“You’re only 15, Emeralds,” Sirius reminded him.
“Well, technically I’m 16,” Harry reminded him, smiling at last.
“That’ll get confusing,” Sirius mumbled to no one in particular.
^HAH! I was laughing so hard!
I know that i have never posted a review before - but i just wanted to say this is the best story i have read on any sight - i can imagine JKR writing it. This is fantastic
It has the full story, up until this point.
Okay, folks. Words can't describe how I feel about this story. I doubt anybody would ever understand if I tried to explain how much I love it. So I'll skip the mush.
Draco Black, Jamie, Vela, all of the 'fake' characters I love. Yes. Draco. He is so new, and different, that i had to include him.
Harry, Ginny, Ron, and the rest. Everybody else is so in character, it is so JKR.
THe ideas - Soul bonding! A second Potter!! Melinoe!!! It makes me feel surpassed in the ways of writing. CTS, you are incredible.
Please update soon! This is the best fic I have ever read, I swear!!!!
A Faithfully Obsessed and In Love Reader,
Is it finshed?
Please say it's not
Wow... an excellent story. Is it finished? ALso, just so you know, it is longer than JKR's version of book 6. much longer. But it is fantasticly written, and has many necessary twists and turns. I never would have thought of Harry having a sister, or a brother for that matter. I liked how Sirius' life befor azkaban came in, and how it used draco not being evil. I really liked it - it took me 48 hrs to read!!! Harry/Ginny was very good as well as Hermione/Ron. I have to wonder... is there a Draco/Jamie?? Or maybe the prophecy ment Fred or George by twins... urgh! post more soon, or i might die
Wowzas! That was really really good! Consider this my review for the entire story, not just the last chapter. I loved it! How could I have not realized that there might be more to the prophecy? That Dumbledore might be keeping some things for later? I'm stupid, and you are a genius. But that's the way it goes, isn't it?
I have just a few comments and questions.
1) What year is this? It seems like a seventh year fic, but so much has happened since HBP to this story.
2) There are a few words (sirus, and music) that are hyperlinked to an invalid web URL. Do you know this, is it on purpose?
3)You might want to proof-read one more time... several capitilization and grammatical errors including quotation marks... but that's up to you.
4) I love how we see Ginny's thoughts, but I think that maybe it would be better if they were in italics so we could better seperate.
That's all, and I'm off to start the sequel. Tata for now!
Ah. Ignore parts of the last review, I just read the beginning of the sequel and I get it! Aren't you proud of me?
AHH I LOVED IT *goes off to read sequel* great job.... awesome... they don't cover it! Darn, I have to wait until later to read the sequel because I have to go do stuff.. I've spent all morning reading this!! Great job, and tata for now!
I love this story! It's really good, and the dedication is so sweet! I like to write a review as I read it so that I can help point out little errors or I can tell you things I love. You start out with a descriptio of Privet Drive in a bird's eye view which is how JKR starts all her books. And you don't jump right in saying Harry Potter either. You have a long description, which is in detail and perfect. He's contemplating his life... that sounds suicidal. "Harry had went straight to his room..." I think this sentence should be Harry went because it just doesn't flow as well as it could. Oh good, we know what year it is by you saying Moody's warning. Summer after fifth year! So this is pre OotP and HBP... good to know. Cool! Remus! I like how you led up to him, with the scary dream, because we are kind of expecting Voldemort or something. Anyway... Oh crap I just scrolled down and it's over! *Curses* Okay, until I press the next button! Tata for now!
I'm back! Here's my little comments about chapter two...
I love Remus' confession of sorts, it seems so real and Remus is trying to explain everything to Harry and trying to get closer to him. Aww that was mean for Harry to say he was alone, because Remus cares about him! This story is so perfect, I almost feel like I don't need to leave these reviews! I usually have long lists of corrections whenevver I do this, but this almost deams unnecessary! Aww, Harry cried into Remus! Soooo sweet, yet so awkward for Harry, because he's never had that person to cry into before! You wrote that part very well. The whole thing is exceptional!
I'm baaaaack! NOOOOOO!!! The Jenkins' are deaddd! NO! Petunia - I can't believe she's talkin about magic! TRUSTED WOODEN FRIEND! HAHAHAHAHA! That made me laugh out loud! My mom asked me what was so funny! OMG Dumbiedore's got a granddaughter! OMG OMG OMG OMG! That's amazing! I can't wait to read the next chapter! Tata for now!
Hey everybody! Abby's back! Haha! Charlie kissed the girl Ron was hitting on - Dumbledore's granddaughter! Can't tell you how hard I laughed at that! And Mrs. Weasly approved - that was classic! Oh this is hilarious! Harry told them he loved them, so sweet and kinda girly! SO he's the Boy who Lived AND the Girl who Lived! There's the end to your story! Lol. And Hermione, eager to talk about school. Only her, only her. JUST for being the famous Harry Potter. Lol. Wait, why is Ellie being called Ms. Dumbledore? I'm confused. She's like Harry's age, right? Okay, igoring that part, CONSTANT VIGILANCE! Wow, Ellie does know the people in the Order. Aww, and she tucked him into bed. “That’s the problem with the world today you know, too many bleeding hearts. You’ll never make an adequate teacher if you fall to pieces every time some one has a bad dream. You, young lady, are more like your grandfather than you realise.” I love that line!!! So Phineas! Okay, now we are at the reading of the will. "Either I have passed away a very old man or I have done something very stupid and ended up somewhat dead" that line was even better than what Phineas'! Wait, what does Sirius hope it was the latter. Harry, Ron, and Hermione being young Marauders is hilarious, I'd never made that connection. Remus better cause more than a little mischief, he'd better cause A LOT! Who cares for a stuffed shirt? Lol. Haha - drawGinny in! He'd better draw her into a huge kiss! I love H/G. “Now, if you’re still underage, which I daresay you probably are," It's like he knew he was gonna die! *Tears up and sniffs loudly* Poor Sirius!!! The way he turns over his guardianship to Ellie is almost as if he is there! It's so sweet. Wild parties - HAH! Aww, Sirus spiliting everything up to everybody is so sweet how he gives it to everbody with a little speach. "Sort it out or I'll be back to haunt you, Snivellus!" I love your writing, it's so funny! I can't tell you how many times I've started laughing as I read. Lupin being Ellies godfather and ellie being Harry's 'mom' in a sense - that makes Remus Harry's adopted godgrandfather! *Grins proudly at this conclusion* Okay, Tata for now!
Oooh what's Ellie gonna do for her grandfather? Curious, very curious *puts on Ollivander face* Sorry, I started reading before I opened up the document to type my comments. OOh, Ellie's Harry's cousin!!! And I drew a family tree, I'm assuming Andrew and James were brothers, and Dumbledore is Jane's dad, which means Dumbledore isn't Harry grandpa. *Pouts* that would be awesome! Okay, back to the story. This one is short, the chapter and teh review. Tata! Abby
Aww, they won. Sorry my reviews stopped, I decided this was too perfect for corrections. And btw, was I not right about GInny? Was I? Tata for now!
AHHH AN ACTUAL UPDATE! I was waiting and waiting and waiting! This chapter definantly stood up to usual standards, and I love the bit about the necklace being three Christmas', four Valentines... ect. That was ingenius! Who's Dudley marrying? Update soon please!
Author's Response: i know i know....this chapter has actually been done since Jan but there was a lot of drama that kept it from being posted....sorry about that... im glad you enjoyed it!
YAY! I've been waiting for this! The match was written fine, don't worry. I love the ending as well. Please update soon, this is one of my favorites!
This was so sad. Please update
Oh. My. Freakin'. God! This story is amazingly written and it just screams to any reader! I love this I love this I love this!!! Just a little mention - in the chapter where we first met Natalie, you said she had green eyes and raven hair, which is how I imediatly figured she was Harry's. You seemed to change the eyes to brown.... you might want to correct that. Other than that, this is one of the best H/G stories I've ever read, and I am adding it to my favorites list so I know when you update!
Author's Response: You aren\'t the first person to mention it, I just haven\'t gotten around to fixing it yet. I will do that now. Oh, and by the way, I have the 10th chapter finished, I just have to wait until the queue opens back up.