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Real name: Lindsey
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I am no longer an author on Mugglenet Fan Fiction. But please enjoy the stories I wrote a year or so ago anyhow! Thank you to everyone who wrote meaningful, wonderful reviews and supported my writing. If you wish to contact me, please do so by email, at lindsey.bell@rocketmail.com. Thank you.



My name is Lindsey, with the penname of Ron x Hermione on both here and the forums. I am a member of the Hufflepuff house and support my house with the utmost respect and endeavour, always going out of my way when possible to receive extra points. This would be one of the reason I have such an extensive library of stories, because most of them are challenge fictions. Some have even won a few awards. For example, Pain Doesn't Cost a Thing won first place in the Summer Challenge in 2007, Unexpected Gifts won second place in a challenge near Christmas 2006, Sacking that Silvery Man . . . won third place in the 'Dolores Umbridge Challenge' in the Spring-Summer of 2007, The Depths of a Darkened Mind won third place in the Gauntlet of Summer 2007, and I'm thinking that that is it. I had taken leave from about August 2007 to October-ish, but I found that I couldn't stay away from here for that long. I hope that my writing has improved at least a bit since last writing a story, and I hope that you, the possible reader, enjoys what you read.



Drop-dead-gorgeous banner by KC/sayiansirius! Go Hufflepuffs!



I am officially in SPEW! (The Society for the Proper Evaluation of Writers.) *coughs or Society for the Protection and Expansion of Weirdness coughs* But I now have a straitjacket! *tries to wave but can't due to restraint*



I now am even in the Susan Bones Book Club, where we analyse different brilliant stories on the forums. It's amazing there. Cute Banner by Noldo.



And though I have blatantly yet to go on a poetry spree of writing, I am in Poetry Anyone, a great little club where poets come together to share their views and thoughts on the metre of a poem. :) Amazing banner by the lovely suzie/crazy_purple_hp_freak!

NEW UPDATE

January 30th, 2008:

The last update I kind of lied a bit. I'm sorry about that. It turned out that while soccer winded down, drama and schoolwork didn't, keeping me away for longer. Now I have a few hours on the computer every once in a while and found that I couldn't stay away from some of the challenges. I just had a new story published Everlasting Friendship and a Green Baseball Cap if it is of any interest to you, dear reader. -grins- I do hope that I continue to write stories and someone continues to read them. Thanks very much for all of the continuous support through reviews and emails. I love you all.

~Lindsey :)

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My Favorites:

Books: Harry Potter 1-SEVEN, Where Willows Grow, Rose for Melinda, The Giver, Gathering Blue, The Messenger, Prayer for Owen Meany, Charlotte’s Web, Bridge to Terabithia, Shiloh, Where the Red Fern Grows, Summer of the Monkeys, The Perks of Being a Wallflower, Man on Fire, Anthem, A Rip in Heaven, The Stand, Crank, and Night.

Movies: Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix, Saw 1 and 2 and 3, Domestic Disturbance, Armageddon, Tristan and Isolde, Simon Birch, The Sixth Sense, My Girl, Where the Red Fern Grows, Day After Tomorrow, Holes, Red Eye, Moulin Rouge, The Outsiders, Flight of the Phoenix, High School Musical 2, Chronicles of Narnia: The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe, Ladder 49, National Treasure, For the Love of a Child, Click, House of D, Mean Creek, Wild Hogs, Blades of Glory, Disturbia, Spiderman 3, Hairpsray! (the newer version), The Stand (mini series) and Across the Universe (though I was utterly disappointed), but the music was amazing.

TV: My stimulus for Mondays is 'Heroes', where the weekly glimpse of Milo Ventimiglia keeps me going; on Tuesdays I watch 'The Biggest Loser' if I don't have a soccer game; I watch 'Kid Nation, 'Private Practice, and 'CSI: New York'; and on Thursdays I watch 'Grey's Anatomy'. Yes, I have a nice schedule going on.

Music: I have recently become a raging addict for Cartel. Will Pugh is just . . . So amazing. I also really like Jim Sturgess, Joe Anderson, and Evan Rachel Wood off the Across the Universe movie and soundtrack, I found an old Backstreet Boys CD and have found a newfound love again for them, Family Force 5, John Mayer, Josh Groban, Kelly Clarkson, and all of the cast of High School Musical 2 with the exception of Vanessa Hudgens.

Favorite Actors and Actresses: Rupert Grint, Jake Gylenhaal, William Moseley, Nicolas Cage, Ewan McGregor, Joseph Mazzello, Leonardo DiCaprio, David Duchovny, Jim Sturgess, Dakota Fanning, Dennis Quaid, Hayden Panettierre, Milo Ventimiglia, Gary Sinise, and Shia Labeouf.



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When You Do Dance by Connor Landon
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: There was a deep silence. It should not have been so, but he was growing used to the silence. On this day, however, he wished for any sound at all to prove that she was still in there. But there was nothing.

Life must go on, even after the one you love has received the fatal Dementor's Kiss.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 1172 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
10/29/06 Updated: 10/31/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 11/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: When You Do Dance

Oh, this was so sad! It was very good writing too!

Author's Response: Yeah, I meant it to be kind of tragic. I\'m glad you liked it, and I appreciate the review!

 

After the War by honeydukes_10
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 22]

Summary: Harry has just gotten home, to the Burrow, and many surprises are in store for him. What has happened to Ron? How will he react to the changes? Why is he getting a letter from the Ministry? Does he have to leave again? All these questions and more are answered in this story of love, hate, and secrets.



Chapter 2: Surprises Now Up! Please, guys, read and review! I would love to hear what you think about the story!

Categories: Ron/Hermione AND Harry/Ginny Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 3899 Chapters: 2 Completed: No
Published:
10/30/06 Updated: 05/20/07


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 11/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1:Welcome Home, Harry

Aww... that was so sad! It was very well-written. Very good how you kept the readers guessing what he looked like too. Very good job.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. Currently working hard on 2nd chapter.

 

Uncle Fred Calls Him Dick by MagEd
Rated: 6th-7th Years [Reviews - 1510]

Summary: Past Featured Story2008 QSQ Awards Runner-up for Best Post-Hogwarts

Harry defeated Voldemort. Harry married Ginny. Harry and Ginny had five children. Harry disappeared. My name is Lily Potter, and this is the story of what happened when my father returned after six years missing to find my mother about to re-marry. This is the story of myself, my crazy family, and most of all, this is the story of my parents and the man who tried to come between them. (pre-Deathly Hallows)

*Completed*

"Oh, I can so die happy now!" -Sirius Potter

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded

Word count: 67532 Chapters: 13 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/04/06 Updated: 05/01/07


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Uncle Ron Never Laughs

That was SO good! I love the plot... *chuckles at the Title* I love the name, Rick. dick, yup. I really like how everything is coming into play so far. Very good! I'm SO going to the next chapter right now! I love it! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad you liked it so much --especially the title! Thanks again for the review.

 

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Summary:

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/16/06 Title: None

Oh, that was great! So sad! I too love the idea of Harry being the Horcrux. I love your ideas in the summary! Please update soon!

 

Lullaby by crazy_purple_hp_freak
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: Late at night, Lily rocks Harry to sleep. She murmurs this lullaby…

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 172 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/08/06 Updated: 11/09/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 05/30/07 Title: Chapter 1: Lullaby

Suzie, I just adore your poetry, dear. I loved this, and keep up the great work. I especially liked this line:

My love’s unconditional,
You’re my Harry, my life.


I loved this, and keep up the great work.

~Lindsey :)



Author's Response: Aww thanks Lindsey! :D This is one of my earlier poems but I\'m glad you like it! *hugs*

 

A Dark Journey by Jenn22291
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 12]

Summary: Ginny knew that this night wasn’t going be easy. She knew that it would be the hardest thing she had ever done it her life. What she didn’t know was that over the next forty-two hours, she would experience more suffering, anger and adventure that she had previously thought possible.



And entry to the Gauntlet #3 by Jenn22291 of Gryffindor.

Categories: Post-Hogwarts Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 6493 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/06 Updated: 11/14/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 11/22/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I loved this story! It was very well-written and imaginative. Completely shocked that Ginny would do all of this for the entire Wizarding World! You portrayed her character perfectly in my opinion. Just thought that i would review your story since you're beta-ing mine! Very good work!

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you liked it, and I\'m glad you thought that I kept Ginny in character! <3, Jenn

 

To Be Or Nott To Be by Schmerg_The_Impaler
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 57]

Summary: Theodore Nott has never had much respect for anyone but himself. But after being summoned by Lord Voldemort to join the Death Eaters, his world turns upside down, and he finds himself questioning everything, including his own values and beliefs. Darkish, but with surprisingly light and fluffy bits, kind of like my Dad's pancakes or a truly hideous dress that my Mum once bought for me.

Written by Schmerg_The_Impaler from Hufflepuff House for the Gauntlet's 3rd run. Whoot!

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 6599 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/06 Updated: 11/16/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/31/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Adventures of a Self-Centred Cynic

Whoa.

Schmergo...Whoa.

I will have to say that this was a completely AWESOME gauntlet submission. It blew my socks off. You wrote in such detail; it was amazing.

I love the way that you put the setting and all of the things in it in such great detail. You are an amazing writer, Schmergo.

I admire the way that you portrayed Theo and November. THey are very good characters, and I really like in how you wrote the pair.

The plot is just...awesome. I can't say that enough. I have never read a Gauntlet submission before, and I am now proud to say that I have read yours. The plot - The Dark Mark, Theo and November, The Murder, The Boggart, the poem/riddle...You truly wrote this fic as if it was your own; I've never seen a fic written in this much detail and have the emotional traits that you did. Kudos to you. :)

With that, Voldemort rolls up my sleeve, revealing my thin, pale forearm. I notice vaguely that the hairs on my arm are standing on end as he grips it, pressing it with a long, spindly finger. He waves his wand above my arm as he presses it, and an excruciating pain shoots through my skin, like hundreds of tiny needles.

This is how I have always imagined how the Dark Mark is etched onto the Death Eaters skin. You did a great job in portraying that.

I really can't find anything to "criticize" for my constructive criticism thing I got going on for this story. You had amazing betas, I see, and there were no mistakes that I saw. Perfect-o! :)

The boggarts that Theo and November had; they were so creative! Well, you know what I mean. It wound in so well with your story - brilliant.

Even though that this was meant to be a "serious" fic, you (of course, because you're hilarious) put in some humor. *laughs at the Aaron Carter comment* There were a few parts in this story that gave me chills from how serious and good you wrote it, when others had me giggling.

We’re both ending a page in our lives and starting over on a clean sheet of paper. We’re just two dead people on the road together, and inexplicably, we’re happy.

A truly wonderful ending. You left the readers guessing at what will happen next, yet you gave them hope in doing so. A truly wonderfully-written last two-sentences, and your style of writing astonishing.

A truly amazing fic, (LOL, I don't know how many times I've said that) but it's true. It's quite different than the Dark Lord's Blog (Hilarious, by the way), and you did a great transition from Humor to the Angst you needed to have in this story.

Fantastic. I'm adding this to my favorites list!! Great job, Schmergo. I'll be reading even more of your stories now...*laughs maniacally*

Thanks for the great read!

~Lindsey :)


Author's Response: That was such a marvelously detailed and positive review that it made me smile at the computer screen (which looked kind of stupid, but oh well.) I\'m so very glad that you liked it, because I personally thought that this was one of my better stories, but it hasn\'t gotten as much attention as my others. Thank you! :)

 

Love Leads to Grief by Ginny Potter101
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 17]

Summary: Lucius Malfoy has been a Death Eater for many years. He has been trained not to show his emotions. Yet, when his wife and son are brutally murdered by Lord Voldemort, Lucius' barrier breaks down. This is the touching story of Lucius Malfoy's love for his family. Written Pre-DH. One Shot. Lucius/Narcissa



(Part of Lucius' monologue is directed at Draco)



SUICIDE WARNING




Categories: Dark/Angsty Fics Genre: Warnings: Book 7 Disregarded, Character Death

Word count: 1888 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/13/06 Updated: 01/10/07


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 11/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: A New Day

Very good! You wrote a lot like JKR at the beginning! Very mysterious, great writing techniques! Check out my story if you will. I'll definitely by putting this on my favorites list! Please updates soon and i will be waiting for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I\'m glad that you like it. The next chapter should be up within a week!

 

Meet the - Children? by Winged Artemis
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 244]

Summary: Lily Evans is a cheeky, brainy, hopeless romantic seventeen-year-old Head Girl with a sour temper. James Potter is an arrogant, hilarious, prank-pulling seventeen-year-old Head Boy with an immature head on his shoulders. Lily loathes James and James loves Lily. Blahblahblah.

However, when a mysterious locket and a very wacked Headmaster inform the two of them that their son is in grave danger, James, Lily, and of course, Sirius, are magically transported to the future to meet James and Lily's son and the state that the magical world is in.

A twist of mystery, fun, romance and some Sirius humor! And with a wee bit of J/L, H/G, and R/Hr!

WARNING: Tree climbing Dumbledores, valuable pieces of jewelry, and an ecess of sugar are contained inside - oh, and HBP is disregarded.

See profile for update information.

Categories: Mystery Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 11269 Chapters: 6 Completed: No
Published:
11/15/06 Updated: 09/08/07


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One - Early Morning

Oooh! Hannah! I love the cliffie! Very interesting so far! I'm not gonna leave a long review.. yet! LOL, *laughs maniacally*. I'm just kidding.
Very good so far and i'm going to the next chapter now!! Very beautifully written!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Hi, Lindsey! Thanks for your review. :-) Glad you liked it. ::big smile::

 
Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/20/06 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter Three - Meeting and Eating

*Busts out laughing at Remus' time of the month* That was hilarious, my friend! Ooh, this was a long chapter, but very enjoyable!

I'm bored, so I'm going to write you a long review...

Hannah, do you know what would be hilarious? Is if Harry fell in love with Lily, er, I mean, Erin. Erin. LOL, but but that would be great! Or, if you have already decided to do that!
I only saw one mistake: Thought i should tell you. When you say Sirius didn't bother cutting his food - he just shove it in his mouth. James chopped everything into squares, and ate them by the hundreds. (And if the italics tags don't work, I'm terribly sorry!) It should be shoveD. With a D. Te he, please excuse my bet skills, I enjoy it. LOL.

I really liked this chapter Hanna,, and when Lily/Erin yelled our "Sirius!" and then turned it into, "Serious," that was great.

Oh darn... no Snape to wreak havoc on the new students....? Ah well..

I'm interested in seeing who wins the eating contest! Pleaaaase update soon, buddy! I'll be checking... and watching you... *looks around shiftily.

OK, doesn't exactly qualify as a S.P.E.W.-worthy review, but you know. I really liked it Hannah, this whole story so far. It's very original, and I really like the plot. Love James and Sirius' sense of humor! Keep it coming, you're hilarious!
~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Hahaha. Thanks a ton! I\'m glad you liked it, and thanks for pointing out that error. :]

 
Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/09/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter Two - To the Future

Ooohh again! Hannah, you must update soon, this is soooo getting good.

""They had a thing, you know?" Sirius said, wiggling his eyebrows."

"James grinned. "I like 'em feisty." Sirius giggled." LOL. I actually laughed out loud at this!

Well... i've just given you two reviews.. can you write even faster? J/K.

This was a very good plot line, i've never thought of anything like this! It's very creative, yet mysterious!

I want Lily/ oops should i say Conner, to meet Draco Malfoy... maybe.. nah i dunno.

I hope you liked my review, (i know you like, 'scuse me, LOVE getting them!)

Please update soon and i heard about your fic from you!

~Lindsey :) LOL, your fellow insomniac.

Author's Response: Hahahhahhahahaha. Thanks! And Lily\'s not Conner - she\'s Erin! It\'s so confusing to write, though. I\'ll start writing Erin when I want to write Lily and Lily when I want to write Erin. Arghh! And they might meet Draco - I haven\'t decided who I want to keep in the sotry and who I want to kick out. But anyway, thank you for both of your lovely reviews!

 

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Rated: [Reviews - ]

Summary:

Categories: Orphan Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 0 Chapters: 0 Completed: No
Published:
12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/15/06 Title: None

I think that I have actually already stumbled upon this fic once, it seemed familiar. But I'm glad that I did again, because I loved it! I really liked your writing style, and the plot was very original for a first chapter. I really like your ideas for the fic so far, although there were a few repeated words and punctuation errors you might wanna check on.. but overall, i loved it! And I am so going to the next chapter.. NOW!

Author's Response: I only put it up, oh, three weeks ago. I\'ll check the errors. I\'m sooo glad you like it! Thanks! ~Cara

 
Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/15/06 Title: None

Oooh Cliffie! Very good, you MUST update soon! Once again, i love your ideas, I'm so wondering what is going to happen with Ron and Hermione...*tear*
Loved it!

Author's Response: Chapter 3 is in the queue. Thanks for the great comments! Heh heh heh, cliffie time!

 

Let me be. by Gin_PotterGirl
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 9]

Summary: While Ginny and "Mystery man" are hanging out together, something bad happends to Ginny. What could possibly happen so that she storms away?

I would like to deticate this story to Nysuperstarz for helping me through out the site.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 113 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/19/06 Updated: 11/23/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 02/12/07 Title: Chapter 1: Let me be.

Ooh, that was really deep, Michelle! And who is mystery man... *giggles* Love the cliffie! This was a great poem! Once again, you astound me! ~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Lindsey! *huggles* Your reviewed yet another story of mine! Woot! Oh yeah, I read your newest story, the Unexpected Files, and I love it! I\'ll go review it in a second. -Gin

 

Water Dens by Gin_PotterGirl
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 4]

Summary: This is for a poetry submission for Poetry anyone? December challenge. The person I chose was T.S. Eliot. My poem is based off of The Waste Land.





Name: Gin_PotterGirl, on the boards GinnyPotter

House: Hufflepuff.

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 160 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/19/06 Updated: 11/22/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 01/27/07 Title: Chapter 1: Water Dens

This was quite cute, Michelle! The gnomes being put into play was portrayed really great! You have a great knack for writing poetry! I wish I could. Very cute poem, girl!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Lindsey! *Squishes* Thank you! Wait a second....is this for the Badgeer Review Circle? *Checks* I knew it! *Shrugs* Well, I love reviews all the same! Thanks for the Lovely review, my Lovely Beta and fellow Insomniac, Hufflepuff, and a bunch of other thing that we have ion common! -Gin

 

For the Fallen by mrsweasley
Rated: 1st-2nd Years [Reviews - 7]

Summary: A one-shot narrative of the last day of the battlefield, and how it all ended up. We see our favorite characters and where they go and how they're honored.

Categories: General Fics Genre: Warnings: Character Death

Word count: 1177 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/22/06 Updated: 11/22/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 11/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: For the Fallen

Aw! That was a great ending! I kind of have wrote a last battle scene too, except it was a bit of a different ending. It's on my author page.
You did a great job in portraying the emotional scenes in my opinion. I am absolutely a Hermione/Ron shipper all the way, and to hear the Ron died like that for Hermione, was sooo sad! Second, Ginny and Harry's mourning too was very good. Very sad.
You did a great job! Very nice work!

 

Summary: While sleeping after a long day's work for the Order, Remus Lupin's dreams take him back to his sixth year as he remembers his good friends, the creation of the mysterious Marauder's Map, and his growing crush on Lily Evans. It's one interesting adventure after another, so climb aboard the Hogwarts Express and view the magical world through the eyes of the werewolf.

Categories: Marauder Era Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 8450 Chapters: 2 Completed: Yes
Published:
11/28/06 Updated: 12/18/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 01/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chasing Memories

The forest is restless tonight. The wind blows fiercely, making the pine trees bend and creak in a rhythmic pattern. The cold air brushes past a gloomy cavern, making a furry tail protruding from inside blow from one side of the rocky ground to the other.

Great start. You gave very descriptive sentences, allowing the reader to already immerse themselves in your fic.

Actually the detailing throughout the first chapter of this fic was marvelous. You did a great job in letting us, the readers, know who you were talking about, and you did a great job of it.

Lupin. A great choice to write about, period. Also, a great choice for this particular style of writing and fic as well, too. You described the parts and physical appearances of the werewolves perfectly. You did a great job at that.

I really didn't see any huge problems, yet I saw a few punctuation problems. You tended to overuse the commas (I do that a lot, so no worries). I'm totally not criticizing, I'm just trying help! :)

The emotional aspects of the mother are quite good, actually. It would be apparent that any mother would go all sad in front of their child that will be leaving for a year.

When you say that Remus put his accessories down to hug his father, that was so sweet! We know how Remus is.. just a poor, misunderstood soul; who just happens to be a werewolf.

Remus gave his parents a final nod and a grin, faced the barrier between platforms nine and ten, and ran directly towards it. He disappeared instantly through the brick, luggage and all.

I loved the ending. If it were still the first and only chapter, I would have been like, "Please, continue. Now!" I am now wondering what you have in store for the reader sin your fic, now.

You used great adjectives throughout the fic. You must be an amazing writer, and have wonderful betas.

I really liked this fic. I haven't read any fics yet, as to where it comes from Lupin's POV, and from where the story is being told mainly about him.

I definitely want to read the second chapter... but I will have to come back later. I'm looking forward to it, but, until then, my favorites list awaits!

Thanks for the great read!

Your new Hufflepuff buddy, ~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Wow. Never in the history of this story has there been as lovely a review as this. I am floored. I can\'t quite remember at the moment where I learned it, but someone taught me not to be afraid of going into deep details. That really caught on to me, and I have tried to utilize detail in my writing carefully, but not to the point of writers like Tolkien (that kind of detail is over-the-top in my opinion). Thanks for the compliment on the detail, I was a little worried the tone I set didn\'t sound sophisticated and interesting enough, but you\'re vote of confidence has made me feel better. Ah yes, dear, sweet Remus Lupin. He\'s my favorite character of the entire series, and I find it ironically tragic that he does not have a huge fan base, especially compared to fellow Marauders James and Sirius. When I first wrote this story, I had found no stories specifically focusing on Remus\' point of view, which really disappointed me. Even today it\'s hard to find well-written fics focused on him. It took me quite a long time to figure out just what I wanted to write about regarding Remus, but luckily I found what I was looking for. Commas! Yay for comma overuse! Just kidding. I\'ll have to check for those. Thanks for pointing that out. I don\'t mind at all. In fact, that\'s quite helpful of you. I know I use them way too much. Always have once I learned of their purpose. I\'m glad you picked up on those little emotions throughout the story. I was hoping they sounded real enough. I was just trying to think of the ways I interact, and have interacted in the past, with my parents. Whenever one injects parts of their life into his or her writing, it really improves it wouldn\'t you say? I\'m glad you\'re eager to read more. I was hoping that was the feeling the reader would get. Oddly enough, I had intended to end this chapter with the beginning or Remus\' dream and chapter two begin with him stumbling onto the Platform. However, MuggleNet required more words for chapter one than I had, so I just smashed the two together! Thanks for the compliments. I certainly hope I\'m a good writer. I\'m constantly developing original ideas in my mind, but until they fully form themselves I\'ll keep to fan fiction for awhile. I\'m very honored that you added me to your favorite stories/authors after reading only the first chapter. That\'s extremely kind of you, and all I can say again is that I am speechless! Thanks again for this spectacular review, my new friend!

 
Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 01/03/07 Title: Chapter 2: Old Friends Onboard

I must say, that was an amazing chapter two. Yay, I get the first review!

This was a very long chapter when I first saw it. I was almost a bit iffy about reading the almost-seven-thousand word chapter, yet I’m glad that I did, though, because it was fantabulous. You should have way more reviews that three, and I being two of them! *blushes*

The bandages part was funny; You did a great job in the comedic part of that.

I didn’t see that many problems; yet again. I did see a few missed quotation marks and other punctuation, but no one is perfect (Goodness look at me!) and I’d make a lot more mistakes than you on this long of a chapter. I saw a few missed/overused commas as well, yet nothing too crazy. Other than that it was great.

I like how you used McLaggen as Tobias’ last name. We know that Cormac McLaggen from the books was a git. I like how you used the “like father, like son, trait in there. I hope to see more of him; you chose Tobias as a great name as well. Tobias to me suggests a manly, kind of controlling person, I think that you have that down pat so far.

I can’t really see Remus Lupin saying, “Oh my goodness, Lily, I’m terribly sorry.” A bit of OOCness goes on there. A warning would be well-placed, but not need; as it only a bit.

When you wrote about Lily and Remus talking a bit in the middle about their summer reading, I though I’d point out that you missed a comma. *blushes* Te he! It’s nothing, though.

Oh, and I’d also like to point out something else…Disregard if it’s stupid; maybe I’ve just forgotten and I’ve read too much fan fiction. But, I did not know that Lily knew about Remus’ “furry little problem” while they were at school. I’m sure (maybe?) that she found out while her and James were dating and married, as James and Lupin were best friends. But, this is just a statement. Please feel free to disregard if I’m wrong.

I love how you let the Marauders make up a map of James home. That was creative.

Maybe it’s just me, but I can’t see the Marauders saying some of the things that they are saying. Like I can see James using big words for comedic purposes and hilarity; and Lupin saying some of the things because that’s how you’ve written his character; the boys have even made a comment of it.

Since Tiberius McLaggen is an OC, you can basically let him say whatever however he wants; including “tomfoolery”. Great adjective by the way.

When Lupin says,

“Yes, I’m afraid I do,” said Remus with a slight tinge of annoyance in his voice. “Tiberius got irritated with me for not wearing it. I can’t afford to let that happen again. You heard him, if there’s anymore ‘tomfoolery’ my parents will have to hear about it. I don’t think they’d be very impressed with that.”

I think that this was a very detailed sentence, yet it’s a bit much. The Marauders aren’t known for how smart they are; they are known for their coolness and comedy. They’re not known for their stupidness (Even though they are hilarious), but I can’t see them saying some of the things that they said.

I do think that you have Severus Snape’s character PERFECT! He talks just like JKR most of the time when you wrote him, and you’ve described to us his appearance in fine detail as well. You need to write a Snape fic, I know you’d do great.

And then, before Remus can protest, he finds that his dreams are once again as silent and dim as they were when he dozed on the Hogwarts Express.

Great ending sentence. You left the readers hanging with the mysterious voice that was talking to the werewolf. You made us anxious to read the next chapter; but it’s not there! Have you started chapter three yet? I do hope that you update soon, the suspense is killing me. Are you planning on this fic being like, an account of the whole Marauder’s sixth year, through Lupin’s POV? And what will happen with the present-day Lupin? I love how you are switching back and forth. It makes the story more interesting. Wait, don’t tell me! I want to read it. Please update soon, if I may ask again. Sorry for the constructive crit; it only makes a writer better… not that you’re not an amazing writer already.

Are you planning on making this a Remus/Lily ship-fic? That would be interesting; I haven’t see many of those.

It still has a reserved spot on my favorites list; Michael. You’re very talented, I hope to hear more from you soon! You know what? I hope to see a one-shot from you! That would be great if you are having a block on this fic.

Thanks again for the great read!

Your buddy, ~Lindsey

 

Summary: Christmas won't be the same now that the world is at war. This year, all that Ginny hopes for is for everyone to be alive; she hopes for peace.

Parody of "All I want for Christmas is you"

Second in the Prompt #2 of the Winter Tales Challenge!

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 340 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/07/06 Updated: 12/08/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 12/21/06 Title: Chapter 1: All I Want for Christmas is Peace

That was great! Wow, I can't do that, you're talented!! Great job, and I hope you win!

Author's Response: Thanks! :D I\'m glad you liked it. Good luck to you too if you enter :)

 

The Tear Never Cried by harry_kissed_ginny
Rated: 3rd-5th Years [Reviews - 19]

Summary: A short poem about Ginny seeing Harry's dead body...

Categories: Poetry Genre: Warnings: None

Word count: 185 Chapters: 1 Completed: Yes
Published:
12/07/06 Updated: 12/10/06


Reviewer: Ron x Hermione Signed
Date: 02/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oh, that was so sad! Gosh, you're a great poet! It's good to see that Ginny killed Voldy- that's something that I've never seen before, really. You had the wording down, and I loved the way that you ended each stanza (thing), with The Tear I Never Cried.

That was really sad. if that had been a fic, i would have cried!

Great work!

~Lindsey :)


Author's Response: awwwwwwwww thanks

 
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