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Promises to Keep by Gemmika

Rated: Professors •
Summary: It's been six years since Harry and Ginny have come face to face. Different career oprions led them in different paths than they had hoped but now at the wedding of Ron and Hermione they are forced back together. Will their fragile love survive the troubles that haunt their pasts? Rated "R" for Sexual scenes, Teen Pregnancy and Spousal Abuse in this story.
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 01/14/07 Title: Chapter 4: Natalie's Father

okay i just started reading this story and first off i love it!
the songs you use fit perfect! the goo goo dolls esecially. it is also one of my favorite songs. great choices.
and i am going to finish reading this wonderful story when i get some more time, but till then i will thank you for writing it! THANKS!!!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 02/23/07 Title: Chapter 11: Interrupted

Aw...this story is beautiful. and this chapter is positively amazing. I love every part of it. Hopefully everything will work out for Harry and Ginny. ANd poor poor George. Can't wait till the next chapter. 15/10

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 01/15/07 Title: Chapter 10: Cannons vs. Harpies

I love this story! you have a real talent for romance. Natalie is so adorable, and the plot that you came up with is wonderful. I can't wait to see where Natalie picks as the place they go as a family. Or what the room Harry shows Ginny looks like. UPDATE SOON!!!!!!

Sins of the Father by TheVault

Rated: Professors •
Summary: There was something about him that made him irresistible to her. Siobhan Murphy will go to any lengths to ascertain her deepest desires - but when the object of those desires is a married man twice her age with secrets darker than she can imagine, she will find herself caught in a scandalous liaison that she can't walk away from. Not Canon-Compliant.
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 07/27/08 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23: Consummation

Okay, Jenna, I promised you a review and here it is.

First off, Siobhan is quite possibly the best character I have ever read in the fanfiction world. Her name is so different and very pretty, just thought I would get that out of the way first. ;) Anywho, the way that she can hold her own against Lucius is amazingly done. She can match his wit and cleverness, which I really like. She is smart, and ambitious as any Slytherin would be, and goes after what she wants- Lucius.

The fact that she used Draco to get the object of her desire was perfect characterization- it’s so very Slytherin of her to do. Yet, she is not the typical Slytherin at all. She is rebellious against the things that the pure-blood society holds so dear- her views on the treatment of Muggles and house-elves, her being friends with Harry, Ron, and Hermione- and yet she is still human in that she does not go against everything and believes that she will succumb to her mother and be put into an arranged marriage. I do hope that made sense as I had trouble getting my thought into functional words.

She is also human in that she doesn’t want to believe that she has grown to love Lucius. Her emotion’s after finding out he was a Death Eater were written so very well.

Your characterization of Lucius is spectacular as well. I love the way you write his dialogue, and I think it is really fitting of his character. Of course we now know that the Malfoys love each other with DH and all, but that knowledge doesn’t hinder this fic at all. Nor does it’s being non-canon compliant. You’ve written this so very well that it seems that this should all be canon. Well done.

The brilliance with which you write the romance in this story is so real that it truly draws the reader right in so that they are pulling for Siobhan and Lucius, at least this reader anyway. The playfulness of their romance in the beginning, to the tenderness with which Lucius grows to say ‘my love’ with, to the heartbreak that Siobhan feels… it’s all perfectly written.

I must say that I am so looking forward to see more of Liam in this. His character seems so sweet and I am anxious to see how he will take his sister’s affair with Lucius.

Now, I must touch on Chapter 21: Everything Changes.

Wow. This was just an emotion packed chapter. Your ending made me cry. First, because of the way that Ron died and the way that you wrote that whole scene, and then, because Lucius saved both Siobhan and Hermione.

This line in particular stood out to me as a moment of change in Lucius, whether for sake of his redemption in Siobhan’s eyes or not.

‘Don’t you think it’s time to give up the crusade, Bella?’

It was so icy, cold, and true. It’s a memorable line in the chapter and I truly think it fits both Lucius and the scene beautifully.

Siobhan kneeled next to her and took her hand and squeezed it. They didn’t look at one another, they didn’t say anything. They had already forged their bond, nothing else needed to pass between them. The world had changed.

This was also extremely moving and memorable. It really speaks to the reader the devastation in the chapter. It is simple and pure; everything it should be and nothing more.

Okay, moving on to your characterization of Hermione. I think this best states it.

”But I also want you to know, that whatever the circumstances, you can trust me. For whatever reason, Lucius was against Bellatrix, and he saved my life. I believe he would have saved Ron, too, if only perhaps he’d gotten there sooner. Whatever he may have done, I’ve only witnessed the good, and I would never repay what he’s given me by saying anything against him. Especially if that might harm you in any way.”

You have her perfectly in character here and I can find no nitpick on her; I truly think this is very in her character to say because it is much like Harry attests to the Malfoy’s change of heart after the Battle of Hogwarts. Hermione could attest to some kind of change, and for that, she would never cause him intentional harm, no matter his past sins.

One last passage to comment on:

“I have made mistakes, yes,” he said, his voice once again composed, “but those mistakes are in the past. I have done my best to make amends, and I will continue to do so if you desire it. I’m not asking you to forgive my actions, but that you forgive me for having committed them.”

This was great. I especially loved that last line as it is along the lines of what Siobhan is thinking in the chapter. The wording is brilliant and perfect.

Oh, this is the most wonderful story, Jenna. Your characterization, description, plot… everything is stunning, brilliant, and extremely well written. I could go on for a few more days, so, in short, I applaud you. And I look forward to the next chapters. Amazing story and fantastic work.


Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 08/22/07 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Something of Interest

Okay, So I keep hearing about this story in the Slytherin Common Room. (At least I think this is the same story.) Anyway, you have got me completely tranced. I want to keep reading all that is written of this story, but the fact that I have to work in the morning is forcing me to stop.

Your words are some of the most captivating I have ever read. I must tell you that I can already tell this is going to be an amazing story, and not just because others have told me so. I must find the time over the weekend to read the rest of this story so that I can be up to date. I just thought that I would leave a review, while the thoughts were still fresh in my mind.

Okay, so that was only mildly annoying, right?

Amazing job,

Harry Potter and the Dynasty of the Wand by Lady Snuffles

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The fact that opposites attract might be one reason for Ron and Hermione’s new endearment towards each other. By the time the Hogwarts Express pulls into Hogsmeade Station for another year at Hogwarts, every witch and wizard on the train knew something had changed drastically between the two friends. Harry and Ginny on the other hand decide to keep their relationship a secret because of a “dream” Harry has about ‘You Know Who.’ If their secret love is discovered by the wrong people it could possibly cost Harry and Ginny their lives.

The sequel is on it's way! It's been submitted so I hope you enjoy it everyone!
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 01/27/07 Title: Chapter 15: Charlie's Challenge

I love it!!! it was amazing. i can not wait till the next chapter! 10/10

Author's Response: I\'ll be submitting it tonight

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 11/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: Good Laughs And Bedrooms

hey, im new to the fanfic and you story is the best one i've read so far....and i stayed up all night long reading....i so can not wait till the next chapter comes...great cliffhanger.... : )!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the compliment. If you want to check out a couple other GREAT stories then go read Daddy by blondebouncingferret, and Bittersweet by Aebhel. Two of my favorites! They blow my story out of the water but hey...I can\'t keep them all to myself. Happy reading!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 12/30/06 Title: Chapter 13: Where is Lupin?

this is a very good chapter...i really liked it and i am looking forward to the next. keep writing this amazing story. i hope you had a good holiday.

Author's Response: thank you! you too!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 03/11/07 Title: Chapter 18: Dream Come True

Another amazing chapter. That was a beautiful cliffie. the others that you used before were so evil (the way I like them) but this one was the perfect ending to this chapter. It really shows how much Harry loves her. It is just perfect. You have a wonderful way with words. This chapter had just the right amount of action and romance. I can really feel the pain that Harry is feeling at the end. Hopefully Ginny wakes up. *sigh* The way you used the dream to foreshadow what was to come was brilliant. And the fact that Harry forgot part of it is just how I would imagine him to do so. Because he saw Ginny being tortured he would naturally try to forget that little bit, wouldn't he?
I look forward to reading the last chapter, I am sure it will be even more outstanding than the ones before it. This is my favorite story on the site and I am anxous to see how it ends. GREAT JOB, another 10/10

Author's Response: You know, it\'s these kinds of reviews that keep me writing. They tend to bring a tear to my eye...

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 12/18/06 Title: Harry Potter and the Dynasty of the Wand

I wish they would validate this chapter already. I can't wait much longer or i may go insaine! I hope they do it before Christmas!

Author's Response: well they just rejected it so I\'m going to fix it and then resubmit it today so if it\'s up before Christmas it\'ll be a miracle.

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 11/22/06 Title: Chapter 11: Nothing...Anything...Everything

good story....can't wait till new chapter

Author's Response: me neither. Monday at least because of the well deserved break the mods are taking

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 02/11/07 Title: Chapter 16: The Tournament

Very good chapter. Can't wait till the next one.

Author's Response: in the process of submiting

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 12/01/06 Title: Chapter 12: A Bit of Holiday Spirit

this is soooooooooooooooooooooooooo good....more pleaze

Author's Response: working on it I promise

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 02/23/07 Title: Chapter 17: Missing

Personally, I love being evil so, YAY for cliffies!!!
Great chapter, can't wait till the next.

Author's Response: I\'ve got to admit thatyou are the first person to EVER say that....or think it as far as I\'m concerned....way to be original! ;-)

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 03/23/07 Title: Chapter 19: The Dynasty of the Wand

Wow. Words can not describe this wonderful story, but I will do my best. The way you describe things and your dialoge. You have a wonderful way with words and emotions. The idea that the wands uniting together was brillient. I am so glad that GInny is alright. I cannot wait for the sequal although I am deeply saddend that this story is closing because it is my favorite one on the site. *sigh* But all good things come to a close, so that new great things can come. Amazing job. 100/10.

Author's Response: That makes me feel so fantastic...thanks for the review!

Part I of Romance Slytherin Style - Somewhere Only We Know by SeaIsleWitch

Rated: Professors •
Summary: Near the end of sixth year, an overdue confrontation between Pansy Parkinson and Draco Malfoy leads to an emotionally charged evening, that neither will forget. This story depicts a missing scene from HBP and includes a humorous cameo of our favourite Potions Master. (Complete - 3 Chapters)
Part I of Romance, Slytherin Style - A Trilogy
* Let me change your mind about the Slytherins you love to hate. *
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 07/29/07 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three

This was really really good. Excellent. I loved every single part of it. I loved the connection that Draco and Pansy share. Amazing job this was one of the best stories I have ever read, fanfiction and not.

Part II of Romance Slytherin Style - However Far Away by SeaIsleWitch

Rated: Professors •
Summary: He had no choice when he was marked as a servant of evil; her only mistake was to fall in love with him. Draco Malfoy and Pansy Parkinson are two lovers forced to live in a cruel reality.

This is Part II of Romance, Slytherin Style - A Trilogy. Please read Part I - Somewhere Only We Know first. *Let me change your mind about the Slytherins you love to hate.*
Warnings: Non-graphic violence, torture and sexual situations. Character death, but not Pansy or Draco.
Genres: Romance/drama with some humour and action
Main Characters: Draco Malfoy & Pansy Parkinson
Other Characters: Severus Snape, Narcissa Malfoy, Millicent Bulstrode, Bellatrix Lestrange , Lord Voldemort and many more.
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 08/20/07 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter Twenty-four

Beautiful Excellence! I had to say that first. I have spent the past two weeks reading this fic whenever I had time. I read chapters 12-24 today alone and the others in 3-4 chapter days. This is one of the most amazing, wonderful fics I have and will ever read.

The way that you describe the connection between Draco and Pansy is simply breath-taking. You can feel the need and love they have for each other. You have came up with an amazing story and special details and spell work. Very good job. Word can not express how wonderfully well-written this story is.

I look forward to the final installment. You are truly a gifted and talented writer.

Belonging to Bellatrix by Fantasium

Rated: 3rd-5th Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: “Behind every great man stands a great woman.” But what happens when the roles change? What is life like to a man who must live in the shadow of his wife? A wife who is neither great nor good, but wicked and cruel, and who only exists to serve her master… One-shot, written pre-HBP.
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 12/01/09 Title: Chapter 1: One-shot

Oh Anna, this was such a dark little treat to read. Your take on Rodolphus was very intriguing and different from the many others that I have read. He’s usually shown with either a strong devotion to Bellatrix or at least a love for her, or a strong man who holds his own against her, but who can never quite defeat her power of him. But your Rodolphus is very different from that – he’s a hollow shell, his character barely seems of importance as you read the story, and that’s how we’re supposed to feel. As readers, we’re supposed to be able to feel what the character feels, and I think you achieved that.

I could really sense Rodolphus’ sense of worthlessness in his own eyes, and when he made the decision at the end, I could feel that he truly believed and felt that he was worthless and his death would make little difference in the world. And that is just great writing, because even though you were able to convince the reader of Rodolphus’ ideas being justified in his situation, you were still able to leave the audience with sympathy for him.

The alluring smells of fine wines and dark magic might be pleasant to the unaware, but he was constantly noticing the suffocating stink of sea water and rotting algae.

I loved the detail that you put into describing the location and setting. It really gave off this wonderfully dreary and dank atmosphere that really fit the story.

Bellatrix had even said she would have preferred his younger brother, Rabastan. He who had, as she had so delicately put it, ‘at least shown enough dedication to get himself killed’.

This characterization of Bellatrix was simply astounding. It was just so her. I could vividly picture her telling him that and her believing it, because she was just so devoted to the Dark Lord that dying for him would have given her the greatest joy, and the fact that her husband couldn’t even devote himself that much to their cause would have brought her great displeasure.

Of course it was. His master always knew.

This line was one of the best character moments, in my opinion, because it was exactly how the Death Eaters would think of their Lord and exactly how Voldemort would have been – he would have planned it, or at least known what would eventually happen.

Great work, dear; you’re writing is always a pleasure to read.


Letter to Draco by wizard girl

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Hermione writes her thoughts and feelings down, and sends them to the one she loves. this is taken from an original poem I wrote, and made HP style.... *note- not meant to rhyme, and this is OOC*
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 06/13/07 Title: Chapter 2: Draco's side

These were so incrediably sweet. I loved the second one the most. Really great.

Author's Response: Awe thanks so much. I\'m happy now. I really didn\'t think this would be accepted. I\'m really happy you liked it.

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX Signed
Date: 06/13/07 Title: Chapter 2: Draco's side

These were so incrediably sweet. I loved the second one the most. Really great.

Author's Response: thank you so much. i appreciate you all taking time away from your lives to read something I wrote. <333\'s to all.