Summary: "I don't need help from filthy little Mudbloods like her!" **
Fifteen months have passed since Severus Snape shouted those words in fury. He's had fifteen months without Lily and it hurts like hell. Over the summer holiday he's made a decision - he wants her back. But first he needs to speak to her before the Hogwarts Express leaves King's Cross.
This story was originally written for the Hufflepuff Back to School challenge last year.
** indicates a line taken directly from Snape's Worst Memory - Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix. I am not JK Rowling but I doubt you're surprised by that revelation.
For someone who doesn't like Severus Snape, you did an excellent job with this Carole! *squishes*
Now, that is angst!Teen!Severus. I wonder how you would write Professor Snape.
Keep up the great work... Man, I didn't realise how many stories you have up... *shakes head*
Author's Response: EEEP! I never responded to your review, young Allieatrix. Thank you! I'm pleased you like it, especially as I know what a fan you are of Snape, so your opinion matters a lot. I do write Professor Snape in my Tonks fic, by the way. He's not the main focus but he's definately there (and about to turn up again). Thanks for reviewing. Carole xxx
Summary: Breathing. It’s easy, isn’t it?
In. Out. In. Out.
But what if it’s not easy? What if your body struggles for breath? What happens if you cannot get enough oxygen into your lungs? What happens if your lungs contract so tightly that you’re forced to use all your strength simply to breathe?
And how on earth do a wizarding family cope with a Muggle condition that could kill?
This is Lily Luna Potter's story of living with asthma.
I am Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the Written World Challenge, Spring Term 2009. It has been written to garner support for Asthma UK.
I do not own any of these characters - they all belong to JK Rowling.
FACT: Asthma can kill.
Caroley! This is a really touching story (of course it is. It's real life to you). I was kind of sad to see that you haven't updated it since last April, almost a year ago. I would love to see how things turn out for the Potters as well as Harry and Dudley's confrontation.
Please update soon Carole. This is such a great touching story. Asthma isn't a laughing matter for anyone, no matter how severe it may be. And to have someone in your family that has it only makes writing about it that much easier, when it comes to knowledge, and that much harder, when it comes to emotions.
I love your writing and I hoep things are going well at home, considering everything you have to go through with your daughter's asthma and your dad's death.
Hugs and love goes out to your family from everyone here on MNFF.
Author's Response: Thanks Allie. Yeah, I should update, as I know what's supposed to happen. I'm off on holiday soon. The last time I did that finished seven chapters of one story ... ha ha. Thank you again for the lovely review, I really appreciate it. ~Carole~
Summary: “Is it true five years have passed since that night? That I have been dead for five years?”
Hermione had known love with Ron. But, now he was married to someone else and Hermione was alone with only her work at the Ministry to keep her busy.
But, when she was asked by Minister Shacklebolt to handle a problem, would Hermione find love with someone from her past?
Sirius Black’s life was cut short when he fell through the Veil in the Department of Mysteries. But, somehow, he inadvertently found a way to come back through the Veil.
When he was told it was five years after he fell, Sirius didn’t believe Kingsley. Sirius found himself being held in a room in the Department of Mysteries. A prisoner again.
When the door opened and a grown-up Hermione walked through it, Sirius was stunned. How could this be the same girl he had known?
This is the story of a lost girl, a man back from the dead, and a love story that will be talked about for years.
Terri! This story just keeps getting better. I can't wait until the next update!
Keep up the great work girl! *squishes*
Author's Response: Allie,
Thank you. I will be updating soon. I am glad you like it.
I noticed a few times you spelled Sirius' name without an 'i'.
Harry watched as Kreacher, his big globe shaped eyes peered up at Sirus.
Sirus looked at the scene at his feet with amazement.
Hermione looked up at Sirus as she said the last statement.
He gave a wary glance at Sirus before addressing Hermione. “I hope you brought the dishes back, young miss.”
Looking at his godson, Sirus sighed.
Harry looked at Sirus and Hermione. “I have to go,” he said as he rushed to the door.
Turning to Sirus, Hermione attempted to reassure him.
I know what he did before you died, but he has made it for it, over and over again.
I think you meant "made up for it."
Other than those few mistakes, I found the chapter quite enjoyable.
It seems that Harry can get what he wants from Kingsley. I wonder how the mission concerning Greyback will be.
As for the little twist at the end with Bill, gosh, I hope everything will turn out right.
*waits a moment* *bursts out laughing*
Haha. It'll be around the Weasley family in no time, I'm sure of it!
Keep up the great work Terri and I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Allie,
Thank you. Dang keys on the laptop don't always put in the letters I type. Grrrr. Fixed all of them. Ahhh, but Bill is an Order member and knows when a secret must be kept. So, we will see what the Weasleys find out and when, won't we? hehehhee
Hmm... I wonder how many more people will find out about Sirius coming back, and whether Kingsley will be mad or not.
Great story so far Terri. I can't wait to see how this will turn out.
Keep up the great work.
*clicks 'add story to favorites'* *confirms saving story* *gushes over first chapter*
This was really cute Terri. I noticed you spelled Sirius' name wrong once, but that's not a big deal.
The main thing I noticed was that you sometimes started sentences off with the same word.
“No, you weren’t dreaming, Sirius. You were in the afterlife with James and Lily for all this time,” Hermione said gently.
Hermione quickly finished telling Sirius the rest of the story. When she told him of Molly’s outburst as she approached Bellatrix, Sirius laughed.
With the repeating of Hermione's name here, it kind of slows the chapter down. Instead of both Hermione's, it might have sounded better with a she replacing one of them.
I think this happened a few more times in the chapter, but I can't remember. The awesomeness of the story is blanking my memory of it. :D
Overall, I loved it. Sirius' reactions to the parts of Hermione's story were very in character and Hermione's want to include Harry is also in character.
I can't wait until the next chapter. Keep up the great work with this story!
Long live Sirius! He did not die, he fell. There is nothing in the book to say it was the killing curse, and thus JK Rowling made the mistake and opened up this argument of Sirius being dead or alive!
Author's Response: Allie,
It wasn't a killing curse that hit him. The light of the spell was red, not green. Which lead to the thought, if he was alive when he went through the veil...
I will fix those things. Thanks for pointing them out.
And I can assure you, he didn't die. The Veil transported him to America and to me. LOL Thanks for your review.