patrick Doyle is great - just not John Williams!
I love "Moments of Bliss" by Moonymaniac, it is well worth checking out.
I think this is great. Very sweet, but not sickly, and very in character.
Hilarious! Love it. I like the first chapter, but so far the writing style is very different from the next three. I guess it will make more sense in the context of the story the further along it progresses.
I really like this, but there was an awful lot of "the father" and "the son". It appeared almost biblical! I am no expert myself, but you could have used "the younger man" or something just to vary it a bit. I hope you don't think that obnoxious, because I truly did enjoy this chapter.
Very funny. I like your portrayal of Molly and Arthur.
My favourite chapter so far. Short and to the point and very amusing.
I want to know more about the tall pale man...not Ron in the afterlife or anything? I really enjoyed this.
Great story, but I hope somebody worried about Parvati - she was still living after all! I am sorry everyone dies, but that is probably what it would be like in a battle where students face war hardened warriors.
Author's Response: Not just war-hardened, but heart-hardened! These people might not be just well-trained in war, but they're heartless and cruel as well. Yes, poor Parvati -- I almost forgot about her. ;)
It would be nice to see how Hermione reacts I don't suppose you have a companion piece in mind? So like Ron to throw it at her as a kind of accusation!
Poor Michael...isn't he being used a bit? I definitely want to see how Ron is going to react to that!
I like Seamus. And the Irish accent is so cute. Nice writing - it sounds like Hermione speaking.
Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment!
I like the seperate POV thing. Perhaps if the chapter went on too long it could be borning, but they are thinking such different things all the time....it is a bit amusing really, like Men are From Mars and Women are from Venus.....they both think the other is thinking completely different thoughts to the ones they actually are!
I do like this, it is very sweet. The way Ginny wakes up is perfect.
If his sheets are covered in blood, maybe one of the house elves will tell Dumbledore - the sooner the better! As you say, it isn't worth it. I used to do that, and now I am in America with two kids, I have to keep covered in order not to answer silly questions, or have my children wonder. When we go to the swimming pool in 85 degree heat, I have to sit in my long sleeves, watching everyone else enjoy themselves.....it is not worth the questions and pity, and people will shun you too. The worst is a completely irrational urge to do it again, because it is an addiction.
I find a bit of your description quite good. Are you implying that the girl is both detached and concerned? For example, she has icy blue eyes, yet they look concerned, and her eyes are soft, yet they remind him of diamonds, which are on of the hardest substances known to man. It certainly makes her character very complex!
Author's Response: Thank you. The house elves wont tell Dumbledore, I assure you that but Dumbledore will find out.
I am so glad the chapter finally got through the queue! I got quite irritable, waiting for it. I love your development of Snape's character, and Athene's, as the impossibly sharp edges start to mesh. It is the first story I have read that makes Snape seem believeable, even though, you, like Athene must have been wrestling with him for chapters to get him to soften naturally. And I like the way he is softer, but not mushy.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for this feedback, Buckbeak22! I've said it before, but that is one of my main goals--to write a fairly IC Snape into a believable relationship. [Your second sentence made me smile, by the way, as it seems like something Snape would say--wink!]
Not that I am obsessive compulsive or anything, but I have been checking your story often, so it was lovely to find a new chapter - and such a brilliant one! I loved all the characterizations, and the events, and I have a purely selfish wish that you aren't too busy in the next week so that you can update soon. What on earth is Snape going to do without Athene? I liked the dancing descriptions. You give such a clean description it is practically like watching it in technicolour.
Author's Response: Thank you, Buckbeak22! I don't think that you are obsessive compulsive at all, but then again, I might be biased *winks* The next chapter should not be long in coming, thanks to some kind helpers and a willing mod.
If your next chapter doesn't appear soon, I am going to start hexing people.
Author's Response: It is up--and just so you know, we (authors and moderators) have all been having trouble logging in, so that is the reason for the delay, both in my submission and in the mods ability to validate. At any rate, wands away and happy reading! Hope you enjoy.
Potions, pallor and horses? I can't imagine Snape doing anything outdoorsy, I am really looking forward to the next chapter - just imganining what is going to happen has put a smirk on my face! Just thought you'd like to know I am already laughing, and you haven't got the next chapter up yet! Brilliant.
Author's Response: Thank you--that puts a smile on MY face--you are my very first "pre-review" for a chapter that hasn't appeared yet! And it may be testing canon Snape a bit (it is impossible to remain completely dignified while shoveling manure), so let me know how it scans on your end. Cheers!
It gets better and better. And I like the notes at the end - I didn't have to look everything up myself! I really like your writing. I can't do humor to save my life, and you do it so well.
Author's Response: Thanks for this comment! (Humor sure comes in handy during life's rough bits...)
Too funny! As always, great writing. From your students reactions, it sounds as if someone would make a killing on those air sickness bags if the relationship becomes common knowledge!
Author's Response: What a novel idea! From the books, it does seem as if house loyalties are VERY important, and I think that, when we are younger (not that I am not...cough...cough) we tend to not realize that our parents (ew!), teachers, etc. are people too, with all the same emotional needs, desires, etc. I thought that, for the Hogwarts students, believing the "worst" in terms of potions and curses would be a lot more natural than realizing (DUH!) that the two are in a relationship. Especially as they think Snape is such a git. And from such innocent mistakes is going to come a whole lot of trouble... Cheers for sticking with me and being such a faithful reviewer!
I don't know which I like more - your writing, or the notes at the end! (Actually the writing, but the notes come close). Just spent a while looking up the Cleveland Bay, which is a beautiful horse. I like your story telling too - you told the rather convoluted story in Athene's succinct style, with perfect clarity, and no unnecessary verbiage. I admire that.
Author's Response: Cheers! And don't fret, you aren't the first person to say that about the notes. (Cleveland Bays are gorgeous, aren't they?) This chapter was a beast to deal with...took loads more sweat and tears than the others (because of all the backstory that needed to be told), and it is very nice to hear that the effort paid out. I truly appreciate your feedback.