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I'm a huge fanfic addict. Although I am more of a reader than a writer, since the only story I once started has never been finished, I check Mugglenet frequently and try to write reviews.
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On a Hogsmeade Bench by Kiara Avalon
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 3]

Summary: James and Lily share a moment on the bench outside Honeydukes as they wait for their mates to join them.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2632 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/07/12 Updated: 01/09/12


Reviewer: Callisto Anaxandra Signed
Date: 01/09/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, wow, that was so cute. I especially liked the tentative hopefulness of the ending.

I was a little thrown by your use of the 1st person present tense point of view. I think that POV is a little too jarring, and you could have had comparable intimacy with Lily's thoughts using 3rd person POV.

Overall, though, it was great. The lily mittens were a nice touch!

:)

 

Put Asunder by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 2]

Summary: As a Slytherin Sorted two years after the Battle, Astoria has never been popular. She's survived Hogwarts by keeping her head down. But when the news of her sister's engagement hits the papers, Astoria finds she's far more noticeable. For Daphne's fiance is Draco Malfoy, who is still universally loathed.

Why her sister wants to marry him, she has no idea. But then she meets Draco, and all loyalties are put asunder.

This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff writing for the Great Hall Cotillion 2014

Put Asunder is Astoria's version of the events first related in Until (Death) Eaters Do Us Part, and then Rumour Has It.

I am not JK Rowling. I think you know that by now.

Categories: Draco/Other Character Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations, Strong Profanity

Word count: 9166 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
04/21/14 Updated: 04/21/14


Reviewer: Callisto Anaxandra Signed
Date: 04/23/14 Title: Chapter 1: Let No Man Put Asunder

What a great story! Not my go-to pairing, but I thought the characterizations were realistic and the chemistry compelling. It was not too long at all; just the right length.

However, I'm skeptical about the ending. I understand Draco's motivation for such a public announcement, but I think pulling such a stunt would make the reality worse, considering all the money that was wasted and the shame of the broken engagement and unplanned pregnancy. Couldn't Astoria and Draco have eloped and then called off the big wedding? I suppose that relies on age of consent laws and such.

Still, overall very satisfying.

Author's Response: Well, the original story which is from Draco's POV, was more about him wanting a bit of a show, and also he wasn't entirely sure Astoria would be there. I guess I should make that clearer in this. He was also creaming money off the top from all the caterers etc, so needed as much time as possible to put funds into place. There's also the fact that once everyone knows Astoria is pregnant then her parents will find it much harder to get rid of the baby. Also .... if you read Rumour Has It (which is the POV of Pansy) then that gives a little more insight into Draco. He was peed off with Daphne for sleeping with Anthony, so wanted to cause her humiliation as well. As this is from Astoria's POV, then you don;t quite get that message. I take your point though, and might look at tightening up some of the details.

Thank you very much for the review. ~Carole~

 
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