From: North Carolina, USA
I am also a librarian at Mugglenet Interactive
That was by far one of the most beautifuly written stories I've read that deal with Ron and Hermione. The dialogue was perfect, the description was just right. It all blended it a wonderfully perfect mix! You had me grinning like a chestire cat when the two of them finally kissed. :D I look forward to reading more works by you in the future.
Sweetie, you already know what I think of this story!!! I could praise you for hours over this! I reread it and laughed.. a lot! Good thing I went to the bathroom before I read this or I would have pissed my pants!!! :D Lovely job sweetie, and you know I can't wait for DFT!
Author's Response: Krissy, you're too sweet, hun :D Thanks for EVERYTHING! I'm working on DFT right now, so get your bum ready to beta! :D
As I said when you reviwed my story, I would return the favor by reviewing yours! This was an excellent start and I'm anxious to see where this is going and how our Draco is going to play into it. I hope you don't mind if I give you some constructive criticism, from one author to another? Make sure to use British terminology and spelling. Mom= Mum... even when not in speech. O.K.=okay. There, they're, their There: as in a place, there. they're: they are. their: shows posession.
Do you have a beta reader? Perhaps having one will help just catching these small things that can take away from the already beautiful and amazing story that you have. I truly enjoyed what I've read thus far and look forward to the next chapters.
Author's Response: Thanks! Oh I don't mind constructive criticism at all. I seem to catch everyone else’s mistakes, but never my own. Yes, I know the difference between the "there’s", but I never seem to catch all that either. I probably do need a beta reader *looks out at the large expanse of authors hoping to find one willing to beta*, now it's just a matter of finding one! Thanks again for the compliments and the help!
I didn't know any other way of responding except by this... I'm willing to help by betaing your story if you would like. Email me if you would like - email@example.com
Author's Response: Oh! I didn't mean to sound like I was trying to get you to beta read, just someone in general. It doesn't sound as though you really want to, so don't worry! Sorry if I came off like that!
That was such a touching story. I like how you managed to keep James and Lily as in character as possible. There were a few spelling errors that I caught in a few paragraphs. For instance, it's Lucius Malfoy. And then Imperious is actually spelled Imperius. I got that befunddled the first few times I tried to spell it. But anyway, on with the story. I really like how the relationship between James and Lily progressed. It was more believable as you took it at a more slow pace than most. The fights with Voldemort and how James would always protect Lily is just so heartwarming and sweet. The ending nearly made me cry. I think were I more awake right now I would probably be balling. It's like we all know what's going to happen to James and Lily but we still hold on to some shard of hope that perhaps it doesn't happen, but then we all realize that it must because then Harry wouldn't be the same in the future. Anyway, I've rambled and I apologize. This was a lovely story and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for writing it!
Lovely!! I laughed and smiled very much! During the part with Professor Snape, I couldn't help but laugh! I hope I didn't wake my roommate up. *snort* Very well written and all the characters were perfectly in character. Bravo. :)
This is very good. I really liked it, however there are some odd characters within your story. I don't know if it's a formatting error or what, but it made it hard to read.
Author's Response: Yeah I see what you mean. They weren't in it when I submitted it. I think I'll resubmit it, that should sort it out.
Author's Response: Right, problem sorted I hope. Thanks for bringing it to my attention. Hope it didn't annoy ya too much!