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I'm a huge fanfic addict. Although I am more of a reader than a writer, since the only story I once started has never been finished, I check Mugglenet frequently and try to write reviews.
Summary: What if, on that fateful October night, it was not Lily's sacrifice that saved Harry, but James' sacrifice that saved them both? What if Lily is left to pick up the broken pieces of her life after its been shattered into a million pieces? Who would be there to rescue her? Who would get her through the night? This is a story of loss, of pain, of hopelessness, and ultimately, of healing.
After much deliberation and input from all you guys who have read thus far, I have officially decided to continue this story. It was initially supposed to be a one-shot, but I've decided I already have too much of my heart invested in it to quit now. :) Second chapter in progress. Thanks, all! Advice and reviews are still very welcome!
Hmm... Really interesting idea! I think you should keep going and explore both Lily's life and Harry's life later. There could be confrontations with Snape, Harry's childhood in (or not in?) the wizarding world, horcrux in Lily (?), and so many other things to explore.
Summary: James and Lily share a moment on the bench outside Honeydukes as they wait for their mates to join them.
Oh, wow, that was so cute. I especially liked the tentative hopefulness of the ending.
I was a little thrown by your use of the 1st person present tense point of view. I think that POV is a little too jarring, and you could have had comparable intimacy with Lily's thoughts using 3rd person POV.
Overall, though, it was great. The lily mittens were a nice touch!