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The Legacy of Four by spaniard
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 20]

Summary: A year after the Battle of Hogwarts, Harry recieves a cryptic warning and a painful hint. It's not over. Someone has been left out of the equation that could mean the downfall of the fragile order assembled post-Voldemort.

Burdened by a destiny set into motion when he was only a year old, Harry has no choice but to find something long forgotten and risk his life and those around him once again to maintain peace.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 19562 Chapters: 8 Completed: No
Published:
07/08/08 Updated: 08/21/08


Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 08/02/08 Title: Chapter 1: Someone Else's Nightmare

Lookin' good so far! A few questions:
-> Why are Bill and Fleur sleeping on an illegal flying carpet?
->Why is everyone outside?

I'm really curious about what happens next, so expect more reviews from me!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm really just imagining that the embargo ended with all the darkness on the carpet front, and they were outside because that's where they fell asleep...worry free life and all that jazz! I hope you like the next chapter...it's in the queue...

 

Summary: The final installment in the Potter’s Pentagon Trilogy. Read “The Five” and “The Truth” first, myess? Okay!

WARNING! Contains Muggle adventures in Diagon Alley, unusual eyebrows, cheesy clichés galore, psycho Ted, the not-so-lost years of Merlin, a school-wide singalong, the old potato joke, Tyrone’s Princess Bride obsession, Emma’s stubborn denial of the existence of Tyrone’s mustache, a graphic death, a joke shop product as a major plot device, hobo Jordan, Jordan hugging, Jordan pulling pranks, time travel, the Love Shack, angst, and worst of all, Professor Zabini.

It’s the sixth year for Potter’s Pentagon and company, and our heroes learn that in the wizarding world, coming of age has a somewhat weightier significance. Students are busy with an Inter-House Unity Project, Jordan is having weird dreams, Pansy and Ophidias Malfoy have been released from Azkaban, Professor Zabini has a mysterious project of his own, and almost everyone is acting strangely. Meanwhile, at the Ministry of Magic, a man with a vendetta against Ron Weasley is trying his hardest to get him in the biggest trouble possible. Is the only way to save him to travel into the past?

New talents are discovered, new friendships form and old ones change, pasts are dredged up, and, of course, there’s lots of good old-fashioned snogging. And one of the five kills for the first time… while another becomes a casualty of war.

Starring 2008 Quicksilver Quills Best Male Original Character runner-up Jordan Potter, Best Female Original Character nominees Ivy Potter, Haley Potter, Emma Weasley, and Giorgi Anderson, and Best Male Original Character nominee Ted Lupin! Nominated for 2008 Quicksilver Quills Best Post-Hogwarts Story.

Categories: Next Generation Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 183223 Chapters: 28 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/09/08 Updated: 03/15/10


Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/28/08 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: That Obligatory Hospital Wing Chapter

I just discovered I right some of the shortest reviews for this story. Eh, everything I write is short compared to other people.

I absolutely adore this chapter, even if it does bring bad news. At least we now know Ted isn't dying! Also, I'm pretty sure you've noticed this before (and most likely put it in yourself) Ted was doing something with silver when he was in Potions.

Thank you for saying my picture was cute. That means a lot to me.

I read this chapter yesterday and I'm trying to remember what happened without rereading it.

When are the auditions for "Alice"?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Luna, I don't mind that your reviews are short because I talk to you in real life! I can interrogate you in the lobby or something. And yes, he was certainly working with silver. Sharp eyes! I don't know when auditions are, but Levesque said she thought they'd be this upcoming week. *Shrug*

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/28/08 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7: That Obligatory Hospital Wing Chapter

Oops. I just wrote the stupidest thing. Of course, you put the silver thing in yourself. I meant to say you put it in realizing what you were doing or someting like that.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: No, it's okay, I know what you meant!

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/13/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: In Which An Old Adversary Slouches Back Onto The Scene

I finally got around to catching up on my Potter's Pentagon!

I've always imagined Charybdis rather, er, rotund.

Onto the next chapter!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Really? That's interesting. I've always had her as very tiny and birdlike and dainty angular.

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 02/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

I know I said I would post the reviews on your birthday, but I am, sadly, not a woman of my word.

-Jordan appears to be Spock at various points in this chapter. But that's okay--I like Spock (who is, of course, infinitely superior to Kirk).

-Ivy seems to me to be a bit fake in this chapter. I'm sorry; I know that sounds mean, but "I'm sorry, but it's so funny" feels a bit awkward. But that might just be the horrible character voice I have in my head for Ivy. Unfortunate that. Sorry.

-Why/How are you such an amazing writer? Every time I read a book, I look at it and say "Yeah, I can do that." Then I read one of your stories and say "Nope, I can't do that." Keep on being cool!

-I just realized that the entire time I was imagining the Burrow instead of Potters' house.

-Enlighten/Remind me: Dora Lupin. Is that Tonks?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! YOOOOOOOU! IYAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY, I MISSED YOOOOOOOOOOUUUUUUUU! Okay, sorry, but I haven't seen human beings for a long time. Haha, also, on my birthday, I'll be leaving for Disney World and not coming back for daaaaaaaays. Bahaha. And yes, Jordan IS Spock. Except I'd never seen anything Star Trek related when I wrote this story. But then I saw the STar Trek movie. And I said, "What is Jordan doing making out with Zoe Saldana???"

Ivy is fake in this chapter, yes. I always have trouble writing her at the beginnings of stories... I forget how to slip into her character. But I promise, you will like her at the end of the story! (I hope.)

Oh my gosh, my dear Luna, thank you soooo much for that compliment... I think you're superbly talented and everytime I read something you write, I go, "Wow, that's super-clever... how does her mind produce this stuff?" But yeah, in case you are wondering, I imagine ALL LOCATIONS in every book I've ever read/written/imagined to be places in my church, my grandma's house, my house, or the school (however non-appropriate for the occasion). Kind of like how you can't make up new faces, I can't make up new places!

Dora is Tonks, yep. That's addressed a couple times later in the story, but she is indeed Nymphadora!

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/13/08 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: In Which Professor Zabini Hatches A Diabolical Plan

"She’d show Zabini. She’d manage to get a passing grade on her Inter-House Unity project, even if she had to push Capshaw out of a window to do it." -Charming, really charming.

Why does Merlin look like Harry or Jordan minus any scars?

This Inter-House Unity Project reminds me of IRPs. I wish we did Inter-Grade Unity Projects instead. I would write a round robin. Ah, fun.

Is the Prefect badge silver or red 'n' gold in your version?

Who was Tyrone paired with?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: I hated IRPs. I did mine all alone... I'm an antisocial Jordan when it come to group projects. Mine was about crickets and how you can measure the temperature based on thieir chirping, but it was winter, so they weren't chirping, and the crickets were almost all female, and only male crickets chirp. I slapped together some totally made-up information the night before the project was due, made a gorgeous poster, and got the highest grade in my bio class. The teacher still displays the poster to her younger students.

I'm a horrible person. I've just realized that.

As for the Prefect badge, it magically changes colour depending on your mood! YEAH!

Merlin doesn't look exactly like Harry and Jordan. His hair is long, he's got a dark tan/olive complexion, his features are, in my mind, different, with a sharper nose and a high forehead and a rounder chin, and his build is more similar to Jordan's than Harry's. (Harry, by the end of the series, is more lanky, while Jordan's body structure is more like Daniel Radcliffe's.) He has dark hair (not black, just very dark brown) and very dark green eyes (almost black). But I guess they do look kind of similar.

Tyrone is not in the rest of the group's potions class, so I never bothered making up who he was paired with. I'll do it right now, if you like, just off the top of my head. Okay, Tyrone got paired with a fifth-year Hufflepuff girl named Luna Natashi and "accidentally" made out with her on the first day of their project, then immediately regretted it and paid her a vast sum of money to never tell Emma. ^_^

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 08/04/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: In Which Tyrone Makes Dorkiness Cool

Oh my! That's a plot twist for ye.

Tyrone is bringing dorky back!

I drew some parallels between Ted and myself when I was reading this chapter.

FRED! AND GEORGE! And Edwin! (Whom I love!)

"Bangles to jangle" - Aha! Rhym-age!

Why is there ready-made Polyjuice Potion? I was under the impression it was illegal. Or is it just against Hogwarts school rules?

Who is Edwin's mother?

Dexter's Laboratory!

I saw "Hello, Dolly" today. Me mum says I should play the milliner, Irene Malloy.

Enough of this randomness! Onto the next chapter!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Thank you! I'M BRINGIN' DORKY BACK! ALL THE OTHER BOYS DON'T KNOW HOW TO ACT! Sorry. anyway, what are the parallels between you and Ted? What, do you have hairy legs, too?? ^_^ No, I'm kiddin'. You have obnoxiously blonde hair. Except for when I colour in your eyebrows. It might be illegal... I've never paid attention to canon before, hahahaa. Edwin's mother is Eglantine Mackle from Long Distance Extendable Ears, unless he is Fred's son (can't remmeber which one he is in this story) in which case, his mum's Angelina. Either way, he's biracial. I still haven't seen "Hello Dolly," but I SHOULD. I loved the bits that were in "WALL*E."

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/13/08 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: In Which Anatoly Matches Giorgi In Sheer Eccentricity

"A gold necklace, a bald-headed figure slumped over on the ground, a wand, the top of a building, a pair of red eyes, Cecilia’s face frozen in a silent scream, and the phrase, “We’ve got nothing to lose,” echoed through his mind." -I would tell you what I think this means, but as I have spoilers I shall refrain.

"He shifted in his seat as silence buzzed around them." -Isn't that rather contradictory?

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!! What's wrong with Ted? (Don't answer that. I'll continue reading and find out for my self.)

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Does your theory involve evil barbershop quartets? Speaking of which, scroll down to the review written by "me" for a full (and rather bogus) summary of the rest of the story.

Have you never heard the way silence buzzes?

Spoiler: Ted is pregnant with Jordan's child. Werewolves bodies work in ways you can't possibly understand.

Just submitted Chapter Seven! Wish me luck!

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 07/16/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In Which Jordan Has A Bad Experience With A Hobo

May I take this time to say a) you're very good at writing summaries and b) have you dismissed me as an impossible beta reader?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: My summaries are obnoxiously long. :( Oh my gosh, I totally forgot about our beta-ing scheme! May I request your services, Madame Luna? -_0 The mods seem to be taking an inappropriately long time to put this chapter up. SOMETHING MUST BE DONE.

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 03/15/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: In Which Tyrone Makes Dorkiness Cool

-I like this Uther Smith-Smythe. He sounds like quite the attractive young man, sarcastic no?

-I ADORE TYRONE! I can't stand how cool he is. (Yes, I'll admit it: I'm a Tyrone Thomas fangirl. *squee*)

-You were right: Ivy's getting more real. Huzzah!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Hi-Hi-Hi! Oh, believe me, that Uther Smith-Smythe is quite the sexy beast indeed. Does not get more attractive. AND I AM GLAD YOU LOVE TYRONE BECAUSE I LOVE TYRONE AND EVERYONE SHOULD LOVE TYRONE. Especially later in the story, when he gets especially wonderful. And speaking of later in the story... Ivy has some ATTITUDE later in the story, haha.

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 12/01/08 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8: In Which Emma Has A Birthday Adventure

Apparently I was behind on my Past and I didn't realize it! I'm sorry!

I like this chapter as much as I've liked the rest, although I'm curious: Do you dance to cheesy 80's music on top of the teacher's desk whenever you have a subsitute?

Also, I thought it was "Arvetta" and not "Arvide." Perhaps I was wrong?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: I DO! I DO! (Dance on the desk. Myess). Were you in school today? I missed you at lunch! Anyway, my character's name is technically Arvide, but since I'm a girl, we changed it to "Arvetta." (The role was written for a man.) However, if anyone on this site is familiar with "Guys and Dolls," and I said I played Arvetta, they'd be like, "Wait a minute, who's that? I only know of Arvide!"

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 08/05/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: In Which Ivy Avoids Attack Chickens, But Not Hadrian Bellowes

I absolutely adore your description of the Auror office.

I love Chester. I told you a have an idea for a story with a Lolly Ollivander, didn't I? Well, I do.

Does Jordan watch School House Rock? "Knowledge is power!"

I also spotted the Beatles reference in the previous chapter.

Is Haley being Kitten Marie? (She's underneath the dining room table.)

What book is Jordan reading?

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Thanks! I think you did mention Lolly Olivander because it makes me think of olive lollipops. MAYBE CHESTER HAS A SISTER! That excited me too much... I just ate a candy apple and it was EXTREMELY SUGARY! The 'knowlege is power' line's kinda common, but Jordan might just be the kind of person who'd watch Schoolhouse Rock. And the book he's reading is probably "Twilight," hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. Okay, I need to lie down. As for Kitten Marie... Haley would TOTALLY do that! ^_^ I almost bought a Kitten Marie shirt yesterday in Disney World, but I bought a Belle one instead, because I already have a Kitten Marie shirt. It's sparkly and has Belle and a horse and flowers and it says, "Once upon a time there lived a beautiful young princess named BElle!" and it's yellow with puffed sleeves. I got it from the kids' section.

 

Wake Up, Luna by YourWildestDreams
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 6]

Summary: When the Lovegood family is struck by a tragic disaster, young Luna is left alone and depressed. Her father does what he can to help, which includes a simple Physcologist. As Luna searches for happiness, she also finds her own way to connect to the world. A story about a child looking for a little hope, Wake Up, Luna shows just how much a daughter needs her mother when trying to grow up.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4032 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/15/08 Updated: 07/19/08


Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 07/19/08 Title: Chapter 1: Wake Up, Luna

Looks great! I really like this story, and I like your characterization of Xeno. (Notice I didn't touch his characterization when I was going over it.)

Thanks again for those fabulous banners you made for me! I'm glad I could help you with this story.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Thanks so much Luna! You were a great beta. *huggles*

 

A Different View On Love by helz_belz
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 364]

Summary: James would do anything to get inside Lily’s head. Lily would do anything to get away from James. Lily was brewing a banned potion. James went to find her. Lily made a mistake and the potion exploded. James got his wish, but is it much more than he bargained for?

Now Complete!



After a year the Epilouge is now up! Come read for a bit of fun!!

Runner up QSQ - Best Chaptered Canon Romance


Reason for Nomination:
This is the most unique take on how James and Lily really got to know each other. The story is hilarious and keeps you laughing throughout, but it never lets you forget the serious stuff. Plus, she somehow manages to end each chapter with a nice cliffhanger.

~~hestiajones

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 51560 Chapters: 15 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/23/08 Updated: 04/08/11


Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 11/21/08 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Four: I Can’t Get Enough Of Your Love, Babe

"She had been to Hogwarts for six years and three weeks and she had managed to only gain two detentions, for only minor offences." -Ooh! What were the offenses?

Watch out for little errors! There are a few little mistakes. Things like "then" versus "than." Little things.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Ok, one was for talking to Alice in class in 5th year, when she found out that a sixth year boy had asked her out. The other was from Filtch for accidentally tramping mud through the corridors in her second year. Really, quite boring offences.

I do miss then and than's quite often. Thanks for picking them up, as soon as I get time I'll read through and fix it up.

Helen

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 11/21/08 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five: The Moronic Moose

Same thing I just said about the little errors.

I love your explanation for the Marauder's revelation of Lupin's lycanthropy. It fits well and doesn't seem awkward like some explanations I've seen. Yea!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Yeah sorry about the errors, I'll try and read through a bit more carefully next time.

I'm glad you liked my explanation! I felt this was a pivotal turning point in the story, and worked hard on putting in the right way. :)

Thanks for the review!
Helen

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 08/22/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Why Am I Doing This Again?

Oh my! That's rather unfortunate for Lily, isn't it? (At least for the time being.)

I think taking oil from a butterfly's wings for a potion is pretty interesting idea. But don't butterflies die when you touch their wings?

I've been waiting for this fic for a while. I was one of the repliers on the Title Thread for this story. I must have missed it when it went through the "Recent" page the first time.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: Maybe you could somehow collect the oil without touching their wings? It would be very, very hard, but that would be why it is rare right? Ok now it is just getting into crazy hypothesis. Thanks for replying to the title thread. I saved all the suggestions, and you just might find one of them popping up as a chapter title. Thanks for the review!! Xoxo Helen

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 08/22/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two: When You Become Exceedingly Handsome

Oh! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: It's written! For a sneak peak, take a look at my authors page!

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/20/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three: It Must Be The Shampoo

I enjoyed it, as usual. This time around there were many more mistakes than there usually is, though. You used the word "defiantly" instead of "definitely" in multipule places.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response: *Head Desk* I can't believe I missed that! I seem to do that a lot. Thanks for your reviews - Not just this time, but on the last three chapters. They have always been extremely helpful. I will probably be able to submit the next chapter when the queue reopens. It isn't finished yet, but it is close and I have three weeks to finish.

 

Summary:
HEY! Hey you! Psssstttt! You have to help us!

It’s Tim the Enchanter, our fanfiction writer – HE’S GONE MAD! We’re just trying to live normal lives at Hogwarts, but CRAZY things keep happening to us because he’s bored!

Please! Read our story and hear our plight! We need to bludgeon some sanity into our author – Oh no! HE’S AT HIS COMPUTER NOW!

NO! NOOO-aaahhhh! Must resist! Resist… Gibber narg turnip turnip wibble antidisestablishmentarianism blubber gibber wop wop bbluubbaaarrrggghhh!


Nominated for QSQ 2009, Best Humour.



Categories: Humor Fics Genre: Warnings: Alternate Universe, Character Death, Mild Profanity, Violence

Word count: 25021 Chapters: 9 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/31/08 Updated: 01/22/09


Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 09/12/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter I: HAGGIS ATTACK!

HA HA HA! (Yes. I am indeed quoting you.)

Hilarious. I found it had a Monty Python feel. My favourite part of Holy Grail is when the woman says: "Do you feel this should have been left out of the movie?" or something along those lines.

Anyway, I plan on reading the next chapter when it becomes available.

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response:

Well, Luna, you’re right about that! This story does have a very strong Monty Python feel to it. Aside from general insanity, I first came up with the idea for this story in a weird dream that involved a bunch of Hogwarts students fighting Tim the Enchanter from Monty Python and the Holy Grail. Tim soon transformed into the author (ME!) and the rest is history – so yes, this story started out under the influence of the Pythons, and that set the precedent for all subsequent chapters.

Personally, my favourite part of Monty Python and the Holy Grail is the scene where King Arthur argues with the anarcho-syndicalist peasant, Dennis.

Also, the second chapter is in the queue!

Tim the Enchanter

 
Reviewer: Nevilles Girl Signed
Date: 10/26/08 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter B: Absurdity Who’s Who

Why was I vaguely reminded of "Kill Bill (And Arthur)" halfway through this chapter?

Tim, I love you. (This is, of course, a hyperbole.) You're just fantastic. I feel very compelled to read all your other stories. (Which I promise I WILL do!)

Lookin' forward to the next chapter (and the ones following it).

Smiles,
Luna

Author's Response:

Well, hello Luna!

Thanks for reviewing and liking this story… again! Concerning Kill Bill (And Arthur), wasn’t that your co-op story with Schmergo about the parallel universe thing and the M.O.D.s and M.N.F.F.? I suppose the “all-powerful overlord” thing controlling the story might have made that connection…

And I love you too, Luna. Watch out for Chapter Three, and while you’re waiting, have fun with my other deranged creations!

Tim the Enchanter

 
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