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Absolutely amazing. Not at all what I expected, since I'm not a very experienced Draco/Ginny reader. I loved this story so much so, though, that I felt compelled to review.
The entire letter flowed so smoothly and seemed to fit just perfectly together. How it went from bittersweet and sad to an almost accusatory tone and back to the bittersweet worked wonderfully. I feel you really captured Draco's character. He's always being bitter about everything around him and loves to blame Harry for getting things he doesn't deserve. He's also a bit of a possesive kind of person and you demonstrated that through him calling Ginny his. "You were mine-" Also, good job with the fancy vocab!
But it was confusing when he kept referring to a letter he never even recieved. Maybe I just missed something, but how does he know she explained everything if she had never sent it?
Other than that one point, the rest was fantastic. This is really a beautiful piece of work. Thanks for sharing your gift!
Author's Response: When Draco refers to the letter he \"never recieved\" he is, in a way, lost in his own thoughts and insanity. The letter is a fantasy, and how he believes things should be. He wished that Ginny had left him something like a letter to explain why everything went wrong. Hope that helps! :]
This is really good for a first fan poem. Very touching really... i think I'm about to cry!
Author's Response: You do not know how much that reveiw made me go awwwwwwwwwww. It really did. Thak you sooo much!!
Wow! This is a great story! You've really written Lily as I've always imagined her. I love how you make James seem so completely ridiculous and stupid from Lily's point of view.
"eyes as green as almond-shaped zucchini..." :D
Author's Response: Most people think my Lily is a little un-Lily like. But I\'m glad she pleases you. Thanks!
WOW! THIS HAS TO BE THE VERY BEST HUMOR STORY EVER WRITTEN IN THE HISTORY OF MANKIND! I'M RECOMMENDING IT TO ALL MY FRIENDS! IT WAS THAT INCREDIBLE!!!! :D
Author's Response: WOW! THANKS FOR YOUR VERY COMPLIMENTARY REVIEW IN ALL CAPS, LIKE GENERAL UPROAR!-- Schmergo (Schmerg_The_Impaler)
My friend has begged me to leave a review. She doesn't have her own account yet and so can't leave one herself. She loves your story so far and hopes you can use her name in the game. Her name's Bill. She'll have her fingers crossed. Thanks! :)
Author's Response: That\'s nice of you, Scribbler. Thanks for the review! Okay, another nmae, Bill.
I absolutely love this story. You've kept all the characters realistic, while writing a great humor fic. Voldemort, Snape, and Draco never lose their characters throughout all of the funny situations they're in.
For instance, Draco never seemed happy as a death eater. I love the take that he might go for "Dark Lord" stance. But you didn't forget that he isn't a killer and because of that he has to try something different. Naturally, he'd be freaking out right now, so the spell doesn't go off so well. That was a great scene! You really pulled it off.
I liked the brief part in Snape's own thoughts, too. It's just like him to be so logical, always calculating the odds and consequences.
Violet! Now, there's an OC. I would have never DREAMED of a fashion designer for dark lords. People always naturally assume they come up with the looks by themselves. Even though she has such threatening clients, she's so upbeat and peppy, too. She's not scared to give them petnames. She's extremely clever, on top of everything, too. A Dark Lord Grand Entrance package would be quite the invention.
Overall, you've really pulled this story together. At first, I didn't pay much attention to Draco's tattoo, but you suddenly brough it up in this chapter to save him from Voldie himself! Then, the characters are so fun to read in these weird settings. And through it all, I'm on the verge of laughing my head off. Well done!!!
Author's Response: aw, *thank you*. I\'m blushing. Please stink around for the final wrapping-things-up chapter, whenever the mods decide to let it through.
I always wondered what might have happened if Neville was chosen instead! Good luck with the series. I like it already.
Author's Response: Thank you! Keep reading!
WOW! That was FANTASTIC! Pure genius. Seroiusly. Normally, I'm too lazy to actually log in so that I can leave reviews, but your story compelled me to do so. You captured Neville's nervousness perfectly and NO one could ever guess Millicent. The entire time I was searching through different couples in my mind to try and guess who might write that, but it never occured to me that it could be Neville writing to MILLICENT! Excellent ending. Very well done. :D
Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much!! It makes me so happy that you liked it...=) I\'m serious, I jumped up and down on my bed when I read this review...=) You made my day. =D I think my head may be too big to fit out the door now, though! =p Thanks so much for reviewing.
Awww... James was loving her more when he gave her the choice to love him back than he even could when he was constantly forcing himself onto her. Very beautiful fic. Good job.
That was such a heartfelt -- ahem, gutfelt -- letter. I love how you showed Lily. Most fics end up with her suddenly falling in love with James out of nowhere. For example, he kisses her without her permission or because of a dare and she just melts in his arms. All of a sudden, she loves him.
But here, your Lily's cautious and someone who doesn't change quickly. She eases into a deeper relationship rather than jumping in. She isn't quite to that point yet of romantic love. She still has questions, but she's open to "the unknown."
Thank you for a refreshing look at Lily!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'll be honest, when I wrote this I was really frustrated with stories where Lily suddenly decides she's madly in love with James. And the thing is, at the time she's writing this, I think she's not in love with James yet--which isn't a bad thing, and it doesn't mean they shouldn't be together. So I'm really glad you liked my take on Lily's character. And thanks again for reviewing!
Lol! Congrats on your first fic. The intro alone forced me to review. For some reason, it reminded me of the beginning of A Tale of Two Cities. Overall, I love this first chapter. All the sarcasm and random fanfic cliches made it hilarious. Now, I'm off to read the second chapter!
Da da da dum, snap! snap!
A poem inspired by the Addams Family theme song.
I HAD to review this one! Your poem reminded me of an English class I had a few years ago. We were learning about poetry when the teacher gave us these rules to follow for our own poems. In the end, it turned out the poems were meant to match The Addams Family theme song. Your rendition for the Malfoys worked amazingly well. I loved it.
Author's Response: What an interesting poetry assignment! I had English teachers much more interested in grammar and essays than creative writing. :D I'm so happy you liked the poem. It was fun to write...and got the theme song stuck in my head!