Penname: Indigoenigma [Contact]
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Member Since: 10/30/06
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It saddens me to have to remove the images from my profile, but an update was drastically needed.

I am a proud Hufflepuff, a former SBBC-er, and a member of the lovely group, SPEW. All of these can be found on the beta forums. I'm very proud of my participation and membership in all three and they've all helped me to expand as a writer.

I'm also exceedingly proud to share that I've won the QSQ for Best Reviewer. Well, I just don't have the proper words to express how much of an honor this is for me.

If you're here looking for something to review (which I invite you to do), I would like to request that you review some of my more recent work. While I appreciate reviews on everything that I've written, they're always twice as sweet on something that is rather new. That said, please don't review My Father's World (it is definitely on permanent hiatus) or Miss Myrtle (which exists only for sentimental reasons these days).

Other than that, please enjoy and explore my author page! Thank you!
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Better Together by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary:

Dunderhead students. A clumsily-handled Auror assignment. Snape and Tonks each have a bad day that gets better once they're together.

* Follows Sweet Anger and Too Much is Never Enough*



Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1101 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
07/16/07 Updated: 07/16/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 07/16/07 Title: Chapter 1: Better Together

Breathe! I must remember to breathe when reading your stories. I tend to forget about half way through :D
I thought that this was really well done! It followed the other two very nicely.
However, I kept thinking, “She belongs with Remus! Get your hands off!” And then I started thinking about what Morty would say if she was in that position….
I know, I know – wrong story. But anyhow, I really enjoyed this one.


Author's Response: I know how you feel. I have to say to myself, \"Remember that this is an alternate dimension of the Potterverse, where she falls for Snape, not Evan. She\'s not cheating on Remus. She doesn\'t know he exists!\" :D

Remus and Tonks will always be #1, but in a different time and place, Snape could be a \"favorite mistake\". :D

 

For Bitter or for Worse by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1016]

Summary:

All is not well.

George uses work and Firewhisky to cope with Fred's death until a drink with a friend leads to something that dulls pain better than alcohol. Emotionally torn by grief, he struggles to allow Alicia into his life...and then comes baby....

*Winner of the 2008 Quicksilver Quill Award for Best Dark/Angsty Story*



Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations, Substance Abuse, Violence

Word count: 112887 Chapters: 40 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/01/07 Updated: 07/12/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/03/07 Title: Chapter 2: The Morning After

Awwwwwwww!

Okay, I had to get that out of my system. :D
That was a really good chapter. I especially enjoyed how George’s character is developing – it’s just like how I imagined it would be.

*snickers* Was it Mr. Wilytounge who sold Alicia the potion?


Author's Response: Of course it was! :D Just for you, I went and copied this from \'A Moment Like This.\' Bet Alicia would be squirming with embarrassment too!

(The goblin clerk Mr. Wilytongue) “Are you a current user of contraceptive solutions?”

(Alicia) “No.”

“Is there any history of allergy to--” He rattled off a long list of ingredients.

“No.”

“Intended for short or long term usage?”

Her face felt hot. “Long.”

“Will the properties of the solution be engaged sporadically or frequently?”

Her cheeks were probably as red as the flagon at which she was staring. “Frequently.”

“One last question. Which flavour do you prefer?”

(Sweet cherry, of course!)

Thanks for bringing back a fun moment!

 
Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Pain and Comfort

Oooh! Rereading is fun!!
I know that this is supposed to be rather darker than most of your fics (duh!), but somehow I know that you will manage to make it a bit fluffy. Why? Cause, you’re gonna have to face it, you’re addicted to love!
Three cheers for the late and great Robert Palmer!


Author's Response: Yay for you re-reading! Yay for Robert Palmer! I named a fic Simply Irresistible because of him. :) I think these lyrics apply to George...or at least they will! ;)

A one track mind

You can\'t be saved

oblivion is all you crave

If there\'s some left for you

You don\'t mind if you do

Ohh oohh

You like to think that you\'re immune to the stuff.

It\'s closer to the truth to say you can\'t get enough,

you know you\'re gonna have to face it you\'re addicted to love

Might as well face it, you\'re addicted to love(5x)

 
Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/30/07 Title: Chapter 6: Motherly Love

Emotionally charged chapter this week!

Molly has always been one of my favorite characters and I was pleased to see that she made another appearance in this chapter.

Lucky rock…lol.

The conversation between George and Alicia about the term ‘girlfriend’ was heart wrenching. *sniffles* I can’t wait to see how it is resolved!


Author's Response: Most people think nothing of calling someone their girlfriend/boyfriend, but here, it\'s like a line drawn in the sand. Relationship or no relationship, George has to decide.

 
Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/11/07 Title: Chapter 3: Making Love Instead of Misery

Ooooeee!!
Alicia’s mum walked in? Gods, how mortifying!
I hope that, at some point, Alicia will be able to say “To us,” without fear of being sent home. It’s a bit sad that she can’t, but understandable for the moment.
I loved the house elf. So eager to clean and help – cute!


Author's Response: I want a house-elf to clean and help! :D Oh well, at least I can enjoy George\'s vicariously, heh. Alicia should be darned grateful her mum\'s isn\'t like Mrs. Weasley. Could you imagine if Molly had walked in on that in the Burrow?

 
Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 09/14/07 Title: Chapter 8: Something to Talk About

Heh, I’m not sure why, but the palmistry thing made me giggle a bit.

Vampire!George was an interesting thing to think about. Yeah, I could see him with the pale skin and some pointy eye teeth….*shakes head in order to get image out*

When Bill started panicking over Fleur – ah, it made me sigh a bit. He’s going to be a great parent, if an overprotective one. Gosh, Victorie’s dates must have really suffered some serious threats!


Author's Response: I imagined Fred using it on one of the French cousins at the wedding and George taking mental notes, LOL. Vampire!George would be sexy. They might have to act that out one day, just to give you a detailed mental image, hee. As for Bill, can\'t you see him using his scars and curse breaker stories to scare dates into keeping their hands off his daughter...at least while they\'re in the room with her dad, :P.

 
Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/24/07 Title: Chapter 5: Dance with Me

Hehe...Molly Weasley gets me everytime! She's one of my favorites!
The pub scene ws beautifully written, but did I hate Geroge's reaction to Alicia. I think I'm a fluff-addict.
Oh well! I'm still enjoying this story!!

Author's Response: A little angst will make the fluffy moments sweeter! I think you\'ll enjoy Molly in the next chapter, heehee...hee.

 

Baby Mine by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 40]

Summary:

Precious to me, cute as can be.... Tonks was supposed to be with Teddy at her mother's. Why couldn't she stand waiting? What caused her to look 'anguished'? Not a deathfic, just a possible explanation of why Tonks 'sped off' to find Remus.





Categories: Remus/Tonks Genre: Warnings: Mild Profanity, Sexual Situations

Word count: 1566 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/10/07 Updated: 08/10/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/11/07 Title: Chapter 1: Baby Mine

Aww!
While I was reading, I couldn’t help but think that Teddy was going to be somehow left on his own soon. So sad. But, I remembered that he has many loving surrogate parents, so it’s not so bad.
Anyhow, *sniff*, it was excellent.


Author's Response: No amount of \"surrogate parents\" makes up for the loss of your own. Harry would be the first to agree, and I\'m glad that Teddy won\'t be left on his own in my dimension of the Potterverse!

 

A Black Rose and a White Lily by Afifa
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 34]

Summary:

One school: Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry

Two Girls: A freak and a chatterbox

Three blood groups: Pure bloods, Half Bloods and Mudbloods

Four Houses:  Gryffindor, Hufflepuff, Ravenclaw and Slytherin

Five boys: A rebel, a pandered child, a traitor, a werewolf,  and a distressed boy.

The story starts with them...

 Five, four, three, two, one- Avada Kedavra! 

... and ends with them. 

 



Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 14177 Chapters: 4 Completed: No
Published:
08/13/07 Updated: 05/10/09


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 12/23/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1-- And they were born

Afifa –

It’s quite interesting how you’ve juxtaposed the births of the Marauders (and Lily). I’m not sure if this was your intention, but it makes it seem as if all of their lives are connected somehow before any of them even meet.

It was rather bittersweet to read about Remus, especially how his mother thought that nothing would ever happen to her son. Of course, we all do know what will happen to the poor boy. Sigh…

One interesting thing that I noticed was the description of Walburga Black. I have never pictured her as someone who took great care in her physical appearance. Also, I would have never thought to have described any part of her as beautiful. But, this may just be my own perceptions.

Anyhow, this is a very thought provoking opening chapter to what I’m sure will be a wonderful fic!


~Kelly


Author's Response: Well, no. That wasn\'t my intention and it never struck me that the reader would take it like that as well. Yeah, it is. About Mrs. Black\'s description... I just presumed that as Sirius was supposed to be handsome, he might have inherited his looks from his mother. Thanks for reading and submitting a lovely review! =)

 

Summary: When Lucius Malfoy asked me to be his attorney, I had no choice but to accept. Actually… I suppose I did have a choice, seeing that it wouldn’t exactly have put Lucius in the best light if he’d threatened me while on trial, or anything like that. But the choice I had, frankly, came down to money. In fact, I find that a lot of choices come down to money in today’s legal system—not the least of which was the choice to let Mr Malfoy walk free.


A deceptively light, satirical story about a young lawyer who makes his big break to success during the trial of Lucius Malfoy--and learns an important lesson in the process.

I am FenrirG of Ravenclaw, writing for the August One-Shot Challenge: The Trial of Lucius Malfoy.


Categories: One-Shot Challenge Submissions Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 4666 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/14/07 Updated: 08/15/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/15/07 Title: Chapter 1: From the Life of Mr. Archibald Bailey

Fenn -
This is incredible. Not only the writing is good, but I greatly admire your plot (and your lawyer).
Now for some weird coincidences: Colores is currently beta-ing my challenge fic and it features Harry Potter as the witness for the defense. That's so coincidental! Whoa...
Fortunately, my lawyer happens to be female so it's definitely different. But wow! Just the same.
I loved the persona that you gave your lawyer - it seemed to be just the right combination of nervousness and inexperience. Great job!

Author's Response: Kelly! *huggles*

Awww, your wonderful reviews have brought a HUGE smile to my face right now. *hearts* I\'m so glad you like the story--as you might have noticed, I wrote in a very different style in this one, and I\'m glad you think I pulled it off okay. And tee hee to the coincidences. =P Fresca is an amazing beta, no? She mentioned to me that someone else was using Harry as a witness. *points finger* It was youu! ;]

Anyways, thank you so much for yet another fabulous review. *hugs* You\'re wonderful!

 

Summary: Anyone heard those rumours about a Harry Potter musical?



It better be just like this.



No, but seriously, it's a spoof of the songs from Disney channel's infamous "High School Musical," telling the tale of JK Rowling's infamous "Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets." (I was dared; I took the challenge.)



You will never see the Basilisk the same way again.



P.S. You may also want to check out my Beatles and Phantom of the Opera spoofs. Just click on my username and it'll take you to my delightfully chaotic author's page.
Twice nominated for Best Poem in the Quicksilver Quills Awards!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 3145 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
08/28/07 Updated: 08/29/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 08/29/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 and Only

Schmergo -
Just so you know, I was going to review the story (it was beyond hilarious), but then I caught a glimpse of your reviews.

I have to say, I LOVED your Voldemort sings "Popular"! Holy Helga! I could so see him doing that! (in your stories, that is....not Jo's).

If you ever do another musical spoof, I know that I'll read it and enjoy it!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I also wrote a bunch of Hairspray (Harry-spray) spoofs in response to spam reviews that got deleted... I think I\'ll post \'em here...

\"GOOD MORNING VOLDEMORT!\"
Oh, oh, oh woke up today
With a new evil scheme on the way
Oh, oh, oh, hungry for revenge and killing sprees
I call the D.E.s!
The rat on the street
Is secretly Pete
No one will guess that he’s Pettigrew!
Oh, oh, oh, don’t make me wait
UNTIL THAT POTTER BRAT’S LIFE IS THROUGH!
Good morning, Voldemort!
Every day’s like an open door!
Every night is a killing spree
Every sound screams of agony!
Good morning, Voldemort!
I heard Snape just killed Dumbledore.
The world’s gonna wake up and see
Voldemort and me!

I may post more if I feel like it (\"Without Love\" and \"You Can\'t Stop Lord V\") and if I want to expose the world to extremely horrible spoofs-in-progress

 

Two Little Stars by whatapotter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 10]

Summary: Fred and George used to be inseparable. Now Fred is dead, and George, devastated by the loss of his brother, must continue living.

He was one half of a set that was never meant to be separated; a cup without a saucer, a key without a lock.

This is a heartwrenching story about the horrific consequences of war, and the terrible loss it leaves in its wake. Sadly, it is often the people left behind by Death that are damaged the most.

Alone. He had never been alone. As far back as he could remember there had always been two of him. It had never been an ‘I’ or a ‘me’, but always an ‘us’ and a ‘we’.

Told through George's eyes - this is his story.

He was broken now.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2575 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/04/07 Updated: 09/04/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 10/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Two Little Stars

Gah, Rhi, I decided to read this again for my review and it still makes me cry. You did an incredible job with this story. The word choice is beyond amazing, dear, and the repetition of “He was broken now” really gives it a bit of a poetic feel. I really think that Fred’s death was one of the most tragic in DH, and it’s been interesting to see how the fanfiction world has responded. I’d give your fic two thumbs up and a box of tissue. Good job!

~Kelly

ps - congrats on winning the EMEA!!!

Author's Response: Thanks so much, what a lovely review! You're the best Kelly, thanks so much x

 

Melodramatic Myrtle by Everlasting
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: Myrtle has been lonely for years without Harry, but when she meets someone too similar to him she realizes the fun can begin all over again.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 1901 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
09/05/07 Updated: 09/09/07


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 09/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: Myrtle's a Mess

Ha! That was great! I absolutely adore good fics with Myrtle in them. (Actually, I have one myself - Miss Myrtle - in the humor section)

/shameless self-promotion.

Anyways, I think that you had an excellent characterization of Myrtle. She seemed just as self-centered and dramatic as she always is. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks! :] I\'m really glad you liked it; I didn\'t know how people would react really. haha I\'ll check out your story! i love Myrtle fics too :D And thanks, once again

 

The Song of the Stars by Pondering
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 15]

Summary: On one starry night, Luna tries to help Harry listen to the stars.

Categories: Harry/Other Character Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1564 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/02/08 Updated: 01/12/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 09/01/08 Title: Chapter 1: The Song of the Stars

Tash –

Mmmm. This was a very sweet little story. I feel rather like Goldilocks, but it wasn’t too heavy and it wasn’t too light – it was just perfect.

You did a marvelous job with the characterization of Luna. She is a terribly difficult character to pull off because she rather defies any sort of stereotype. She’s quirky and eccentric, yet she isn’t completely mad. You very carefully included her individuality while maintaining her actual character – she’s not just someone who spouts loads of useless and random information. JK Rowling has always used Luna as a tool for passing on various messages: thestrals are one excellent example. However, she also gives the reader (and the characters) important messages about the things in life that matter. When certain characters (Harry, mainly) loose sight of what’s important, Luna is always there to remind him. It is in this capacity that your Luna really stands out. Her actions in your story help give Harry some of the hope that he had lost. It was truly a beautiful moment at the very end when this happened.

The interactions between Harry and Luna were also very well done. She’s just as unflappable and he’s just as completely bewildered as we’ve all seen them in the books.

“But I can’t hear them,” Harry said helplessly. “Even when I close my eyes, or whatever it is you tell me to do.”

Luna smiled mysteriously at him. “Then, we just have to go a little bit closer.”


Those lines really stood out for me as the quintessential conversation between Harry and Luna. Harry’s not quite as confused as Ron is when he speaks with Luna, but he occasionally has absolutely no idea what Luna’s talking about. This was one of those perfect moments when both characters seemed absolutely real.

While I’m speaking about characterization, I have to comment about Harry. Having him walk outside after Remus’ death, thinking about him was both incredibly touching and incredibly in-character. Remus was really the last person whom Harry could physically connect his father to. Even though Remus was not as close to Harry as Sirius had been, they shared a very close relationship, especially after Teddy was born. Having what he probably considered an honorary uncle die, leaving his son behind, was a huge emotional blow for Harry. However, Harry has always had an issue about showing his weaknesses. If he was going to be upset or cry about Remus, although it would have been thoroughly understood by everyone, he would have gone outside. The actions that you have Harry taking are exactly what I would have expected from him. You did a wonderful job with his character. And, personally, it’s always the hardest to pull Harry’s characterization off because we’ve all seen so much of him throughout JK Rowling’s books.

I also enjoyed how you incorporated small details into this story to make it just that much more special. The one that really stood out for me was how Luna sat on her thestral. I very much enjoyed how you connected that to Order of the Phoenix and described how Luna had a graceful seat on hers.

”I’ve always wanted to try,” Luna admitted, “as my Mum used to tell me that they would whisper secrets. I could hear them trying to sing to me, but I could never hear the words. I think Mum was wrong, as they’re not really secrets, are they?” She contemplated her own question for a few moments before answering it, “It’s not really such a secret that even after they’re gone, our loved ones will still think of us.”

Due to an unfortunate circumstance in my own life recently, I’ve been thinking a lot about the general concept of death. (That sounded somewhat morbid…>.>). This passage that Luna tells Harry was really quite interesting for me. I really liked how Luna describes those who have died as the ones thinking about those who remain on the earth. It really takes Luna to put such an idea in perspective – usually the phrase would be that those who are still alive think about those who have died. Luna phrases the fact that the dead never truly leave us in such an elegant way. I think that this was my favorite passage in your entire story because of how touching it is, both for me and for Harry. After all, Harry has spent so much of his life thinking about those who have died, that it must give him a sense of closure to know that the people that he thinks about are thinking about him in return.

Tash, this was a very moving story. Everything worked so well together: the stars, the characters, just everything. You did a fabulous job with two very difficult characters and a very heavy theme. In short, this was amazing.

~Kelly

 

Safety by KASK
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 30]

Summary: During the first war, people married young, married because they were afraid, married for protection. But love grows, well, it did for Lily Evans.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 2186 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/04/08 Updated: 01/12/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 01/12/08 Title: Chapter 1: Safety

That was amazing. The way that you characterized Lily was brilliant. It was wonderful to see her progression from being unsure of her love for James to realizing that he was quite literally a part of her. It was amazing to watch her growth throughout the story - her emotional growth, really, and perhaps her capacity to love also.

And the finish, though surprising, was a great touch. Looking back, it does seem as if Lily is telling her story as if to justify why she chose James Potter over anyone else. This was an absolute joy to read.

~Kelly

Author's Response: Thank you!

 

His Most Faithful Servant by R_Ravenclaw
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 5]

Summary: After the Dark Lord tries to murder Harry Potter, he disappears and is assumed to be dead. His four most loyal servants are alone in trying to find him. And Bellatrix will do anything she can to bring her Master back.

Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Violence

Word count: 1545 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/12/08 Updated: 01/15/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 01/15/08 Title: Chapter 1: His Most Faithful Servant

Oh my goodness. That was very well done, dear. I really liked Bella's voice - it seemed very clear and very driven. I found it especially believable that Bella didn't love her husband - was she capable of loving anything other than power? Just as a side note, I think that Bella may have felt just a twinge of remorse for being caught and being sent to Azkaban. Although, I do think that such a feeling wouldn't have lasted all that long - she's so certain that Voldemort will come and save them all.
Anyhow, excellent work!

~Kelly

Author's Response: Well, Bellatrix would have considered any affection for her husband to be the absolute worst thing to do to her beloved Dark Lord. I love Rodolphus, and can\'t help but feel sorry for him. Perhaps a bit of anger would have been good for Bella, but I wanted the torture to make her realise that Voldemort had to be out there somewhere. Does that make sense? Thanks for the great review!

 

Great Expectations by Cassandras Cross
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 505]

Summary: A weekend trip to the mysterious Rose Cottage leads to Ginny's second pregnancy and Hermione's first. The Potters and Weasleys take on “The Next Great Adventure” as they anticipate the births of Albus Potter and Rose Weasley.

NOW COMPLETE!


Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 107864 Chapters: 26 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/13/08 Updated: 07/25/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 02/05/08 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: Surprises

Oh my. I really like how this is coming along. The timeline that you drew up for the children is excellent - saves me from researching! :D

Also, seeing Hermione fail at something is quite an interesting experience. You pull it off quite well.

Remus and Tonks in this chapter were a nice addition. Having Ginny's Patronus change was so sweet. It kind of reminded me of Snape, though. Heh, I know it's supposed to be the female form of Harry's.

Great job!



Author's Response: There is more to the Patronus than meets the eye. It becomes even more important later in the story, though when you\'ll get a chance to read that goodness only knows with all the problems the site is having. If you grow tired of waiting, I do have 14 chapters of this story already posted on fanfiction.net under the name Cassandra\'s Cross. Please PM me if you\'d like more information. Thanks for your review.

 

Love Is Just Hate With A Smile by jenny b
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 18]

Summary:

‘Love and hate are quite similar when you think about it,’ James said thoughtfully.

‘What do you mean?’ Lily asked.

‘You can’t hate someone for no reason without loving them a little,’ he said.

Lily rolled her eyes. ‘That’s stupid,’ she said.

‘No it’s not. Why do you think guys tease girls they like? Most people use hate to hide the fact that they really love someone.’

Lily didn’t say anything, so James continued. ‘After all, love is really just hate with a smile.’

Lily Evans hated James Potter. She always had, and thought she always would. But people change. Opinions change. Sometimes the line between right and wrong blurs … as well as the line between love and hate.

ON INDEFINITE HIATUS. Check out my bio for more details.

Categories: James/Lily Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 5759 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
01/14/08 Updated: 07/21/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 01/30/08 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: Friends and Foes

Jen -

Lovely teen angst that you've got going here. Although, I must say that it was well written and believeable. It wasn't over the top or underdone. I will admit, though, that I was a little surprised at Petunia's openness about "Sev" and who Lily is seeing. I wouldn't have thought that Lily would have told her mum that they were dating. Although, this may be that I'm not all that familiar with the dynamics of such a thing.

Also, the word choices were great throughout and the sentence structure was very smooth. There was just one little place where I got a bit confused:

Chloe’s husband had left them when Madeleine was born, and Chloe was not much older than Lily was now.

For a moment, I thought that Maddi's mum was only sixteen or seventeen. Hehe, which would be impossible. Maybe reformatting the sentence would clear that up a bit.

Anyways, great job on this. I think that you have Lily characterized very well. I also think that you have an excellent title - it's very thought provoking.

Wonderful start!

~Kelly

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the amazing review, Kelly. I can see what you mean about the Severus thing, but I\'ve always imagined Lily to have a close relationship with her mum. But anyway, I don\'t think Lily and Sev were dating, it\'s just what Petunia thought. I\'ll fix that sentence soon. I see what you mean! It\'s a bit confusing. :] I\'m glad you like my characterisation! *phew* Lol! But the credit for the fantastic title must go to my beta, Alex/wewillmissyou. But the title did remind me of a conversation I had with a friend once about that same thing, which is why the summary has a bit of it in there. :]

 

Put Thy Trust On Egypt by joybelle423
Rated: Professors [Reviews - 7]

Summary: When I was twenty-four, I took Victoire to visit her grandparents. Bill had been sent on a trip to Egypt, so it was the perfect opportunity for us. It was wonderful to be back home, speaking my native language again, visiting friends I hadn't seen in years, seeing places I'd frequented in my childhood. My parents doted on Victoire, and it was easy to slip back into some of my old habits of staying up late into the night with friends. One of those friends was an old ex-boyfriend of mine, back when we were at Beauxbatons together. We'd dated for three years, and everyone – our parents included – thought we would marry each other. His name was Philippe.

Written for Amanda/pandafan81 for the SPEW Spooky Swap of 2007.

Categories: Other Pairing Genre: Warnings: Sexual Situations

Word count: 1820 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/19/08 Updated: 01/23/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 01/29/08 Title: Chapter 1: Put Thy Trust On Egypt

That was quite an interesting read. I rather enjoyed the dynamics between Bill and Fleur - quite believeable and very in character. I also like how Fleur is incredibly attatched to her child and how very in love she is with Bill. That was a lovely story about a lovly pairing.

Excellent!

~Kelly

 

Summary: A giantess and a wizard...just how did it happen?

The story of how love began between Hagrid Sr. and the giantess Fridwulfa.

Categories: Historical Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1583 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
01/27/08 Updated: 01/31/08


Reviewer: Indigoenigma Signed
Date: 01/31/08 Title: Chapter 1: Take My Hand, I'll Take You Away

Aw, Hadeer!

That was very sweet. I really liked your interpretation of how Fridwulfa...excuse me, Diana and Markus met. It just seemed so...real, somehow. I was touched by how Markus befriended her, even though she was a giantess and how he seemed to genuinely care about her.

Oh, and it was awesome how you had Diana grow up in a human world. That's a great explanation for why she would have been so comfortable with humans.

Brilliant work, dear!

~Kelly

Author's Response: Thank you, Kelly! I\'m glad it was all realistic!

 
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