You obviously clicked on my name for some reason or another, so I feel that it is my duty to tell you a bit about myself. I lead a very boring life and I think that my sense of humor is great, when in reality, it is sick and twisted. You have been warned.
The name's Meg, but I also respond to OuchKibble, Ouch or even Mega-Meg, if you're feeling crazy. I'm fourteen years old and I live in the Great White North, or Canada. Pick one. I'm a competitive Irish Dancer, and a lot of my time is being taken up by dance practices. I like to eat breakfast foods for dinner, but not for breakfast. I'm good that way. I like to think of myself as a nice person, so feel free to drop me a line sometimes. I'm on AIM a lot now. :)
I also go by the name of OuchKibble over at the MNff forums. I'm a member of the Beta Guild, meaning that I'm a recommended Beta who has passed the super-special Beta test. Not many people did. I'm only doing one-shots and single chapters right now, but if you need my help, I'll gladly oblige.
I sail many different ships, especially Harry/Hermione, Ginny/Neville, Draco/Luna, Ron/Pansy, Blaise/Hermione, Snape/Lily and Ron/Draco. I'm currently searching for a well-written Ron/Draco fic, or an angsty Lily/James. What can I say? I like things to be complicated.
I think I've bored you all to tears with my rambling, so I'm going to leave it there. Ta!
Attention! From Parchment to Parchment has been taken off this site and transfered to another one. If you would like to continue reading this fic, please contact me and I will either send you the upcoming chapters, or I'll give you the new URL of the story. I'm sorry, guys, but Humor isn't the genre I want to focus on, and I'm working with a humor expert on another site. My three romance fics will still be on MNff.
A very interesting concept for the story. Though I have only read the first chapter as of right now, I'm intrigued, and I look foreward to more.
Yep, I'm still reading. I must say, as a person who had NEVER read a General fic, I quite like this one. I'd like to beta for you, just send me your third chapter.
Why does it have to be a one-shot? You left me wanting more! Brilliant job. 10!
Author's Response: A 10 ????? THANKS !!!! :-) Awww.... *blushes*..... :-)
Great, way to leave the reader wanting more. This was an interesting concept, and I like how you cut right to the chase. I want more. Right now. Please update soon.
Brilliant as usual wwB. I really like the use of the first-person narrative and how the characters interacted with each other. The ending left me wanting more. 9
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing Ouch! :) I was considering adding an ending that takes place years afterward but it involved Harry doing illegal magic.....so I didn't write it.
Wow, just wow. I'm very surprised that you haven't gotten any reviews for this because it's absolutely amazing! I even got a bit teary at the part with Harry's death, I'm so glad that it wasn't real. Update ASAP!
Author's Response: Thank you soooo much for your review! This is a re-post because my story got deleted before so that could be why there aren't a lot of reviews! I hope to get a lot more...keep reading! Thanks again!
Ooh. I am a huge fan of Bellatrix, and I quite enjoyed reading about her as a teen. I like how you focused on the different things that troubled her, and how she saw it fit to deal with them.
Author's Response: Thanks! I think Bellatrix is cool, also!
I admit, I don't usually read dark fics, much less leave reviews for them, but this echoed the thoughts of a confused girl during war so well, I couldn't pass up the oportunity. As a self-proclaimed Ginny-hater, I clicked on this fic thinking that it would be pretty much like all of the other Ginny fics; missing Harry and feeling mildly sorry for herself. Needless to say, I was happily surprised when I read this. You protrayed Ginny as someone experiencing the war differently than I have ever seen her protrayed; kudos to that. The line But what took away our happiness? You-Know-who? The Death Eaters? Murder? Ourselves? was one that really made me stop and think [something that doesn't happen in many fics.] However, I did have to read this twice, just to make sure that I completely understood what was being said. But I had to agree with her in the end, or give in, whatever you want to all it. What if none of them came back? What if they…died? But they would go down fighting, I guess. Something about it just didn't sit right with me. I was also a bit iffy about the many elipses used in the fic, but after my second reading, I realized that without them, it wouldn't be the same. They seemed to make Ginny seem more like a person we could all relate to, in that her train of thought was getting a bit jumbled, just like ours can from time to time. All around, I really enjoyed this, even if Ginny was the main character [and that's saying something.] Good job!
Your reviews for my stoey made me really want to read your own. I went in with pretty high expectations, and I wasn't disappointed. Watch your grammar after quotations [eg. "Watch your head." Ron said. -- the period should be a comma] My only other complaint, other than the few grammar mistakes, is that it wasn't long enough! That's supposed to satisfy my growing mind? I want more!
Author's Response: Because some of the grammar errors you mentiones in the above review, I think Chapter 2 is grammar-error-free, because I corrected most of those. Yeah, I know it wasn't long enough but I'm trying to make the chapters longer...I think I've succeeded, so far. Thanks for reviewing and keep writing on YOUR story! :)
Woah. What a way to start your fic with a bang! Other than your intriguing summary, your first two or three sentences drew me in right away and I found that couldn't take my eyes off of the page. I wanted to know exactly just what had happened to Harry and what he was going to do about it. I could imagine what he was doing, kudos for that!
There were, however, a few things that I had to read over again, just so they would make sense. '. . . dreams Harry were having these days. . .', for example, threw me off a bit. The word 'were' makes the sentence seem awkward. Try replacing it with the word 'was,' and it'll flow better. This impossible course of action was the only way he could see of overcoming the next six months, or year if he was lucky, which didn’t end with the funeral of Harry Potter. That sentence confused me a lot. I had to read it a good three or four times before the meaning became clearer, and even now, I'm not sure what you meant to say here. Are you talking about how, if he could change the future, things would be easier for him, or is he thinking that he task seems impossible? I caught one spelling mistake, probably just a typo. '. . . suprised that anyone else would have reason to be awake. . .' the word suprised should be surprised. The only other sentence that threw me a bit was this one, Just then, Ron gave an almighty snore, similar to that of a hippo in labour (recalling the program on the Discovery Channel he had seen in Privet Drive…before Uncle Vernon had yelled at him for watching ‘un-educational’ pig-swill…he then changed the channel to ‘One hundred ways to make coal shinier’ – Number One: Cover it in glue, Number Two: Replace them with plums…). It was just a little too long, for my taste. Perhaps you could take the information in the brackets, trim it a bit [so it's not as run-on], and somehow combine it into the sentence. For example, 'Just then, Ron gave a mighty snore, similar to the cry of a hippo in labour. Harry chuckled, recalling a program about hippos that he had seen while he was staying at Privet Drive.' Just a small suggestion.
The reality of his dreams were more strikingly vivid than those he had about Voldemort, but he also knew that they couldn’t be true; since as far as he could remember, he hadn’t been murdered by Voldemort anytime in the recent past. This line made me chuckle. It really made me think of something that could have been in the series, though it didn't sound like something that JKR would write. You managed to keep the style yours, while still writing something that rang true to the novels.
Just like you started the chapter, you finished it with a bang. Hermione's declaration of the battle coming closer to Hogwarts was something that I definitely didn't see coming. Also, A sense of dread washed over him, as he realised that the inevitable Battle for Hogwarts was inching ever close. was a great way to end the chapter, and it left me wanting more.
Excellent work. I look forward to reading more of this fic in the future.
Author's Response: Hello, what an intriguing name - sounds like a kind of cat-food which has shards of metal in it. ..anywho, okay: the sentence about the funeral for Harry Potter - you're right that it doesn't flow greatly but I still thinks it makes sense...basically he was saying that if he had the power to change the future then he would be able to avert his inevitable death. Oh, and thanks I'll change the surprised typo (my spelling is usually perfect, but that's one mistake I've made since I was 5 - I like my spelling better though =) Thanks for your kind words; You must read past the first chapter coz that's the worst chapter, and it gets much better later! Nitwit Blubber Oddment Tweak!!
This chapter pushed me over the edge. I have officially become a SecretKeeper fangirl.
Your writing is close to flawless and the characterization is perfect. I could see exactly what was going on in my mind's eye. The conversations between Harry and Hermione were perfectly in character -- I found myself wondering if JKR should come to you for characterization advice. I especially loved how Hermione kept finishing Harry's sentences for him; it proved how strong their friendship really is.
I just have one teensy nit-pick. There role is now crucial if Potter is to be lured. The word 'there' should be 'their;' an easy mistake to make, since Word doesn't pick up on things like that. The only other thing I picked up on was Forty-eight hours and thirty-nine minutes, when he's been thinking that it's been forty nine hours.
I loved when Harry was remembering his last conversation with Ron. IT actually made me shiver. The wording you used to describe his reaction had to have been one of my favourite paragraphs in the whole chapter. Harry sighed and shut his eyes, hoping it would shut out the memory. The heavy weight in the pit of his stomach seemed to squirm and tear at his insides, reaching his heart until a fiery ache twisted behind his chest. Wow.
“If they… it could mean… they’d have so much power over me, if they captured you too, more than… I just… can’t…” I loved how vulnerable this made Harry seem. I wanted to reach into my computer and give him a hug after I read this.
Harry’s loss for words lingered between them, manifesting into unanswered questions and burning impulses thick enough to suffocate the thoughts from the girl’s mind. I love the words you used to describe what Hermione was feeling. It was so vivid and riveting.
Harry lowered the broom a few more inches and gently loosened Hermione’s grip on his shirt. “On the ground, for starters…” This one made me laugh out loud.
All in all, this was a wonderful chapter. You grabbed my attention right from the very beginning, and I look forward to more. Right now, though, I'm going to go make my SecretKeeper fangirl icon.
Author's Response: Oh, wow! I'm simply... floored by your amazingly encouraging words! Thank you so, so much. I might just have to print this out and save it as my little confidence booster when I start to doubt myself. *smiles* I am nothing short of thrilled to know you continue to like each chapter. And thanks for pointing out specifics as well... I'm happy you liked the descriptions! And of course, thank you for pointing out that "there/their" mistake. *Hits Self* What a silly error on my behalf. I appreciate all your support, so very much. Thanks again. Next chapter is for you. ; )
I have to admit -- your fic made me smile. It was a very good way to begin your fiction, though it did seem a bit familiar [for lack of a better word]. I really hope that this doesn't turn out to be like many other L/J fics, as I enjoyed it quite a lot. The first line drew me in -- I could picture Lily on the Platform, looking for her friends -- picturing scenes in my head is a very good thing for me when I'm reading, kudos to that.
I just have a few things to nit-pick; I'm a picky person. In the very first paragraph, there was a misspelling of Carmen's name. Now, I'm not sure if you meant to say Carman or Carmen, but you should pick one. Also, don't forget that Head Boy and Head Girl should always be capitalized, even if the words aren't at the beginning of a sentence. The same goes for the word Prefect. I also caught a few minor grammar blips, such as no punctuation at the end of one sentence, or no comma in front of someone's name when they're being spoken to [“- hey, Lils!”], but it was nothing major.
I like how you're subtly developing your characters. There were no long descriptions of Lily and her friends [which is the case in many Lily/James fictions]. I also like how Carmen and Sarah's personalities aren't outshining Lily's right away, which is another thing that I see in many L/J fics. Though you haven't fully developed them [and I really hope that you do, they seem very interesting], I still get a feel of their personalities. Many authors tend to create female versions of Remus and Sirius, and then pair them off with the Marauders. I caught a little hint about Sarah's romantic future, and I was delightfully surprised that I didn't see Remus of Sirius. Often times, authors come right out and make their OCs have dazzling personalities, and they sort of shunt Lily off to the side as the 'stuck-up' one. I didn't see you do this at all. Thank you for that. Carmen seemed a bit strong minded, but then again, so did Lily and Sarah. I like that you didn't stereotype each girl's personality [the loud one, the shy one, etc.] Great work!
I usually don't read fluff -- I'm much more of a dark romance kind of gal, but like I said before, I was delightfully surprised. I look forward to reading more in the future.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really want to make my fic different from others of the same genre, but it can be difficult! I didn't realise I had spelled them differently - thanks I will try to correct them. Carmen and Sarah will come into the story a lot maore as it progresses. Thanks for your review!